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Post by Flo » Tue Dec 22, 2015 9:30 pm

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Owner's Name:Nara Berser
Yosh
General Information Height: 37 inches in total.
Weight: 55 lbs
Type: Pet
Gender: F
Age: 1 year
Appearance:
  • Face/head: White-tailed deer's horizontally slit pupils allow for good night vision and color vision during the day.
  • Body: 6-11 inches, bushy tail displaying the white hairs of the outer edge and under surface. Long, slender legs - each bearing two narrow, pointed hooves that support the weight - prominent ears.The deer's coat is a reddish-brown in the spring and summer and turns to a grey-brown throughout the fall and winter.
  • Notable Features: Nothing that separates her from a basic bitch deer
Personality:
  • General:She is very kind to berser and the other nara, though that may be because she was raised up in the nara forest. To others who oppose her or berser, she doesn't hessitae to jump into action.Most of the time she is pretty slient and sweet.
  • Hopes/Dreams: Nothing really. Just berser's friend and or pal.
  • Fears: Lions, tigers, anything that eat deer like things. Wolves.
  • Combat Mentality:She was trained to face off against oppents with berser, so she never will jump into a battle without him or his say in the matter. When she is into that combative stage she is simply relentless, usually attacking at close ranges.
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Battle Information Rank: D
Chakra Affinity: Lightning

Stats
  • Ninjutsu:1
  • Taijutsu:10
  • Genjutsu:1
  • Stamina:1
  • Control:1
  • Strength:4
  • Speed:4
  • Instinct:2
Equipment: Flank jacket around her upper body that contains 50 inch wire,5 kunais , 5 shurkiens.

Abilities and Concentrations Abilities: [0/1]
Ninjutsu Concentrations:1/1
Raiton Affinity:
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Raiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Raiton affinity. Raion has a shocking effect.
Taijutsu Concentrations:2/2
Lower Body:
The fundamental skill of [Lower Body] indicates the user’s proficiency in using their legs and feet in many different ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu.
Upper Body:
The fundamental skill of the [Upper Body] indicates the user’s proficiency with using their arms, chest and head in various ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu.
Genjutsu Concentrations:0/1
Jutsu Information
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White Tail:
This style focuses on combat fit for a deer, Involving powerful kicks, bucks, and tackles that will devestate, shock, or overwhelim the enemy.This style focuses on speed, stamina, strength. Speed to keep up, stamina to keep attacking, strength to ware the enemy down.
Requires-[Upperbody and Lower body Concentrations.]

[White Tail Style • Elegant Trot ]
D-rank Taijutsu Maneuver
This technique is usually used for closing in on enemies with perfectly timed skips and hops to avoid projectiles that are slung her way ex. Shuriken or kunai's.
[White Tail Style • Dynamic Kick]
D-rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Rushing in on the opponent, the deer jumps in the air to deliver a strong kick to his or her side. Quite like a drop kick only by hooves.

[White Tail Style • Regal Step]
D-rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Within a close range with the enemy, this move allows her to stay within a close range with the enemy, occasionally shifting and swerving out the way in time with quick punches kicks and jabs tossed her way.
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Raiton • Bright nub
D-ranked Raiton Jutsu
After performing the correct hand seals for her, she will extend her nub/s(Where the antlers are for males) toward a target. A bolt of lightning will jump up to 10 meters from their nubs at a speed of 6, striking with a strength of 4.

Raiton • Stun nub
D-ranked Raiton Jutsu
After performing the correct hand seals for her, the user will channel Raiton chakra to two of their nubs. They will then be able to fire up to three total bullet sized balls of concentrated lightning from their nubs. These bullets will travel at 5 speed, but will not have any physical force. Instead, they will apply light electrical burns similar to a sun burn and will apply Raiton's shocking effect.

History:Pet that was found in the nara's shadow forest while berser wasn't doing anything on his time off. He took care of this deer, coming to see it most of all the time he was in the forest to hang out with it and play. He one day got the idea to try to train it, he already knew a lot about deer from dwelling in the forest for so long, so this was a piece of cake to him with a deer that young. He trained it to respond to certain sounds he made to attack, stop, or do what she wanted to that were similar to the sounds deer make to alert each other. He even figured out what scents it mostly responded too, what sets her off and even named it Yosh.This girl was definately one of hsi best friends.
Konaha + Genin ? Yosh

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Post by Kabu » Wed Dec 30, 2015 6:47 pm

Needs a name and gender. Also humanoid summons start at higher ranks by default.
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Post by Flo » Thu Dec 31, 2015 9:18 am

Think i fixed it
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Post by Kabu » Thu Jan 14, 2016 2:11 am

I'm not sure if it's possible -but- I don't see why she can't have Shadow jutsu so

1/2
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Post by Ace Trainer » Fri Jan 15, 2016 2:12 am

Please be sure to update this app to reflect the proper changes.
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Post by Flo » Sat Jan 16, 2016 2:00 pm

Im gonna work on it
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Post by Kabu » Sun Jan 17, 2016 10:24 pm

Post when done.
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Post by Flo » Tue Jan 19, 2016 8:24 pm

Don. Switched a lot of things around and in.
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Post by FluffyGinja » Wed Jan 20, 2016 7:16 pm

Please list what you switched.
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Post by Flo » Thu Jan 21, 2016 2:02 pm

Equipment edit, Jutsu change, Concentration changes, updated page to meet the current criteria.
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Post by Flo » Sat Jan 23, 2016 8:39 am

Now, changed to a pet, added all taijutsu maneuvers, removed a concentration , and changed around stats.

And now history to match everything up.
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Post by Lace » Sat Jan 23, 2016 6:13 pm

Quote:
Title of the Thread
This should be the name of the companion.


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Height: 2'5
Animals who stand on four legs have more than one dimensional measurements, if she stands two foot five inches from ground to the top of her head, how long is her body?


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Weight: N/A
Everything has a weight. Unless you're a ghost, she's not a ghost, she's corporeal, she needs a weight.


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Appearance:
Face/head: Looks mostly like a deer, has some weird yellowish orange eyes and some blue in weird places.
Body: Small and slim
Notable Features:She has deer like features with the four legs, small tail, two antlers and hooves,.She looks like a strange type of white deer and appears older in deer years then she should. She, of course, can't talk, due too her being a pet and visited by most of the nara but, those are the only things special about her at this point.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Deer#Antlers You should read the first paragraph of this link, aside from some odd anomaly (in which they are stubs) only a certain breed of reindeer females have antlers.


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General:She is very naive to most danger and seems to be trigger happy when it comes to anykind of action. She's happy to the most extremes of being happy, and tends to be curious of everything she sets her eyes one.Because of her naive nature, she seems to take things to heart, in other words, she's bipolar.
This is not bipolar.


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Hopes/Dreams: To understand her connection with the Nara
This seems WAY too sentient for a mere animal in the woods.


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Picture:
If that's her, she needs to be a summon and not a pet, that's going outside of the normal animal range to be considered a 'pet'. Pets are animals, normal creatures. Nothing mystical/special/mythical/ect, all that fall into that category are summons.


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Equipment: two horns on the top of her head that are very resistant to damage. Though they can be broken, they can leave nasty scars and cuts in a person that messes with her.Can rotate them at will.
What?


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Strong Fist
This style focuses on being overall more physically powerful than your opponent. Users attempt to overwhelm defenses with great speed and strength while chipping away at their opponent’s stamina and keeping their own at the highest possible. Most attacks are simple in execution but extremely powerful in effect, causing battles of attrition to be in their favor.
Kinda curious how this works exactly, she doesn't have fists.... and your first jutsu has this.... deer throwing an object at someone. I dunno if that quite works. I think you'd have to create taijutsu specifically for this 'deer' and make it realistic.


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History:Pet that was found in the nara's shadow forest as what berser seems to think was an experiment because white deers aren't normal. She knows a bit about physically fighting but doesn't knows how to speak English along with her other deer friends that seemingly produced her...Someone fucking with deer around here? She seems to like her habitat since she was born there, and knows every herb and deer from her years there and has a strange connection with the nara clan, to the point it's like she can tell what they are saying. (Rest of the history with berser will be inserted here when the d ranked requirement is done)
This needs work, I don't have the words to describe my state of mind reading this.

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Post by Flo » Sat Jan 23, 2016 9:58 pm

Fixed
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Post by FluffyGinja » Mon Jan 25, 2016 12:03 pm

Please update your pet's taijutsu in accordance to the new rules.
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Post by Flo » Tue Jan 26, 2016 8:07 pm

Fixed p,p
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Post by FluffyGinja » Sat Jan 30, 2016 3:42 pm

One last thing, your deer only has one Taijutsu concentration according to companion rules. So, you need to change what Tai concs you have.

After that, I can likely 1/2
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Post by Flo » Sun Jan 31, 2016 8:20 am

Thanks for the info about the sudden shift from 9 to 10
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Post by FluffyGinja » Sun Jan 31, 2016 8:25 am

You are quite welcome. 1/2.

This will not be accepted until your character has been accepted.
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Post by Flo » Sun Jan 31, 2016 8:29 am

Dope
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Post by Ace Trainer » Thu Feb 04, 2016 7:55 pm

Extension, waiting for character acceptance.

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Post by Nick » Sun Feb 07, 2016 9:12 am

Character has been approved.

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