[Denied][Style] Lotus Jujitsu

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[Denied][Style] Lotus Jujitsu

Post by Hokami » Tue Dec 11, 2018 5:15 pm

Lotus Jujitsu

A universal style of grappling that can usually be found in both Leaf and Kumo. Originally composed of slams and holds designed to combat ninpou in it's intermediate years and in it's beginning years used to help skilled taijutsu practitioners combat those of larger size or strength. The fundamentals are often used as a stepping stone into custom styles of grappling and it's generally a mixed martial arts practice with no true masters. There are some strikes involved however they are usually capitalizing on an earlier technique in the style.

All techniques require equal speed too their Taijutsu requirement to be preformed but not to be learned as ancient practitioners would boost themselves to the speed needed.
Lotus Jujitsu:
A universal style of grappling that can usually be found in both Leaf and Kumo. Originally composed of slams and holds designed to combat ninpou in it's intermediate years and in it's beginning years used to help skilled taijutsu practitioners combat those of larger size or strength. The fundamentals are often used as a stepping stone into custom styles of grappling and it's generally a mixed martial arts practice with no true masters. Deft hands are required to put the opponent's in grapples in the heat of combat. There are some strikes involved however they are usually capitalizing on an earlier technique in the style.
Requires:
  • [Deft hands] Concentration [CQC] Concentration/ i]

D Rank:
*[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline Requires: 10 Strength
For preforming Lotus Jujitsu the user needs to make the most out of their body's capabilities, they practice using their body control to give them the upper hand against opponents so they spend a lot of time solidifying proper stances for grappling giving them greater leverage and initative against inexperienced grapplers in the middle of combat.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Slam]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The user slams their palm into the opponent's chin and then follows through into pushing the opponent straight into the ground as fast as they can.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Uki Goshi]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The user impedes a target's movement with their leg tripping them and using their momentum to throw them over their shoulder by lowering their center of gravity at the pace of them.

*[Lotus Jujitsu Style • DDT]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The user attempts to tank the opponent's charge and then grapple their neck and fall back into the ground bringing them down face first into the ground.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Toe hold!]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Manuever *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The user awaits for a charging opponent and then falls too the ground wrapping their feet around their target's foreleg tripping them up with their momentum.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Peregrine Falcon Drop]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever
The user grabs a falling opponent by their ankles, wraps his legs around their waist, and drives them head first into the ground.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Takedown!]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The user places themselves under their target with their head underneath one of their arms and their shoulder against their chest, The user lifts with with their knees as they pick up the opponent by the waist and then throw them too the side in one fell swoop.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Spear!]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The use runs at the target with much haste and attempts to slam their shoulder into them taking them down too the ground .


C Rank:
*[Lotus Jujitsu • Shadow of the Dancing Leaf]
C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever
A technique used to appear behind an airborne opponent with a focus burst of speed, mimicking how their body is positioned, just like a leaf that dances in the air is followed by its shadow. While harmless on its own, it is used as a stepping stone to perform techniques. The technique is usually preceded by a swift upper kick that will launch the target into the air.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Shi Shi Rendan]
C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Shadow of the Dancing Leaf] [Requires: Acrobatics]
A technique used upon an unarmed opponent that they have got behind in mid air, They usually throw a quick feint kick to disorient their opponent, then they proceed to preform a double spinning back fist on the target with added momentum following with a heel kick driving them downward.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Chin Music]
C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance] Instinct 15
A technique used to counter the movement of an incoming opponent with a quick thrusting heel kick too the chin capable of sending the opponent flying several feet in the air. The added discipline of their stance gives them added momentum in their knock back.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Lariat!]
C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
Is a powerful charging taijutsu technique whereby the user charges at their opponent, striking them with a Lariat move. The attack is rather straightforward, but very quick, powerful and is easily capable of knocking the opponent of guard allowing them easily to bring them down onto the ground if they wished.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Guillotine Leg Drop!]
C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The user leaps their strength in feet and then lifts their leg up into their before slamming their leg down onto their target and using them to cushion their fall. Their efforts go into putting all of their weight onto increasing the momentum before the strike so it has the potential of completely incapacitating their opponent from the strike.


B rank:
*[Lotus Jujitsu • Flash Lariat!]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
Requiring a full post of charge time the user tenses their entire body in preparation, becoming immobile. During this time they will look for their direct path and position themselves with their arm out. At the end of the post they will release all of this pent up energy with extreme force, leaping nearly instantaneously a number of yards equal to their speed. If their strength is high enough this can rip through obstacles on their path and create extreme damage to opponents who are hit by it. Often used as an opening attack and cannot be done more than twice per thread.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Stunner!]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
Lunging at the opponent they wrap their arms around their head and then slam their jaw down onto their shoulder with intense strength and dexterity that it can kill a normal person. This technique can be preformed almost at a moment's notice and is very difficult to predict. This is generally used to surprise or counter the opponent sending them falling flying onto their back

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Front Lotus!]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Shadow of the Dancing Leaf] 30 Stamina and Taijutsu
After using the shadow of the dancing leaf on a mid air opponent, the user wraps their arms around the opponent's waist tight restraining them, They use their upper body to cause them spinning at an incredible speed into the ground before letting go at the last moment and escaping the fall. The drop lets out an explosion of force that can completely incapacitate someone. Once a hiden this technique requires intense strain and can only be preformed once a day.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Hurricane Fulcrum!]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The user parries an incoming attack with tight elbow slam too usually one of their joints or their shin in the attempt to break the bone on impact, Originally designed to take down people who come at them with wide roundhouse kicks, If their [Taijutsu + Strength] is greater then their opponent's this defensive maneuver could possible break a limb and leave the user with no damage from their opposing blow.

A rank:
*[Lotus Jujitsu • Liger Bomb]
A-Ranked Nin taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance]
The user lifts the opponent up above their head similar too that if they were prepping for some kind of power bomb. They would then leap their strength in feet into the air at max speed and then slam the opponent down onto their back full speed with their enhanced strength. The technique upon impact causes a sizable amount of destruction to the ground below and can completely paralyze someone for life.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Hiden Front Lotus!]
A-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Front Lotus!] 35 Stamina
After using the shadow of the dancing leaf on a mid air opponent, the user wraps their arms around the opponent's waist tight restraining them, They use their upper body to cause them spinning at an incredible speed into the ground before letting go at the last moment and escaping the fall. T drop lets out an explosion of force that can kill someone, The intense speed that they make impact causes them to burst into flame. Once a hiden this technique requires intense strain and can only be preformed once a day (Not on the same day as it's predecessor].

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Sweet Chin Music]
A-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Chin Music] [Requires Medical]
A technique used to counter the movement of an incoming opponent with a quick thrusting heel kick too the chin capable of sending the opponent several feet in the air. This more advanced version of the technique is done with enough added oomph to break the teeth of it's target and send a shock too their brain disconnecting signals too the body too move. The added discipline of their stance gives them added momentum in their knock back and this version is done with a quick dash leading up.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • One Man Lotus!]
A-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever *[Lotus Jujitsu • Front Lotus]
The user dashes at a target spinning in the same fashion they would do if they were preforming a Front Lotus. The speed that the user spins creates a vacuum of wind around the user's head and impact with the said head is incredible. This also does not strain as much as the common variant and can be preformed multiple times if they have the stamina to pull it off, the leaving before the drop is the most excruciating part though they may be quite dizzy.


S Rank:
*[Lotus Jujitsu • Raiton Release: Liger Bomb]
S-Ranked Nintaijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Liger Bomb] Raiton Affinity
The user lifts the opponent up above their head similar too that if they were prepping for some kind of power bomb. They would then leap their strength in feet into the air at max speed and then slam the opponent down onto their back full speed with their enhanced strength before eventually sending a large amount of lightning through the impact area of the explosion capable of killing them instantly.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Secondary Lotus!
S-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever Requires *[Lotus Jujitsu • Shadow of the Dancing Leaf] 45 Taijutsu.
After using the shadow of the dancing leaf on a mid air opponent, the user slams their body into the opponent sending them flying, the user then darts to where the opponent is about to land and then does so again, up too their stamina divided by 10 before finally grasping them by the waist and then slamming their arm directly into their solar plexus at sub human speeds slamming them into the ground. Once a hiden this technique still requires immense strain on the body and can only preformed once per day and will render the user incapable of moving for one post.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Hiden One Man Lotus!]
S-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuever *[Lotus Jujitsu • Hiden Front Lotus
The user dashes at a target spinning in the same fashion they would do if they were preforming a Hiden Front Lotus. The speed that the user spins creates a torrent of flames around the user's head and impact with said head is incredible. This also does not strain as much as the grappling slam variant and can be preformed multiple times if they have the stamina to do so, the leaving before the drop is the most excruciating part.

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[Style] Lotus Jujitsu

Post by Sanjuro » Thu Dec 20, 2018 2:22 am

You've got a broken [/i] in the beginning quote which is putting the entire style in italics.
Should move the Requires line of each technique to the line below the Rank to keep things more uniform if this is an archive style submission eg

[Name of Jutsu]
X-Rank
Requires:

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Stance] <- For preforming Lotus Jujitsu' performing*
Honestly should probably just do a Search for preform and replace them with perform, because it comes up quite a bit.

Since Stance is a prerequisite for the majority of the style, I would simply add it to the style Quote alongside the required concentrations, but that's just a suggestion.

*[Lotus Jujitsu Style • DDT] <- Maybe change tank to intercept but that's just a generalization thing.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Takedown!] <- their chest, The user - their chest. The user*

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Spear!] <- The use - The user*

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Shadow of the Dancing Leaf] <- with a focus burst of speed, - focused*

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Shi Shi Rendan] <- Any particular reason they need to be unarmed? Also, mid air, They - mid air. They*

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Chin Music] <- Should be measured in meters as that's the site standard, even if it just 1 meter.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Lariat!] <- As the technique is in itself called Lariat, should probably describe it as a strike with the user's entire arm across the upper body and neck instead of just saying a Lariat attack. Also, knocking the opponent of guard off*

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Guillotine Leg Drop!] <- Meters and I'd give it a fraction of strength. Maybe 1/3?

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Flash Lariat!] <- Meters, fraction again, and it sounds like Psuedo-Heavenly due to the instant movement and crashing through things in their way so probably needs a Strength and Speed minimum of 35. Also, Body Flicker is A-Rank Nintai and that's using Chakra and doesn't allow for an attack in the same motion, so this should be a higher rank.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Stunner!] <- with intense strength and dexterity that it can kill with enough* flying onto their back back.*

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Front Lotus!] <- restraining them, They - restraining them. They* to cause them spinning - to spin*
The once a day restriction doesn't seem necessary, the only per-thread techniques we have are Instantaneous Movement like Replacement and Body Flicker. Someone with sufficient skill and stamina could perform this multiple times.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Hurricane Fulcrum!] <- The user parries an incoming attack with tight elbow slam too usually one of their joints or their shin in the attempt to break the bone on impact, - The user parries an incoming attack with a tight elbow slam, usually to one of their joints or their shin, in an attempt to break the bone on impact.* roundhouse kicks, If - kicks. If* [Taijutsu + Strength] is greater then their opponent's (Taijutsu+Strength)/2 and should be vs either the opponent's flat Strength or Stamina, or the average of both. from their opposing - from the opposing*

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Liger Bomb] <- The user lifts the opponent up above their head similar too that if they were prepping for some kind of power bomb. - The user lift their opponent up above their head in preparation for a power bomb.* Meters instead of feet, should function at a fraction due to the increased measurement. Nothing about this mentions the use of chakra or Ninjutsu so it should be straight Taijutsu instead of Nintai.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Hiden Front Lotus!] <- restraining them, They - restraining them. They* to cause them spinning - to spin* the fall. T drop - The drop* someone, The something. The*
Same as Front Lotus, remove the once per thread limit. Bursting into flames would make this Psuedo-Heavenly, requiring a Strength or Speed of 35. Explosion of force needs a range and strength of said explosion. Flames need the degree of burns caused as well.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Sweet Chin Music] <- signals too the body too move. - signals to the body to move.
Measured in meters, fraction again, needs a duration for the length of the stun. If unconciousness, should probably require a stat battle between user's Strength and opponent's Stamina.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • One Man Lotus!] <- Psuedo-Heavenly, requires a Strength or Speed of at least 35. The vacuum force needs a Strength it functions at.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Raiton Release: Liger Bomb] <- Exact fixes same as Liger Bomb. Requires a mention of chakra channeling or hand seals before attempting the grab. Explosion needs a range and strength it functions at. If it's based on Taijutsu, function at a fraction of Strength, otherwise use the explosion rules for Ninjutsu.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Secondary Lotus! <- Missing ]
Basically everything that is wrong with the other Lotus techniques apply to this as well.

*[Lotus Jujitsu • Hiden One Man Lotus!] <- Same as the standard One Man Lotus errors.
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Hirohito, Hideki Kirigakure Bannin #0047AB
Higurashi, Kazuo Iwagakure Special Jounin #FFC40C
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