[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

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Matsuka, Tsuki
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[ The will of stone ]

General Information Age: 16
Gender: Male
Height: 5'8"
Weight: 140lbs
Physical Features: He sports a small patch of facial hair under his lower lip
  • Face/head:He has a narrow face and nose, brown eyes he sport a long black mane of hair that stretches to arm pit length to mid back length
  • Body: he’s body is quite thin all the way up and down his arms ,legs and chest are slightly thicker due to the muscle gained from taijutsu training
  • Notable Features: scar behind his left ear.
Clothing/Accessories: Tsuki wears a Dark brown flak jacket that resembles the flak jacket designs and style from Konoha but with a few key features that set it apart first as stated above it’s dark brown it also only have one pair of scroll pouches located on the left side of the chest while the Right has a knife sheath , underneath the jacket is a deep marron shirt, He trouser have a white cloth wrap just above the knee the pants are the same red color as the shirt he has mesh like clothing around his ankles that lead right to his black shinobi sandals, he keep a 12 inch long full tang kukri style blade in sheath located on the right side of his flak jacket
Personality:
  • General:Tsuki is a prideful shinobi especially when it comes to his village going as far as to try and fight anyone who dare insult his village even as prideful as he is he is still loyal and caring especially when it comes to his comrades and friends being willing to stick his neck out for them as he feel that they would do the same for him.
  • Hopes/Dreams:Tsukis major goal bring Iwagakure to glory this stems from his deep pride and loyalty to his village.
  • Fears: Failure and the death of friends or family
  • Combat Mentality:His mentally in a fight is dependent on who he is facing if him and the opponent have a certain history he can be a blood lusted fighter if he’s just a random shinobi he can be quite tactically observant and be calm and calculated with his moments.

    Tsuki specialises in offensive taijutsu, which he uses in conjunction with his destructive ninjutsu With this combination, he was able to overwhelm most foes, including a taijutsu prodigys by forcing his opponents to dodge and evade the blows rather than blocking them, thus making hand-to-hand combat a near-impossible choice as one explosion release punch would end it.

Battle Information Village:Iwagakure
Rank:Chuunin
  • Ninjutsu: 10
  • Taijutsu: 20
  • Genjutsu: 1
  • Stamina: 10
  • Control: 10
  • Strength: 5
  • Speed: 15
  • Instinct: 9
Equipment: Equipment: x10 Kunai - within a holster on his right leg pouch
5x Shuriken - Held within holster on his right leg, tied above his knee.
x10Exploding tags - Held within back pouche
x2 Smoke bombs - Held within back pouch
1x 12 inch kukri Blade held in the sheath on the right side of his flak jacket
Companions: (0/1)
Affinity: Doton
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
First Ability----------
Second Ability---------
Third Ability-------------
Concentrations
Ninjutsu .[/quote]
Doton:
Doton Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Doton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the doton affinity. Doton has a passive enduring effect.
Passive (Enduring)Show
Doton has a passive effect of Endurance, which means that it's power is retained throughout the entirety of the jutsu. All of a single doton jutsu retains the strength of the jutsu, even after the jutsu has been destroyed, and unlike other jutsu, doton does not fade when destroyed. This means that if a doton barrier with 25 strength is cut in half and falls to the ground, a part of that barrier could be picked up and carried as a hand held shield which would still have 25 strength, despite being a fractured part of a jutsu. This creates incredibly potent defenses, making doton a popular affinity among defensive fighters.
Kouton Affinity:
Kouton Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Kouton, and advanced form of Doton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Kouton affinity. Kouton has an resisting effect. Those without the Elemental Specialization cannot make custom Kouton jutsu.
Passive (Resisting)Show
Kouton has a resisting effect. This means that Kouton jutsu ignore the effects of other affinities, regardless of their nature. If a Kouton spear was thrown through a water shield, the spear would not be caught by the shield, nor would it be destroyed by Sankaton, or cut by Fuuton. This resisting effect does not apply to active effects by jutsu. This means a fuuton jutsu that cuts with 30 strength would still cut through a 20 strength kouton shield, but it would not be affected by the secondary cutting by Fuuton. This makes Kouton very effective for breaking through and penetrating defenses that opponents expect to protect them. It's hardy nature makes Kouton very popular amoung Doton users.
Taijutsu
Upper Body:
The fundamental skill of the [Upper Body] indicates the user’s proficiency with using their arms, chest and head in various ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu.
Lower Body:
The fundamental skill of [Lower Body] indicates the user’s proficiency in using their legs and feet in many different ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu.
Deft Hands:
The fundamental skill of [Deft Hands] indicates the user’s proficiency with using their hands in very specific and complex movements, like sleight of hand and targeting very small and specific points on an opponent’s body. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu in various ways.
Acrobatics:
The fundamental skill of [Acrobatics] includes the user’s ability to contort their body into unfamiliar positions in order to avoid attacks, as well as the user’s ability to fall safely and perform Ukemi and other feats of gymnastics. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Sword Weapons:
The fundamental skill of [Sword Weapons] indicates the user’s proficiency with swords and sword-like weapons such as knives, daggers, sword-breakers and the like. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
GenjutsuN/A
[c] [hr] [center][b][big]Jutsu[/big][/b][/center] [spoiler=Ninjutsu][b][u]Ninjutsu[/u][/b] [u]Doton[/u] *[color=saddlebrown][b]Doton • Trip Fault[/b][/color] [i]D-Rank Ninjutsu[/i] After performing the correct hand seals, the user will cause a 1/2 meter pot hole to appear at a speed of 5 somewhere within 7 meters. [color=saddlebrown]*[b]Doton • Wall[/b][/color] [i]D-Rank Ninjutsu[/i] After performing the correct hand seals the user will form a solid stone wall up to 5 meters away from them at a speed of 6. The wall has a strength of 4 and is 3x3x1 meters large. *[color=saddlebrown][b]Doton • Trip Fault[/b][/color] [i]D-Rank Ninjutsu[/i] After performing the correct hand seals, the user will cause a 1/2 meter pot hole to appear at a speed of 5 somewhere within 7 meters *[color=saddlebrown][b]Doton • Landmine[/b][/color] [i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i] After performing the correct hand seals the user will tap their foot on the ground charging a 2 meter radius around their foot with explosive chakra. This is armed at a speed of 10. For the next three posts if anyone steps on that area it will explode with a force equal to a standard C-Rank explosion. [u]Kouton[/u] *[color=slategray][b]Kouton • Steel Fists[/b][/color] D-Ranked Ninjutsu After performing the correct hand seals, the user will coat their hands in a silvery metal. This hardens their hands considerably, allowing them to punch and fight with their fists as if they had +3 strength. The metal causes their fists to become less dextrous, however, and reduces their taijutsu by 3. This is, however, unable to protect the user from attacks as the metal coating is too thin. *[color=slategray][b]Kouton • Pellet Storm[/b][/color] D-Ranked Ninjutsu After performing the required hand seals, the user will expel a cloud of metallic pebbles in a cone reaching 10m from themselves and expanding to 5m wide at 5 speed. The pellets strike with 5 strength and have spiked edges for maximum damage *[color=slategray][b]Kouton • Hidden Needle[/b][/color] D-Ranked Ninjutsu After performing the correct hand seals, the user will channel chakra into a metal weapon they are holding. Upon throwing or swinging that weapon, they are then able to cause a 15cm long needle to be launched from within that weapon at 5 speed in a single direction at any point along its trajectory. This needle will strike with 5 strength. *[color=slategray][b]Kouton • Sword Breaker[/b][/color] C-Ranked Ninjutsu After performing the required hand seals, the user will channel chakra into their hand. For the next 3 posts, the first metal object the user touches will shatter into several tiny pieces, so long as it is not larger than half the user's size. *[color=slategray][b]Kouton • Crumple Zones[/b][/color] C-Ranked Ninjutsu After performing the required hand seals, the user will channel chakra to an existing source of metal. The next time that metal is touched, the steel will bend inwards, covering and holding the thing that touched it with 10 strength. This technique lasts for 3 posts.[/b][/spoiler][spoiler=Taijutsu] *[b][color=#60C659]Ochiba • Round and Round[/color][/b] D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver The user will start by performing an extremely quick and powerful slash aimed at the target, and then continuing with that movement, they will spin themselves around and follow up with a powerful roundhouse kick. *[b][color=#60C659]Ochiba • Dance Detour[/color][/b] D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver Prerequisite: 10 Speed A technique that relies highly on speed, much like a floating leaf being swept away by the wind, the user will attempt to slap away any incoming melee strikes or projectiles with their kunai. The user’s the average of the user's speed and strength needs to be higher than the strength the projectile was thrown at, using the momentum of their own speed to deflect the strike. [b][color=#60C659]Ochiba • Extending Branch[/color][/b] D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver Prerequisite: 10 Taijutsu Using extremely quick thinking, if the user attempts to land a hit but their kunai is just short of hitting their target, they can very quickly spin the kunai on their finger, effectively extending its reach by a few inches. [b]*[color=Darkred][Totem Style • Cobra's Strikes][/color][/b] D-Ranked Taijutsu Stance The user folds their hands over where the thumb and fingers make a cone-like point. Their defenses consist of dips and sways to dodge attacks. Their offenses are focused on pin point application of pressure using these points and lightning quick strikes. [b]*[color=Darkred][Totem Style • Turtle's Shell][/color][/b] D-Ranked Taijutsu Stance This stance is focused on resilient defenses at the sacrifice of nearly all offensive ability. The user holds their hands open and their body perpendicular to their target. They use their strongest points to absorb incoming damage, protecting their core. Often they will grab or redirect attacks to simulate them sliding off a turtle's shell. [b]*[color=Darkred][Totem Style • Turtle's Iron Wall][/color] C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver [b]Prerequisite:[/b] [color=Darkred]*[Totem Style • Turtle's Shell][/color] The user will use their open hands and forearms to slow the momentum of incoming physical attacks. They will then angle and push against to force the attack behind them and away. While not complex, this nearly negates all damage from physical attacks that aren't pierce of slash based. *[color=#8B4C39][Toryu • Sweep Cutter][/color][/b] C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver [b]Prerequisite:[/b] [i]15 Taijutsu[/i] During close quarters or after engaging a foe via a rush, the user quickly forces themselves back as they divert body weight downwards typically causing a quick and controllable slide under the opponent's field of control, usually between the legs or to the side. During this slide the user attempts slashes, stabs or even hooks or drags the opponent down with them to open up for more techniques or just deal considerable damage. *[b][color=#60C659]Ochiba • Blinding Leaf[/color][/b] C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver Prerequisite: 15 Speed Utilizing their kunai as a throwing weapon, the user sprints at their opponent and when they are less than a meter away, whilst sprinting, they will toss their kunai directly at their target’s face. If the attack is done correctly, it will simultaneously blind the target by blocking the majority of their vision and distract them. Also, it creates the appearance that the user is actually thrusting with the kunai instead of releasing it, allowing them the opportunity to strike. *[b][color=#60C659]Ochiba • Leaf Duster[/color][/b] C-Ranked Taijutsu Stance The user will place their middle finger through the pommel of the kunai, gripping it so the blade hangs out of the side of the palm, using the weapon as a knuckleduster. The user will keep their hands up to protect the face in this stance as they prepare for maneuvers mostly hand to hand based, but blades at the ready should they need them. Any physical punches used with this technique will add blunt damage. *[b][color=#60C659]Ochiba • Relent[/color][/b] B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver The user will begin by dashing around the opponent, so they are facing their back. They will then deliver a very fast slice from shoulder blade to shoulder blade, effectively making all arm movements intensely painful. While doing that, with their leg, the user will deliver a powerful kick aimed at the back of their knee. This is to get the opponent down to one knee. The target's strength must be 10 higher than the user's to resist the buckle. Once they are on their knee, the target will be open to a variety of attacks. color=darkolivegreen][b]* Kushou・The River Undercuts the Bank[/color][/b] B-Ranked Taijutsu Manoeuvre The user of this technique will first block an incoming strike. Then, they will almost immediately cease resisting, causing the opponent to fall forward slightly and lose their balance provided their taijutsu is lower than the users. This successfully created opening allows the user to raise the lower end of their weapon to strike from inside the opponent’s guard, typically at either the groin or the chin with full strength. *[b][color=#60C659]Ochiba • Last Mistake[/color][/b] B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver When fighting a sword user, the user tries to bait the opponent into performing a slash with their weapon. Expecting it to come, the user will quickly block the strike with their kunai, stopping the momentum of the attack. The user will then open up their hand and allow the kunai to loosely hang on their finger. Then, the user will try to grab onto the wrist of the opponent and quickly pull them to the ground, and also kicking at the target's front foot, pushing it towards their back one, weakening their footing and making them easier to topple. While doing so, the user’s free hand will be placed on the opponent’s back, trying to aid in pushing the target to the ground or at least stagger them. While the opponent is falling forward, or is staggered, the user will very quickly grab onto their kunai and thrust it forward into the opponent’s chest, usually the heart or lungs. [hr] [center][b][big]History[/big][/b][/center][spoiler=Historical Accounts]Pre-academy Tuski was born into the mastsuka family as a small baby both of his parents were killed while off on a misson leaving Tsuki to be raised by his uncle on his fathers side . Growing up without the love of a biological parent was hard for Tsuki as it would be for any child. But he was lucky to still have his uncle looking out for him but it was till heart breaking for a 2 and 3 year old tsuki to see other children his age with 2 parents and happy.But after a while he learned to bury those feelings deep inside his goal at the time was to be a shinobi and shinobis cant be allowed to show those kind of emotions.Before he was of the age to go to the academy he spent most of his days looking for something to fill the countless free hours. One day he was challenged by a number of other children to climb a notoriously high point in the village. A task which he quickly accepted wanting to impress them he would only be able to climb up the surface part way before losing his grip falling down. Unable to break his fall he crashed into the earth a fall that nearly killed him. Fortunately his uncle was able to reach him in time to get proper medical attention. The fall gave him many scars but one scar located behind his right ear failed to heal this event would shape Tsuki in more ways than one Academy When the time came for tsuki to enroll into the academy it seemed Fate wasn't done giving tsuki a hard time. He failed the entrance exams 3 times before barley passing on the 4th. Things continued to get worse it wasn't long before a unofficial clear pecking order was put emplace among the academy students. The most powerful and promising students from the most prestigious clans were at the top. While those seen as less powerful and from less prominent clans were at the bottom and just like in nature the more powerful picked and harassed the weak. Tsuki was a course the ones at the bottom he wasn't just at the bottom, he was the bottom the weakest link. He constaly saw his classmates out preform him. This resulted in him almost leaving the academy but thankfully he kept pushing on thanks to his belief in the will of stone a nido common among iwagakure.This was explained to him by his uncle. He told him " Tsuki barriers ,as you keep running into barriers , you may abandon your will make excuses and even replace it with hatred listen closely, your will ...never abandon it and always strife with pride " thanks to the will of stone he was able to make it though the academy years and pass the final exam to become a genin Genin years He had never felt more pride in himself after he retrieved his red forehead protector The will of stone had helped change his personality to way it was today he had become more confident in his abilities. it wasn't long before he was assigned to a jonin master and a squad . he became fairly close friends with his squad and learnt to respect and admire his sensei he went on dozens of lowrank missons with them he built a strong bound with them all this would prove useful in the chunin selection exams which would of bee hosted in his home village of iwagkure like always each village handled the exams differently iwa handled it In a battle like format Tsuki had grown a lot from his academy days and was ready to take on anything the exams had to offer which turnt out to be his squad battling a chunin and then being judged by a council onhis whole squad made It though the exams barley but still passed all were promoted to chunin this was the beginning of his Chunin career and he was prepared to face new challenges head on like he had done before [/spoiler][/spoiler]
Specialization
Taijutsu Specialist

Having devoted their lives to mastering the art of taijutsu, this shinobi is classified as a Taijutsu Specialist. Taijutsu specialist are able to devote a total of 10 concentrations to taijutsu, unlike most people who are capped at 8. However, they are only able to devote a max of 5 concentrations to genjutsu, and a max of 5 concentrations to ninjutsu.

As a Taijutsu Specialist, [User] is able to utilize taijutsu concentrations reserved for specialists, and is able to enter the God Tier [45+] on select stats, and meaning as a specialist they can select stats to break into the God tier. These stats are Taijutsu, Stamina, Speed, and Strength.


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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Director » Sun Feb 25, 2018 3:27 pm

Hey man, so I understand this is your first app so let me help walk you through it.
  • You do need to follow the format posted here, and it seems you have the rough idea of that, but yours is lacking what is necessary for a character app.
  • To start off Triston isn't really an Asiatic name, we like to keep it uniform as the world is of Asiatic decent, and all names are some form of that. Here's a link to a japanese name generator, a lot of us here use it. As long as it sounds Asiatic is the premise here.
  • I'd like to see you flesh out the physical features a bit more, give me some descriptive paragraphs rather than some lists. You do leave it a bit vague, but write some more like, "Matsuka wears his standard Iwa flak jacket with pride while underneath he displays a mesh shirt that protects his body. Even further past that he sports a black tank-top that covers his chest. For his legs he wears long flowing black pants that dance just above his ankles. While his feet sport traditional open toed shinobi boots that are black in color." Also I'd avoid using words like armor because armor is more so equipment here and must be purchased. You could have aesthetic armor like clothing though that just looks cool, however it wouldn't protect you.
  • I'd like to see a bit more fleshed out from the personality as well, tell me how Matsuka sees the world, and how he interacts on a daily basis. How he feels about Iwa, others, and possibly even his own strength. I'd like to see at least a paragraph or half of how he works. The character traits are a fine list, but I'd like a paragraph explaining better.
  • Next let me hit on your stats, you can't have a 0 in Genjutsu, that's really the only thing I see wrong. It has to have at least a 1.
  • For your equipment make sure you list where each thing is stored on your person.
  • Also you can only have one affinity so please pick Doton or Raiton.
  • For your ability everything can explode, so you don't need to have an ability for that. You could make doton rock bombs that explode, raiton explosive punches, or katon explosive punches. You could even do ninpou bombs if you so chose. Here's an example from the archives of an explosive jutsu.
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*[Ninjutsu • Chakra Burst]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After channeling chakra into one of their fists, the user will then attempt to strike their target and if successful, they will release additional concussive force in the form of an outward explosion at D-Rank force from their fist. If the user does not strike a target within 3 posts the jutsu dissipates.
  • Also a side note off of your ability is we're an alternate universe so we don't have an explosive corps in Iwa. Not everything here is the same as the anime, we're pretty vast in the difference aside from the occasional canon clan, but their traditions and such are not the same.

For your jutsu now they all need to follow the rule set listed here with strengths and speeds. This is based off of the nin requisite to perform that rank of jutsu. Please conform all your jutsu to it, and please review some of the archives here to get an idea of our formatting for it. If I were you, I understand you're new to the site I'd stick with the archive jutsu to get a feel for the site before creating customs, however don't let me stand in your way if you'd like to do so. You have a whole moderating team and myself with the ability to help you build things so please do ask us for help if you want to.

To top this all off if you have any issues, questions, or concerns please do seek me out or one of my moderators. They've all been here for years, and are very good at what they do. Not only that but they're a very helpful bunch that love to help new members and old alike. But don't take my word for it, seek them yourself and let them prove it. Not only that but the members here are willing to take a listen and throw their opinion. They've all been here for years as well, and are well versed so please do seek them out as well. They're good resources and some of them have been moderators themselves.
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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Niro » Sun Feb 25, 2018 3:28 pm

Hi, there's gonna be a lot to fix. A mean A LOT.

I need you to copy and paste the actual character creation template and then fill it out. Information that you input should go outside of the [/i] and [/b] tags. I'll provide the code below.
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[b]Username:[/b] Include a link to your profile.
[b]Points:[/b] 0/0
[b]Prestige Perks:[/b] 0/0
[b]Stat Trainings:[/b] (0/50)
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[center][big][big][b]NAME[/b][/big][/big]
NICKNAMES

[Nindo][/center]
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[center][b][big]General Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Age:[/b]
[b]Gender:[/b]
[b]Height:[/b]
[b]Weight:[/b]
[b]Physical Features:[/b]
[list][*][i]Face/head:[/i]
[*][i]Body:[/i]
[*][i]Notable Features:[/i]----[/list]
[b]Clothing/Accessories:[/b]
[b]Picture:[/b]
[b]Personality:[/b]
[list][*][i]General:[/i]
[*][i]Hopes/Dreams:[/i]
[*][i]Fears:[/i]
[*][i]Combat Mentality:[/i]------------[/list]
[hr]
[center][b][big]Battle Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Village:[/b]
[b]Rank:[/b]

[list][*][b]Ninjutsu:[/b]
[*][b]Taijutsu:[/b]
[*][b]Genjutsu:[/b]
[*][b]Stamina:[/b]
[*][b]Control:[/b]
[*][b]Strength:[/b]
[*][b]Speed:[/b]
[*][b]Instinct: [/b]
[/list]
[b]Equipment:[/b]
[b]Companions:[/b] (0/1)
[b]Affinity:[/b]
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[center][b][big]Abilities and Concentrations[/big][/b][/center]
[table=2, Abilities][b]First Ability[/b][c]----------
[c][b]Second Ability[/b][c]---------
[c][b]Third Ability[/b][c]-------------[/table]
[table=2, Concentrations][b]Ninjutsu[/b][c][Place them here][c]
[b]Taijutsu[/b][c][Place them here][c]
[b]Genjutsu[/b][c][Place them here][/table]
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[center][b][big]Jutsu[/big][/b][/center]
[spoiler=Ninjutsu]Place Ninjutsu in here[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Taijutsu]Place Taijutsu in here[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Genjutsu]Place Genjutsu in here[/spoiler]


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[center][b][big]History[/big][/b][/center][spoiler=Historical Accounts]Place history in here[/spoiler]
We try to have the names more authentic and similar to the canon so more Americanized names such as William or Triston are generally not allowed.

Weight: 140 <- 140 what? Pounds? Stones? Kg?

▪Face/head: Face/head: he has long hair similar in style to a young deidara <-We're an AU and as such have no references to canon. Meaning people like Deidara, Orochimaru, Sasuke, etc never existed here. I need you to actually describe his hair style, the length, and the color.

▪Body: he has a thin but slightly muscular Fram <-Can you go into a bit more detail? Here's an example.

Physical Features: Michi is a very reserved young woman. She has black hair that reaches her shoulders with bangs that cut evenly across her forehead. Her bangs shadow her dark blue eyes that are always peering around her surroundings with curiosity. Light colored skin only accentuates her dark hair and eyes.

Her body is slim but toned as one would expect from a training Kunoichi. Slightly tall for her age she stands at about 5’6”. Michi has minimal scarring on her body. Small ones here and there on her limbs from sparring with her classmates and one on the side of her head near her hairline from falling when she was only a toddler.

Clothing/Accessories:He wears the standard flak jacket of iwagakure along with the standard pants mesh armor,pants Ec <-Iwagakure has no standard attire, I suggest reading up on Iwagakure itself and the climate surrounding it. Most people usually opt for warmer clothes or layers due to the cold.

Personality: <-Can you please turn this into a paragraph rather than a list? We need more than this to know the character. I'll provide another example for you to shoot for.

Personality: A surprisingly quiet young girl for her family, Michi is rather headstrong. With two Shinobi parents and two older brothers who are all very loud and commanding, most others often assume that the quiet Michi is nothing more than a pushover. But what she lacks in presence of body she more than makes up for in presence of mind. The most profound things are often heard coming from her mouth after a long period of silence. It’s one of the reasons that she excels in battle tactics.

Again quite dissimilar from her family, Michi is not a close-range fighter. She prefers long distance attacks, playing off of her teammates in order to achieve the best possible results. As quiet in fighting as she is at all other times, she would never really say that she enjoyed it. But it was, however, part of the job. A part that she took very seriously.

There was always the fear that if she stopped taking one part seriously that the rest would soon follow. Discipline didn’t come naturally to her, she worked hard at everything she did and she worked hard at working hard. She wasn’t entirely sure why, but there was plenty of time to figure it out. Plenty of time to decide what she wanted in life. For now, she just enjoys relaxing with her family and friends in her downtime. Going to the movies or curling up to read a book. Exploring and finding new and interesting things that she can learn about.

▪Genjutsu: 0 <-The lowest a stat can go is 1.

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Born to 2 members of iwagakures explosion corps Triston also is in possession of the kekkie Genkai , explosive release gives the wielder the ability to utilise explosive chakra in combat. It was seemingly common to members of iwagakures explosive corps <-We don't have an Explosive release here. Any and all jutsu are capable of exploding and as such it is not unique enough for it's only release or clan.

Koran affinity <-I think you mean Kouton

Draft hands <-Deft*

Jutsu wise, the majority of these look like they've been copied from the Naruto wikia. We do not use jutsu from there, rather we have our own archives on site you can copy/paste jutsu to use on. Please look in there and see if anything catches your eye.

Your history is one giant run-on sentence. As a chuunin it should entail at least 3 paragraphs, one for pre-academy history, academy history, and his time as a genin. The word 'clan' around here holds a lot of weight so unless it's a registered clan in the archives we avoid using it. Family is a much better term to use as there is no mastsuka clan. Iwagakure no Sato also has no such thing as the Explosion Corps on this site, you are free to try and create one after registering however.
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NameVillageRankTeam
Tatsuo [color=#940839][b]IwaTsuchikageTeam 18 Jousai
Kinomichi [color=limegreen][b]IwaBanninJousai
Kotetsu [color=slategray][b]IwaGeninTeam 7
Ashura [color=coral][b]SunaGenin
Sai [color=#FF14A1][b]Kiri - MND-Rank
Yamato [color=#C71585][b]KiriA-Rank

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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Tristan » Sun Feb 25, 2018 6:44 pm

Well I was pretty sure I’d have to make some changes I did this on my phone I’ll be sure to make all the appropriate changes and let you know when I’m done editing shouldn’t take long if can just add a photo of my attire, add 1 point for genjutsu, change the name and organizers for the jutus


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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Yura » Tue Feb 27, 2018 5:24 am

Alright, so, I'm going to be making a double post here. I went ahead and basically coded out you entire app for you to make it easier for you since you are on your phone. If you copy and paste the code below exactly, it should update your app to look consistent with other apps on the forum and be a bit more organized. Everything that is on your current profile is on the code that I'm about to give you (except for a few of your jutsu, the reason for which I am going to detail in my next post). If you have issues copy and pasting the code, let me know and I can just do it for you. So yeah, here is the code:

[b]Username:[/b] [url=https://www.narutosaigen.com/forums/memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=4045223/]ShinobiT28[/url]
[b]Points:[/b] 0/0
[b]Prestige Perks:[/b] 0/0
[b]Stat Trainings:[/b] (0/50)
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[center][big][big][b]Matsuka, Tsuki[/b][/big][/big]
Trist

[“ I’ll wait for you there like a stone “][/center]
[hr]
[center][b][big]General Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Age:[/b]16
[b]Gender:[/b]Male
[b]Height:[/b]5'8"
[b]Weight:[/b]140lbs
[b]Physical Features:[/b]
[list][*][i]Face/head:[/i]He has a narrow face and nose, brown eyes he sport a long black mane of hair that stretches to arm pit length to mid back length
[*][i]Body:[/i]
[*][i]Notable Features:[/i] scar behind his left ear.[/list]
[b]Clothing/Accessories:[/b]
[b]Picture:[/b][url=https://i.pinimg.com/736x/ed/31/9f/ed319f1e8fb6cb0e2a048f6b70ca06d7.jpg]Character Photo[/url]
[b]Personality:[/b]
[list][*][i]General:[/i]Tsuki is a prideful shinobi especially when it comes to his village going as far as to try and fight anyone who dare insult his village even as prideful as he is he is still loyal and caring especially when it comes to his comrades and friends being willing to stick his neck out for them as he feel that they would do the same for him.
[*][i]Hopes/Dreams:[/i]Tsukis major goal bring Iwagakure to glory this stems from his deep pride and loyalty to his village.
[*][i]Fears:[/i] Failure and the death of friends or family
[*][i]Combat Mentality:[/i]His mentally in a fight is dependent on who he is facing if him and the opponent have a certain history he can be a blood lusted fighter if he’s just a random shinobi he can be quite tactically observant and be calm and calculated with his moments.

Tristons specialises in offensive taijutsu, which he uses in conjunction with his destructive kekkei genkai. With this combination, he was able to overwhelm most foes, including a taijutsu prodigys by forcing his opponents to dodge and evade the blows rather than blocking them, thus making hand-to-hand combat a near-impossible choice as one explosion release punch would end it.[/list]
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[center][b][big]Battle Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Village:[/b]Iwagakure
[b]Rank:[/b]Chuunin

[list][*][b]Ninjutsu:[/b]10
[*][b]Taijutsu:[/b]20
[*][b]Genjutsu:[/b]1
[*][b]Stamina:[/b]10
[*][b]Control:[/b]10
[*][b]Strength:[/b]5
[*][b]Speed:[/b]15
[*][b]Instinct: [/b]10
[/list]
[b]Equipment:[/b]Equipment:x10 Kunai - within a holster on his right leg pouch
x10 Shuriken - Held within holster on his right leg, tied above his knee.
x13 Exploding tags - Held within back pouche
x2 Smoke bombs - Held within back pouch
[b]Companions:[/b] (0/1)
[b]Affinity:[/b]Doton
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[center][b][big]Abilities and Concentrations[/big][/b][/center]
[table=2, Abilities][b]First Ability[/b][c]----------
[c][b]Second Ability[/b][c]---------
[c][b]Third Ability[/b][c]-------------[/table]
[table=2, Concentrations][b]Ninjutsu[/b][c][quote=Sensory][b]Sensor[/b]
Sensors are shinobi who are able to activate a sixth sense which can locate and read chakra sources. Sensory is advantageous as it allows shinobi to perceive without using any of their conventional senses, which can easily be deceived. Sensors are able to collect a lot of information through the interpretation of this sixth sense.[/quote][quote=Doton][color=saddlebrown][b]Doton Affinity[/b][/color]
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Doton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the doton affinity. Doton has a passive [color=saddlebrown][i]enduring[/i][/color] effect.
[spoiler=Passive (Enduring)]Doton has a passive effect of [b]Endurance[/b], which means that it's power is retained throughout the entirety of the jutsu. All of a single doton jutsu retains the strength of the jutsu, even after the jutsu has been destroyed, and unlike other jutsu, doton does not fade when destroyed. This means that if a doton barrier with 25 strength is cut in half and falls to the ground, a part of that barrier could be picked up and carried as a hand held shield which would still have 25 strength, despite being a fractured part of a jutsu. This creates incredibly potent defenses, making doton a popular affinity among defensive fighters.[/spoiler][/quote][quote=Kouton Affinity][color=slategray][b]Kouton Affinity[/b][/color]
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Kouton, and advanced form of Doton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Kouton affinity. Kouton has an [b]resisting[/b] effect. Those without the Elemental Specialization cannot make custom Kouton jutsu.
[spoiler=Passive (Resisting)]Kouton has a [b]resisting[/b] effect. This means that Kouton jutsu ignore the effects of other affinities, regardless of their nature. If a Kouton spear was thrown through a water shield, the spear would not be caught by the shield, nor would it be destroyed by Sankaton, or cut by Fuuton. This resisting effect [b]does not[/b] apply to active effects by jutsu. This means a fuuton jutsu that cuts with 30 strength would still cut through a 20 strength kouton shield, but it would not be affected by the secondary cutting by Fuuton. This makes Kouton very effective for breaking through and penetrating defenses that opponents expect to protect them. It's hardy nature makes Kouton very popular amoung Doton users.[/spoiler][/quote][c]
[b]Taijutsu[/b][c][quote=Upper Body] The fundamental skill of the [b][Upper Body][/b] indicates the user’s proficiency with using their arms, chest and head in various ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote][quote=Lower Body]The fundamental skill of [b][Lower Body][/b] indicates the user’s proficiency in using their legs and feet in many different ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote][quote=Deft Hands]The fundamental skill of [b][Deft Hands][/b] indicates the user’s proficiency with using their hands in very specific and complex movements, like sleight of hand and targeting very small and specific points on an opponent’s body. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu in various ways.[/quote][quote=Acrobatics]The fundamental skill of [b][Acrobatics][/b] includes the user’s ability to contort their body into unfamiliar positions in order to avoid attacks, as well as the user’s ability to fall safely and perform Ukemi and other feats of gymnastics. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote][c]
[b]Genjutsu[/b][c]N/A[/table]
[table=1, Specialization][b][center][b]Taijutsu Specialist[/b][/center]

Having devoted their lives to mastering the art of taijutsu, this shinobi is classified as a Taijutsu Specialist. Taijutsu specialist are able to devote a total of 10 concentrations to taijutsu, unlike most people who are capped at 8. However, they are only able to devote a max of 5 concentrations to genjutsu, and a max of 5 concentrations to ninjutsu.

As a Taijutsu Specialist, [User] is able to utilize taijutsu concentrations reserved for specialists, and is able to enter the God Tier [45+] on select stats, and meaning as a specialist they can select stats to break into the God tier. These stats are Taijutsu, Stamina, Speed, and Strength.[/b][c]
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[center][b][big]Jutsu[/big][/b][/center]
[spoiler=Ninjutsu][b][u]Ninjutsu[/u]

*[color=#80A0FF][Ninjutsu • Chakra Burst][/color][/b]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After channeling chakra into one of their fists, the user will then attempt to strike their target and if successful, they will release additional concussive force in the form of an outward explosion at D-Rank force from their fist. If the user does not strike a target within 3 posts the jutsu dissipates.

[u]Doton[/u]



[u]Kouton[/u]

*[color= slategray][b]Kouton • Pellet Storm[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the required hand seals, the user will expel a cloud of metallic pebbles in a cone reaching 10m from themselves and expanding to 5m wide at 5 speed. The pellets strike with 5 strength and have spiked edges for maximum damage.

*[color= slategray][b]Kouton • Egg Shell[/b][/color]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the required hand seals, the user will cause metal to surround them in a sort of spherical shape, becoming 3 metres high and 2 metres wide at 20 speed. This metal will guard the user with a strength of 20 for 4 posts.

[u]Sensory[/u]

[b]*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] Ninjutsu/Control/Instinct stats of 10
This sensor jutsu is used by shinobi to feel chakra sources within a radius of 25 meters. While this jutsu is fairly helpful in sensing chakra, it is unable to actually pinpoint specific chakras outside of 10 feet. This only gives the Shinobi an idea of how many entities with chakra are present in their general area.

[b]*[Sensory Style • Evaluation][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] [b]*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b]
The sensor will activate their sensory jutsu, and then do an additional set of hand seals. By doing so, the user will be able to compare the “strength” of each source of chakra they are able to sense to each other. The “strength” of the individual is determined by the average of each person’s Stamina, Control and Strength stats. The user can determine who has more chakra strength than others, allowing them to pick out possible risks. This technique is not very reliable as a determining factor, however.

[b]*[Sensory Style • [Target Lock][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] [b]*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b]
The sensor will activate their sensory jutsu, and focus on one source of chakra they can sense. By doing an additional hand seal, and holding said hand seal, the user will be able to continue to sense that source of chakra, even if they are moving around, so long as they are holding the hand seal. If they, or the chakra source, moves out of range, the user will lose track of them.

[b]*[Sensory Style • Gauge: Speed][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] [b]*[Sensory Style • [Target Lock][/b]
After activating Target Lock, the user will do a second series of hand seals, releasing the single seal for target lock, and then recreate it once finishing the series of seals for the technique. Doing so, the user will know their targets speed with a deviation of 3 points. Meaning if their speed is 17, the user will know its within the range of 14 to 20.

[b]*[Sensory Style • Flare][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] [b]*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b]
The sensor will activate their sensory jutsu, and then do a second set of hand seals. For the next 5 posts, any time anyone within the range of their sensory activates a jutsu, the user will see their chakra “flare” momentarily. While they won’t know anything about the jutsu, it will give them a better idea of the battle field.[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Taijutsu]N/A[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Genjutsu]N/A[/spoiler]


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[center][b][big]History[/big][/b][/center][spoiler=Historical Accounts]Pre-academy
Triston was born into the mastsuka family as a small baby both of his parents were killed while off on a misson leaving Tsuki to be raised by his uncle on his fathers side . Growing up without the love of a biological parent was hard for Tsuki as it would be for any child. But he was lucky to still have his uncle looking out for him but it was till heart breaking for a 2 and 3 year old tsuki to see other children his age with 2 parents and happy.But after a while he learned to bury those feelings deep inside his goal at the time was to be a shinobi and shinobis cant be allowed to show those kind of emotions.Before he was of the age to go to the academy he spent most of his days looking for something to fill the countless free hours. One day he was challenged by a number of other children to climb a notoriously high point in the village. A task which he quickly accepted wanting to impress them he would only be able to climb up the surface part way before losing his grip falling down. Unable to break his fall he crashed into the earth a fall that nearly killed him. Fortunately his uncle was able to reach him in time to get proper medical attention. The fall gave him many scars but one scar located behind his right ear failed to heal this event would shape Tsuki in more ways than one

Academy
When the time came for tsuki to enroll into the academy it seemed Fate wasn't done giving tsuki a hard time. He failed the entrance exams 3 times before barley passing on the 4th. Things continued to get worse it wasn't long before a unofficial clear pecking order was put emplace among the academy students. The most powerful and promising students from the most prestigious clans were at the top. While those seen as less powerful and from less prominent clans were at the bottom and just like in nature the more powerful picked and harassed the weak. Tsuki was a course the ones at the bottom he wasn't just at the bottom, he was the bottom the weakest link. He constaly saw his classmates out preform him. This resulted in him almost leaving the academy but thankfully he kept pushing on thanks to his belief in the will of stone a nido common among iwagakure.This was explained to him by his uncle. He told him " Tsuki barriers ,as you keep running into barriers , you may abandon your will make excuses and even replace it with hatred listen closely, your will ...never abandon it and always strife with pride " thanks to the will of stone he was able to make it though the academy years and pass the final exam to become a genin.

Genin years

He had never felt more pride in himself after he retrieved his red forehead protector The will of stone had helped change his personality to way it was today he had become more confident in his abilities. it wasn't long before he was assigned to a jonin master and a squad . he became fairly close friends with his squad and learnt to respect and admire his sensei he went on dozens of lowrank missons with them he built a strong bound with them all this would prove useful in the chunin selection exams which would of bee hosted in his hoem village of iwagkure this year each village handled the exams differently iwa handled it In a multi exam format Tsuki had grown a lot from his academy days and was ready to take on anything the exams had to offer his whole squad made It though the exams barley but still passed all were promoted to chunin this was a extremely pleasant moment for tsuki had become a chunin . [/spoiler]
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SadakoGeninIwagakureTeam 13[color=#90D2D8]
Enkouten, MitsuoBanninIwagakureTeam 18|Jousai[color=#ff2200]
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Nara, ShikariBanninKonohagakureMamorinuku[color=#fb8a00]
Takara, MorikoGeninIwagakure[color=#ffeb66]
Inji, AyakoC-RankWaterfall[color=#8080ff]

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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Yura » Tue Feb 27, 2018 5:24 am

Now about some of your jutsu. I noticed that several of your jutsu seemed to have come from Niro's character Tatsuo including the following jutsu
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D-Ranked Doton Jutsu
Prerequisite: Shiin
After performing the required hand seals, the user will place their hands on the ground and infuse the immediate ground below them with their chakra. The now infused area will rise up and encase itself around the users shiin which will add +3 strength to their blows but also slow them down by -3 speed.

Kouton • Hold the Door
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user will channel Kouton chakra directly into a Kouton object. This strengthens the object, giving it an extra strength of 25. However, while doing so, they are unable to use any ninjutsu or genjutsu while this is in effect. This lasts as long as they continue to channel chakra into the Kouton object.

Kouton: Grand Defense
A-rank Ninjutsu
The user will perform the needed hand seals and cover their body in a silvery metal. This silvery metal will coat the user in an armor of Kouton. It forms at a speed of 10 and can withstand blows and jutsu up to 40 strength.

Kouton: Guardian Spikes
B-rank Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Kouton: Grand Defense
After performing the correct hand seals the user will produce half-meter Kouton spikes all along the back, arms, and legs of the armor. The Kouton spikes form at a speed of 20, and when done, will have covered the user’s armor armor in spikes to protect the user from attacks of 20 and less strength.
Please refrain from using another member's custom jutsu (ones that don't have a * nest to the name) unless they have given you permission. I did not include these specific jutsu in the code that I gave you.

If you would like to see more Doton jutsu, we have a free use archive located here: viewtopic.php?&t=5922288/

If you would like to see more Kouton jutsu, we have a free use archive located here: viewtopic.php?&t=5922343/

If you would like to see more Taijutsu, we have a free use archive located here: http://s1.zetaboards.com/Naruto_Saigen_ ... m/1712814/

If you would like to look through our free use jutsu archives in general, they are located here: http://s1.zetaboards.com/Naruto_Saigen_ ... m/1712617/

Additionally, it should be noted that all jutsu must follow a pyramid scheme. This means that in general you need to have more lower rank jutsu than higher rank jutsu in order to build a proper pyramid. For example, you must have four D-rank jutsu before you can have three C-rank jutsu to get two B-rank jutsu and one A-rank jutsu. This is detailed more in the rules page locate here: viewtopic.php?&t=?p=1980268&t=5899683

Also, in order to perform a B-rank jutsu, you need to have a 20 in the corresponding stat. So in order to perform those B-rank kouton jutsu, you would need a 20 in the Ninjutsu stat. this page in the rules details stats/this concept a bit more: viewtopic.php?&t=5899079/1/#new

As a final note, while you have provided a photo, we still need you to describe the clothing section. Unfortunately photos sometimes expire/get removed from their hosting site (we have seen it happen several times) so a general description is needed as a back up. It doesn't have to be super super detailed or lengthy.

Hope this helps!
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SadakoGeninIwagakureTeam 13[color=#90D2D8]
Enkouten, MitsuoBanninIwagakureTeam 18|Jousai[color=#ff2200]
Retired CharactersShow
NameRankVillageTeamColor
Nara, ShikariBanninKonohagakureMamorinuku[color=#fb8a00]
Takara, MorikoGeninIwagakure[color=#ffeb66]
Inji, AyakoC-RankWaterfall[color=#8080ff]

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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Tristan » Tue Feb 27, 2018 8:58 am

I very much appreciate the help I have a PC but haven’t been on in months and it’s doing some weird stuff Oh I’m sorry I was under the impression he took the jutuss from the archives I didn’t know custom oc jutus were allowed I was just taking some jutsus for kouton I hope you don’t think I’m the kind of person to try and copy other peoples styles


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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Kao » Tue Feb 27, 2018 5:44 pm

• Alright. So, I'm gonna start with your justu. The basic ninjutsu you have listed is universal for village nin, so it doesn't count toward your jutsu point total. You don't have to remove it, but it's not necessary to list in the app unless you just really want it there. I counted 56 points worth of non-basic justu, and you get to spend 60 at start up.

• For your ninjutsu, you do not have the stat required to perform B ranked ninjutsu. You have a 10 in ninjutsu and need 20 in order to perform B ranks.

• You have an Iaido style taijutsu, but you don't have the needed concentrations to use it. Iaido requires also requires
[Sword Weapons] and [Perception] concentrations to use.

• Toryu style also requires [Sword Weapons] concentration, which you don't have.

• Yoshin style requires [Sword Weapons] and [Medicine] concentrations, which you don't have.

• Ochiba style requires [Sword Weapons], which you don't have.

• In your history, I noticed that you mentioned that the exams were hosted in Iwa when he took it. You should know that each village holds their own exams, so Iwa's exams will always be in Iwa, and the format is a genin or a genin team fights with a chuunin or chuunin team, followed by an interview from the council that oversaw the exam. You can keep the information about how he passed the exam but I suggest you remove the mention that the exams were "held in iwa that year."
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Komiya ShizuoJounin Iwagakure no Sato [color=#209DD3]
Yanagida Yukino Special Jounin Iwagakure no Sato [color=#a07ac2]
Ishiwara SetsunaChuunin Iwagakure no Sato[color=#E81D1D]
Enkouten Mai Jounin Iwagakure no Sato [color=#CE5412]
Aisu Namie Chuunin Kirigakure no Sato [color=#5bc2d4]
Awai FusaeA-Rank MNKonohagakure no Sato[color=#D95FEA]
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Akari Kanehara Akari clan elder [color=#80A0FF]
Sakata KannaIwagakure Councilwoman [color=#3DA43B]
Hazuki Shuran Jinchuuriki researcher [color=#E854C0]
Enkouten Kaizen Iwagakure councilman, clan leader [color=#C65871]
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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Tristan » Tue Feb 27, 2018 6:06 pm

So basically if I fix those things I’ll be good ?


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Post by Kabu » Tue Feb 27, 2018 6:17 pm

You might be. Make the edits and someone will come back and check again. I can say that we're getting there though.
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Ibakuro Rin - #9E4FA5
Nakiya Hotaru - #9E540A
Nakano Kiyomi - #8E47AD], Nakano Ayaka - #0C1C8C
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Karagata yamada - #CE1126, Makura Ayame - #7251BC
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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Tristan » Tue Feb 27, 2018 6:24 pm

Sounds good I feel so helpless for having to get so many mods to come help me 😂😂


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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Kabu » Thu Mar 01, 2018 10:59 pm

Aside from a few coding goofs such as your history being inside your taijutsu spoiler, this looks like it should be good to go.

1/2
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Ibakuro Rin - #9E4FA5
Nakiya Hotaru - #9E540A
Nakano Kiyomi - #8E47AD], Nakano Ayaka - #0C1C8C
Fukusha Nezumi - #E00747
Karagata yamada - #CE1126, Makura Ayame - #7251BC
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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by WrightJustice » Sat Mar 03, 2018 8:14 am

I'm actually counting 61 points worth of jutsu when you can only have 60, though your Kouton pyramid is wonky so if you just changed one of the Cs there into a D it should be fine.
Might as well see if you can't fix a couple of your broken codes whilst you're at it, though a mod could help if you're having trouble.

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[Accepted]Tsuki Matsuka

Post by Yura » Wed Mar 07, 2018 7:50 am

So I initially came to tell you that you need to make the necessary edits within the next 3-4 days or we'll have to deny the application. We typically don't let apps sit for more than a week without being touched.

I do see some other issues though:
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*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses]
C-Rank Ninjutsu
Prerequisites: Ninjutsu/Control/Instinct stats of 10
This sensor jutsu is used by shinobi to feel chakra sources within a radius of 25 meters. While this jutsu is fairly helpful in sensing chakra, it is unable to actually pinpoint specific chakras outside of 10 feet. This only gives the Shinobi an idea of how many entities with chakra are present in their general area.
This jutsu requires that you have a 10 in the Instinct stat as well as in Ninjutsu and Control. Since your instinct is only 9, you cannot have this jutsu at the moment. Also, since this jutsu is a fundamental/prerequisite technique of all of the other sensory jutsu you have, without it you can't have any of the rest.
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*[Toryu • Limb Lock]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: *[Toryu • Close Quarters] , 5 Taijutsu
A dangerous close quarters 'option closer', the Toryu user will sweep in close and try to slam their foot down on an opponent's as well as quickly sweep their arm around the opponent's to lock their elbow with the user's own. This technique is usually utilized for setting up blows or blocking off the weapons of dual-wielding foes and it forces the opponent to break out of the move before counter-attacking
This jutsu requires that you have the *[Toryu • Close Quarters] jutsu as well. Since you do not have the prerequisite jutsu, you won't be able to have this one unless you add it.
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*Stop Pointing
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Pre-Requisite: Deft Hands Concentration
This technique requires the user to get close and personal and grab the opponent and force them into an armbar. Once the opponent is forced into an armbar the user must then open up their fingers and bend them back with immense force until they break or dislocate. This prevents the opponent from forming handseals unless they relocate their fingers or mend the bone breakage. The user must have 5 higher Strength than the opponent's strength to be successful with this jutsu
This jutsu is from the Bone Breaker tai style which requires the user have the [Medicine] tai concentration. Since you don't have that and you really don't have room for another conc, you won't be able to get this jutsu right now.
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*[Flawless Aim Style • Hidden Shot]
C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
By releasing two projectiles back to back the user attempts to create a decoy for the second. The first projectile is often larger or of equal size and the second is slightly behind and below it, usually attempting to hide in the first’s shadow. This masks the attack to some degree. However, perceptive opponents who have an instinct greater than the user’s tai may be able to see through the charade, provided they have means to do so
This jutsu is from the Flawless Aim tai style which requires the user have the [Projectile Weapons] tai concentration. Since you don't have that and you really don't have room for another conc, you won't be able to get this jutsu right now.
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*[Toryu • Staggering Knee Strike]
C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 15 Taijutsu, 15 Strength
The user quickly dashes into an opponent's range while delivering a quick knee strike to the target's solar plexus in an attempt to stagger the opponent. The aim is to get the target to lean forward while holding their gut, opening up the many vulnerable areas of the back, neck and skull to various possible finishing moves
This jutsu requires that you have 15 strength. Since your strength stat is only 5 at the moment, you cannot have this jutsu.
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b]*[Totem Style • Crushing Bear's Paw][/b]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Totem Style - Bear's Endurance]
Requiring great strength and amazing tenacity this move can end most matches in a single stroke. By buckling down and pitting strength against strength the adept will attempt to grapple their opponent. Once achieved the will grab any of the limbs and repeatedly slam them against the environment or any terrain, often doing so with such speed and force as to forbid any real retaliation. The final slam is done by gripping an arm and a leg, leaping into the air, and sliding the grappled target beneath them mid leap. They will then come down full force with their feet firmly planted in their target's spine. Such a display is taxing and can only last for a number of posts equal to (stamina/10).
This jutsu requires that you have the [Totem Style - Bear's Endurance] jutsu as well. Since you do not have the prerequisite jutsu, you won't be able to have this one unless you add it.
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Post by Niro » Thu Mar 08, 2018 7:32 am

Hey, I've straightened out a lot of the code on your app so that your spoilers will no longer be eating each other. Everything Yura has said above still applies unless you're fixed it. If you have fixed anything, be sure to post in this thread saying something along the lines of 'edited' or 'fixed'. If you have any more questions or want me to help you settle your jutsu issues feel free to PM me on site or on discord.
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Post by Tristan » Thu Mar 08, 2018 3:15 pm

Appreciate it


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Post by Kao » Fri Mar 09, 2018 9:29 pm

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Post by Kabu » Fri Mar 09, 2018 10:02 pm

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