[Accepted]Yuusha, Juzo

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Yuusha, Juzo
Unnatural Eater

[Life is like fine dining, you gotta enjoy every bit of it.]
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General Information Age: 13
Gender: Male
Height: 5'5"
Weight: 90 lbs
Physical Features:
  • Face/head: Juzo has blondish-red hair that crowns atop of his head. Its not too long, barely falling below his eyes from the front and stopping just above his shoulders on the back. His eyes are a an assortment of rainbow colors from his doujutsu.
  • Body: Juzo is light skinned and has a very thin frame. Still hasn't fully grown into his body so does not have a whole lot of muscle definition on it.
  • Notable Features: His rainbow colored eyes.
Clothing/Accessories: For clothes he wears a basic shirt and pants combo. For a top he wears a long sleeve white shirt that has a kraken sewn into the back of it. Over his shirt he wears a blue zip up vest. For bottoms he wears black pants and has black boots to match. His headband is worn over his forehead.
Personality:
  • General: Ever since he was a kid, Juzo has had a very daredevil like attitude. He became the type of person that always wanted to be dared to do something just to prove that he wasn't afraid to do it. Of course this didn't always end well for him and he had scars to show. He like to live life on the edge and perform activities that would get his adrenaline pumping.

    Juzo also has a soft spot in his heart for his family, his twin sister being of the utmost importance. Having that twin connection with his sister really identified him as a person by wanting to prioritize her needs before anyone else. He also cares deeply for his younger, seven year old brother and new born baby sister. Another reason they have such a big impact on his life is because they were all born with the same eyes as Ren and himself, which meant they'd go through the same scrutiny of being a freak. It also meant they probably had the same abilities too.
  • Hopes/Dreams: He one day hopes of becoming a legend within the village that not only his parents can be proud of, but the Karagata family as well. Another dream he began to have after leaving the academy was to one day see if his ability was biological and something that could be passed down to his future generations.
  • Fears: Having his family taken from him.
  • Combat Mentality:Because of his ability to consume elements, Juzo has a very extreme combat style. He enjoys getting close and personal with his opponents, using the passives of consumed elements to help him inflict damage.

Battle Information Village: Kirigakure no Sato
Rank: Genin
  • Ninjutsu: 10
  • Taijutsu: 3
  • Genjutsu: 1
  • Stamina: 3
  • Control: 15
  • Strength: 2
  • Speed: 3
  • Instinct: 3
Equipment:
Back PouchShow
  • 10 Shuriken
  • 10 Kunai
  • 15 Senbon
Right Hip PouchShow
  • 10 Tagged Kunai
  • 2 Flash Tags
Left Thigh PouchShow
  • 3 Smoke Bombs
  • 1 Lighter
Combat GlovesShow
A pair of black gloves that he wears over his hands. The gloves have metal plating over the top of the hand that he uses to parry against weapons. They are cut off around the base of each finger for finger speed.
Companions: (0/1)
Affinity: Katon Affinity, Fuuton Affinity, Raiton Affinity
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
First Ability
Elemental EaterShow
With this ability, Juzo is able to literally digest the chakra from any elements he is able to use. By consuming an element, Juzo takes on the elemental passive of the technique, the strength of which is defined by the technique's Ninjutsu stat requirement. It lasts a number of posts based on his control. He is not able to eat any elements created with his own chakra and may only consume those created by other people. To consume the element he channels chakra into his hands and mouth. He cannot have more than one passive on a particular appendage of his body at one time and adding a new passive to another part of his body adds a debuff based on the rank of the passive. As a note; while consuming a jutsu absorbs the passive, it does not absorb the jutsu's strength which will still have to be dealt with. Jutsu used from this ability require more chakra than average per rank compared to other Ninjutsu of similar rank. The number of posts he may retain his passive body is as followed:
  • 1-10 Control - 1 Post
  • 11-20 Control - 2 Post
  • 21-30 Control - 4 Post
  • 31-40 Control - 5 Post
  • 41-49 Control - 7 Post
  • 50 Control - 8 Post
The way the debuff works is that they are split evenly between speed and strength and last for as long as the absorbed passive is active. In case of odd number debuffs, it's rounded up, so a total debuff of 7 would result in -4 strength and -4 speed:
  • S-Rank - 5
  • A-Rank - 4
  • B-Rank - 3
  • C-Rank - 2
  • D-Rank - 1
Second Ability
NijishiganShow
The Nijishigan is a doujutsu the user has that when active gives the user the ability to see the affinity of those they see, as a colored aura of that affinity around their body, or around a jutsu that has been used, as long as they can use the affinity themselves. If the person or jutsu they are staring at has an affinity they cannot use, no aura will show. If a person has multiple affinities that the user can use then multiple colored auras will form around their body and if they have more than one affinity they can use that the user cannot then just the one color will show. The colors for affinities should be based off the colors used in archives. The iris of the eye itself is an assortment of colors when inactive and when activated has the colors swirling around the pupil. The colors of the eye range from shades of blue, red, green, and purple.
The EyeShow
Third Ability-------------
Concentrations
Ninjutsu
Fuuton Affinity:
Fuuton Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Fuuton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Fuuton affinity. Fuuton has an cutting effect.
Passive (Cutting)Show
Fuuton has a natural cutting property to it, that exists in all jutsu unless otherwise stated. This gives fuuton a unique opportunity to strike with additional power, and to act as a offensive defense. Regardless of their purpose fuuton jutsu passively cut with no distinct pattern at 1/3rd the strength of the technique rounded down unless otherwise stated. This means if someone punched a 19 strength fuuton wall, they would get cuts on their hand applied with 6 strength. This also means that fuuton jutsu specifically designated to cut things can create devastating wound by essentially striking twice.
Katon:
Katon Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Katon, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Katon affinity. Katon has a passive ignition effect.
Passive (Ingition)Show
Katon's effect is ignition, which means that all katon jutsu, regardless of effect, start and spread fire from their source. Once a jutsu has been performed, the fire from the jutsu spreads at 1/3rd the speed of the technique, rounded down. That means a C-rank katon jutsu that moves at 13 speed would create subsequent fires that spread at 4 speed. These secondary fires require flammable material to continuously spread, otherwise they will burn out on their own.

Additionally, the strength of burns on organic material from katon jutsu is determined by the ninjutsu stat requirement.
  • 1-10 Ninjutsu Requirement : 1st Degree Burns
  • 11-20 Ninjutsu Requirement: Second Degree Burns
  • 21-35 Ninjutsu Requirement: Third Degree Burns
  • 36+ Ninjutsu Requirement: Fourth Degree Burns
Raiton Affinity:
Raiton Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Raiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Raiton affinity. Raiton has a shocking effect.
Passive (Shocking)Show
Raiton has the effect of shocking, which means causes it's effect to be diffuse upon impact. In organic material, this causes nervous stimulation which results in numbness, tingling, loss of sensation, and sometimes paralysis. In inorganic material, this means that the strength of the jutsu diffuses across an area 2x the size of the attack. In a jutsu that creates a lightning ball 2m in diameter, if it struck a wall the size of the attack would cover a 4m area.

Additionally, the strength of the nervous effect on organic material from raiton jutsu is determined by the ninjutsu stat requirement.
  • 1-10 Ninjutsu Requirement : Tingling, acute numbness
  • 11-20 Ninjutsu Requirement: Loss of Sensation
  • 21-35 Ninjutsu Requirement: Localized Paralysis
  • 36+ Ninjutsu Requirement: Diffuse Paralysis
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Jutsu
NinjutsuShow
D-Rank Elemental Eater: Passive Discharge
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing a set of hand seals, the user is able to release one passive that is surrounding their body. Once released, the passive cannot be obtained again unless the user consumes it once more.

Nijishigan
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing a single seal, the user activates his Nijishigan, causing the colors to swirl around his pupil. The Nijishigan stays active for five posts unless they continuously channel chakra into it. For every post after the initial five that the user continues to use the jutsu they will receive a -1 in stamina per post.
C-Rank Elemental Eater: Basic Consumption
C-Rank Ninjutsu
The user channels chakra to their hands and mouth as they prepare to catch an incoming jutsu. Once the jutsu is in range they will catch and consume the passive of the jutsu, applying it to an appendage on their body. With this jutsu they may only consume those of D-Rank and below. Though they are consuming the passive the user still has to deal with the speed and strength of the jutsu.
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D-Rank *Katon • Fireball
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user draws in a deep breath before exhaling out a 1/2 meter diameter fireball at the opponent. It travels up to 10 meters away at a speed of 6 and a strength of 4.

*Katon • Flame's Shadow
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user will create a copy of themselves out of katon chakra. The clone will be able to move with the stats labelled below, while also exploding with the force of a single exploding tag upon death into a burst of flames. The clone will only last for 3 posts.
  • Taijutsu: 2
  • Stamina: 1
  • Strength: 1
  • Speed: 2
C-Rank *Katon • Great Fireball
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user draws in a deep breath before exhaling a thin stream of flames up to 15 meters away at a speed of 10. Either at 15 meters, or if the stream makes impact with anything, the stream will erupt into a spherical C-Rank explosion, scattering flames all over the immediate area.
RaitonShow
D-Rank *Raiton • Shock Double
D-ranked Raiton Jutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user will create a copy of themselves out of Raiton chakra. The clone will be able to move with the stats labelled below, while also exploding with the force of a single exploding tag upon death (which also applies the raiton passive effect). The clone will only last for 3 posts.
  • Taijutsu: 2
  • Stamina: 1
  • Strength: 1
  • Speed: 2
*Raiton • Bright Bolt
D-ranked Raiton Jutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will extend two fingers toward a target. A bolt of lightning will jump up to 10 meters from their fingers at a speed of 6, striking with a strength of 4.

*Raiton • Static Shroud
D-Ranked Raiton Jutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user covers their body in a layer of visible static which crackles around them for 4 posts. Anything which comes within 6 inches of their body will be repelled with a force of 5 strength and have the Raiton Shocking effect applied.
C-Rank *Raiton • Golden Birds
C-ranked Raiton Jutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user creates two orbs of lightning the size of basketballs slightly above their head. They are then able to direct these orbs at a speed of 10 at their will, however they may not move while doing this. These orbs cannot leave a 40m diameter around the user, and detonate with the power of a single explosive tag each on contact with a solid. These orbs last a maximum of 4 posts, and may be self destructed at any moment in their lifespan at the user's will.
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D-Rank *Fuuton • Wind Bullet
D-Ranked Fuuton Jutsu
After performing the required hand seals, the user expels a basket ball sized ball of wind from their mouth. This ball of wind travels up to 20m at 5 speed, and explodes with the strength of a single explosive tag on contact with solid matter or at the end of its range.

*Fuuton • Wind Skating
D-Ranked Fuuton Jutsu
After performing the needed hand seals, the user is able to glide on air as if they were skating on ice. This allows them to move faster (+3 speed) but lowers their accuracy and agility (-3 Taijutsu). This doesn't allow them to fly, but rather to travel over things like land, water, and ice with greater ease. The user is only held several inches off of the ground. This Jutsu does not expire until the user’s chakra supply runs out or the user shuts it off. The fuuton passive is not applied in this technique.
C-Rank *Fuuton • Wind Clone
C-Ranked Fuuton Jutsu
After performing the necessary hand seals, the user will create a clone out of their fuuton chakra. This clone will be able to act entirely independently of the user for 5 posts before dissipating, with physical capabilities equal to the stats listed below. This clone applies the fuuton passive to enemies it touches.
  • Taijutsu: 6
  • Stamina: 6
  • Strength: 6
  • Speed: 9

History
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It was an unusually cold day. Rain was pouring through Kirigakure no Sato and it seemed to be non-stop. A woman crying in agony as she lay within a Karagata hospital bed, her husband standing over her with their hands held tightly together. Two doctors were in the room, keeping the situation under control as she pushed as hard as she could, freeing the first of two babies to be born. She would look down at him, his eyes closed before naming him Juzo. The boy set down on a bed as the woman screamed once more, only a mere minute passing before the second child came from her, a baby girl. Looking down at her she named her Arie. What was odd about the two babies being born is neither of them cried and both were born with their eyes closed. Almost simultaneously the twins would open their eyes together, revealing a sight that had never been seen before. Their eyes, wide and bright were an array of colors that flashed across their irises. Worrying that something might be wrong with the two of them the doctors quickly took them into an emergency room to run tests.

Two weeks later and the twins were released from the Karagata hospital as healthy babies. The doctors could not yet figure out the reasoning behind their rainbow colored eyes, but deemed them healthy enough to go home. The two were Juzo and Arie, the crazy eye colored twins.

Six years would pass before Juzo's mom expected another baby. Luckily his father was a ninja for the village so he was able to support them with all the missions he took. His mother worked as a spokesperson for one of the Karagata family docks. By this time Juzo and Arie were always getting into mischief together. Juzo's dare-devilish personality had begun sprouting around this time and it wasn't til after the birth of their little brother Ayato that he kind of figured out what kind of powers he had. Their little brother Ayato was also born with the same rainbow colored eyes as he and Arie. The doctors assumed that it was a genetic mutation that was occurring when their mother and father procreated. Of course it didn't effect the family at all considering how healthy the twins were.

The morning after Ayato was allowed to return home, Juzo was dared by a neighbor kid to eat fire. Not wanting to fall short to the dare, the twin opened wide and placed a burning match into his mouth as he swallowed it, not feeling pain but relief. The fire he had consumed actually begun to satisfy the hunger he had that day as he tried it once more with another match, followed by another. What followed was his skin turning hot like an oven. It was as if he had become fire himself. Quick to enjoy his new found powers he told his twin sister, Arie, having her try the exact same thing he had. To their surprise she too was able to eat the fire, and with the same satisfying release of her hunger disappearing too.

With these powers found, they told their parents, their father only being able to understand it as chakra working within their system. It meant one thing for the Yuusha family, they were going to raise a pair of ninjas for the village and the Karagata family. It was an honor that their father felt proud of as he begun training Juzo and his sister in the basics of ninjutsu.

A couple more years would pass and Juzo and his sister, about eight now, would join the Academy within the village. There they learned more about the way that chakra works and the different ways it could be used. Through this knowledge they also were able to discover what exactly it was their eyes were and what they could do. They learned it was a doujutsu and by channeling chakra into it, they were able to distinctly see what affinities other ninjas within their class were able to use. It was a power blessed only to him and his two siblings and one he was gonna make sure to protect. Also while in the Academy, Juzo learned that he was able to use Fuuton and Raiton and consume them the same way he had Katon. He learned other ways of fighting and that protecting Kirigakure no Sato was a must, all while his sister Arie stood beside him.

They would stay within school for a couple years, graduating at the age of thirteen before being given the title of full fledged Genin. They were also blessed to find out their mother had given birth to another child, a baby girl who also was born with the same eyes as them. Together they were ready to prove that they could make a difference in the village and come into spotlight to honor their family. Juzo and Arie, bled for the Family Karagata, born of the Family Yuusha.
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[Accepted]Yuusha, Juzo

Post by Valkier » Sun Jul 16, 2017 12:45 am

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Elemental Eater: Basic Consumption
C-Rank Ninjutsu
The user channels chakra to their hands and mouth as they prepare to catch an incoming jutsu.
Although this jutsu is using the character's hands to catch, the preparation of the jutsu is done beforehand - so I don't think it qualifies for basic channelling; please use hand seals unless you'd like to specialise and take the channelling conc.

I'd like a little more detail in the elemental eater ability about how the character is able to use the energy of eaten elements - particularly the "able to use his body as a medium to form those kinds of jutsu" part.

Otherwise, the app looks fairly decent. However, given that the Yuusha were a suna clan, i'd like confirmation from the current OOC (Ty) that he's not bringing them back to that village before this app continues. The Kiri OOC will also need to sign off on the history. I'll give them a nudge :)

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[Accepted]Yuusha, Juzo

Post by Jeff » Sun Jul 16, 2017 8:44 am

I'd like a second opinion on the whole channeling chakra to his hands thing if you don't mind, i had it overlooked by a lot of mods and admins already.

TYdie told me he killed the Yuusha in a modkill so I did this specifically for that reason lol.

Added a line in the ability for you.

Also I guess waiting on a Rain check lol
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Post by Kabu » Sun Jul 16, 2017 4:03 pm

You should just remove the bits in the ability about being able to use his body as a medium, because those would just be regular jutsu that anyone can do.

As for the clan thing, it was already cleared up that this is okay as the clan was originally modkilled even pre-flip

For history, I personally don't see anything requiring an OOC check, but I'll defer if need be. Also Jeff, the current Kiri OOC is Chi, rather than Rain.

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[Accepted]Yuusha, Juzo

Post by Jeff » Mon Jul 17, 2017 9:19 am

alright removed that line altogether then
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Post by Hayate » Mon Jul 17, 2017 4:50 pm

That's most definitely not basic channeling champ. @C-Rank
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[Accepted]Yuusha, Juzo

Post by Jeff » Mon Jul 17, 2017 7:50 pm

fixed also talked to ginj about fixing stuff as well in box.

it falls under ability channeling
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[Accepted]Yuusha, Juzo

Post by Brentston » Thu Jul 20, 2017 4:26 pm

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With this ability, Juzo is able to literally digest the chakra from any elements he is able to use. By consuming an element, Juzo's body takes on the passive granted from the technique of that element for a number of posts based on his Control stat. Juzo is not able to eat any elements created with his own chakra and may only consume those created by other people. To consume the element he channels chakra into his hands and mouth. The number of posts he may retain his passive body is as followed:
1-10 Control - 1 Post
11-20 Control - 2 Post
21-30 Control - 4 Post
31-40 Control - 5 Post
41-49 Control - 7 Post
50 Control - 8 Post
I think there should be a caveat that he can only maintain one passive at a time, and obtaining a second passive overwrites the first. Also it should define whether or not the consumed jutsu still damages him (which I feel it should), and a chakra expenditure based on the rank of the jutsu being consumed (which I feel should be hefty, as abilities that control the chakras of others are typically very chakra intensive).

Also I don't believe this ability would qualify for ability channeling. Could be wrong, but iirc ability channeling is reserved for body mods, transformations, and fusions. Even if not, I think granting channeling alongside the abilities effect is too much IMO.

This is basically diet empathy, so I'm not sure how I feel about you being able to do this without being locked out of using elements as normal. I kinda feel like maybe it should lock out elementals.

Edit: Also, the passive earned should be equal to the jutsu eaten. So if you eat a 10 nin req Katon, you 1st degree burns. If you eat a 35 or w/e nin req katon you get one. Irrelevant to the ones that don't have tiered passives but yeah
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The Nijishigan is a doujutsu the user has that when active gives the user the ability to see the affinity of those they see, as a colored aura of that affinity around their body, as long as they can use the affinity themselves. If the person they are staring at has an affinity they cannot use, no aura will show. If a person has multiple affinities that the user can use then multiple colored auras will form around their body and if they have more than one affinity they can use that the user cannot then just the one color will show. The colors for affinities should be based off the colors used in archives. The iris of the eye itself is an assortment of colors when inactive and when activated has the colors swirling around the pupil. The colors of the eye range from shades of blue, red, green, and purple.
For the sake of balance, I think you should only be able to see the person's primary affinity. Seeing all of them is just too much, I feel.

Feel free to get second opinions on all of that, obviously. But as it stands this just seems like way too much.
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[Accepted]Yuusha, Juzo

Post by Jeff » Thu Jul 20, 2017 7:08 pm

Thank you for the check brent; now not trying to argue just stating some points.

Okay I changed the part where you sai only one passive, I wrote it in there.

Talking about whether it damages him or not goes into the techniques. If you see it states that if his control isn't higher than x and x he takes the jutsu full damage. I'd rather not see splash damage occur as it is based off of Dragon slayers (though i know thats not a sound argument to some people).

fixed expenditure part too

The passive part is already written in there
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Juzo's body takes on the passive granted from the technique of that element for a number of posts based on his Control stat.

Also for the channeling ability, we didn't want to use hand seals as that is SUPER lame when you think about dragon slayers so I talked about that with ginj before actually going forward with it. He said it'd work that way, hence the huge stat dump into control.

LASTLY:

With the eyes, it was nerfed a lot from what it was originally, letting him see all elements.
Now he cannot see all of them, only the affinites that he can use himself, which is a balance in of itself. If its set as just seeing the primary then he would always be able to see a color regardless, if he doesn't share it he won't be able to see anything.
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[Accepted]Yuusha, Juzo

Post by Brentston » Thu Jul 20, 2017 7:30 pm

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Talking about whether it damages him or not goes into the techniques. If you see it states that if his control isn't higher than x and x he takes the jutsu full damage. I'd rather not see splash damage occur as it is based off of Dragon slayers (though i know thats not a sound argument to some people).
Again, feel free to get a second opinion. But being able to absorb abilities from a jutsu while simultaneously destroying it without taking damage just doesn't sit well with me. Also, the limitations of the ability need to be outlined specifically in the ability itself. Putting it in the jutsu is fine, but what you're able to do with jutsu moving forward will be defined by the wording of the ability and not the wording of the other jutsu.
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Also for the channeling ability, we didn't want to use hand seals as that is SUPER lame when you think about dragon slayers so I talked about that with ginj before actually going forward with it. He said it'd work that way, hence the huge stat dump into control.
I disagree wholeheartedly. This ability is STRONK. To get free ability channeling is too much imo. If you had deeper requirements to justify it I can get on board, but as it stands it seems too much to me. BUT Fluffy outranks me so
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With the eyes, it was nerfed a lot from what it was originally, letting him see all elements.
Now he cannot see all of them, only the affinites that he can use himself, which is a balance in of itself. If its set as just seeing the primary then he would always be able to see a color regardless, if he doesn't share it he won't be able to see anything.
Ah, I see- I misread that. Still though, I don't think he should have the ability to absorb any element and use the passive and be able to use elements himself. seems too much IMO.
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The passive part is already written in there
That just defines the number of posts it lasts, not the strength of the passive that he's receiving
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Post by Jeff » Thu Jul 20, 2017 7:43 pm

okay we clarified the part about passives together.

Asking for a formal second opinion on the part Brent wants an opinion for!


If more people want the channeling changed I guess I'll have to change it, just doesn't fit in with dragon slayers.

the issue with all things he can do are all in separate abilities but yea i get the qualm on it
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Post by Kabu » Mon Jul 24, 2017 1:35 pm

In hindsight, being able to completely negate jutsu while getting stronger from it yourself is a bit too strong. There should be some sort of splash damage, even if it's only minimal. Also keep in mind that it wouldn't protect you from things like Katon's ignition effect, so you would still be getting burned while trying to eat it. Of course that's just a single example but I'm sure that you get the point.

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Post by Jeff » Wed Jul 26, 2017 9:36 am

Don't time this, working on a solution, or can i have a mod vote for the whole splash damage thing?
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Post by Director » Tue Aug 08, 2017 5:42 pm

Gonna say you need to take some form of damage, however can it be reduced, sure.
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Post by Jeff » Sat Aug 12, 2017 11:56 am

On hold until Director and I come up with something different, DO NOT TIME.
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Post by CDF » Thu Aug 17, 2017 1:34 pm


I feel the way to go here is that the ability lets you ignore an affinities passive while you're absorbing it. So if you catch a gust of fuuton, it won't cut you because you're absorbing it. Same with a bolt of lightning or ball of fire. But you still still have to deal with the jutsu, if you have a fireball shot at you at 50 strength and it has an impact strength of 50, you're still going to need to deal with that impact.

Also, I'd like to know how this works once you've absorbed a passive. Is the passive exhibited throughout the whole body? Or can you now apply it to your other jutsu?

To boost this, and because you have to get the jutsu into your mouth, i think it'd be fair that you can use more than one passive if they aren't in the same spot. like absorbing a katon jutsu and exhibiting the passive on your right arm, but then having a lightning bolt be absorbed and used on your right arm. But you can't have two in the same appendage, for example.

For your doujutsu, I recommend you buff it a little by it being able to tell what affinity a jutsu is. So if somebody shoots out a jutsu you can't really tell is raiton (like an invisibly raiton charged senbon), your eye would show what it's really loaded with, though give you no other info than that.

lil typo since i'm checking anyways:

Elemental Eater: Passive Discharge <-- cannot be obtained*


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Post by Jeff » Sat Aug 19, 2017 9:04 pm

Okay well the typo was an easy fix.

Issues with first thing. I'm eating the jutsu, idk how that works with dealing with impact if the fireball is eaten away?

It goes throughout the body, like you touch his physical body while passive then passive is felt. So no to putting into other jutsu. i.e. making a fireball paralyze people.

I was for the whole multilpe passive thing but other people voted against it. I feel like a mod vote should be on what is and isn't allowed. BTW the way you wrote it is less op and kinda better than how i had it before.

The doujutsu part I'm okay with adding but another mod might not be okay with buffing it again. So idk how that works with one saying yes and another saying no.

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Post by CDF » Sat Aug 19, 2017 9:33 pm

I'll talk it over and get back to you. I'll try to be quick, but, you know.

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Post by Jeff » Thu Aug 24, 2017 12:38 pm

Understandable.
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Post by CDF » Thu Aug 31, 2017 3:48 pm

Confirmed that everything i said before's good except add this on:

For every passive past the first one, the user experiences a stat debuff based on the rank of the passive they're absorbing.:

S - 5
A - 4
B - 3
C - 2
D - 1

These debuffs are split evenly between speed and strength and last for as long as the absorbed passive is active. In case of odd number debuffs, it's rounded up, so a total debuff of 7 would result in -4 strength and -4 speed

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Post by Jeff » Sat Sep 02, 2017 4:07 am

edited to chucks standards.
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Post by CDF » Sun Sep 10, 2017 1:09 pm

Elemental Eater: Passive Discharge <-- you might want to change this to allow for specific passive removal. Atm it's worded as removing every passive, basically. Or at least it seems that way to me.

Elemental Eater: Basic Consumption <-- that's confusing loool. Also when we said you have to deal with the strength/speed, it's going to have to be more than this. Your control won't suddenly make it so you can catch a 40 speed/strength fireball, if you have 20 strength but 41 control. You can have jutsu to cushion impacts and such, but would have to be separate. The base consumption technique should just allow you to ignore a passive when you're grabbing/consuming it, and transfer from consumed to the appendage in question. As for the speed ,just say a speed equal to his control with a max of X. You'll need to give it rank-based limits.

Otherwise, looks good.

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Post by Jeff » Wed Sep 13, 2017 4:57 pm

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Post by Director » Tue Sep 19, 2017 12:30 pm

Quote:
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After performing a single seal, the user activates his Nijishigan, causing the colors to swirl around his pupil. The Nijishigan stays active for five posts unless they continuously channel chakra into it.
You're gonna need a drain on this if you're channeling past this jutsu's limit. Like -1 stamina per post past 5.

But after that, 1/2.
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Post by Jeff » Thu Sep 21, 2017 11:21 am

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Post by Director » Thu Sep 21, 2017 1:40 pm

1/2, we made it jeffy
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Post by CDF » Sat Sep 23, 2017 4:29 am

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