[Denied]Hozuki Kangetsu

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Hozuki, Kangetsu


["Help your comrades first and that is all there is too it."]

General Information

Age:15
Gender:Male
Height:5'9"
Weight:195 lb
Physical Features: Kangetsu has pale white skin and also has purple eyes, this is a somewhat common color of eyes and skin for the Hozuki clan. He also seems to have a mad or calm facial expression. Kangetsu is quite tall and is often mistaken for an older age. He has a standard build and is not too skinny but is not too buff. He also has white hair(Kind of messy). Kangetsu's teeth seem so be somewhat sharp which seems to be common to shinobi in Kirigakure
Clothing/Accessories: Kangetsu always wears sleeveless clothing because sleeves get in the way of him forming hand seals. He also enjoys wearing collors because he thinks that they look cool. He also wears a belt that holds his sword and makes it easy to unsheathe. Overall Kangetsu just wants too look cool and cares about his style.
Personality: Kangetsu seems to always be calm and collected. Kangetsu has a fear of rejection. This is because most people wont approach him due to his angry/calm look on his face. He is nice to comrades and has a protective attitude. Kangetsu does not mind staying back in order to protect or help his friends. Kangetsu is also very smart and can find out a strategy for most situations. Kangetsu seeks power and will do many things to get this power.


Battle Information Village:Kirigakure no Sato
Rank: Genin

Stats: (0/40)
  • Ninjutsu:10
  • Taijutsu:10
  • Genjutsu:1
  • Stamina:4
  • Control:1
  • Strength:1
  • Speed:8
  • Instinct: 5
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1x 28.5 Inch Katana. (Hilt=5 Inches) (Blade=23.5 Inches)
Companions: (0/1)
Affinity: Suiton
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
First Ability
Body ModificationShow
As Kangetsu is in the Hozuki Clan he has an ability passed down through the clan. He seems to be able to turn himself into water. This can be used to evade taijutsu but anything that causes loss of water will affect him so he is not immune.He can also use this to escape most traps because he can phase through anything that is solid.(like metal bars NOT a complete wall)
Second Ability
Third Ability
Concentrations
Ninjutsu 1/2
SuitonShow
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Suiton affinity. Suiton has a passive enveloping effect.
Passive(Enveloping)Show
Suiton's effect is enveloping, meaning that suiton passively surrounds anything that it makes contact with. Suiton techniques that do not last over periods of times (i.e, exploding techniques) drench their opponents, but long term techniques will envelop anything they come in contact with and maintain a hold on it with the 3/4th strength of the technique, rounded down. This means that if a suiton wave is shot forward with 17 strength, it will envelope and move anything with it that does not have more than 12 strength to resist it. This allows Suiton to fill a very powerful role in eliminating tools from opponent's access and capturing targets.
Taijutsu 1/2
Sword WeaponsShow
The fundamental skill of [Sword Weapons] indicates the user’s proficiency with swords and sword-like weapons such as knives, daggers, sword-breakers and the like. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Genjutsu 0/2

Jutsu
NinjutsuShow
Suiton • Defensive Barrier
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will spray water created from the inside of their chest through their mouth. Once the water is expelled, it will form an umbrella shape that is concave to the user and about two meters in diameter. This defense is somewhat solid and can be formed in any direction the user can spit, up to five meters away. The defense is shot at a speed of 5 and has a strength of 5 and unless completely destroyed it lasts for three posts before falling lifelessly to the ground.
Suiton • Water Shuriken
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will form a shuriken of water approximately 6 centimeters in diameter in their hand. When kai'd, this shuriken explodes with a force equal to a D-Rank explosion and covers the immediate area in water. If not consumed, this technique lasts for three posts.
Suiton • Great Stream
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user expels a massive conical water torrent that drenches an area thoroughly, capable of soaking a meter down nearly instantly for soil and like materials. The cone has a base width of 15 meters and a range of 15 meters and travels at a speed of 10, pushing things back with a strength of 10.
Suiton • Clone
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user creates a clone of themselves comprised completely of suiton chakra. This clone is incapable of jutsu, however it's liquid nature makes it a very capable taijutsu combatant.
  • Taijutsu: 6
  • Stamina: 8
  • Strength: 8
  • Speed: 6
Suiton • Crashing Wave
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user expels a massive tidal wave of water 10 meters wide and nearly 5 meters tall. This wave travels forward at a speed of 10 and with a strength of 10 for up to 15 meters before losing it's steam and failing.
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TaijutsuShow
*[Iaido • Block]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 8 Speed
A technique developed out of need to protect himself from other weapon users, Block is simple in its use, but highly effective when used right. By partially drawing their sword, the user of this technique is able to use the back of their blade to block incoming weapon attacks should they time it correctly. The user must be careful when using this technique, should the attacker have a high enough strength, this technique could very well shatter the user's weapon.
*[Iaido • Swift Draw]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 5 Taijutsu, 8 Speed
With the most widely recognized attack of Iaido style, the user draws their katana at a very quick speed, making a powerful slash in tangent with the draw. This technique is dependent on the user's overall reaction speed as it is usually only used when an opening presents itself or when the user needs to draw their sword quickly.
HistoryShow
Zangetsu was born and raised in the Mist Village and quickly learned all of the Jutsu that was passed down through his clan. He hated the Mist Village though and always wants to leave. Zangetsu was trained by his brother and they always fought over who was stronger. Their fights ended in a draw as both of them often fainted after Zangetsu was fully trained and was even in skills as his brother. He often got in trouble at school as well because he does not deal well with authority and he sometimes even fist fought with his teachers because he thinks that he is more skilled than them and that he doesnt need them to teach him. This is somewhat true because he passes almost every test with quite a high grade. He was so happy when he graduated from the academy because he could finally leave his village and go see the world. What will happen when he goes on his first mission to deliver some papers to Konohagakure?


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Post by HozukiKangetsu » Fri May 26, 2017 7:28 am

Think i am finished.

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Post by Kabu » Fri May 26, 2017 9:02 am

First of all, this is an alternate universe so characters from canon, like Suigetsu and Sasuke, have never existed.

For his physical descriptions, if you could please add a bit more detail that would be appreciated.

His sword needs to be defined, given actual measurements and whatnot, and you also need to state where he carries it.

As for your jutsu, if you choose to make your own they need to follow the rules laid out here, though we also have an archive located here that you're free to take from or even simply use as a guideline.

You're also missing a history, which is basically an account of the character's life thus far and for a genin should be at least 2-3 paragraphs.
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Post by HozukiKangetsu » Fri May 26, 2017 12:21 pm

I dont want to argue but every jutsu i listed is an actual jutsu in the naruto franchise. if you want me to change them though i do not mind.

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Post by HozukiKangetsu » Fri May 26, 2017 1:07 pm

Take three :D

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Post by Zangy » Fri May 26, 2017 1:22 pm

I would recommend going through the jutsu archives that Kabuto linked, as we have a very specific format and style for the jutsu that we use on profiles here. D:
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Post by HozukiKangetsu » Fri May 26, 2017 5:20 pm

Take 4!

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Post by HozukiKangetsu » Tue May 30, 2017 8:01 am

good now?

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Post by Director » Fri Jun 02, 2017 9:02 pm

First to start off with, we are an alternate universe, so the Naruto canon holds no weight over ours. Yes, we utilize clans and ideas from the manga/franchise, but in our universe we have a different set of history with many different basis. For one, we don't have the Hozuki clan in Kirigakure. They haven't existed, and probably will not exist as their ability is something anyone can do.

Second, starting while on the topic of your ability. Water body is something anyone can do, its what we call an elemental body which has a different set of rules. The reason why we have these rules are because while we are an RP site at its core, we also have rules in place to ensure fair play in the PvP scene. You can find more on elemental bodies here at the bottom of the post.

Your suiton conc is a little bit out of place, the passive spoiler should be inside of the Suiton spoiler as the passive does not require another conc slot, it is an always active thing on suiton jutsu.

Also about your concs, you do not have 0/2 genjutsu concs, as you do not have 5 in your Genjutsu stat. For the others like Taijutsu and Ninjutsu, since you have a 10, you can have 3 concentrations in those slots. I strongly suggest you read here.

Next up are your jutsu which, primarily your suiton ninjutsu needs to have the asterisk (*) if they're from our archives. It lets the moderators know these are pre-approved jutsu. Not only that, but your suiton jutsu need to follow our pyramid rules as seen below.


As for your history, I strongly suggest you go read the What Kiri Is Like Page as it holds tons of information relevant to our universe, which is vastly different than the Naruto franchise. Reason being is it gives a unique experience in a familiar world for people to enjoy and have a good time, but also discover and rp in nicely set-up world that feels thematic. But some quick notes in your history that I see, once again the Hozuki clan does not exist, even though you graduated from the academy it does not mean the village will let you roam the world, there are still rules, and genin are seen as the most basic form of military and carry many restrictions. Also, Kiri and Konoha are not too friendly with each other, so I highly doubt you'd be delivering letters.

Feel free to give me a PM on any questions you have, or reply to your app.
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Post by Jinan B » Wed Jun 07, 2017 9:34 am

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Post by Director » Mon Jun 12, 2017 9:10 pm

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