Kururugi Chiosai [Finished]

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Kururugi Chiosai [Finished]

Post by Reiju » Wed Feb 20, 2019 8:42 pm

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Kururugi Chiosai


[Nindo]

General Information Age: 16
Gender: Male
Height: 5’6
Weight: 145
Physical Features:
  • Face/head: Chiosai looks to others like a pretty, and delicate girl. Despite his gender. His face is best described to be gorgeous. His face has a smooth, and soft texture. He has a very light complexion of his skin. He has chin length hair, and wears glasses. His eyes is a light brown color. The same color as a warm cup of coffee. His bangs stop at the near center of his forehead, just enough for it to touch the middle of his glasses. His sides are partially covering his ear.
  • Body: He has a noticeable attractive build, as he is seen to be slender, and a bit tall. However he is nowhere near fit or athletic. His body is clear from scars.
  • Notable Features:Bust - A bust? Why would a guy have a bust? Chiosai was biologically assigned as a female at birth, but identifies as a male. This is a secret that he keeps. Besides he has some melons, so nobody should complain. Right?
Clothing/Accessories: Chiosai prefers to be comfortable at times. From the ground up, he can be seen wearing a black battle skirt in order to keep his gender ambiguous. He the basic ninja sandals, and his socks stop at his knees. He has two pouches behind his back, located on the back side of his skirt, that keeps typical ninja tools, such as kunais, ninja stars, and scrolls.

His shirts vary in color, and in size. He is sometimes seen wearing shirts that are too baggy, or too large. However the most notable shirt he wears is the two button up shirt that goes with the dress he wears. He also keeps his colors bright. Chiosai also, always wears long sleeve shirts in order to keep his upper body warm. He wears his ninja headband around his neck, rather than his forehead.
Picture:
Personality:

Quiet - Chiosai doesn't do a lot of speaking, and when he does. He does with a monotone voice, as if you're watching someone go through a slideshow presentation. He can also come off as boring. He isn't much of a talkative person, and prefers to speak through action, and combat. However, this doesn't mean that he lacks communication skills. You can just say that he's shy.

Independent - Chiosai doesn't believe in the power of other people. He only believes in his own capabilities. He isn't the type of person to ask for a helping hand. He doesn't want to be seen weak, and someone who is always depending on someone. He wants to be able to handle his own problems without the need of someone trying to save the day.

Hard working - When setting his goals straight, he is the most hard working. He works towards achieving his goals, and won't stop until the obstacles before him is out of his way. He has a generally good performance rate, and oftentimes he doesn't slack off. Chiosai is always seen training hard, as if something is on his mind 24/7.

Straightforward - Chiosai is someone who keeps things simple, and straight to the point. At times he can come off as impolite, and rude. However this isn't his intention. He doesn't like things that are complicated, and tends to explain things in the shortest terms. Keeping things sweet, and simple. This is contrast to be in honest, though contradicting his tendency to keep secrets.


Secretive - Chiosai doesn't like to reveal too much about himself. He is mostly seen as a mysterious person who doesn't let on. Sometimes it can be hard to get to know who he is, since he cares for his privacy. He doesn't want to let out enough information, and his weaknesses so they can get the better of him.

Gentle - Chiosai doesn't look like your typical person to hurt a fly, but don't mistaken him for being soft, and weak. He can be described as someone who is easy to be around, because of his gentle nature. He attracts the trust of people, despite being secretive, and a liar. As a gentle person, he is most certainly a reliable ninja, and a vital help to the team. He is willing enough to bring his peacefulness to the people that need it.



Forgetful - Chiosai is easily a forgetful person, but also doesn't mean that he will show someone mercy. It also depends on how much damage that the person has done to him, or the people around him. In an emotional sense. He is easy to understand others motives, and tends to forgive their actions. Likewise it depends on the scale of these actions, and if they're unforgivable.

  • General:
  • Hopes/Dreams:

    Becoming a banin - Chiosai is a hard worker, and has a certain goal. He wants to become a banin, and by doing that. He has to train extra harder.

    Have a student - He wants to be strong enough, and hold enough to handle other people. He wants to be able to pass down his skills to others.
  • Fears:

    Heights - Chiosai had never been the type to enjoy high places, as he fears that he might fall from them, and die if he isn't careful. It gives him nausea if he's in towers or higher places.

    Being alone - Chiosai doesn't want to be left alone, and forgotten. He wants to be remembered as someone. He wants to be famed for something.
  • Combat Mentality:------------

Battle Information Village:Konoha
Rank:Genin
  • Ninjutsu:7
  • Taijutsu:3
  • Genjutsu:5
  • Stamina:5
  • Control:6
  • Strength:3
  • Speed:5
  • Instinct: 6
Equipment:
x1 sword
x3 explosive tags
x3 wires
Companions: (0/1)
Primary Affinity: Katon
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
First Ability
Second Ability
Third Ability
Concentrations
Ninjutsu[
Katon:
Katon Affinity
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Katon, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Katon affinity. Katon has a passive ignition effect.
Passive (Ingition)Show
Katon's effect is ignition, which means that all katon jutsu, regardless of effect, start and spread fire from their source. Once a jutsu has been performed, the fire from the jutsu spreads at 1/3rd the speed of the technique, rounded down. That means a C-rank katon jutsu that moves at 13 speed would create subsequent fires that spread at 4 speed. These secondary fires require flammable material to continuously spread, otherwise they will burn out on their own.

Additionally, the strength of burns on organic material from katon jutsu is determined by the strength stat of the individual jutsu.
  • 1-14 Strength Requirement: First Degree Burns
  • 15-24 Strength Requirement: Second Degree Burns
  • 25-34 Strength Requirement: Third Degree Burns
  • 35+ Strength Requirement: Fourth Degree Burns
]
Taijutsu[Place them here]
Genjutsu[Place them here]

Jutsu
NinjutsuShow
[Katon • Fireball
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user draws in a deep breath before exhaling out a 1 foot diameter fireball at the opponent. It travels up to 10 meters away at a speed of 6 and a strength of 4./spoiler]
Katon • Torch
D-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will exhale a small ball of flame directly in front of them. The ball lights up the surrounding area in a 5 meter radius and requires 5 or more Strength to destroy. Unless destroyed, it will stay locked in it's location for 5 posts before fading.
Katon • Heated Blade
D-Rank Ninjutsu
By channeling katon chakra into a metal weapon or blade, the user will cause it to grow hotter and cover the blade in flames. The imbued weapon will be able to carve through defenses of 5 or less strength with ease.
Katon • Great Fireball
C-Rank Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user draws in a deep breath before exhaling a thin stream of flames up to 15 meters away at a speed of 10. Either at 15 meters, or if the stream makes impact with anything, the stream will erupt into a spherical C-Rank explosion, scattering flames over everything within a 5 meter radius from the point of impact.

*[Basic Jutsu • Act of Tree Climbing]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
By focusing chakra into his/her feet, the user is able to walk up trees and other vertical surfaces in a similar fashion to walking along the ground. This chakra amount must be precise, and although all shinobi learn this technique, the user's control stat will determine how well this jutsu can be executed. Users with low control 2 or lower will often fall during the use of this technique, while users with average control 3 or higher will be able to use this technique functionally. It lasts for a number of posts equal to the user's stamina stat.

*[Basic Jutsu • Act of Water Surface Walking]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
A variation of the Act of Tree Climbing technique, this jutsu requires the user to focus a precise and balanced amount of charka into the soles of his/her feet. By doing so, the user is able to walk on the surface of water as though it were a solid surface. Users with low control 2 or lower are much more likely to fall through the surface of the water, while users with average control 3 or higher will be able to use this technique functionally. It lasts for a number of posts equal to the user's stamina stat.

*[Basic Jutsu • Clone Technique]
E-Ranked Ninjutsu
After completing a set of handseals, the user forms a slight chakra 'body', thus creating a single, massless clone. The clone created from this technique is very basic and will dissipate when hit with anything. These clones do not possess vital signs or a unique chakra signature, meaning they don't disrupt the environment, and anything on their person is superficial. The clone has 1 in each stat. They are limited to basic movements.

TaijutsuShow
Place Taijutsu in here
GenjutsuShow
Place Genjutsu in here

History
Historical AccountsShow
Chiosai raised by two loving parents. They had nurtured Him, and always made sure that He was healthy and safe. Chiosai is the only child of His family, as He never had brothers or sisters. He just had Himself and His parents. while they were all loving, they also cared about His training. Both of His parents were trained medical ninjas, and both were also well trained in the arts of interrogation and torture. They never use those methods unfortunately, as they were pacifist and never really relied on harsh punishments in order to get what they need in order to successfully complete their mission. Though Chiosai didn't want to share the same lifestyle, as His parents and wanted to carve out His own path. He had this sort of thinking at the young age of 4. Chiosai would usually help around the house. He made sure that things kept in order. It was like He was a guard dog at times when His mother is away, and His father attends meetings with other members in his clan.

His parents wanted to train Him to become a doctor, and be of great use in the medical field. Despite the training, it soon became a side hobby for Chiosai. He wasn't entirely interested in becoming a doctor, even in the process of becoming one. His clan was was mostly made up of assassins. While his father and mother were kind, and caring. Behind the scenes his father was doing most of the work training him to be a ruthless killer, and be feared by other clans some day.

Once He reached the age of 5, it was time for Him to prove Himself that He's smart, and can handle people. The academy years was smooth sailing for the most part. He was able to have friends, but they all didn't stick around for too long as He distance Himself during the long academic days before graduation. He was more focused on His grades, and studies than trying to form bonds and make friends. He never excluded the option of trying to have friends, as most people look up to Him. The reason they look up to His, because He is intelligent. Whenever someone needed help, He's mostly this to help them out the best He can. He was able to pick up things much faster than most of His classmates, which makes Him reliable. His parents had been way more busy than usual, and still took in lessons after school from His teacher. By this time, He would specifically go to His teacher for things, such as any life lessons that He will receive if anything in His life turned for the worse. In His own right, He didn't feel like He was the perfect child. He knew He had His faults, but He never admits to them, due to His ego. His ego makes His feel as if He was the top of the world at times.

This has also been one student that would test Him, unfortunately He was mostly all talk and can't back His words up for the most part. He will always get back at them, during the second run. By the time graduation came, He felt good about Himself How much He has learned over the short amount of time. He was sure to enter in His genin stage with a positive attitude, and never yield to no one other than His superiors. But once He enters His genin stage, He wouldn't expect an immense amount of change that was brought before His. This meant more training, and discipline, when He hit the age of 13. He made sure to train hard, and to never fall behind the pack. His teacher made sure that He wouldn't, even there was a time that He did. His teacher never believed in slacking off, despite His doing so every now and then.
Last edited by Reiju on Fri Mar 01, 2019 10:15 am, edited 5 times in total.

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Kururugi Chiosai [Finished]

Post by Reiju » Thu Feb 21, 2019 8:32 am

Ready for grading

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Kururugi Chiosai [Finished]

Post by Takumi » Fri Feb 22, 2019 2:51 pm

Hey, welcome to Saigen. Your app looks really good, especially the personality.

There are a few things I noticed from a cursory glance.

In hopes/dreams, you mention the Sannin. In Saigen, we don't have the Sannin (which just literally means three ninja). Instead, we have Bannin, the high-level equivalent rank above Jounin.

Your character doesn't have any concentrations or jutsu. Was this intentional? As a genin, he can have 30 points worth of jutsu for free. These free points can't be used later, so if you want to add jutsu in the future, they will have to be earned through points or training. Similarly, you have a lot of points available for equipment, and can have up to 15 explosive items if desired. If you want to leave them as is, that's cool too, but I figured I'd make sure you were aware of that.

The capitalized pronouns in the history makes it a bit hard to read, especially when "His" is used instead of "Him". I assume they're capitalized to denote his designated pronouns? Also, I know I was curious about his gender identity, it may be interesting to incorporate that into the history, but that's just my opinion.

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Kururugi Chiosai [Finished]

Post by Reiju » Fri Feb 22, 2019 5:55 pm

Is there a list for jutsus?

I've corrected the 'his' stuff.

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Kururugi Chiosai [Finished]

Post by Niro » Sat Feb 23, 2019 11:16 pm

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Tatsuo [color=#940839][b]IwaTsuchikageTeam 18 Jousai
Kinomichi [color=limegreen][b]IwaBanninJousai
Kotetsu [color=slategray][b]IwaGeninTeam 7
Ashura [color=coral][b]SunaGenin
Sai [color=#FF14A1][b]Kiri - MND-Rank
Yamato [color=#C71585][b]KiriA-Rank

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Kururugi Chiosai [Finished]

Post by Reiju » Fri Mar 01, 2019 10:15 am

Bumping

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Post by Takumi » Thu Mar 07, 2019 6:21 pm

You have a coding error, everything after Ninjutsu is hidden in the Ninjutsu spoiler (other Jutsu and History).

You need 10 in the Ninjutsu stat to have C-Rank Techniques.

You don't need to put the basic ninjutsu on your sheet (tree climbing, water walking, clone). All of them are assumed to be known by any characters who start as ninja.

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Kururugi Chiosai [Finished]

Post by Ace Trainer » Sat Mar 16, 2019 3:50 pm

I just wanted to reaffirm the edits Takumi suggested and note that you have 30 points to spend on jutsu so feel free to get more jutsu.
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Post by Niro » Thu Mar 21, 2019 11:54 am

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NameVillageRankTeam
Tatsuo [color=#940839][b]IwaTsuchikageTeam 18 Jousai
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Kotetsu [color=slategray][b]IwaGeninTeam 7
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