Nakajima Mariya

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Nakajima Mariya

Post by Taiga » Sat Apr 16, 2022 6:09 am

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NAKAJIMA MARIYA

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General Information Age: 16
Gender: Female
Height: 5'7"
Weight: 49KG
Physical Features:
  • Face/head: Mariya has a sharp feline face with almond-shaped black eyes. She has a button nose and above-average thickness lips. Her jet black hair is worn in a pixi cut. While her facial features and bone structure mirror that of her genetic base Nakajima Hayate, Mariya's colorings and appearance in total is closer to her first genetic donor, Tada Banri and an unknown genetic sample from a shinobi long dead.
  • Body: Mariya is more on the "sporty" side than "supple", save a few curves. In extremely great shape, she manages to be attractive in a "peak human physicality" way akin to the way an Olympian acrobat is visually stunning- statuesque.
  • Notable Features: Mariya seems to have two permanent cowlicks on either side of her head- her hair juts up and out causing a "horned-owl" like appearance to her otherwise short pixi-cut.
Clothing/Accessories: Preferring function over form Mariya wears a black shoulder-less shirt with a raised collar and a pair of black sports tights with red accenting. Over this, she wears the standard Kumogakure flack jacket and a white forehead protector worn like a belt. Attached to the forehead protector are several pouches. For accessories, she wears long black gloves that start above her biceps and a pair of knee-high black rubber boots with red trimming. Last she tends to wear a pair of white sports goggles with a tinted-red visor.
Personality:
  • General: Mariya likes law and order. She also likes patterns and for things to go according to plan. To a degree, her upbringing in Black Ops has left her with impairment when processing or trying to understand normal human emotion often leading others to believe she is insensitive. This is exhibited by behavior such as laughing when others are sobbing or crying- her inability to understand the correct emotional response in the heat of the moment.
  • Hopes/Dreams: Mariya's competitive spirit, imparted by Banri during her underground training, drives her to want to be "better" than her genetic originals, Nakajima Hayate and Tada Banri.
  • Fears: Mariya is deeply afraid that she is more like Tada Banri than Nakajima Hayate. Worse, she is afraid that is nothing but her genetic code to follow them both.
  • Combat Mentality: A trained black ops operative, Mariya is capable of suppressing her true personality in combat and taking a careful approach watching from the shadows for the opportune moment.

Battle Information Village: Kumogakure no Sato
Rank: Chuunin
  • Chakra Pool: 20
  • Endurance: 15
  • Control: 25
  • Strength: 10
  • Speed: 10
  • Willpower: 15
Equipment:
White Ninja Poncho
Made of a mysterious material, it is a hooded white shinobi poncho that ends just above the feet, typical of the standard-issue ones shinobi villages use in rain or on travel. The material has a strength of 50.

Left Thigh
Kunai Scroll (1.2x Kunai Wide, 1000x Kunai Long. Currently Sealed: 35x Kunai)
1x Ink Cartridge Brush, 4x Ink Cartridges

Right Thigh
1x Ink Cartridge Brush, 4x Ink Cartridges

Belt Pouch 1 (Right Front)
- 5 kunai
- 10 shuriken

Belt Pouch 2 (Left Back)
- 10m of wire
- 5 exploding tags
- 1 smoke bomb
- 1 flash bang

Companions: (0/1)
Primary Affinity: Fuuinjutsu
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
[1] Harmonious Chakra
Mariya was sourced from several DNA sources including that of the Ninth Raikage Nakajima Hayate in an attempt by the infamous Tada Banri to create the ultimate soldier. Unbeknownst to Banri the tenketsu mutations of the Nakajima family were not something that could be controlled. Rather than the Raikage's "resonating chakra", Mariya got the mutation of harmonious chakra.

Harmonious chakra resonates so perfectly with any other chakra around it that it is impossible to, even with chakra sensory, discern it from any other chakra. Most incredible however is that functionally, others can use or even control jutsu cast by Mariya as if it was their own jutsu. This means if Mariya was to cast a fireball, an individual with fire kinesis could control it as if they had cast the fireball, or they can kai her jutsu as if it was their own.

[2] Sharingan
Included in the genetic manipulations of Mariya was a strange doujutsu all but forgotten by the world that when activated cause Mariya's eyes grow red with a black pupil in the center, surrounded by three tomoe that grant her enhanced visual senses.

The first tomoe grants her with [Sensory] that allows her to see energy around her opponents, such as chakra when they begin to cast a jutsu or the kinetic energy building up in their legs as they create torque for a kick. This energy is translucent and color-coded, such as fire appearing red-orange or kinetic energy appearing grey. The stronger energy, the deeper its hue, and it leaves "tracers" that linger in the air following actions for up to [Control / 2] posts, though she can mentally turn tracers on or off, or choose to focus on one.

The second tomoe grants enhanced [Perception] allowing her to pick up on the smallest patterns or even muscle fiber movements of her opponent to increase her ability to react, though to what length is dependent on her training with the eye and represented by Discipline Taijutsu.

The third and final ability of the doujutsu, is the ability to refract light giving the user the ability to see through visual impedances such as smoke, mist, or stealth cloaks ranked A-Rank or lower. This ability is limited to [Endurance] x2 meters, and anything further away than that will bypass the third tomoe's visual processing power.

While utilizing the Doujutsu, Mariya must be careful as for every [Control/5] posts it is active it drains -1 Chakra Pool.
Concentrations
Ninjutsu[Storage & Force Fuuinjutsu], [Charge & Augment Fuuinjutsu]
TaijutsuN/A
GenjutsuN/A

Jutsu
History
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While Mariya is physically assumed to be around the age of 16, she is less than 4 years old in reality because she was grown in a lab. Formerly known as Subject #42, under Program New Dawn in a Kumogakure BlackOps medical facility Mariya was created from the egg of an unknown woman and DNA comprised of Tada Banri and unbeknownst to him, Nakajima Hayate. Officially, she is the daughter of three people: Hayate, Banri, and an unknown female donor.

New Dawn had hoped to clone the Raikage in hopes of using his unique tenketsu and chakra mutations to allow the direct binding of spirits to each clone. This would allow the black ops to eliminate the need for Jinchuuriki and the instability the Genma and other spirits brought to their human hosts. With over 60 participants at various life stages and various genetic alterations, Subject #42 was the only one who managed to survive. As she grew at a hyper-altered pace in her pod, upon reaching adolescence and being taken out of the pod it was clear she was a mistake.

While Subject #42 possessed an ancient visual doujutsu Banri had implanted into her, the tenketsu chakra mutations she possessed was not that of the Raikage Nakajima Hayate. This caused Banri to be furious. He ordered the complete culling of the entire program but through the efforts of researchers, Mariya was spared. Though she would not be a candidate for his super-soldier pseudo-jinchuuriki project her chakra made her nearly impossible to track- the perfect spy. Her successful doujutsu cultivation from ancient DNA also was promising, enough so that eventually Banri took a liking to the girl and to raise her as his own child. She was not the weapon he wanted but she was a weapon he could use. As abusive as Banri was the girl brought out a certain kind part of him- but a part that likely was due more to his love of himself which he saw in her.

When she was not in her pod or being prodded, poked, or tested, Banri would train the girl himself, however, the day for her debut as a Black Ops soldier never came. As the war progressed the researchers disappeared. The soldiers were gone and Banri never returned for her. Occasionally she would wake for moments in her pod only to find she was alone and fall back into her stasis. One day after the war, however, something happened. Something called to Mariya and she awoke in her pod and placed her hand on the glass, her eyes widely looking out but failing to adjust to the sudden light of her dark confines.

A hand met hers on the glass and she felt something- the chakra of her other father, Nakajima Hayate. Their chakra reacted in way he did not expect as the glass shattered and out came the girl- naked, shivering, and cold. Unaware of what he was the Raikage covered her in his cloak, but soon after as his forces raided the lair and obtained the details of Banri's heinous experiments they soon learned the truth of this girl. Despite a girl in need... confused... lost... Hayate struggled to see her as anything other than a monster. A weapon created from his DNA to likely kill him.

This man was father. But her earliest memories of him confused her. His kindness had quickly turned to a look of disgust and that would be etched in her mind forever if not for Hayate finally breaking the silence. Fighting everything he felt he gave her the benefit of being human.

"I think you're a Mariya. It's a beautiful name, do you like it?" he asked. And in that moment, the girl could do nothing more than nod and tug at his sleeve to leave.

"Let's go home, Mariya".

Those were the words she would always remember.

It has since been almost a year and Mariya has struggled to adapt to her surroundings as a normal teenager, however her innate strength and ability has landed her the rank of Chuunin.

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Post by Taiga » Sat Apr 16, 2022 6:10 am

Pricings
95 Ryo to start (Chuunin + Inheritance)

-60 for 15 stats
-28 for Cloak (https://www.narutosaigen.com/forums/vie ... 4#p4188229)
7 for 35 Kunai

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Post by Zao » Sat Apr 23, 2022 7:11 pm

Pricing looks good.

Care to give a few examples of the first ability just so I can better understand it in us.

For the second ability.
- Does it grow from one tomoe to three or does she just have all three powers of the doujutsu when activated?
- For the second tomoe, how long can she trace these residual energy particulars for after the action?
- Third probably needs a range for how far/much visual disruption (smoke/mist/dust) she can see through.
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Post by Taiga » Mon Apr 25, 2022 11:14 am

The first ability is just passive, as is. Beyond "masking her" to chakra sensors, it means her chakra is usable by anyone. If she casts a fireball and you have fire kinesis, you can kinesis her fireball as if it was your own chakra. If she makes a plain jutsu that "will explode on kai", you can kai it just as she could.

I expanded on the text for that.

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Does it grow from one tomoe to three or does she just have all three powers of the doujutsu when activated?
Just all at once. It's treating the three tomoe all as one eye, the complete sharingan. Going for the "one ability, two concentrations" thing, since this effectively grants sensory + perception.

As for the ranges/limits, done. I limited to A-Rank or lower, dropped the range lower than normal human eye so that she wouldn't get like, infinite battlefield vision for example
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This isn't sharingan
I edited it to make it more clear (5/4/2022) and put the free percpetion-eye based jutsu conc in. Anyhow, it is exactly Sharingan. I wrote this while looking at the Wikipedia page. The first tomoe of the Eye of Insight is the ability to see color coded chakra along with different values etc. On saigen, the second tomoe isn't really an ability. It's just perception Taijutsu Hayate, Shio, Taiga, Takeo, Shinji, Yoru, and pretty much every end game character is rocking.

I left the second tomoe as requiring taijutsu to further flesh it out still too. The tracers also kind of add to this ability form a tertiary point of view, since it's giving information on movement etc for the sharingan user to act on.

The third tomoe in canon is jutsu copying- which is copyrighted to another clan... two in fact on Saigen (Henrin and the Iwa one). So, I've just ignored the third tomoe and made it the "can see through mist to some degree or invisibility" thingy, which is totally canon and you can read on it Wikipedi and see it in action with Obito/Kakashi/Sasuke and more.

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Post by Zao » Sat May 07, 2022 9:38 pm

This looks good to me unless another mod has something.

1/2
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Post by Valkier » Sun May 22, 2022 10:21 am

Only super super minor thing I can see is that the blank scrolls should cost 1 ryo for the set of 5

I think the abilities and other items/costs etc. are all ok and ready to go, so once that one single tiny ryo is found I think you can be approved, no need to strip the 1/2 for that.
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Post by Taiga » Sun May 22, 2022 3:26 pm

i removed the blank scrolls for now

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Post by Zao » Thu May 26, 2022 11:29 pm

1/2
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Post by Kabu » Fri May 27, 2022 6:53 am

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