Ryoru, Yuelsilv - The White Winds of Konoha

Edited- I noticed some Jutsu, Equipment discrepancies. I also added to the History, and appropriated some Abilities.

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Ryoru, Yuelsilv - The White Winds of Konoha

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Ryoru, Yuelsilv
Yuel, The White Winds of Konoha
Let go of your earthly tether. Enter the void empty, and become free.

General Information Age: 19
Gender: Male
Height: 5'10''
Weight: 167 lbs
Physical Features: Yuel is a thin and lean shinobi, incredibly fit for a young man of his age. His pale white skin has countless bright white scars covering its surface. His nails are painted black, and both of his ears have silver hoops in the lobes. He drapes his snow white hair past his ears, and his face is remarkably clear of hair. Yuelsilv bears a feral appearance. His blind eyes open wide, and his ears pointed.
  • Face/head: Yuel's eyes sit squarely on his face, and his slitted pupils seem to take up most of his golden-hazel iris'. He has a large smile, and four sharp incisor fangs that protrude at a noticeable distance from the rest of his teeth. He is handsome, with a cool smile that is inviting. His bottom lip is pierced in the middle, the golden stud fitted with a shiny diamond gemstone. On the left side of his neck is a black mark, indicating his altered human DNA and affinity with natural chakra. The mark is two dots, connected by one circle with an upside-down pentagram in the middle.
  • Body: Yuelsilv is a lean man, with most of his weight being comprised of his muscles. His bones are very thin and his skin is often stained with fresh blood from animals. He stands with a seemingly strong posture, somewhat bent toward the ground with his elbows extending from his hips-side. His feet are average sized, and feature nails that he paints black.
Clothing/Accessories: Yuel wears a white kimono, overtop of his tunic. The robe is fashioned out of shinobi-grade satin, and was designed by the Konoha military. The white robe is heavy, and glimmers in low light. He wears an evergreen cologne, that is faintly reminiscent of the Ninja Acadamy in Kokoha. The red lapels around his hands act as pockets and contain paper summoning tags. They are spacious, and easily conceal his hands. Inside of his red belt, where Yuelsilv has his Konoha headband equipped, he keeps shuriken. Hanging from the sides of his belt are his Demon-Wind Shuriken.

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Personality:
  • General: Yuel is a friendly person. Incredibly polite and well mannered, he is extroverted, and enjoys spending his time with others. Yuel is a great listener and is easily satisfied with serving others by helping them. He loves to instruct others on ninja studies, and his studious nature is on display when it comes to his duties as a shinobi.
  • Hopes/Dreams: Yuel is particularly fond of animals, and hopes to further a peaceful agenda for animals in the wild. He tends to several islands among the Great Rivers of Konoha, and acts as a Ranger for the flora and fauna. As a shinobi he yearns for knowledge of eternal life, and hopes that he will be able to learn more of the mysteries that animals offer humans.
  • Fears: Yuel is personally afraid of betrayal inside of the village walls. He is an active member of Konoha's surveilance team, to protect the village from inside attacks against his country. He tends to several trap lines around his home in the woodlands of Konoha, sure to keep them working to protect himself, and his family, from intruders.
  • Combat Mentality:Yuel is a tactician in battle. He moves cautiously, and often hides amidst the violent winds ninjutsu. Containing a large reserve of chakra, Yuel is capable of multiple rounds of slicing wind ninjutsu at mid range. In close combat Yuel commands the wind to spin his Demon-Wind Shuriken around, and uses razor winds to corner his opponent.

Battle Information Village: Konoha
Rank: Chuunin

  • Chakra Pool: 22
  • Natural Chakra Pool: 10
  • Endurance: 9
  • Control: 23
  • Strength: 2
  • Speed: 18
  • Willpower: 7
  • Power Rank: Chuunin
Equipment:
Belt: 5 Shuriken, 2 Demon Wind Shuriken
Companions: (0/1)
Primary Affinity: Fuuton :fuuton:
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
AbilitiesShow
First Ability
Gene Splicing: Hybrid WereBat:
The genetic structure of the person has been altered by an animal with advanced chakra abilities. Their DNA contains the ability to utilize chakra and transform their body into the likeness of a Werebat. They can communicate with bats, and curiously cannot digest meat. Subsisting only on fruit, the Hybrid Human-Werebeast is a melding of bat dna with a human. Their ears are particularly sensitive, and they have profound hearing. Their hearing is so good they can hear a feather land from the air and pinpoint the area.

The user has a feral appearance, with slitted pupils and profoundly high cheek bones. The fangs inside their mouth are protected by a sturdy jawline, and their mouth is extra wide. Their spine has protrusions like an extra pair of ribs were their wings grow from. The user is blind, with no ability to experience vision, however with practice their mind can alter their perception of sound to create a field of psuedo-vision created by the vibratory dissonance of sounds.

Their stats are not changed during a transformation unless specified, and they can transform into a human-likeness of the Werebat with techniques. The werebat has sharp claws on their feet and hands that act like kunai. As well they can glide and fly. Their senses are heightened while transformed, giving them a greater ability with perceiving the echolocation of sounds.
Second Ability
Were-Beast Chakra:
The user is able to infuse natural chakra that is created by feral animals in the wild, with their own chakra reserves. By drawing upon this natural energy through meditation around living fauna, the user is able to store infused chakra for use with Senjutsu. This chakra is more potent than human chakra, giving the user access to more impactful techniques. To access this natural chakra the users genetic make up must include animal heritage.

With effort the user can store 1/3 of their total Chakra Pool as Werebeast chakra that remains free flowing through their body: the two chakras can intermingle however the flow of natural chakra must remain open. Without meditation, the value of their Natural Chakra Pool (NCP) remains at a base rank value equivalence starting at 5 for D Rank, 10 for C, 15 for B, 20 for A, and lastly 30 for S. This value is constant despite the users Chakra Pool, and with meditation the user can temporarily increase this value by 1/3 of their Chakra Pool. If the user NCP is depleted, they will experience the same effects of normal chakra fatigue.

Humans can use this chakra to perform Senjutsu, but suffer a -1 penalty to their Endurance for the remainder of the thread, unless they are healed by Iijutsu. If they are transformed as Werebeasts when they use Were-Beast Chakra Senjutsu they will not suffer a penalty, instead they will revert back into their human form after performing the technique, unless they have achieved Sage Mode. With tutelage from an Animal Sage who has mastered a style of Senjutsu with Were-Beast Chakra, this natural fuel can be used to attain Sage Mode.

Werebeast Sages are animals or humans that have incorporated Werebeast chakra to alter their bodies and achieve profound feats through Senjutsu. These Sages are S-Ranked masters of Senjutsu, and as animals that have evolved by spiritual ascension through chakra they are the founders of Werebeasts. Werebeasts are originally animals with profound minds who can transform into a more humanoid shape.

Sages can teach Senjutsu that their unique Were-Beast chakra style is based on, and with practice humans can ascend spiritually like the animal Sages. Their bodies transform, in some cases the user becomes a monster like being; while others might learn to materialize a Senjutsu chakra cloak that the environment blesses them with. The application of Were-Beast chakra depends on the user and their ties to the natural world.
Third Ability
Concentrations
Ninjutsu
ConcentrationsShow
Fuuton Affinity:
Fuuton Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Fuuton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Fuuton affinity. Fuuton has an cutting effect.
Passive (Cutting)Show
Fuuton has a natural cutting property to it, that exists in all jutsu unless otherwise stated. This gives fuuton a unique opportunity to strike with additional power, and to act as a offensive defense. Regardless of their purpose fuuton jutsu passively cut with no distinct pattern at 1/2 the strength of the technique rounded down unless otherwise stated. This means if someone punched a 20 strength fuuton wall, they would get cuts on their hand applied with 10 strength. This also means that fuuton jutsu specifically designated to cut things can create devastating wound by essentially striking twice.]
Raiton:
Raiton
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Raiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Raiton affinity. Raiton has a shocking effect.
Passive (Shocking)Show
Raiton has the effect of shocking, which means causes it's effect to be diffuse upon impact. In organic material, this causes nervous stimulation which results in numbness, tingling, loss of sensation, and sometimes paralysis. In inorganic material, this means that the strength of the jutsu diffuses across an area 2x the size of the attack. In a jutsu that creates a lightning ball 2m in diameter, if it struck a wall the size of the attack would cover a 4m area.

Additionally, the strength of the nervous effect on organic material from raiton jutsu is determined by the Strength stat range they fall into.
  • 1-14 Strength Requirement: Tingling, acute numbness.
  • 15-24 Strength Requirement: Loss of Sensation
  • 25-34 Strength Requirement: Localized Paralysis
  • 35+ Strength Requirement: Diffuse Paralysis
Sensory:
Sensor
Sensors are shinobi who are able to activate a sixth sense which can locate and read chakra sources. Sensory is advantageous as it allows shinobi to perceive without using any of their conventional senses, which can easily be deceived. Sensors are able to collect a lot of information through the interpretation of this sixth sense.
Quote:
Jikukan Ninjutsu
Practitioners of this art are able to manipulate Space/Time to create localized pockets within either, or both, that they have control over. An extremely advanced form on Ninjutsu, it demands a firm control and complex understanding of the fundamentals of chakra.
Charge & Augment Fuuinjutsu:
Charge& Augment Fuuinjutsu
This user is able to utilize Charge & Augment Fuuinjutsu, making it possible for them to utilize any jutsu with the Charge & Augment Classification. Charge Fuuinjutsu are used to create jutsu-like effects using seals. Augment Fuuinjutsu are used to enhance or limit the power of whatever they are placed on.
Concentrations
Taijutsu
ConcentrationsShow
Deft Hands:
The fundamental skill of [Deft Hands] indicates the user’s proficiency with using their hands in very specific and complex movements, like sleight of hand and targeting very small and specific points on an opponent’s body. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu in various ways.
Acrobatics:
The fundamental skill of [Acrobatics] includes the user’s ability to contort their body into unfamiliar positions in order to avoid attacks, as well as the user’s ability to fall safely and perform Ukemi and other feats of gymnastics. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Stealth:
The fundamental skill of [Stealth] describes the user’s proficiency in remaining silent, unseen and unnoticed as they go about tasks. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Projectile Weapons:
The fundamental skill of [Projectile Weapons] indicates the user’s proficiency with weapons designed to attack from afar, such as bows, shuriken, senbon, launchers and the like. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Perception:
The fundamental skill of [Perception] describes the user’s practiced methods of more keenly focussing their senses for a short time. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Close Quarters Combat:
The fundamental skill of [Close Quarters Combat] indicates the user's proficiency to efficiently utilize martial arts and advanced combat moves involving the body, for example but not limited to, advanced kicks, grapples, advanced punches, etc.
Weapons Crafting:
With large amounts of experience in the forge and with creation, this individual is able to craft and create most types of weapons and armor. While this typically doesn’t grant the individual himself any additional powers, it allows him to make more powerful gear for himself and shinobi than what can typically be found. However, those with such familiarity with weapons and armor are often skilled at noticing the strengths and weaknesses of weapons they face, and allow them to more easily exploit them. Requires Deft Hands Concentration

Jutsu
NinjutsuShow
NinpouShow
[Ninjutsu •Hidden Leaf Bomb]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user performs a series of hand seals and a poof of smoke appears. Inside of the smoke are leaves the user collected. These leaves can attach to the opponent with a residue the smoke provides.
[Ninjutsu • Leaf Retrieval]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user performs a series of handseals and keeps their eyes closed. By focusing on a leaf they have held, the user can track a moving object up to 15 meters away.
[Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Echo Face]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user performs a series of hand seals and gathers chakra to their throat. The chakra quickly travels to their eyes and activates. Their eyes turn completely gray, then they begin to glow green. The user can sense vibrations through their eyes, enhancing their vision to enable them to see sound. Their vision extends for 15 meters, and is mentally configured as normal vision. The user can view fine details, as far as 5 meters away. This jutsu lasts until the user cancels it, and can be disrupted through sound.
*[Ninjutsu • Wall]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user causes a thin 3x3x1 meter flat barrier to form within 10 meters of them at [Control] Speed and has [Control] Strength. It lasts for 3 posts.


[Ninjutsu • Shadow Windmill]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the necessary hand seals the user forms chakra underneath of a Windmill shuriken they are wielding. While the shuriken is spinning through the air, the user can erupt their chakra below it to fire a shadow shuriken made out of chakra in any direction. The shadow shuriken acts as an exact replica of the shuriken it is made in the fashion of, and flies with the speed and power of [Control].
[Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Bat Swarm]
C-Rank
After performing the necessary handseals the user transforms the air in a ten meter radius from their body, into a swarm of bats by a poof of smoke. The bats last for 2 posts, swarming around a 1 meter radius, or until they are overwhelmed and poof away. The bats have [Control]Strength and Speed; and stay flying where the user appears them.
[[Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Bat Wings]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the necessary handseals the user floods his backbone with Chakra. Smoke poofs around the user, and large, furry wings emerge from their back. The user can glide in strong winds, but cannot flap his wings to fly. His wings can protect his body, with [Control] Speed and Strength, but disappear if they sustain a direct hit.


[Ninjutsu • Shadow Shuriken]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing handseals the user poofs smoke around his shuriken and multiplies the ones they have thrown for this jutsu, by 3. These Shadow Shuriken act as copies of the shuriken and last for 2 posts before poofing away in smoke.
*[Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Demonic Bat-Man]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user performs a set of hanseals and focuses their chakra, undisturbed, for 1 post. Properly infusing their chakra into their body, the user cultivates a concentrated amount of chakra to perform the technique. With a final handseal, the user completes the jutsu and transforms quickly in a burst of smoke.

Their skin grows fur, and their ears become pointed. Wings protrude from their back, and fangs grow from their teeth. They grow claws on their hands and feet, and a tail as long as 1 meter grows from their spine. The user goes blind. Their eyes however turn green, and can sense vibrations as if they were seeing with Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Echo Face. The user can also sense chakra that has been activated inside and out of the body. This enhanced "vision" remains limited to 15 meters. The user can only perform Ninpou and Fuuton ninjutsu styles in this form. This transformation lasts for [3/Chakra Pool] posts rounded up, with a -1 to Chakra Pool for it's duration.

The users wings are as long as their arm span, and are capable of gliding along the wind. They cannot flap their wings to fly. Their wings can be used as defense, with [Control] Speed and Strength. Their claws are like daggers, capable of piercing and shredding with Strength, however they cannot cut metal.

*[Ninjutsu • Shadow Clone Technique]
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user proceeds to create a number of clones of themselves (maximum is equal to 1/3rd the users Chakra Pool). Unlike the Clone Technique, these clones are actual copies of the user in both appearance and substance. The user's chakra is evenly distributed among every clone, giving each clone an equal fraction of the user's overall power. The clones are capable of performing jutsu on their own, be given complex commands, caught in genjutsu, and can even bleed, but they will usually disperse after one or two solid blows. The clones will be created in roughly the same condition as the original and any experience the clones gain during their existence is transferred to the user once they are dispersed. Given that the clones are an exact replica of the user, they share the same stats except for Chakra Pool, which is determined by the number of clones presently in effect.
FuutonShow
[Fuuton • Strong Winds ]
D-Rank Fuuton Jutsu
The user performs a series of handseal and gathers wind around a 10 meter radius, sending it upwards 15 meters and forward 5 meters with [Control] Speed and Strength. The wind can disrupt projectiles and strike 1 target with a 3 meter width. One could also use it as an updraft to glide into the air and soar up to 10 meters.
[Fuuton • Wind Arrow]
D-Rank Fuuton Jutsu
The user performs a series of handseals and focuses chakra into their lungs. They take a deep breath, and exhale a single arrow of wind at [Control] Speed and strength.

[Fuuton • Cyclone Winds]
C-Ranked Fuuton Jutsu
After performing the needed hand seals, the user forms fuuton chakra into a funnel around them. The funnel winds float around the user within a two meter range, and can hold 1 large shuriken or a half dozen regular sized shuriken. The projectiles will rapidly in the air and can be remotely fired with speed and strength by [Control], and applying the fuuton passive. The funnel winds will float around the user for [2/Chakra Pool] posts, and can be swung around two meters from the user at [Control] Speed and Strength.

History
Historical AccountsShow
Acadamy LifeShow
Age: 0-8Show
Yuelsilv was born to a young single mother in the finest hospital of Konohagakure. Her name was Kisame Nara, and she was well taken care of by her rich father. Kisame was a young kunoichi who excelled in the Nara clans Shadow Jutsu, and employed herself to the military for surveillance missions. She was an active member in the society of Konohagakure, and her father was tied in well with the leader of the Nara clan. Yuelsilv's mother owned and acted as the Village Ranger in her 50 acres of the forests in Konoha; so to say she was well off would be an understatement. Between inheriting her fathers fortune and protecting the villages Wildlife, Kisame also directed several shinobi teams that conducted surveillance on the Villages borders. She was very talented, and had many friends in the Nara clan. A perfectly fit young woman, prime material for giving birth in the modern age.

One morning she was inspecting clear signs of humans hunting for deer in the Konoha forests. To her dismay a mysterious and handsome man appeared from behind the trees. He was tall, and his bright white skin shined in the sunlight. With his hair briskly flowing in the wind, the man announced that he was searching for a criminal ninja known to be hiding in the woods. Kisame decided to put her efforts together with the man and find the source of the harm done to the forest wildlife. After working together in the woods for a few days, the two successfully subdued a missing-nin who was hunting in the forests, and hiding from Konoha for stealing jutsu scrolls.

The man named Morigato had swoon Kisame's heart during their time in the woods together. She had completely fallen for him, and began spending all of her time for him. After dating together for a short time, Kisame got pregnant.

Morigato was the leader of a family from the outskirts of the Fire Country. His clan specialized in Fuuton techniques, and Morigato was a fierce warrior. He lacked the culture of a shinobi, but wielded great winds that most shinobi would flee from.

Upon falling in love with the Nara girl, Morigato would visit the Village of Konoha more and more often. Making a week long journey on his donkey. One day while making his way to visit his expecting fiance, Morigato collapsed off his donkeys back. Clutching his chest Morigato screamed in pain, his life force weakening as his blood vessels were collapsing on themselves. His heart failed on him, and he died in a ditch that day.

Kisame wondered where he had gone, after he had failed to make their rendezvous date. After a few weeks she recieved news his corpse was found stripped naked in the ditches outside of the village, and the pregnant woman grieved. She had never lost a loved one before, and her heart was crushed.

The grieving Kisame decided to love her son no matter what. Kisame refused to let her fatherless son be afflicted by the struggles of her own life. Her heart grew stronger and stronger, and before long she gave birth to Yuelsilv. She gave him his fathers surname, since he looked just like him.

Growing up with his mother, Yuelsilv grew fond of the cultural ways of the Nara however. Kisame was faithful to the ways of the Nara clan and maintained her duties to the Forests as such. She would roam the trails and check the trees and dirt daily, sure to keep predators away from the deer trails. Spending so much time in the woods she would collect fragrant roots and leaves, so there would often be lit incense burning in ashtrays at home. Yuelsilvs home always smelled like the woods, and his mother was sure to provide him with nutrients harvested from herbs to keep him healthy.

By the age of seven he was very eager to help his mother with her female duties to her clan. He had no oath binding him to such duties, but he liked to be of assistance. While his young male friends kept to their studies, playing shogi and polishing antlers with their fathers; Yuelsilv would help his mother grind roots and create medicines for wild animals. His mother crafted human medicine on her own, a sacred recipe only Nara's could know. He was however talented in other ways. Yuelsilv was capable of channeling his chakra into Fuuton winds by the time he was eight, his mother began his education in the Konoha Academy.
Age: 8-10Show
By nine years old Yuelsilv had been in the Academy for a year, and had passed the physical requirements for graduation, by most degrees. A true prodigy, Yuelsilv was both capable with jutsu, and passionate about studying concepts of chakra nature. He took to the application of technique incredibly quickly, able to perform all basic Jutsu within weeks of learning. He passed all of his physical exams with flying colors, however he pined over the classical education of Konohas Academy. The young scholar disagreeing on the archaic structure of introducing the study of Genjutsu to children. As such his mother made him repeat the year; she would say to him, "You could learn a thing or two yet and besides most kids went for a few years anyways."

At age ten Yuelsilv had Genin level skills in all areas, with only two years of the Acadamy to support him on paper. His instructor had never seen such progress, as well as such talent all at the same time. Walking into the Academy Yuelsilv could change the nature of his chakra, and wild winds would erupt in his hands. Raw talent was obvious within; but by the time the ten year old left it was clear a truly gifted shinobi had arisen. Yuelsilv could perform incredibly efficiently, and even was beginning to show signs of using two elements. He had excellent control with Classical Ninpou jutsu, and was expected to be revolutionary in Ninpou as an adult.

With an extra year spent studying on-paper concepts at the Acadamy, Yuelsilv's growth was clearly recognizable on paper. Where he had made errors in describing certain formations on the exam, he knew now with certainty. Yuelsilv could even execute hidden formations with Genin team mates, such as vanguard rollouts and long range Fuuton cannon offense. The young boy was a charismatic genius, and excitedly focused on working with Konoha to protect his family.

Yuelsilv looked up to the shinobi of Konohagakure. Growing up without a father he always searched for a strong man to give him advice. When he graduated from the Acadamy, his instructor handed him his forehead protector and said to him, "I think I will see you again. Yuelsilv, your kind of genius comes once in a lifetime to someone like me, but it's the people like me that will direct where your efforts are most needed." Yuelsilv's teacher had no accommodations on the battlefield, a book worm so to speak.

Yuelsilv always remembered those words when he wondered which way to go.
GeninShow
Pre-ExamShow
After a few years as a Genin Yuelsilv had made a name for himself amongst the squads. No other Genin's could compare to the power of his wind jutsu, and there weren't many capable of two elements. Yuelsilv was a great example of a solid ninja, tossing volts of lightning and controlling his giant shuriken with Fuuton. His unique Demon-Windmill technique was known to make even bandits surrender. Yuelsilv made good money constantly taking missions on, and the Council even allowed him to participate in C rank missions. He became famous as the Genin Bandit Conqueror, and enjoyed a good payout. His versatility preceeded him, and many knew him as The White Winds of Knoha.

At home Yuelsilv paid his mother rent, and contributed when he could. The two of them were rarely home together anymore. Between Kisame's journeying into the forests, and Yuelsilv traveling around the country on missions, the family dinner table grew dusty. Kisame was growing older however, and decided to retire from the Surveillance work. Passing down leadership of the Surveillance Squad of Konoha to Yuelsilv, Kisame tutored her son as an experienced Sensor ninja, and she retired from the military.

With his mom home, and his new job with Konohagakure as a Sensory Ninja, Yuelsilv found a more steady pace in life. He kept his usual work with C rank missions, and now worked throughout the week on making sure no one is sneaking inside of the village. Yuelsilv was a Lead of the Hook team, and would chase down the people who were sneaking into the Leaf Village sometimes he would even fight ninja. His growth as a sensor ninja was imperative to seeking out suspicious individuals, and his mom kept teaching him how to improve his ability.

Work stayed steady, monitoring bath houses and gate ways near the Village Forests. Yuelsilv continued to grow as a shinobi, practicing his ninjutsu all of the time and studying proper shinobi formations. He had even created a few techniques, unique to his style of combat. The more he grew physically, the more capable he became with his chakra. At the age of sixteen he decided to take the Chuunin Exam in Sunagakure. Yuelsilv was favored by the Hokage to become a Chuunin and was eager to further his career.

Heading out with his Demon-Wind shuriken, Yuelsilv prepared for a battle in the desert. The young man was studying the art of crafting, so that he could make the best shuriken. Before he left the nation, he spent several weeks honing the edges of shuriken, making sure his arsenal would impressive the shinobi that would judge him in the exam.
Chuunin ExamShow
The first portion of Yuelsilvs exam was taken in the desert. Sitting at tables made of condensed sand, Yuelsilv faced his first opponent. The Written Exam. Most of the Nations had a standardized system for the written exam, however it is customary for each village to put their own flair on each portion of the exam. Yuelsilv answered all of the questions to the best of his ability, and was finished in less than seven minutes. He was ready to turn in his exam and submit his grade to the Shinobi Council in charge of his test. With the paper folded up, Yuelsilv wrapped a knot around it and presented himself to the instructor.

The exam was being taken outside, behind the instructor was nothing but desert. Yuelsilv could see the wind kicking some sand up, but aside from the 12 genin assembled with the Hidden Sand instructor, there was nothing around them. Silence began to fill the air as Yuelsilv stared at the bandana-clad ninja. The young man coughed dryly and held out the paper he had folded up The instructor quickly snatched it from him and stamped it before throwing it behind him. The jar quietly hit the ground, and the instructor began putting together hand seals. Before long, the ink that had been stamped on the paper, turned into a lizard. The sleek, black ink lizard grabbed the scroll and dug into the sand.

Yuelsilv looked confused and the instructor smirked. He spoke in a gravelly voice and explained, "If you want your test graded, you will hunt it down in this desert. You have..." The instructor looked at his watch and declared, "Just a bit more than fifty two minutes left." Yuelsilv let out a disappointed exclamation, the instructor continued. "My jutsu will collect at the same spot, so you will have to find your test before it gets mixed in with the others. Good luck." The instructor Body Flickered away.

Yuelsilv had to act fast. He dashed into the desert, looking in the direction the Ink lizard had dug towards. He began to follow a burrowing tunnel, and before long was certain he was on it's track. Sensing the familiar Suna instructor ninja's chakra, Yuelsilv was like a hound on the trail. It wasn't long before he ran into another ninja. A blonde puppeteer was chasing the same trail. Yuelsilv wondered if he was following the same test. "I hope he doesn't think my scroll is his.." Yuelsilv muttered while he dashed closer towards his target and away from the puppetteer who had taken the written exam with him.

The desert held only a few hiding places, and before long two other ninja were in the clearing the Konoha shinobi had found the ink lizards converging upon. It seemed they were eating the tests and fusing together. It would take some time to find your test floating through the ink, but Yuelsilv was ready. However other Genin had made their way to the clearing, so it wouldn't be easy or safe. Yuelsilv was face to face with three Sunagakure ninja and knew he would have to move fast. He didn't recognize two of the ninja, who had begun fighting. The third was the blonde from his group.

Before Yuelsilv could speak, the blonde wiggled his finger and his puppet erupted from the sand in front of the Konohagakure ninja. There was a lot of range still, which usually worked to Yuelsilvs favor. However dodging a puppet in close quarters would make hand signs difficult, so Yuelsilv dropped a smoke bomb to jump backward. He needed a second to figure out his strategy in battle.

The wind was steady on the desert, and Yuelsilv was certain he could out manuever the Suna ninja. As the smoke faded Yuelsilv threw a handful of 5 shuriken at the puppeteer, hoping to copy them and overwhelm the ninja. Instead the Suna ninja commanded his puppet to knock them down before handseals could be made, and used a mouth-mounted flame thrower to counter Yuelsilv. The fire kept him on the defensive, unable to go after the puppet master; and he was dodging and darting around the sandy terrain. Yuelsilv waws uncomfortable, and things weren't looking well for him. He had time to think however, and running around the battlefield gave him an idea. He thought if he couldn't get around, he would go through.

Yuelsilv faced the puppet, and jumped toward it. As he flew through the air he weaved handseals together. Just as he completed the signs the puppet began to shoot flames, but Yuelsilv was a step ahead and shouted, "Dragon Twister Jutsu!" The air in between him and the puppet got real still before opening up with a loud roar, the flames blown out before getting out of the puppet. Then a giant claw shot out of the visible air in between the puppet, and grabbed the puppet. The wind exploded and tore the puppet into pieces. Yuelsiv dashed forward to the Suna ninja and knocked him out with one punch.

Yuelsilv dashed onward, and secured his scroll. He dashed back towards the instructor and made it back with ten minutes to spare. His answers were perfect, and he was put forward to the final round with a perfect score.
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For his final portion of the exam, Yuelsilv was to face off in one on one combat with another potential Genin. He was given one hour to prepare himself for battle, and did so by meditating. Yuelsilv relied heavily on ninjutsu for battles, so he kept himself focused on maintaining rigorous chakra control. For the entire hour he sat in the Arena and regulated his chakra flow. Before long the referee interrupted him. The battle was to commence, and Yuelsilv was ready. He jumped up, and had a look of the utmost seriousness. The genin was ready to show off his talents, and turned around to face his opponent.

Yuelsilv's opponent was a Sunagakure ninja. A tall woman who wielded a scythe. She seemed older than Yuelsilv, and kept her face covered. The woman bowed to him and brandished her scythe. Yuelsilv returned her bow and flung a paper tag out of his sleeve pocket. The seal released and Yuelsilv grabbed the Demon-Wind Shuriken that emerged from it. He expanded the arms on his weapon, and his opponent jumped back. Yuelsilv assumed a fighting stance, and quickly doubled back to create more distance.

As a ranged fighter Yuelsilv was most comfortable starting a fight at a distance, and it seemed his opponent felt the same. She flung her scythe into the air and sent wind blades toward him. Yuelsilv had time to react however, the attack was slow. He quickly weaved together some hand seals, preparing the Vortex Pillar Jutsu. A tornado began to form around him, negating the inferior winds of his opponent. Quickly the tornado raged into the sky and began to travel towards his opponent. The woman flanked to his right, and Yuelsilv moved in the other direction. With the tornado between them Yuelsilv was safe, and he put together more handsigns for his Cyclone Winds Jutsu. The winds gently floated around him and Yuelsilv threw a Demon-Wind Shuriken into it. The shuriken spun in pace, waiting to be fired. His Vortex Pillar Jutsu's tornado was beginning to settle down, and Yuelsilv had one final jutsu for his combo.

As he was putting together the hand seals the tornado dissipated, and the woman leapt upward to get the jump on him. She was casting her own hand seals but Yuelsilv was quicker. However he was still putting his own together when he used his superb chakra control to fire the shuriken from his Cyclone Winds. It went toward his airborne opponent, but the Great Breakthrough Jutsu she had prepared was a strong defense against the shuriken. The weapon spun in the air, fighting to make it past the rival winds. Yuelsilv finished his jutsu down below and fired a Shadow Shuriken back towards himself, catching it in his Cyclone Winds. The Shadow shuriken floated for a second while Yuelsilv aimed and fired again. This time the woman was not quick enough to counter it and she was barely able to lean forward in time. She took a great cut to her arm, and the referee called the match.

Yuelsilv became a Chuunin. He was praised for quick thinking, and efficient use of simple techniques. He was proud of himself, and went back to Konoha as a greater young man than he had been when he left. Upon returning to the Village Yuelsilv was gifted with a customized Military Grade robe. The Hokage suggested he begin a new career. The concept of missions was becoming more knife-and-dagger. He thought Yuelsilv would enjoy a Village job, and gave him the opportunity to teach for the Village.
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Only sixteen years old, the opportunity was rare for a relatively inexperienced Chuunin to teach. His genius was recognized however, and Yuelsilv reveled in the opportunity to improve the livlihood of Konoha residents. Yuelsilv would teach Genin the study of articulating battle formations. Yuelsilv was a pronounced leader by executing specialized commands of the team. He would be teaching leaders how to know when to employ talents, and how to create unique plans during battle. Yuelsilv was excited by the suggestion, and took the offer. He was eager to flex his brain and practice his ninjutsu.

The Hokage prepared a place for Yuelsilv to teach students. In the Forest of Konoha, Yuelsilv was given a small tree fort that stood 50 meters in the air. At the top of the canopy. There was no ladder, and only a shinobi could climb up the tree with ninjutsu. Yuelsilv fashioned the inside of the tree fort with tapestries that had Laws of Shinobi. He kept several book cases with information on Ninjutsu, Leadership as a Shinobi and Combination Jutsu. Before long the Hokage assigned him two students to teach.

Kirito was a Taijutsu specialist with an Affinity for Suiton; and Kanna Inuzuka was a Fuuton user with her canine companion. Both of his students are thirteen year old genin leaders of their own team, and Yuelsilv was given one year before an audit and the Hokage rated his work. With a curriculum for the next year laid out, Yuelsilv began mentoring the genin with no time to waste.

As their studies together prolonged, Yuelsilv found himself getting to know the two. The Inuzuka girl favored close quarters combat, andconvincing her to lead the charge was quite a fight. Yuelsilv would read books from famous shinobi, providing commentary trying to convince Kanna one way or another. She was hard headed, but in battle Yuelsilv proved himself. After facing the brunt of fully charged wind jutsu, the Inuzuka understood her place in combat.

The classes sparring matches usually involved two shinobi working together against the other two, with Yuelsilv a leader most of the time. They would practice formations, and Yuelsilv would give pointers on when to look for cues to use certain types of jutsu. The class progressed quickly, and within a year the Hokage congratulated Yuelsilv on a job well done. Both of the Genin had improved their leadership skills, and ability with shinobi techniques.

Growing personally as a shinobi, Yuelsilv was thankful for the opportunity to mentor the Genin. The Hokage relieved him of the duty for a season, and provided him the rights to owning the fancy treehouse as a reward. Yuelsilv was thrilled, and continued his life as aa ninja. He maintained working for the military, providing the Village with intel on the goings and comings of people in the Village. Yuelsilv worked for some years, mastering his ninjutsu, and honing his control with chakra. Occasionally he would take on more students to mentor, but the ninja spent most of his free time studying animals of the forest.

Before long Yuelsilv found himself studying the nature of bats, an animal renown for stealth. Yuelsilv wondered if he could learn from the animals natural pattern of life, and began spending many of his nights outside to watch them fly through the skies and devour insects. It didn't take long before he discovered the bats were all coming from the same direction, and the ninja decided to set out and explore the mountain where the bats came from.
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Traveling with his usual shinobi equipment, and lots of food pills, the White Winds of Konoha made his way north. The woods Yuelsilv traveled through were overgrown with unique fauna, and various species of herbivores grazed peacefully. As traversed the greenery, Yuelsilv's head was to the sky. He was only able to travel at night, following the direction where bats were flying from. The trail led him north up a mountain, a few days of travel past Konoha. As he got higher into the depths of the cliffside Yuelsilv found more bats, and ever considerably larger ones. He grew ever more eager to discover the source of the unusual bats, and continued following the hordes that flew in the night sky.

Several weeks passed by, and the shinobi searched everywhere for the source where bats were flying from. Dedication tied him to his goals, and no weather would slow him down. After two months of climbing the mountain, where he had suspected bats to be flying out of, Yuelsilv found an enormous cave. The mountain side had a massive hole bored into its side, larger than most buildings of Konoha. Bats were certainly flying out of the cave at night, so he knew he had found the right cave. These were enormous feral bats, that attacked him from the sky a few times. Yuelsilv called them werebats, and camped near the cave to study the specimens before he entered their home. They were absolutely dangerous, and he knew it wise to tread carefully.

Yuelsilv compiled several documents on the werebats. The first was a comprehensive account of their physical features. The largest of werebats being the size of dogs, with wings and fangs. The werebats claws were like fingers, capable of grabbing and fitted with sharp claws. Their fur ranged from white to gray, and seemed incredibly clean. The larger the werebat, the more of an aura was palpable. As a sensory ninja Yuelsilv could certainly tell that the werebats were capable of harnessing chakra.

Regarding the beasts social patterns, Yuelsilv had little to go on. The beasts left and returned to the cave either alone or in pairs. They seemed to be able to communicate with each other, and only appeared at night. Sometimes hordes would fly out, but most flew off in separate directions quickly.

Truly intrigued by such a beasts, Yuelsilv decided he would enter the werebat cave and find where the beasts lived in the cave. He hoped to discover some inspiration for shinobi warfare, and was ready to get some battle practice in as well. With his writing pad, a pen, and his usual shinobi equipment; Yuelsilv began exploring the mysterious Werebat Cave.
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Yuelsilv spent a few hours traveling through the cave. He found lots of werebat dropping, and some piles were much larger than a typical bats. The caves were silent, the nocturnal creatures sleeping the late afternoon away. Yuel traveled further and further, losing track of time before long. Unbeknownst to him, night time had fallen and the werebats were awake. The walls began to vibrate at the break of moonlight, the giant bats rustling their wings to stretch out before flight. Yuelsilv sensed the movement of several large werebats, and prepared himself.
The werebats flew from the cave ceilings, high above Yuelsilvs head. One dived down, picking him up with its front claws and hoisting him into the air. Yuelsilv pulled out a Demon-Wind Shuriken. The weaponwas folded in, with just one arm extending from the circle the other three arms were linked to. Yuel slashed at the beasts guts from below with his Demon Wind Shuriken, cutting it and covering himself in blood. The beast squeeled wildly and dropped Yuelsilv.

Falling high from the sky, Yuelsilv was unable to land gracefully. The shinobi rolled his ankle and fell to the ground fenseless while he struggled to balance himself up. Suddenly another werebat jumped on top of him forced him onto his back. The werebat lunged down and bit him in the neck, puncturing his flesh with its fangs. The creature latched hard onto his neck, and began seeping chakra into Yuelsilvs body. The chakra overwhelmed Yuelsilv, and he lost the ability to move his body. He tried to grab the creature, but couldn't move under it's weight.

To Yuelsilvs surprise, just before the werebats chakra killed him, another werebat attacked the one that was biting Yuel. This one that saved Yuelsilvs life was incredibly large, almost the size of an adult man. The beasts snarled as they rolled around on the ground. The larger werebat had the upperhand, and the smaller one was running away. The larger werebat had broken it's leg.

The beasts eyes glowed green with the radiance of chakra and ferociously the Werebat roared ; with it's wings stretched out it jumped from all fours, toward Yuelsilv. It sniffed the air for a second, suddenly turning to charge Yuelsilv.
The creature was faster than the small counterparts, and Yuelsilv had only a moment to react. His right arm was heavy like lead, from being bitten. So he instead used his left to throw his Demon-Wind Shuriken at the beasts chest. The werebat charged forward and swung it's arm, deflecting the shuriken. It snorted, and put it's claws together, in a handseal. The werebat puffed out its chest, and green winds began to swirl around it. The technique was creating a strong gust in the caves tunnels, encouraging anything to flee. Bugs began to crawl out from under rocks, and bats that were hiding in the ceiling flew deeper into the cave.

Yuelsilv used this opportunity to escape, while the giant werebat ignored him. It seemed the beast was more concerned with clearing out the caves, than killing the human. So Yuelsilv limped back towards the entrance of the cave. His body was in terrible pain from the battle. The skin around his neck was hot to the touch, and his vision was shrinking. The longer he walked, the more his neck was giving him sharp pain and his sight was darkening around the edges. As the blindness continued to worsen Yuelsilv began to feel a pain similar to when the werebat had injected him with chakra. He could feel the werebats chakra still inside of his body, surrounding his own chakra. Concerned for his health, Yuelsilv intended to head back to the Village and get medical help.

To his dismay however, Yuelsilv would not escape the cave without a final confrontation. As he was nearing safety, a swarm of normal bats flew out. Yuelsilv was moving slow, and turned sluggishly to his backside. He could barely see now, and squinted to focus his eyes. He could see green eyes in the darkness, and recognized them as the giant Werebats. The beast waited for a moment while the two stared at each other. Yuelsilv could only see in front of him, the corners of his vision darkened. The beast seemed to be calm, and even though he was gravely injured; Yuelsilv limped in front of the giant werebat.

Suddenly Yuelsilv's vision blackened, and burning pain spiked in the punture wounds within his neck. Yuelsilv painfully clutched himself, the fang wounds still bleeding from a deep stab.

The beast peacefully stepped forward on all fours, its wings curled to its sides in a passive stature. The werebat leaned back on it's hind legs and put its paws together in the same handseal it had done before. Chakra began to radiate around it's throat, and the monster opened it's mouth toward Yuelsilv who had fallen to the ground. The chakra around the werebeast collected as an orb and the werebat fired the chakra into Yuelsilv's wound.
The punctures healed instantly, with his pain fading away too. Where the scars would have formed, a seal mark appeared. The seal was two dots, connected by a circle with a spiral inside.

Yuelsilv 's vision went black. He could not see anything, and began to panic. He wondered if he was dreaming, and started to sob. The pain had faded away, and he reached up to his neck to touched where the seal was. Chakra began to flow through his body, and Yuelsilv's chakra network began to repair itself. Chakra moved through each of the points in his body, stimulating their spiritual capacity. Yuelsilv felt healing, despite being blind. However as chakra reached his throat, Yuelsilv felt something new. The sensation was at first like smoking after a delicious meal, delightful and inviting. However as it continued Yuelsilv could sense his chakra separating from his body, and being replaced by wild chakra he could not control. His heart began to palpitate and he fainted.

Meanwhile the werebat fled. After waking up a few hours later, Yuelsilv slowly made his way to the nearest town. He was totally blind, and weakened by the event. He fell unconscious before Konoha medical ninja arrived in the town to pick him up. When he woke up, he was still blind, but he told the hospital what happened. He gave them his writings on the beasts, which they were familiar with. They promised with some time they would be able to ascertain if the mark on Yuelsilvs throat was dangerous.

While staying at the hospital, Yuelsilv was confined to living gently. He could meditate, but found that his chakra network was flowing in two directions. His usual chakra reserves were stored in his stomach area, however now Yuelsilv could feel a new source of chakra flowing around his throat. The hospital brought in an expert on Senjutsu, curious the relation of Werebat chakra to human genetics, and Yuelsilv was examined. After careful deliberation, a few things were certain.
Werebats were capable of altering human DNA with their chakra, that much was known by professionals. Those who were bitten by werebats were usually afflicted by cancer, however it was known that Gene Splicing could be achieved through Chakra Therapy with humans and werebats. It was also clear that Yuelsilv's blindness was caused by the bite rather than the technique the werebat used, which was confirmed to be a sealing technique to alter how natural chakra interacts with genetic make up.

The hospital deduced the following. Yuelsilv was bitten by a werebat, and his RNA began to alter his genetic make-up to protect himself from the toxic effects of natural chakra invading the body. This caused him blindness. Then a Werebat used a chakra technique on the chakra that was inside of Yuelsilv's body. This sealing technique halted any further physical changes, and re-established Yuelsilv's connection to his own chakra. It was still unclear why Yuelsilv fainted, however the Senjutsu expert deduced that the unfamiliarity of the seals effect on his chakra network was the cause.
This raised the question of how will that flow of natural energy, that resonates around his throat, alter Yuelsilvs body further. The hospital requested Yuelsilv sit through more tests, however he declined and decided to figure the rest out for himself.

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Post by Das Kirb » Thu Jun 03, 2021 11:47 pm

[Ninjutsu • Shadow Clone Technique] <-- Could you add the * back to the beginning of this jutsu? It denotes it as an archived jutsu and is require.

[Fuuton • Cyclone Cradle] <-- As described this could be C rank, but it does require a size and that could bump it to B.

[Fuuton • Serpentine Twister] <-- You give a dimension for length, how wide is it?

[Raiton • Thunderous Hirahira] <-- Okay, right now this isn't B rank. It feels more D rank. HOWEVER, that could change with how to clearify the last part. Is this causing an explosive force in an AoE? Cause it reads that way atm.

Also, I count 1 D rank, 3 C ranks. Unless I'm mistaken you would need more D and C, up to 5, to support the higher ranks. Double check with a less rusty mod.

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Post by Rudi » Fri Jun 04, 2021 7:47 pm

I completely reworked the jutsu, I had totally murked it as far as following the pyramids. I added some to the history as well, and fixed some abiliities and concentrations.
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Post by Das Kirb » Sun Jun 06, 2021 6:15 pm

Alright, lets take this one piece at a time from most impactful to least.

1) Your bat ability could use a bit of clarification. With transformation abilities you kinda need to instill a bit more detail on HOW it's being accomplished. Looking at your jutsu I think I sorta understand but still. Here's what I'd like detailed.
1a) Through what method are you able to do this? I.E. Taijutsu style metamorphosis ala Katsu or ninjutsu style transformation?
1b) What are the limits? Can you do partial transformations or just full? What does this transformation grant in terms of senses, natural weapons, natural abilities, or natural armor?
1c) Duration? Unrequired if you intend to govern this via jutsu, in which case say so.

2) Your second ability is terrifying in its vagueness. Are you getting a full on Sage mode? In which case I believe we have rules that outline this. Are you simply taking aspects of various animals? In which case there's a lot more that needs to go into this for development and you're stepping on the toes of the Body Genma. Feel free to PM me about this particular beast, but intended.

3) Only archived jutsu are required to have the *, unless I'm missing something. Other jutsu should not as it's a form of short hand used by mods and members to benchmark jutsu by.

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Post by Rudi » Mon Jun 07, 2021 5:14 pm

Updated :D Thank you by the way
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Post by Das Kirb » Wed Jun 09, 2021 5:02 pm

Okay, the first ability seems fairly alright. Will just need standard stuff like duration and whatnot in jutsu so that can be handled that way.

Your second ability is still confusing me, and it's probably my fault. From what I'm reading one or more of several things are happening here.

1) You're getting CP by draining wild animals.
2) You're granting all of your ninjutsu a blinding effect.
3) You're granting yourself a +5 speed and strength with any jutsu used for a single post.
4?) You're turning other creatures into werebeasts.

There are problems with each of these but only the first one is simply a no-go. I'm sorry. The rest can possibly be worked with, will just need to figure out how.

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Update: removed CP drain, and stat increases
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Post by Ace Trainer » Sun Jun 13, 2021 7:27 pm

I agree with Chi in that I could use a lot of clarification on your second ability.

" This chakra cannot be used to attain Sage Mode. Any Senjutsu technique used blinds a human for the duration of the thread,. "

Does this mean that the person performing a senjutsu technique is blinded? Or a person struck by a senjutsu technique is blinded?

"Hybrid Werebeast/humans who are transformed will revert back into their human form in the next post, while an animal Werebeast will die the post after using Senjutsu."

If you are currently in your form from the 1st ability, and you use a senjutsu, you turn back into a human?

What exactly is this ability doing beyond letting you use senjutsu? Because you can just use a concentration for that.
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Post by Rudi » Mon Jun 14, 2021 7:03 pm

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Mechanically speaking the abilities purpose is to be able to teach Senjutsu to animal companions that are disposable, and eventually use Gene Splicing to create an Animal-PC that goes with the standard form of a Were-Beast Sage. Something similar to the Tsukino's, but perhaps with more process to the story developing. For example the harrowing of teaching senjutsu to animals, for the purpose to evolve their bodies before death. (The idea is actually inspired of how I would have raised Alucard as Dracula)

From a writers perspective the process is hopefully a way to create disposable companions that last for a few weeks, while writing about natural chakra relating to the wild hunts of nature, primal hunting and evolution, and experimenting with biological animals while exploring nature. Learning to speak with bats, forming relationships with a sort of pet that could develop into a Sage, through consciousness transplantation with Fuuinjutsu and Senjutsu. Etc. Or perhaps be sold and sacrificed to a friend who needs Senjutsu.

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Post by TheLacarix » Tue Jun 15, 2021 11:09 am

'summoning tags' on your windmill shuriken will need to be a specific technique.
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Post by TheLacarix » Tue Jun 15, 2021 11:11 am

'summoning tags' on your windmill shuriken will need to be a specific technique.
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Post by Rudi » Tue Jun 15, 2021 12:37 pm

Fixed that (he wears em like a katana now)
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Post by TheLacarix » Tue Jun 15, 2021 12:50 pm

I think you'd be better of combining your two abilties into one and taking a mastery stat, seems more ideal for what your attempting to create.
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Post by Rudi » Fri Jun 25, 2021 8:19 pm

I considered it. However the reason I opted for 2 is so that both abilities can be grafted to a PC. For example, a were-bat pet could use Were-Beast chakra to enhance nintai. But it wouldn't have or need Hybrid Gene Splicing for that. With that being said, as well if both were taken the pet could be a more intelligent companion.

Also. For each I hope to model what other players could do with the concept. Maybe take Were-Beast Chakra and instead of combining it with physical transformations; design a gene splicing that allows a PC to devour werebeasts and become pregnant with feral ainmal spirits that can be contained by Were-Beast Chakra Fuuinjutsu.

For balance purposes too. I want to do a lot with each ability. Like making bat clones that can be summoned, becoming a giant bat, regenerating limbs, creating small mountain storms, eventually achieving a Sage Mode (see edits) and stuff like that.

ICLY the two are separate. The chakra source was revealed to him by the effects of his body changing to be more like a were-bats. The actual chakra exists originally outside of his body (as an extension of the fear and euphoria animals use to stimulate growth and decay of flora). The change is a culmination of the effects of the natural chakra inside of a werebat infused with human chakra by Fuuinjutsu, that will be revealed to be development (mad scientist in the underground tunnels of a cave) that encourages Yuelsilv to create hordes of bats that he can summon.

If you still feel like the two are best to be one, I'm willing to change it as long as that still makes sense.
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Post by Gilak » Tue Jun 29, 2021 7:17 pm

So with this second ability I am going to need you to give some bullet points of exactly what it does. Because as of right now I'm just seeing it as a whole bunch of fluff that when boiled down it looks like you have a specific type of chakra and that is it.

I will second the Idea of merging the two abilities together and grabbing a 9th slot.
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Post by Rudi » Thu Jul 01, 2021 5:18 pm

Edit: I detailed the two abilities more specifically

I tried to write in more detail that would explain how the two abilities are separate from each other. I could combine them, but it would take some work. If this isn't satisfactory, I will proceed to edit.
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Post by Gilak » Fri Jul 02, 2021 8:14 am

They can store 1/3 of their total Chakra Pool as Werebeast chakra that acts as their own natural chakra <--- This is only possible if you have a 9th Stat
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Post by Rudi » Sat Jul 03, 2021 8:09 pm

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Post by Nafan~ » Thu Jul 15, 2021 6:23 am

Were-Beast Chakra:

This is not traditionally how specialized stats work. While I will entertain different methods of obtaining stat points in a specialised stat, I don't think a specialised stat that defaults at rank average as you rank up is balanced, and it is also extremely difficult to keep track of and the logic breaks if your stat total goes into the next rank. As this is your first character, if you really want to use a specialised stat which I will note is a part of the advanced rules, I would suggest you arrange the stat in a traditional manner. This means you allocate stat points to it on start up as you normally would for a regular stat.

your taijutsu concentrations quote is accidentally embedded within your ninjutsu concentrations quote, instead of below.

For your custom ninpou techniques, please insert a return/enter between the end of each technique so that it is easier to read.

[Ninjutsu •Hidden Leaf Bomb] - you mean puff, not poof. Where does the smoke appear, the technique does not make this clear. The leaves will need either a strength with which they attach to someone/something, or to state what can allow them to be removed.

[Ninjutsu • Leaf Retrieval] - this needs to specify that it is a sensory technique. This needs to be a leaf they have infused with their chakra, not simply one they have held.

[Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Echo Face] - The jinrai have a copyright on vibration related ninjutsu. Perhaps remove reference to vibrations and refer only to 'sound'. I know that sounds nitpicky, but trust me, it matters.

[Ninjutsu • Shadow Windmill] - unfortunately cloning metallic objects falls under Kouton. You would not be able to create another metallic object without that element.

[Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Bat Swarm] - Puff of smoke. What size 'cloud' is the bat swarm? How far away from you can you create them?

[[Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Bat Wings] - this needs a duration.

[Ninjutsu • Shadow Shuriken] - this suffers the same issue as shadow windmill.

*[Ninjutsu • Transfiguration: Demonic Bat-Man] - the * at the start of techniques is to indicate that they have been copied from the archives. This is not an archive technique. [3/Chakra Pool <- you mean Chakra pool /3. This requires your transformation ability as a prerequisite and you should list that.

[Fuuton • Strong Winds ] - this is like 3 techniques in one. You need to pick one effect and stick to it, especially for a D-rank.

[Fuuton • Wind Arrow] - this needs a range. How big is the arrow?

[Fuuton • Cyclone Winds] - the projectiles will rapidly what in the air?

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