Naruto Saigen Roleplay

I realized on attempting to correct the issue that the better way to do that particular idea would be as it's own series of jutsu or add it to a style description. Either way, Corkscrew has been removed for now. Disguise shield reflects the new working.

I went ahead and nuked the two channeling techniques. Fixed Trapped Wall. Also fixed the Dust Flow typo and made them measure as Meters.

<r>To say Jinseie has isolated himself once he'd taken the role of protector of the Jinchuuriki was an understatement. He all but disappeared socially and the missions or jobs he took had become those related to his task; Training Kiyone, training himself, working on his presentability and the vario...

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<r>Jinseie let Kiyone relax and come down from her reaction until she spoke and he chuckled lightly, not in derision but rather in amusement. There was nothing about it that was an overreaction, he'd overstepped a little himself and now he'd like nothing better to do than make her feel better. So in...

<r>It took Jinseie a moment to confirm with Kiyone with a glance that she didn't mind if Amaya stayed to chat with them; He wasn't about to allow another person to interrupt a moment if she desired privacy, they had rare opportunity to be truly alone and together, and if Kiyone wanted to take advant...

<r>It had taken almost no time at all for Jinseie's spot to be found and the first person to drop to the ground had him looking over quietly, the gentle frown on the beautiful face of his partner and girlfriend. Girlfriend. It felt really odd to call this woman, Kiyone, that title considering she wa...

<t>The midday sun had long since disappeared behind the mountain peaks surrounding Iwagakure, the bustle of the city dying down to the workers and shinobi still on patrol or those heading home for the night. Merchants had long since closed up shop, businessess were shutting down and the mines were w...

<r>Confidence and bumbling awkwardness had always gone hand-in-hand with Jinseie's personality, a fact that left it's mark on most of his interactions up until that point. Especially with her. Even in the face of her sudden crimson flush or the fact her cloak was the most attention-drawing thing in ...

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<r>For all the impulse and bluster he usually put forward Jinseie had no idea what came next, after the kissing, at least to any degree of realism. It was not the sort of kiss that spiraled out of control or into some maddening passion, it was a flare of inspiration that lit up and unfortunately bur...

<r>Jinseie waited patiently as he was greeted, Kiyone behind, and followed quickly as the man stepped to the Wall, the gate-like opening met with a careful walk as he helped Kiyone step through as much as might be necessary and when they arrived, they were greeted with the basics of their request; A...

<r>Nervousness was not something Jinseie outwardly showed often to anyone and perhaps something he hid even inside his own mind and heart, all in the name of keeping up appearances; Not to others, though he did have a reputation to others, but because it was how he wanted to be viewed. He did not wa...

<t>She weighed next to nothing around his neck when she embraced him but he still shocked slightly, not out of recoil of her touch or loss of strength, but honestly taken aback by how her posture changed as he reassured her. He hadn't really expected his words to make much of an impact, used to her ...

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<r>The cold barely bothered Jinseie here, did little to dampen his spirits or his mood as he watched Kiyone unfurl the scroll and begin to process it. He knew it was still dangerous, and he would be expected to take and perform missions on the meantime, but it meant she was to be guarded by him dire...

<r>For all his many talents, Jinseie was ultimately still just a young man and every young man on the planet would have promptly began a small grin at the implications of Gran's statement. He luckily did not speak and draw attention to this moment and indeed snapped out of the daze as Gran finished,...

<t>Rubber > I'm not really sure I like just saying you can absorb and repel Raiton completely, even at 5 strength. This would also need a duration and some more information about how the repel happens. Is it just completely rebounding the original technique? If that's the case it's repel range shoul...

<t>Clothing/Accessories > ' The Uzushiogakure symbol is integrated onto the back of the jacket'. I don't know if that's supposed to say Konoha, or if it's an org symbol, or if it's the technical name for the spiral leaf design, but either way just pointing it out to fix or reaffirm it's nothing to w...

<t>The mountain that protected this place was a chain of linked mountains, ancient and untouched for years because of their isolation but more than that, their legacy. The mountains formed a strange shape when viewed from afar, seeming as if a hand of rock had risen around a central, isolated palm i...

Do me a favor and go ahead, deny this for now. After re-reading it I've come to the conclusion I had some sort of seizure writing it and it is, in essence, really dumb lol. I'll redo it once I've gotten a better handle on it.

<t>Far outside even the most remote of roads and towns laid this forest, an ancient and overgrown verdant tract that towered over the surrounding woodland with ease. Large sweeps of land for at least half a mile in any direction around the forest had been cut, cleared and rolled until there was a fl...

<t>Joining hands had exactly the kind of slightly ridiculous connotation Kotentou would have commented on, but there was little time to make such a remark as the man offered his hand and began to pulse with light, exhaling a bit as he nodded. He simply offered his own hand to his twins and then wait...

<t>[Genjutsu • False Shadow Shuriken Technique] - I'd say this should be more like 3-5 projectile clones, not 20. 20 feels just a bit too much for a D-Rank to me.<br/> <br/> [Genjutsu • Rise Above] - Does anything happen if they attack the rising image during the illusion, or does it just pass throu...

I'm going to give this a tentative 1/2 barring problems with the history via the OOCs of the village, things flow logically to me however.

Genjutsu: Multiple Dancing Blades - Just to clarify, but this essentially lasts only the post it is used in? Or do the clones hang around attacking for a bit?

Otherwise this looks good and I see no issues at the moment.

<t>Let's say a mass of Suiton, a 5x5x3 meter jutsu, strikes a Rubber Barrier made with 36 Strength. The rubber can only reflect back up to 1.5x1.5x1.5 meters of that jutsu, so it rebounds up to that amount with 1/2th the whole masses' strength. For a solid object, like a hugeass (10x10x10 meter) roc...

<t>Rough terrain surrounded and made up the mountain, dozens of feet of ground around it a vertical climb over sharp rocks and harsh paths that had been unkempt or years. As simple as it started, the sheer and sudden cliffs surrounding it halfway up and the tight, narrow paths that were safe to clim...

<r>As the twins packed and the loving glares of his assistant struck his back, Kotentou seemed to give Naho a small look before moving himself towards a wall, quietly sliding a few simple things from behind what looked like a large shelf. Papers and small scrolls were rolled into his hand and then h...

<r><QUOTE author="FluffyGinja" time="1477335852"><s>[quote=FluffyGinja,(time=1477335852)]</s>Clarification question. Nintaijutsu is both part tai and part nin. However, the Tai part generally needs to hit for the nin part to be effective. Does that mean Sakebi armour could completely stop Nintaijuts...

<r>Any other night Kotentou would have apologized quietly for disturbing their rests and complimented each of them in some fashion, perhaps tormented Naho for her attitude a bit before focusing on whatever was worth waking both of His assistants at this hour for; A thing he so rarely did it might as...

1/2, I can find nothing further wrong and all the rule quotations are accurate.

I'm giving this a tentative okay barring Onu giving further input on the techniques he had issue with, as I personally understood them and the whole Pistol Shrimp thing.

1/2

<r>One might have expected Kotentou, proud of his wit and intuition, to take some measure of start or perhaps shame in being boldly wrong about his guest, the masked and unnamed agent who now disputed his assertion that Banri himself had come to see him, but Kotentou seemed oddly unphased by the 'fl...

<r>For all of his bluster, Jinseie grinned a bit sheepishly back at Kiyone when she spoke about Gran and he decided to stow any further comments, not that he had any negatives to make. Gran had done her best to make him feel like he was welcome here quite a few times, even if many of her comments wo...

<t>I fixed the conc/nocode difference, they both now have the same information.<br/> <br/> That said, I get where you're coming from on the jutsu in question but I feel like it being considered a static stat boost is incorrect; It doesn't increase Strength so much as it increases a few choice factor...

<r>Choices were things Kotentou was good at. Choices were things Kotentou had made his entire life; He'd chosen to leave his family when Kumogakure had intervened and he had chosen to refuse contact with them, chosen to deny them the right to be a part of his life. He'd chosen to save the twins, he'...

I'm going to need a bit of clarification on what you mean for that, as I would assume for defensive purposes the object would recoil until the defense was broken through which is already accounted for in the wording of what is currently there.

Only rebounds up to that size, each projectile is recoiled individually so each thing counts individually for it's own size, not overall size. If you shoot rubber at something, it bounces off, unless it's glue. All of these have been clarified or edited into the style.

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