[Denied]Style Pack

[Trusted Grader]

Application: Nonki, Hotaru
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A weaponry style created by Hotaru in order to master the way of both stealth and armed combat. The user uses their wits and human knowledge to their advantage, to not only strike them when they are unprepared but also take them down before they manage get a full grip on the ever surprising trickster.

Req: Upper body, Lower body, Deft hands, Perception, Projectile, Sword, Acrobatics

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D-Rank

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Ghost Draw
D-Rank Discipline Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Sword.
The user has mastered the ways of drawing their hidden sword slowly to reduce sound, though at this level the user can only unsheathe the blade without drawing attention.

Knife Proficiency
D-Rank Discipline Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Hidden-blade, knife.
The user has mastered the ways of wielding a knife on either grip side and is able to switch in between then with ease.

Bleeding Feet
D-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu.
Prerequisite: Caltrops.
The user moves around and gently kicks their heels to drop the caltrops out of their boots. Spreading it out in an even five meter field.

Paper Cut
D-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Bladed weapon.
The user aims to slash their targets arms in order to weaken then and leave the target open for followup attacks. These minor annoyances are overcome by either regeneration or minor wound treatments. If left untreated they will draw -1 strength from the target.

Switch it Up
D-Rank Stance Taijutsu
The user has mastered the ways of switching between her unarmed style to her armed variant and vice versa on the fly. By sheathing her weapons and using the blade as fist grip, allows her to stay one step ahead.

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C-Rank

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Untouchable
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Black Wolf.
The user is able to move about through any terrain without drawing to much noise, by always checking her surroundings as she keeps her eyes on her path.

Shank
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Knife Proficiency, Knife, Hidden-blade
The user precision stabs the target with their hidden-blade or knife, aiming to stab them by the guts in order to maximize the damage and cause internal bleeding. (-3 Stamina) The wound will go on bleeding until treated.

Dual Wielder
C-Rank Discipline Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Sword and Knife.
The user has mastered the way of wielding two separate weapons and work a way to use both at their advantage for both offensive and defensive purposes.

Blade Deflector
C-Rank Discipline Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Knife, Hidden-blade.
The user has mastered the way of deflecting bladed weapons with their knife, using the small size to throw their target off balance.

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B-Rank

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Rebellious Execution
B-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu.
Prerequisite: Hidden-Blade, 10 Wushu.
The user begins by moving within the targets guard before delivering a standing round house kick to their head, the user locks the opponents head instead of striking it by placing their head between their thigh and calf. Once their leg closes in on their target, they pull their body down to crashing them headfirst to the ground, followed by a well placed dagger between the ribs. This devastating combo can be quiet lethal, especially if the wound is left untreated.

Ghost Strike
B-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Ghost Draw, Black Wolf, Sword, 25 Speed.
The user crouches down to a three point stand as they lock in on their target, once their mind is set, they will rush the next ten meters at top speed and lose the ability to change direction until their strike has either landed or been blocked. This grants the user the ability to vanish as a shadow if the targets (speed+Instinct/2) is lower than the users speed.

Ghost Wolf
B-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Blade.
The user must first find themselves either above or below an unsuspecting target, once they are in place and have them on lock on, they will pounce the opponent and strike them with their weapon/s between their ribs. If the wound is left untreated then it can lead to certain death.

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A-Rank

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Step it Up
A-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: The Step Up, Sword.
The user reverses The Step Up move set and begins the technique with a kick to the back of the targets knee, followed by using the same foot to kick the targets hip. The user follows with their target before surprising with a falling sword. The user aims at the targets solar plexus, using both their momentum and the targets powerless pose to their advantage.

Predator
A-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Ghost Wolf, Ghost Draw
The user sits at their vantage point and takes key notice of their targets whereabouts, they plan out their form of attack before picking out four targets that are within 20 meters range. Using their speed, wits and weaponry the target is able to take on four unsuspecting foes and use the surprise attack to her advantage. If the users (Taijutsu+Speed+Instinct/3) is higher than the targets (Taijutsu+Instinct/2) the users movements will be hard to perceive due to unpreparedness.

Payment: Payment

[Nick]

Ghost draw<< Says "without making too noise"

Bleeding feet<< Need some kind of maximum on distance to spread them.

Papercut<< This implies that you're doing the strike with -1 srltrength, but I assume you meant that it debuffs the target with -1. Might want to rephrase.

Switch it up<< Should probably be a maneuver or discipline, and should also say HOW you switch between armed and unarmed.

Untouchable<< It's very unclear what this jutsu is meant to be doing for you.

Dual wielder<< It's written as a discipline, not a stance. A stance is a "mode" you go into, a discipline is something you do naturally.

Blade deflector<< Same thing here.

Rebellious execution<< Where is the well placed dagger so well placed? How are your legs locking the opponent?

Ghost strike<< Where is the strike aimed? What happens if you miss the opponent after 10 meters rather than hitting or being blocked? What makes this a B rank if all you're doing is running in a straight line?

Ghost wolf<< Similar here, you're not clear on what you're actually doing, except surprising someone from above or below. As written it's not really a jutsu at all.

Predator<< You have both stat lineups listed as the "target" lineup. Just as well, as written, this is an A rank instant kill on 4 people if they even miss the stat mark by a single point, which isn't really allowable.

[Trusted Grader]

Fixed! I hope this works for the better.

[Kabu]

Ghost Draw <- Discipline, though stance might work as well

[Trusted Grader]

Fixed

[Fake]

Bleeding Feet <- Sorry, I'm having a bit of trouble comprehending how D-Rank physical coordination translates to allowing you to spread caltrops (presumably 30) evenly over a 15 foot diameter field by 'gently kicking [your] heels'. Far too large imo.

Untouchable <- As mentioned above by Gunshanks, it's still unclear what exactly this does. You're able to move near silently by checking your surroundings? Or is it something along the lines of 'this character avoids obstacles that might produce noise'? Balancewise it's fine but it doesn't really make sense.

Blade Deflector <- IMO this should definitely be a maneuver with a stat check, as opposed to a discipline.

Ghost Strike <- Perception stat check should be based just off of instinct.

Ghost Wolf <- This is literally just a stab at the ribs. I don't see that it warrants being a B-Rank. Should be D-Rank.

Predator <- So I have a couple of issues with this one, the first being that it's written in a way that doesn't give any indication whatsoever as to what your character is doing--only that he/she is using various aspects of their style to automatically take on anybody who doesn't make a stat check. It's very game'y and doesn't have any counterplay whatsoever (besides having X amount of stats). It doesn't make sense as a maneuver because... Well, there's nothing specific being done. The second is a minor issue but your equations should read as (Stat+Stat+Stat)/3 as opposed to (Stat+Stat+Stat/3).

[Director]

3 days left

You'll still be able to claim your June event, even if this gets denied. Just so ya know.

[Trusted Grader]

I need a couple of days extra, please.

[Nick]

5 day extension granted.

[Director]

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