[Accepted]Hiraki, Rai

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Username: Marshal Phantom
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Hiraki Rai


Dying isn't failure... being a coward is.

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General Information Age: 16
Gender: Male
Height: 5'10"
Weight: 157lbs
Physical Features:

• Face/head: He has black dread locks that are pushed behind his ears, with one or two falling in front of them. He would considered handsome, with a heart shaped face and narrow jaw.
• Body: He has a lean-built body, not overly muscular, though with visible definition to it. He walks with an upright posture, as if he always knows where he is headed. His skin is a caramel brown, with the shading being somewhat consistent.
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Clothing/Accessories: He wears a black collared closed-vest, with a navy blue hoody over it and black camo-pants and basic shinobi boots. His forehead protector is worn around his neck, and is navy blue in color. He has one pouch on each arm, and two around his left thigh.
Personality:

• General: Rai could be described best as a sociable and easy-going person, never looking to appear as more than he is. He'd much rather resolve a dispute through words and treating to a dinner than fighting. While his friendly demeanor may be looked down on by some of his comrades, he doesn't mind, his reasoning that given the often grim and melancholy nature of their profession, a good story or talk now and then wouldn't hurt. This nature, however, does not appear in all faces of his life. When with a superior, when on mission, in official business overall, he maintains a stern and professional tone, showing respect.
  
  To allies, he can be a source of strength, support, or focus. He is loyal to a fault, which can be both a strength and a weakness, while to enemies, he is cold, distant, and merciless.
• Hopes/Dreams: To serve his village to his greatest ability; To die respected and well regarded
• Fears: To fail and cause harm to his village; To betray those who trusted him
• Combat Mentality:Rai believes the greatest asset you can have in any situation is information. Who your opponent is, what motivates them, who they know, there is no such thing as "bad" information. This mindset is reflected in how he fights. He never fights an enemy head on if he can help it, preferring to disorient or disable before striking. If he has to fight head on, he'll hold back to feel observe how his opponent fights, looking at their strengths and weaknesses before deciding.

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Battle Information Village: Kirigakure; House Hirohito
Rank: Chunin

• Ninjutsu: 15
• Taijutsu: 6
• Genjutsu: 20
• Stamina: 6
• Control: 10
• Strength: 6
• Speed: 6
• Instinct: 11

Equipment:
One 12 inch short sword katana sheathed at the base of his back.
15 Shuriken; 5 located in a kunai sheathe on his arm, 10 located in a the front pouch on his thigh.
5 Smoke Bombs located in a back pouch.
10 Kunai located in a back pouch
Companions: (0/1)
Affinity: Suiton

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Abilities and Concentrations [/i]

Abilities
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Concentrations
Ninjutsu	Sensor Sensors are shinobi who are able to activate a sixth sense which can locate and read chakra sources. Sensory is advantageous as it allows shinobi to perceive without using any of their conventional senses, which can easily be deceived. Sensors are able to collect a lot of information through the interpretation of this sixth sense. Suiton Affinity A character with this concentration is able to utilize Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Suiton affinity. Suiton has a passive enveloping effect. Passive (Enveloping)Show Suiton's effect is enveloping, meaning that suiton passively surrounds anything that it makes contact with. Suiton techniques that do not last over periods of times (i.e, exploding techniques) drench their opponents, but long term techniques will envelop anything they come in contact with and maintain a hold on it with the 3/4th strength of the technique, rounded down. This means that if a suiton wave is shot forward with 17 strength, it will envelope and move anything with it that does not have more than 12 strength to resist it. This allows Suiton to fill a very powerful role in eliminating tools from opponent's access and capturing targets. Fuuton Affinity A character with this concentration is able to utilize Fuuton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Fuuton affinity. Fuuton has an cutting effect. Passive (Cutting)Show Fuuton has a natural cutting property to it, that exists in all jutsu unless otherwise stated. This gives fuuton a unique opportunity to strike with additional power, and to act as a offensive defense. Regardless of their purpose fuuton jutsu passively cut with no distinct pattern at 1/3rd the strength of the technique rounded down unless otherwise stated. This means if someone punched a 19 strength fuuton wall, they would get cuts on their hand applied with 6 strength. This also means that fuuton jutsu specifically designated to cut things can create devastating wound by essentially striking twice. Mist Release A character with this concentration is able to utilize Mist, an extension composed of Fuuton and Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require Mist. Mist has an encroaching effect. You must be a former or present Kiri shinobi and have both Suiton and Fuuton to utilize this concentration. Passive (Encroaching)Show Mist naturally encroaches. This causes all mist jutsu to grow over time. Mist jutsu will passively grow at 1/10th their size per post, allowing them to not only become larger, but also refill areas within themselves that has been displaced. While Mist has limited offensive power, it's a supplementary superpower that can completely alter the course of battle by manipulating the battle field, and the people on it.
Taijutsu	The fundamental skill of [Stealth] describes the user’s proficiency in remaining silent, unseen and unnoticed as they go about tasks. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Genjutsu	This user has learn to use sound cues to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to create sounds and sustain sounds to capture their targets in a genjutsu. This user has learned to use visual cues to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to perform actions, or draw the eyes to something to capture their targets in a genjutsu. This user has learned to use their chakra's presence to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to initiate genjutsu in people who notice them with sensory techniques. This user has learned to combine the basics of Status and Illusion genjutsu, allowing them to use single techniques to create sensory illusions, as well as status changes on their target.

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Jutsu

NinjutsuShow

Sensory

SpoilerShow *[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b] C-Rank Ninjutsu Prerequisites: Ninjutsu/Control/Instinct stats of 10 This sensor jutsu is used by shinobi to feel chakra sources within a radius of 25 meters. While this jutsu is fairly helpful in sensing chakra, it is unable to actually pinpoint specific chakras outside of 10 feet. This only gives the Shinobi an idea of how many entities with chakra are present in their general area. *[Sensory Style • Approaching Breeze] C-rank Ninjutsu The user will do a series of hand seals and place their hands in the air. Releasing waves of chakra out of their hands. These waves of chakra will bounce back to the user after traveling out 25 meters in the air. As the chakra returns to the user it will evoke an image in the users head of the immediate area around them, anything in the air and anything up to 10 feet in the air. These are still images, not moving images, but can give the user a good idea of what is happening if they aren’t able to see otherwise. *[Sensory Style • Sense: Genjutsu] B-Rank Ninjutsu Prerequisites: *[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses] Once their sensory jutsu is active, the user can do a brief series of hand seals, allowing them to notice any abnormalities indicative of genjutsu in any of the sources of chakra they can sense. This can help them determine who needs to be released and who does not.

Suiton

SpoilerShow *Suiton • Defensive Barrier D-Rank Ninjutsu After performing the correct hand seals the user will spray water created from the inside of their chest through their mouth. Once the water is expelled, it will form an umbrella shape that is concave to the user and about two meters in diameter. This defense is somewhat solid and can be formed in any direction the user can spit, up to five meters away. The defense is shot at a speed of 5 and has a strength of 5 and unless completely destroyed it lasts for three posts before falling lifelessly to the ground. *Suiton • Water Shuriken D-Rank Ninjutsu After performing the correct hand seals the user will form a shuriken of water that can be thrown approximately 6 centimeters in diameter in their hand. When kai'd, this shuriken explodes with a force equal to a D-Rank explosion and covers the immediate area in water. If not consumed, this technique lasts for three posts. *Suiton • Clone C-Rank Ninjutsu After performing the correct hand seals the user creates a clone of themselves comprised completely of suiton chakra. This clone is incapable of jutsu, however it's liquid nature makes it a very capable taijutsu combatant. This clone lasts for 5 posts. Taijutsu: 6 Stamina: 8 Strength: 7 Speed: 6

Fuuton

SpoilerShow *Fuuton • Wind Skating D-Ranked Fuuton Jutsu After performing the needed hand seals, the user is able to glide on air as if they were skating on ice. This allows them to move faster (+3 speed) but lowers their accuracy and agility (-3 Taijutsu). This doesn't allow them to fly, but rather to travel over things like land, water, and ice with greater ease. The user is only held several inches off of the ground. This Jutsu does not expire until the user’s chakra supply runs out or the user shuts it off. The fuuton passive is not applied in this technique. *Fuuton • Redirection D-Ranked Fuuton Jutsu After performing the needed hand seals, the user covers a projectile they are holding in fuuton empowered wind. Then, when the weapon has been thrown as normal, the user is able to change it's direction by up to 90 degrees once with no drop in momentum on the projectiles part. This technique only lasts one post. *Fuuton • Wind Bullet D-Ranked Fuuton Jutsu After performing the required hand seals, the user expels a basket ball sized ball of wind from their mouth. This ball of wind travels up to 20m at 5 speed, and explodes with the strength of a single explosive tag on contact with solid matter or at the end of its range. *Fuuton • Wind Clone C-Ranked Fuuton Jutsu After performing the necessary hand seals, the user will create a clone out of their fuuton chakra. This clone will be able to act entirely independently of the user for 5 posts before dissipating, with physical capabilities equal to the stats listed below. This clone applies the fuuton passive to enemies it touches. Taijutsu: 6 Stamina: 6 Strength: 6 Speed: 9

Mist

SpoilerShow *Hidden Mist Technique D-Ranked Ninjutsu Prerequisite: Kiri-nin Kirigakure no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilized by Hidden Mist Ninja. After forming the required hand seals, the ninja creates a blanket of mist which covers the area around them. The mist covers 20x20x20m area. The mist limits the visibility of those inside to 4 meters in any direction. This technique lasts a number of posts equal to 1/2 the user's stamina. *Moving Mist Technique D-Ranked Ninjutsu After performing the correct hand seals, the user will cause the mist to shift and move in whatever direction they please. This mist moves at 5 speed, and while casting this technique the user cannot move or cast other techniques. *Mist Anchor D-ranked Ninjutsu After performing the correct hand seals, the user slowly moves their hand down, stabilizing the mist in the area. D-rank fuuton jutsu will still work in the mist, but will no longer displace it, allowing the mist jutsu to be maintained easier. Additionally, the duration of the mist will be extended by 2 posts. *Fading Mist Technique D-Rank Ninjutsu After performing the correct hand seals, the user can control the transparency of the mist to become much more lucid or clear in a 2x2x2m area. If this is used on a blanket of mist with another's chakra within it, it requires a higher control stat than the caster. This increased visibility lasts for up to 3 posts. *Mist Bath D-rank Ninjutsu While inside the mist, the user will form a series of hand seals, then hold a hand forward. From their hand 5 marble sized bullets of mist will form and shoot forward through the mist at 5 speed, with 5 strength. *Mist Clone C-rank Ninjutsu After performing the correct seals, the user materializes and creates a clone of themselves. When destroyed, they explode in a poof of *Hidden Mist Technique. The hidden mist will release and burst outward from the clone. This acts as a good container and transportation for the mist jutsu. These clones can only use taijutsu. These clones have a taijutsu of 3, stamina of 3, strength of 1, and 5 in Speed. The clone exists for a maximum of 4 posts before detonating early. *Mist Constriction C-rank Ninjutsu After performing the correct handseals, the user will focus on a 3x3x3m area of mist. This mist will then become extremely dense, weighing down with 10 strength. Anyone caught within this area with less than 10 strength will be unable to move. *Thick Mist C-rank Ninjutsu While inside the mist, the user will perform the correct seals and clasp their hands to initiate the jutsu. The water will increase and substantially grow in thickness. This will make anything that enters or is within the mist experience -3 speed so long as they are inside it. This technique lasts 4 posts.

GenjutsuShow

Genjutsu

*[Genjutsu • Pins and Needles] D-Ranked Illusion Genjutsu After performing the hand seals and pricking the opponent with some sort of small weapon (usually senbon), the opponent feels their arms and legs fall asleep. It feels as if the blood flow to these appendages has basically stopped, making their movements a tad sluggish and just all around uncomfortable. This jutsu doesn’t really hinder a person, but it makes everything they do feel off. For those who are attuned to the way their body feels during battle, it can be extremely distracting. Lasts 3 posts. *[Genjutsu • Smell Of The Deceased] D-Ranked Illusion Genjutsu After performing the necessary hand seals, any victim that sees the user preforming the hand seals will be induced under the genjutsu. This causes the target to begin to smell rotting flesh and decaying bodies. The jutsu can cause nausea and vomiting from the target, depending on how sensitive their sense of smell is. The smell of the dead can also cause some mental stress on the target. This genjutsu lasts for three (3) posts. *[Genjutsu • Paranoid] D-Ranked Illusion Genjutsu The user will do a series of hand seals, then point indiscriminately. Should the target see the pointing motion, they'll be captured in this genjutsu. For the following 4 posts, the target will see a shadow in the corner of their eyes, constantly shifting out of view when they attempt to look at it. *[Genjutsu • Boom!] D-Ranked Illusion Genjutsu The user will do a series of hand seals, then within the next post, snap their fingers. Anyone who hears the snapping will hear an explosion in the distance behind them. This works as an effective distraction, or a scare tactic, if properly utilized. *[Genjutsu • Demonic Illusion • Hell Viewing] C-Ranked Illusion Genjutsu This is a genjutsu technique that causes its target to see a horrifying vision. The ninja will perform some hand seals and make eye contact with the target. Once cast, the world will appear normal to the target until they see the illusion. The illusion is at the discretion of the user. However, they can only make a stationary image, or a visual loop, not a controllable visual illusion. Examples would be a decapitated head on a table, or one of their friends running in circles on fire. This illusions may only last up to 4 posts, or until the user ends the jutsu themselves. As a note, this only effects sight. *[Genjutsu • Burning to Death] C-Ranked Illusion Genjutsu This is a genjutsu technique which can be used in quite a few ways. The user forms a hand seal, and as long as the opponent(s) see it, then the genjutsu will begin. The user and the opponent(s) will both light on fire and start to burn, from the feet up to the head, in the opponent's mind. The opponent will normally start to panic and try to get rid of the fire, especially since they feel as if they were in actual pain. This genjutsu lasts for 4 posts and will not appear to be able to be extinguished, no matter what the victim does. The illusion is very static, in the sense that it doesn't change with the environment, it merely creates an illusory flame and pain.

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History[/b][/b]

Historical AccountsShow

Rai was born into a small family of little prestige and standing, though experienced early childhood well off. Both his parents were shinobi, causing them to alternate in caring for him and teaching him while the other was out on assignment. They were good people, instilling in him the need to respect and protect ones people and village, even at the cost of one's own life. When he was 6 years old, he would come to experience this lesson personally, when both of his parents were killed while on an emergency assignment. At their funeral, they were given full respects and honors, and were called "true shinobi".

The now orphaned Rai coped with this badly, acting out at the orphanage he was placed in and often bullying other children. It was only when he was enrolled in Academy Three that he began to change. Constant discipline and lessons began to make a an impression on the young child, who began to see more and more the values that his parents had tried to instill in him, and the ones they had died by.

At the age of 10 he graduated, becoming a Genin. It was during this time in his life in which he began to unfold, becoming more sociable and friendly, finding it was one of the best options when interacting with others. It was also here that he discovered his aptitude for Genjutsu, the techniques and concepts coming easy to him. After 2 more years, his sensei deemed he and his rival were ready to prove who was the better between them in the Chunin Exams. After a rather prolonged fight, Rai emerged as the victor, and was promoted to Chunin

For the last few years he has built up experience as a shinobi, often taking assignments that involve intelligence gathering or scouting.

[WrightJustice]

Hi and welcome to the site. It seems you got the character app down pretty well for first time but a couple things stand out to me.
Username: Include a link to your profile.
For this part you should make it your name with link like so:
[b]Username:[/b] [url=https://www.narutosaigen.com/forums/memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=4047173/]Marshal Phantom[/url]

One short sword blade sheathed at the base of his back. <--- Could you say how long it is and maybe what kind, though Katana is typical basic ninja sword.
Also say where your other things are kept, which may typically just be a pouch round near lower back.

With your jutsu it would be great if you could organise them in rank order, either E-S or S-E is great, just seems less confusing compared to say how your sensory has a B-Rank in the middle of the C-Rank jutsu.

Speaking of your jutsu, you appear to have 147 points worth when Chuunin only start with 60 jutsu points, heck Jounin even only start with 120.
You're going to have to decide on maybe a couple of your styles to start with and then focus on earning the others later through RP and such.

As for your history (very harsh sounding but good history, poor kid) Kiri team are usually 2 genin that act as rivals and then for chuunin exam they face off against each other and the winner gets to become chuunin, though it may happen a bit differently the exam is definitely always 1 genin vs another to see who advances.

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[Kao]

• I notice you have Warp Gen concentration, but you don't have the requirement to use it (13 Control for C ranks, 23 Control for B). This is fine since you currently don't have any warp genjutsu. Just remember that before you can add any, you'll need to up your control to 13 first.

• Can you be a bit more specific about where the shuriken are located on his arm? Are they in a type of pouch? Same for the ones on the thigh.

• You have 58 points of jutsu, so if you want you can add another D rank somewhere so you'll be at 60 points

[Jinan B]

one more thing on the point of Genjutsu is that you need control equal to the rank of the jutsu to use a Genjutsu (Ie, instead of 10 gen for a C rank, you need 10 gen and 10 control). Unfortunately that means that you won't be able to pick up B rank Genjutsu without 20 control.

On the bright side I came here to look at your history and that's all on point, so well done on that

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[Tristan]

I like you sheet we should meet up Irp and spar

[Rain21199]

other than a few simple spelling/coding errors this looks fine

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[Niro]

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