[Accepted]Takumi Aisu

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[Accepted]Takumi Aisu

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Takumi Aisu
Takumi of the ice release

“ I’ll fight till hell freezes over ”

General Information Age: 16
Gender: Male
Height 5'8
Weight 150 lbs
Physical Features:
  • Face/head: Takumi has tale skin taking after his Mother in that department considering his father had almost a tan appearance. He has bright brown eyes that always seem to be looking deeply at something a narrow face but not feminine in appearance his hair is a different texture from most of the clans because of his fathers genes and also unlike the majority of males in his clan he wears his spiky black almost waist length hair in a low hanging ponytail but will sometimes Wear it free
  • Body: Takumi Physical body is nothing to write home about he has a thin frame with a 2 pack He sports mediocre muscles and by extinction strength in his arms and legs
  • Notable Features: a scar on his pinkie finger, a scar on his right knee
Clothing/Accessories: he wears a slate grey flak jacket it comes with 3 scroll pouches on the lower left side, a pocket on the right chest, a built-in pouch on the lower back, a neck guard, an extension to protect the lower stomach, and is fastened by a covered zipper. However, there is only minimal padding on the sides. The village's symbol is embedded on the back he spots a black armband with his clans emblem on it , Underneath the jacket is a black long sleeve shirt his trousers follow a camo pattern of Grey and white with some black mixed in . He has a 12 inch kukri styled blade sheathed just above his back ninja tool pouch . He always sports a sliver ring on his thumb
Black mixed in his shoes consist of black shinobi sandals
Picture: N/A
Personality: Takumi can be a cold hearted cocky bastard without a care about who he hurt or what he does but he can always be a gentle,caring and loving individual just depends on what you mean to him and if you ever wronged him in any way
  • General:
  • Hopes/Dreams: to become a great shinobi
  • Fears: death of friends or family
  • Combat Mentality: Kill, Kill And kill

Battle Information Village: Kirigakure
Rank: Chuunin
  • Ninjutsu: 20
  • Taijutsu: 15
  • Genjutsu: 1
  • Stamina: 8
  • Control: 11
  • Strength: 5
  • Speed: 10
  • Instinct: 10
Equipment: 15x Kunai held on his leg pouch and back pouch 12x explosive tags held in the back pouch
Companions: (0/1)
Affinity: Suiton
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
First Ability
Aisu:
Hyouton Chakra Element
Through a genetic mutation, members of the Aisu clan are able to simultaneously use the elements of Suiton and Fuuton to create Hyouton, or Ice Release. Capable of rapidly reducing the temperature of objects, and even the air around them to freeze defenses and create weaponry from moisture in the air.
Passive(Cooling)Show
The Aisu clan is able to dynamically cool the temperature of things around them through their jutsu. In most of their jutsu, this occurs through the creation of ice using suiton jutsu, or the moisture already existing in the air. While Aisu are naturally resistant to decreased temperature, even they can succumb to the biting frost of their techniques. The temperature decrease, and the area they can decrease, is determined by the rank of techniques, making elder Aisu more deadly than their youngest, able to create snap freezes that can kill with ease. The only exception is freezing organic material directly, which requires higher ranking techniques.
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Third Ability-------------
Concentrations
Ninjutsu
Suiton:
Suiton Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Suiton affinity. Suiton has a passive enveloping effect.
Passive (Enveloping)Show
Suiton's effect is enveloping, meaning that suiton passively surrounds anything that it makes contact with. Suiton techniques that do not last over periods of times (i.e, exploding techniques) drench their opponents, but long term techniques will envelop anything they come in contact with and maintain a hold on it with the 3/4th strength of the technique, rounded down. This means that if a suiton wave is shot forward with 17 strength, it will envelope and move anything with it that does not have more than 12 strength to resist it. This allows Suiton to fill a very powerful role in eliminating tools from opponent's access and capturing targets.
Chiton Affinity:
Chiton Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Chiton, and advanced form of Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Chiton affinity. Chiton has an replenishing effect. Those without the Elemental Specialization cannot make custom Chiton jutsu.
Passive (Replenishing)Show
Chiton has an replenishing effect. This means that Chiton jutsu passively repair themselves when damaged, at no additional cost to the user. The rate of repairing itself is 1/3rd the speed of the technique rounded up, so a Chiton defense that manifests at 10 speed would repair itself at 4 speed when damaged. This only works for the length of the technique, so maintaining the damage to Chiton until the jutsu expires will stop it from regrowing.
Mist Release:
Mist Release
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Mist, an extension composed of Fuuton and Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require Mist. Mist has an encroaching effect. You must be a former or present Kiri shinobi and have both Suiton and Fuuton to utilize this concentration.
Passive (Encroaching)Show
Mist naturally encroaches. This causes all mist jutsu to grow over time. Mist jutsu will passively grow at 1/10th their size per post, allowing them to not only become larger, but also refill areas within themselves that has been displaced. While Mist has limited offensive power, it's a supplementary superpower that can completely alter the course of battle by manipulating the battle field, and the people on it.

Taijutsu
Lower Body:
The fundamental skill of [Lower Body] indicates the user’s proficiency in using their legs and feet in many different ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu.
Acrobatics:
The fundamental skill of [Acrobatics] includes the user’s ability to contort their body into unfamiliar positions in order to avoid attacks, as well as the user’s ability to fall safely and perform Ukemi and other feats of gymnastics. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Upper Body:
indicates the user’s proficiency with using their arms, chest and head in various ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu
Rigid Structure:
The fundamental skill of [Rigid Structure] describes the user’s ability to adeptly position and lock in their skeletal structure to efficiently absorb blows with minimal damage to their person. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Genjutsu Place them here

Jutsu
NinjutsuShow
*Miracle Water
D-Rank Chiton Ninjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, the user will clap their hands together, using chakra to boost their cardiac performance, and increasing their speed by +3, however reducing their control by -3 for the 4 post duration of this technique

*Blood Weapon
D-Rank Chiton Ninjutsu
After performing the needed seals, the user will cause blood to break through their skin, forming a kunai in their hand. The kunai has 5 strength, and can be thrown. After impact, if falls into a pool of blood that can then be used for other attacks

*Bold Clotting
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the needed seals, the user will place their hand over an open wound up to five inches wide and two inches deep. After channeling Chiton chakra for a full post, the user will form a superficial blood-clot covering over the wound to prevent further bloodflow from it. While this cover doesn't completely heal the wound, it allows the target's body to recover from the wound naturally without agitation

*Bathed In
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the needed seals, the user will slather blood on their body. By concentrating Chiton chakra in the blood, the user thins it out, allow the user to spread it over a larger area on their body. As a result, the user will look much more wounded and bloodier as a means to trick the opponen

*Venipuncture
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the needed hand seals, the user will get a grip on their target, causing two needles from their palms to lash out into the target, pumping their blood into the target. Follow up techniques can be utilized with this jutsu to attack the opponent from the inside out

*Bloodied
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the needed seals, the user will channel Chiton chakra into a location on their body. From that location a 2ft long spike of chakra will shoot out from under their skin with 10 strength at 10 speed. The spike is sharp, and will either recede back into the body after use, or follow up jutsu can be used with it.

*Impaler
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the needed hand seals, the user will focus their chakra on a patch of their blood, at least a baseball in circumference, within 10m of their body. From the patch of blood 5 senbon will form, and fire in whatever direction they choose, at 2 speed, with 18 strength. This is most commonly used on blood they've gotten onto the enemy, firing directly into their skin.

*Blood Bath
C-Rank Ninjutsu
The user will do the necessary hand seals, then bite their tongue, causing it to bleed. A ball approximately the size of a baseball can then be spat out at 10 speed, striking with 5 strength. When it impacts a surface, the ball will explode with 5 strength over a 1x1x1m area, covering the area in blood for future attack


~Frost Burst
D-rank Ninjutsu
The clan member will do a series of hand seals to activate this technique. Then they must throw a kunai or shuriken within the next 3 posts. Doing so will cause the projectile to rapidly drop in temperature until finally it explodes with the force of a single exploding tag, launching icy shrapnel in the process

~Frozen Breath
D-rank Ninjutsu
The user will channel chakra into their throat, then slowly exhale icy breath. Any material they breath upon will be rapidly chilled, weakening it by 5 strength, allowing it to be broken more easily.

~Ice Senbon
D-rank Ninjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, then thrust his hand forward. The air in front of the users hand will rapidly drop in temperature, freezing any air in that area into 5 senbon that fly forward at 5 speed and strike with 5 strength.

~Frozen Barrier
D-rank Ninjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, then form a square in the air with arm movement. This will cause all the air within the area between their hands to rapidly freeze, forming an ice wall. The wall is approximately 8 centimeters thick and is the size the user makes it based on their arms movement, but cannot exceed 1 meter in width or height. The wall has 5 strength, manifests at a speed of 5 and it will remain in the air until broken.

~Morning Chill
D-rank Ninjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, take a deep breath in, then slowly exhale. As this happens, the area within a 15 meter radius of their body will rapidly drop in temperature in the area to about -15 degrees celsius. While this isn't enough to freeze large bodies of water, this technique will freeze a great quantity of moisture in the air, creating a veil of ice that

~Silence
C-rank Ninjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, causing a shell of hyouton chakra to form around them, bringing the temperature of an isolated pocket air around them to near absolute zero. So long as the user doesn't move any faster than 10 speed, they won’t be heard when moving, allowing them to move silently. It’s worth noting that moving close to people with this technique will disrupt it.


*Suiton • Defensive Barrier
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will spray water created from the inside of their chest through their mouth. Once the water is expelled, it will form an umbrella shape that is concave to the user and about two meters in diameter. This defense is somewhat solid and can be formed in any direction the user up to five meters away. The defense is shot at a speed of 5 and has a strength of 5 and unless completely destroyed it lasts for three posts before falling lifelessly to the ground.

*Suiton • Water Shuriken
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will form a shuriken of water that can be thrown approximately 6 centimeters in diameter in their hand. When kai'd, this shuriken explodes with a force equal to a D-Rank explosion and covers the immediate area in water. If not consumed, this technique lasts for three posts.

*Suiton • Water Orb Technique
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will form a dense ball of water approximately 6 centimeters in diameter in their hands. Upon lurching forward, they will release the ball towards an opponent up to 10 meters away at a speed of 6 and with a strength of 4.

*Suiton • Propel Leap
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After channeling chakra into their hands the user will fire two jets of water from their hand, essentially hurling and propelling themselves in the opposite direction of their jets as if thrown by a strength of 5. Can be used once to throw themselves with 5 strength.

*Suiton • Wet Spot
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will expel a 3 meter diameter sphere of water from their mouth at speed of 5 up to 10 meters away. Upon impact it will burst spilling all over the immediate area making it extremely slippery. Those without 5 taijutsu or higher will not be able to hold their footing on this wet spot and will slip around.

Suiton • Crashing Wave
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user expels a massive tidal wave of water 10 meters wide and nearly 5 meters tall. This wave travels forward at a speed of 10 and with a strength of 10 for up to 15 meters before losing it's steam and failing.

*Suiton • Pacifistic Domination
C-Rank Ninjutsu
Created to safely incapacitate opponents, after performing the correct hand seals, if the opponent is within 15 meters and is standing a top a body of water with the user's chakra in it, the user will begin to churn their chakra causing the water to turn into a vortex and engulf the opponent, trapping them in a vortex about two meters in diameter. Once the target is inside, the user must hold the last seal and cannot use any other techniques, capable of holding this for up to five posts. In order to escape, the target must have at least 10 strength to physically make their way out, or the user must be disrupted. Most shinobi would pass out after two posts due to a lack of oxygen. However, if a target possesses a stamina stat higher than 10, it would require three posts for them to pass out. Should the target possess a stamina stat above 20, it would require five posts for them to pass out, but anything higher than 30 would allow them to resist passing out altogether.

*Suiton • Clone
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user creates a clone of themselves comprised completely of suiton chakra. This clone is incapable of jutsu, however it's liquid nature makes it a very capable taijutsu combatant. This clone lasts for 5 posts.
  • Taijutsu: 6
  • Stamina: 8
  • Strength: 7
  • Speed: 6
*Suiton • Great Stream
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user expels a massive conical water torrent that drenches an area thoroughly, capable of soaking a meter down nearly instantly for soil and like materials. The cone has a base width of 15 meters and a range of 15 meters and travels at a speed of 10, pushing things back with a strength of 10


Hidden Mist Technique
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Kiri-nin
Kirigakure no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilized by Hidden Mist Ninja. After forming the required hand seals, the ninja creates a blanket of mist which covers the area around them. The mist covers 20x20x20m area. The mist limits the visibility of those inside to 4 meters in any direction. This technique lasts a number of posts equal to 1/2 the user's stamina
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History


Pre academy
Takumi has always been surrounded by death . Even since he took his first breath in this world. Takumis mother died during child birth leaving him alone and to be raised by a friend of the families. As for Takumis father he might as well be dead considering he never saw him ever. He was a member of the hunter nin division even when his father was stationed back at the village he wouldn’t come see him. But don’t be confused a hate for his father doesn’t equate a hate for his clan or his village actually quite the contrary .He loved both his clan and his village and had pride in both .This would transmit to a better time in his academy years considering how it was operated

Academy years
As his early years treated him rough his time
In the academy would prove slightly better being a shinobi seemed to be right up His alley .He excelled in the class room as well as in the training he loved to fight .If he was mad at the person he fought ,or if they wronged him in some way he loved to go over board when sparring in a attempt to multilate his foe.This got him in trouble more than a few times. This surprised Takumi considering kiri had always been a society that put strength above all else and it wasn’t like he was just attacking them for no reason . They started with him but he was still threatened with being held back to thrown out the academy if he kept manning the other students. He eventually stopped “temporarily “ so he would be able to graduate on time he eventually passed to become a genin where .

Genin years
After passing the academy and being promoted to genin he was assigned to a rival squad .At first he hated him but he grew on him after a few missions .He had always been able to work with a team but never had the feelings connected to it .Sure he could see an attack coming and block it before it hits his teammate cause that was what he was expected to do.He didn’t do it cause he actually cared for that person but that changed he learned to care about his squad mate .he became family he never had when the chunin exams came around so did some dread as they both knew that only one could pass to chunin to this day that fight was the best fight he had ever fought but he was lucky enough to pull though and become chunin


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[Accepted]Takumi Aisu

Post by Kao » Sat Mar 03, 2018 3:07 pm

• Lots of coding errors so I went ahead and fixed them for you, which I will provide in my next post

• Your jutsu was broken up strangely, like some of the technique descriptions was far away from the jutsu name. I fixed that as well

• Speaking of your jutsu, if you could organize it by type (Chiton, Mist, Sensory) and rank, that would be really helpful to make the app more organized and easier to read

• We usually don't let WIP posts on reg, but since you are only missing the history it can stay for now. But if you don't post the history soon, this will be moved to the WIP section. If that happens, I will link it to you on Discord
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Komiya ShizuoJounin Iwagakure no Sato [color=#209DD3]
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Ishiwara SetsunaChuunin Iwagakure no Sato[color=#E81D1D]
Enkouten Mai Jounin Iwagakure no Sato [color=#CE5412]
Aisu Namie Chuunin Kirigakure no Sato [color=#5bc2d4]
Awai FusaeA-Rank MNKonohagakure no Sato[color=#D95FEA]
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Akari Kanehara Akari clan elder [color=#80A0FF]
Sakata KannaIwagakure Councilwoman [color=#3DA43B]
Hazuki Shuran Jinchuuriki researcher [color=#E854C0]
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[Accepted]Takumi Aisu

Post by Kao » Sat Mar 03, 2018 3:07 pm

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[center][big][big][b] Takumi [url=https://www.narutosaigen.com/forums/viewtopic.php?&t=5632120/1/#new]Aisu[/url] [/b][/big][/big]
Takumi of the ice release

[ “ you know I’m going to be the best shinobi you ever fought?”[/center]
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[center][b][big]General Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Age:[/b] 16
[b]Gender:[/b] Male
[b]Height[/b] 5'8
[b]Weight[/b] 150 lbs
[b]Physical Features:[/b]
[list][*][i]Face/head:[/i] Takumi has brown eyes that always seem to be looking deeply at something a narrow face but not feminine in appearance his hair is a different texture from most of the clans because of his fathers genes and also unlike the majority of males in his clan he wears his spiky black almost waist length hair in a low hanging ponytail but will sometimes Wear it free
[*][i]Body:[/i] Takumi Physical body is nothing to write home about he has a thin frame with a 2 pack He sports mediocre muscles and by extinction strength in his arms and legs
[*][i]Notable Features:[/i] a scar on his pinkie finger, a scar on his right knee [/list]
[b]Clothing/Accessories:[/b] he wears a slate grey flak jacket it comes with 3 scroll pouches on the lower left side, a pocket on the right chest, a built-in pouch on the lower back, a neck guard, an extension to protect the lower stomach, and is fastened by a covered zipper. However, there is only minimal padding on the sides. The village's symbol is embedded on the back he spots a black armband with his clans emblem on it , Underneath the jacket is a black long sleeve shirt his trousers follow a camo pattern of Grey and white with some little. He has a 12 inch kukri styled blade sheathed just above his back ninja tool pouch
Black mixed in his shoes consist of black shinobi sandals
[b]Picture:[/b] N/A
[b]Personality:[/b] Takumi can be a cold hearted cocky bastard without a care about who he hurt or what he does but he can always be a gentle,caring and loving individual just depends on what you mean to him and if you ever wronged him in any way
[list][*][i]General:[/i]
[*][i]Hopes/Dreams:[/i] to become a great shinobi
[*][i]Fears:[/i] death of friends or family
[*][i]Combat Mentality:[/i] Kill, Kill And kill[/list]
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[center][b][big]Battle Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Village:[/b] Kirigakure
[b]Rank:[/b] Chuunin

[list][*][b]Ninjutsu:[/b] 20
[*][b]Taijutsu:[/b] 15
[*][b]Genjutsu:[/b] 1
[*][b]Stamina:[/b] 8
[*][b]Control:[/b] 10
[*][b]Strength:[/b] 1
[*][b]Speed:[/b] 15
[*][b]Instinct:[/b] 10
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[b]Equipment:[/b] 5x Kunia held on his leg pouch and some in his back pouch, 5 explosive tags held in his back pouch
[b]Companions:[/b] (0/1)
[b]Affinity:[/b] Suiton
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[center][b][big]Abilities and Concentrations[/big][/b][/center]
[table=2, Abilities][b]First Ability[/b][c][quote=Aisu] [color=#15aabc][b]Hyouton Chakra Element[/b][/color]
Through a genetic mutation, members of the Aisu clan are able to simultaneously use the elements of [color=dodgerblue]Suiton[/color] and [color=lightgreen]Fuuton[/color] to create [color=#15aabc]Hyouton[/color], or Ice Release. Capable of rapidly reducing the temperature of objects, and even the air around them to freeze defenses and create weaponry from moisture in the air.
[spoiler=Passive(Cooling)]The Aisu clan is able to dynamically [b]cool[/b] the temperature of things around them through their jutsu. In most of their jutsu, this occurs through the creation of ice using suiton jutsu, or the moisture already existing in the air. While Aisu are naturally resistant to decreased temperature, even they can succumb to the biting frost of their techniques. The temperature decrease, and the area they can decrease, is determined by the rank of techniques, making elder Aisu more deadly than their youngest, able to create snap freezes that can kill with ease. The only exception is freezing organic material directly, which requires higher ranking techniques.[/spoiler][/quote]
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[c][b]Third Ability[/b][c]-------------[/table]
[table=2, Concentrations][b]Ninjutsu[/b]
[c][quote=Suiton][color=dodgerblue][b]Suiton Affinity[/b][/color]
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Suiton affinity. Suiton has a passive [color=dodgerblue][i]enveloping[/i][/color] effect.
[spoiler=Passive (Enveloping)]Suiton's effect is enveloping, meaning that suiton passively surrounds anything that it makes contact with. Suiton techniques that do not last over periods of times (i.e, exploding techniques) drench their opponents, but long term techniques will envelop anything they come in contact with and maintain a hold on it with the 3/4th strength of the technique, rounded down. This means that if a suiton wave is shot forward with 17 strength, it will envelope and move anything with it that does not have more than 12 strength to resist it. This allows Suiton to fill a very powerful role in eliminating tools from opponent's access and capturing targets.[/spoiler][/quote]

[quote=Chiton Affinity][color=#8B0000][b]Chiton Affinity[/b][/color]
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Chiton, and advanced form of Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Chiton affinity. Chiton has an [b]replenishing[/b] effect. Those without the Elemental Specialization cannot make custom Chiton jutsu.
[spoiler=Passive (Replenishing)]Chiton has an [b]replenishing[/b] effect. This means that Chiton jutsu passively repair themselves when damaged, at no additional cost to the user. The rate of repairing itself is 1/3rd the speed of the technique rounded up, so a Chiton defense that manifests at 10 speed would repair itself at 4 speed when damaged. This only works for the length of the technique, so maintaining the damage to Chiton until the jutsu expires will stop it from regrowing. [/spoiler][/quote]

[quote=Mist Release][color=#80a0ff][b]Mist Release[/b][/color]
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Mist, an extension composed of Fuuton and Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require Mist. Mist has an [b]encroaching[/b] effect. You must be a former or present Kiri shinobi and have both Suiton and Fuuton to utilize this concentration.
[spoiler=Passive (Encroaching)]Mist naturally [b]encroaches[/b]. This causes all mist jutsu to grow over time. Mist jutsu will passively grow at 1/10th their size per post, allowing them to not only become larger, but also refill areas within themselves that has been displaced. While Mist has limited offensive power, it's a supplementary superpower that can completely alter the course of battle by manipulating the battle field, and the people on it.[/spoiler][/quote]


[quote=Sensory][b]Sensor[/b]
Sensors are shinobi who are able to activate a sixth sense which can locate and read chakra sources. Sensory is advantageous as it allows shinobi to perceive without using any of their conventional senses, which can easily be deceived. Sensors are able to collect a lot of information through the interpretation of this sixth sense.[/quote]


[quote=Augment Fuuinjutsu][color=#444F51][b]Augment Fuuinjutsu[/b][/color]
This user is able to utilize Augment Fuuinjutsu, making it possible for them to utilize any jutsu with the Augment Classification. Augment Fuuinjutsu are used to enhance or limit the power of whatever it's placed on.[/quote]


[c][b]Taijutsu[/b]
[c][quote=Lower Body]The fundamental skill of [b][Lower Body][/b] indicates the user’s proficiency in using their legs and feet in many different ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote]


[quote=Acrobatics]The fundamental skill of [b][Acrobatics][/b] includes the user’s ability to contort their body into unfamiliar positions in order to avoid attacks, as well as the user’s ability to fall safely and perform Ukemi and other feats of gymnastics. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote]

[quote=[Upper Body]indicates the user’s proficiency with using their arms, chest and head in various ways to facilitate their use of related Taijutsu[/quote]

[quote=Rigid Structure]The fundamental skill of [b][Rigid Structure][/b] describes the user’s ability to adeptly position and lock in their skeletal structure to efficiently absorb blows with minimal damage to their person. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote]


[c]Genjutsu
[c]Place them here[/table][quote=Acrobatics]
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[center][b][big]Jutsu[/big][/b][/center]
[spoiler=Ninjutsu][b]*[color=#DC143C]Miracle Water[/color][/b]
D-Rank Chiton Ninjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, the user will clap their hands together, using chakra to boost their cardiac performance, and increasing their speed by +3, however reducing their control by -3 for the 4 post duration of this technique

[b]*[color=#DC143C]Bold Clotting[/color][/b]
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the needed seals, the user will place their hand over an open wound up to five inches wide and two inches deep. After channeling Chiton chakra for a full post, the user will form a superficial blood-clot covering over the wound to prevent further bloodflow from it. While this cover doesn't completely heal the wound, it allows the target's body to recover from the wound naturally without agitation

[b]*[color=#DC143C]Venipuncture[/color][/b]
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the needed hand seals, the user will get a grip on their target, causing two needles from their palms to lash out into the target, pumping their blood into the target. Follow up techniques can be utilized with this jutsu to attack the opponent from the inside out

[color=#15aabc]~Frost Burst[/color]
D-rank Ninjutsu
The clan member will do a series of hand seals to activate this technique. Then they must throw a kunai or shuriken within the next 3 posts. Doing so will cause the projectile to rapidly drop in temperature until finally it explodes with the force of a single exploding tag, launching icy shrapnel in the process

*[color=#80a0ff][b]Hidden Mist Technique[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Kiri-nin
Kirigakure no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilized by Hidden Mist Ninja. After forming the required hand seals, the ninja creates a blanket of mist which covers the area around them. The mist covers 20x20x20m area. The mist limits the visibility of those inside to 4 meters in any direction. This technique lasts a number of posts equal to 1/2 the user's stamina.

[color=#15aabc]~Ice Senbon[/color]
D-rank Ninjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, then thrust his hand forward. The air in front of the users hand will rapidly drop in temperature, freezing any air in that area into 5 senbon that fly forward at 5 speed and strike with 5 strength.

[color=#15aabc]~Frozen Barrier[/color]
D-rank Ninjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, then form a square in the air with arm movement. This will cause all the air within the area between their hands to rapidly freeze, forming an ice wall. The wall is approximately 8 centimeters thick and is the size the user makes it based on their arms movement, but cannot exceed 1 meter in width or height. The wall has 5 strength, manifests at a speed of 5 and it will remain in the air until broken.

[color=#15aabc]~Morning Chill[/color]
D-rank Ninjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, take a deep breath in, then slowly exhale. As this happens, the area within a 15 meter radius of their body will rapidly drop in temperature in the area to about -15 degrees celsius. While this isn't enough to freeze large bodies of water, this technique will freeze a great quantity of moisture in the air, creating a veil of ice that distorts vision.

[b]*[color=#DC143C]Bloodied[/color][/b]
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the needed seals, the user will channel Chiton chakra into a location on their body. From that location a 2ft long spike of chakra will shoot out from under their skin with 10 strength at 10 speed. The spike is sharp, and will either recede back into the body after use, or follow up jutsu can be used with it.

*[color=dodgerblue][b]Suiton • Clone[/b][/color]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
After performing the correct hand seals the user creates a clone of themselves comprised completely of suiton chakra. This clone is incapable of jutsu, however it's liquid nature makes it a very capable taijutsu combatant. This clone lasts for 5 posts. [list][*][b]Taijutsu:[/b] 6[*][b]Stamina:[/b] 8[*][b]Strength:[/b] 7[*][b]Speed:[/b] 6[/list]

*[color=dodgerblue][b]Suiton • Pacifistic Domination[/b][/color]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
Created to safely incapacitate opponents, after performing the correct hand seals, if the opponent is within 15 meters and is standing a top a body of water with the user's chakra in it, the user will begin to churn their chakra causing the water to turn into a vortex and engulf the opponent, trapping them in a vortex about two meters in diameter. Once the target is inside, the user must hold the last seal and cannot use any other techniques, capable of holding this for up to five posts. In order to escape, the target must have at least 10 strength to physically make their way out, or the user must be disrupted. Most shinobi would pass out after two posts due to a lack of oxygen. However, if a target possesses a stamina stat higher than 10, it would require three posts for them to pass out. Should the target possess a stamina stat above 20, it would require five posts for them to pass out, but anything higher than 30 would allow them to resist passing out altogether.

[b]*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] Ninjutsu/Control/Instinct stats of 10
This sensor jutsu is used by shinobi to feel chakra sources within a radius of 25 meters. While this jutsu is fairly helpful in sensing chakra, it is unable to actually pinpoint specific chakras outside of 10 feet. This only gives the Shinobi an idea of how many entities with chakra are present in their general area.

[b]*[Sensory Style • Evaluation][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] [b]*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b]
The sensor will activate their sensory jutsu, and then do an additional set of hand seals. By doing so, the user will be able to compare the “strength” of each source of chakra they are able to sense to each other. The “strength” of the individual is determined by the average of each person’s Stamina, Control and Strength stats. The user can determine who has more chakra strength than others, allowing them to pick out possible risks. This technique is not very reliable as a determining factor, however.

[b]*[Sensory Style • [Target Lock][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] [b]*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b]
The sensor will activate their sensory jutsu, and focus on one source of chakra they can sense. By doing an additional hand seal, and holding said hand seal, the user will be able to continue to sense that source of chakra, even if they are moving around, so long as they are holding the hand seal. If they, or the chakra source, moves out of range, the user will lose track of them.

[b]*[Sensory Style • Gauge: Speed][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] [b]*[Sensory Style • [Target Lock][/b]
After activating Target Lock, the user will do a second series of hand seals, releasing the single seal for target lock, and then recreate it once finishing the series of seals for the technique. Doing so, the user will know their targets speed with a deviation of 3 points. Meaning if their speed is 17, the user will know its within the range of 14 to 20.

[b]*[Sensory Style • Flare][/b]
[i]C-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
[i]Prerequisites:[/i] [b]*[Sensory Style • Beyond Senses][/b]
The sensor will activate their sensory jutsu, and then do a second set of hand seals. For the next 5 posts, any time anyone within the range of their sensory activates a jutsu, the user will see their chakra “flare” momentarily. While they won’t know anything about the jutsu, it will give them a better idea of the battle field

[color=#15aabc]~Frozen Water: B Class[/color]
B-rank Ninjutsu
After performing a B-rank Suiton jutsu, the user will do a series of hand seals, rapidly freezing that technique. While the technique may lose it’s ability to permeate and envelope, it will become solid in quality, gaining +10 strength in impact force. This technique is useful for trapping in the event the suiton technique has already enveloped something

*[color=dodgerblue][b]Suiton • Water Prison[/b][/color]
[i]B-Rank Ninjutsu[/i]
After performing the correct hand seals the user is able to spew a large ball of water that stands at three meters in diameter. This ball rolls forward at the desired target up to 20 meters away and at a speed of 20. Should this strike the target, they will become engulfed within the sphere. However, if this manages to strike multiple targets, it will envelop them as well, up to a total of 3 prisoners. One can resist being pulled into the ball if they have a strength higher than 20. The trapped targets will spin with the sphere and may become nauseated and dizzy from the dis

Ice amour
**B-Rank ninjutsu
After preforming the correct handseals ice will coat the users body buffing up strength by 15
But cutting speed by10

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Post by Tristan » Sat Mar 03, 2018 4:23 pm

Thankyou for the help , I have finished my bio/history So rn im going to organize the jutsu


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Post by Tristan » Sat Mar 03, 2018 4:43 pm

Done !😋


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Post by TyDie » Sat Mar 03, 2018 4:51 pm

Just one small thing I noticed at a glance, but you need to have 1 control above average for your rank to be an Aisu. So you'd need at least 11 control as a chuunin.

EDIT: also your tai spoiler for concentrations is broken :(
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Post by Tristan » Sat Mar 03, 2018 5:05 pm

Appreciate catching my mistakes sorry about messing up on this simple stuff it’s only my 2nd app


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Post by Kao » Sat Mar 03, 2018 11:18 pm

Somehow you have two copies of your jutsu on your app now, plus an entire copy of the original app you posted under the first genjutsu spoiler. If you want, I can go in and fix all that for you. Might be easier that way
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Post by Valkier » Sat Mar 03, 2018 11:20 pm

Good work overall! Just a few more things I can see -
  • The link used in your character name goes to an out-of-date page for the Aisu. Try using the following line of code to replace that line:
    [center][big][big][b] Takumi [url=https://www.narutosaigen.com/forums/viewtopic.php?&t=5632120/1/#new]Aisu[/url] [/b][/big][/big]
    It should end up looking & funtioning as so:
Quote:
Takumi Aisu
[*] As part of the Aisu, i'd like for your character's appearance to include some brief mention of having pale skin, and bright eyes (brown eyes are ok, but they can still be described as "bright").
Due to the Aisu family's ties to the Hirohito family of Kiri (you can read more about this both on the Aisu clan page linked above, and here, if you wish - search through the spoilers in the first post) your character would also be expected to wear a silver ring on his thumb, which could be included in your character's appearance

[*] For stats, I'm afraid a character must have a strength stat at least half as high as his speed - so 1 str/14 speed isn't possible, as it reflects that the character's body isn't physically strong enough to move at that speed. You'll need to rebalance your stats so that strength is no more than double your speed stat

[*] To have the Augment Fuuinjutsu concentration, your character needs to be a Ninjutsu Specialist - which would need to marked on your app somewhere, following the rules shown here. However, since you don't have any jutsu yet that need the augment fuuin conc, it might be preferable for now to remove that concentration - the conc and the specialisation are free to pick up later on if & when you need them (but are permanent once taken, so it's a good idea to avoid locking into them until they are needed!)

[*] Your Hyouton, Suiton, and Sensor jutsu will need to be added to, or trimmed down, to meet the 'pyramid rules' - described at the bottom of the first post here. These can be confusing, so the following infographic might help:[/list]

For example, you currently have 2 C-rank and 1 B-rank Suiton jutsu. To turn this into a balanced pyramid, it needs a 'base' of at least 3 D-rank Suiton jutsu too: 3D > 2C > 1B

See what you can do, and please feel free to message me or reply here if you need any help with the coding! The jutsu might be a big change, so we can continue checking once you've had a go at those :)
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Post by Tristan » Sat Mar 03, 2018 11:54 pm

How are my jutus wrong in ninjutsu I have atleast 5 Ds so I can Cs I have atleast 4 of those which allows me to have Bs I have 3 Bs I thought the pyramid apply to all the ninjutsu or dose it only apply to each concentration like water release,sensory,Mist style Ect ??


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Post by Valkier » Sun Mar 04, 2018 1:28 am

Oh - yeah, sorry, each different type of ninjutsu should have its own pyramid. There are exceptions to that, but for the most part (and for everything you have right now) they all need their own pyramids i'm afraid.
Taijutsu and genjutsu all share a single pyramid, but for ninjutsu it's divided up because they can be so different from one another.
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Post by Tristan » Sun Mar 04, 2018 3:03 am

Will rework it then


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Post by Tristan » Sun Mar 04, 2018 8:08 am

How is it now ?


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Post by Willoria » Sun Mar 04, 2018 10:37 am

One of the Kiri OOC's here just doing a quick history check. While I feel its kinda lacking in some details there really isn't much for me to point out until we get to the portion on Genin. In Kiri there are no genin teams, not in this sense anyway. A genin will have a single rival. They train with one another, they take missions, and they try to best one another as often as possible. The chunin exam will be a single fight between these two rivals, and the one who wins is the one who promotes.
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Post by Tristan » Sun Mar 04, 2018 1:44 pm

Sorry for my ignorance I was able to read the history,culture,military Ect about the villages but it never pointed out how the exams were operated


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Post by Kao » Sun Mar 04, 2018 5:09 pm

Would you like for me to go into your post and fix your coding?

Edit: Fixed the coding issues!
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Post by Tristan » Sun Mar 04, 2018 8:09 pm

I would appreciate it but idk why their are so many errors I’m positive I followed the coding correctly


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Post by Rain21199 » Mon Mar 05, 2018 10:16 am

Everything looks fine now. You still might want to organize your jutsu a bit better but I'm not going to force you.

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Post by Valkier » Mon Mar 05, 2018 11:16 am

2/2

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