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Post by Trusted Grader » Thu Sep 05, 2019 11:16 am

Application: Nonki, Hotaru
Change: 1 Ability, 1 rank ups and signature technique as perk.
Out of sight:
This ability allows Hotaru to passively leak out chakra that reaches as far as her control=meters, the leaking chakra targets others subconscious and cause her to blend in better with her surrounding, making it easier for her to disappear among the crowd, giving her varying levels of change of appearance depending on the difference of skill. The effect works off of the warp cancellation chart. If the target's [Tai+Inst]/2 is lower than Hotaru's control by -5; she will start to fade among the environment, whether is a crowd or between the trees. If the target's stat is lower than -10; she will be able to change the appearance of the environment, such as adding more crowd/trees. If the targets stat is lower than -15; she'll be able to start to "teleporting" (Fading in and out of existence) and appear around target. This Ability is always active, which ends up drawing -5 Stamina from the user.
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D-Rank

Innocent
D-Rank Discipline Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Act like it
If the user has chosen to act like a cute character then Innocent can be used to attempt to trick the target into believing that they are innocent. Her Tai vs their Inst 2 to see through her lies.

C-Rank

Pick Pocket; Intermediate Object
C-Rank Manouver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: 15 Taijutsu, 15 Instinct, Location of the item.
This is one of the most basic techniques the spy has in her archive, first it requires that the user knows where the item (1 post) is located on the person, then bumps into them and attempt to pick the targets pocket, if the target has lower Instinct/tai than the users taijutsu then they won't notice. This works on object smaller than a pouch and she cant plant items on the target at this level as well.

B-Rank

Stealth; Silent Wolf
B-Rank Discipline Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Black Wolf
Hotaru has upgraded her previous jutsu and has now learned how to sprint at full speed without making noises.

A-Rank

Mind Reader
A-Rank Discipline Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Subtle Movements, 30 Taijutsu
Through the art of being able to read their subtle movements, readings of emotions and manipulating the outcome of the situation, the user is able manipulate how the outcome would be, making it appear as if they are reading their minds. In order for this connection to be linked, the user must study the target for 4 posts and only works if Hotaru has higher/equal Instinct to/than the target.

S-Rank

Born To Find A Way
S-Rank Discipline Taijutsu
Prerequisite: 40 Instinct.
By studying the target/area for more than 5 posts, the user gets a hub of possibilities that can be created, within this zone it almost appears as a playground for the user as they can chose to set up traps, find a way in through fortress, lead enemies into danger, etc. The user keeps a strong grip of the information flow, giving them data on almost anything within a max 1 mile, meaning any broken branches, new footsteps will be noticeable once she returns to that specific area and allow Hotaru to notice those small changes, though it can change to smaller sizes.
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Noticed that this jutsu wasn't worded correctly, it's a ranged continuous debuff but the wording makes it not appear so.

Monsun
S-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Weapon on Weapon action, Hand-Eye-Coordination, 40 Taijutsu, 40 Instinct.
The user plants their feet and begins to empty their weapon stash, they will keep their eye on a target and begin to swarm them with senbons/kunai/shuriken in order to weaken the foe. The overwhelming projectile weapons twists and turns as they bounce off walls and each other and the longer the target stays pinned within the area and get targeted then they lose 8 stats (-2 Tai, Stam, Str, Spe) for 5 posts that lasts until they recover from the damage. This technique can only be used once per thread as it empties the users weapon stash, leaving them with only the essentials.

Should be

Monsun
S-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Prerequisite: Weapon on Weapon action, Hand-Eye-Coordination, 40 Taijutsu, 40 Instinct.
The user plants their feet and begins to empty their weapon stash, they will keep their eye on a target and begin to swarm them with senbons/kunai/shuriken in order to weaken the foe. The overwhelming projectile weapons twists and turns as they bounce off walls and each other and the longer the target stays pinned within the area and get targeted then they lose 8 stats (-2 Tai, Stam, Str, Spe) per post up till 5, the wounds lasts until they recover from the damage. This technique can only be used once per thread as it empties the users weapon stash, leaving them with only the essentials and forced the user to be stationary for the sum of their chosen duration.

Payment: Price for the ability and B-Rank mission
Last edited by Trusted Grader on Sat Sep 28, 2019 8:18 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Sushi
The Lawful
Shoshiki, Amaya
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H.N.K
Wana, Ran
The Hunter
Inuzuka, Kitsui
Genin: Konoha
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N/A
Wana
Treasure Hunter
Amigaou, Mahalow
B-Rank: Suna
[Olive]
[N/A]
[N/A]
The Invisible
Nonki, Hotaru
Jounin / Spy: Kumo
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Kirie
The Mercenary
Nara, Chikara
S-Rank MN: Konoha
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Chie, Yasu, Wakana, Ayuma, Shiryoku
The Cryomancer
Aisu, Yuri
Genin: Kiri
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N/A
N/A
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Post by Niro » Mon Sep 09, 2019 7:50 pm

Can't buy access to warp as it is no longer locked

The range is too much we said it should be solely equal to control

Go through your Jutsu and make sure your formulas are correct
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Post by Niro » Sat Sep 14, 2019 3:18 pm

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Post by Trusted Grader » Tue Sep 17, 2019 5:46 pm

I think this is better?

Did you mean my jutsu in the app? Or these jutsu?
CharactersShow
Different Sides Of The War
Order
The Compassionate
Karagata, Yuuto
Special Jounin: Kiri
[Lightblue]
SSM
Sushi
The Lawful
Shoshiki, Amaya
Bannin: Iwa
[Palegoldenrod]
H.N.K
Wana, Ran
The Hunter
Inuzuka, Kitsui
Genin: Konoha
[Forestgreen]
N/A
Wana
Treasure Hunter
Amigaou, Mahalow
B-Rank: Suna
[Olive]
[N/A]
[N/A]
The Invisible
Nonki, Hotaru
Jounin / Spy: Kumo
[#7FA08C][Dimgray][Gray]
S.T.R.A.T.O.S
Kirie
The Mercenary
Nara, Chikara
S-Rank MN: Konoha
[Purple]
Setsuzoku
Chie, Yasu, Wakana, Ayuma, Shiryoku
The Cryomancer
Aisu, Yuri
Genin: Kiri
[Skyblue]
N/A
N/A
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Kijo, Nehan
S-Rank MN: Konoha
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Chishiki
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Post by ShinobiTruth » Wed Sep 25, 2019 1:04 am

I understand that this is a technique that is already on your character sheet, but since you're bringing it up here for review here in this mod:

Monsun <==== I fail to see how this technique would cause a stat debuff against someone defending against it who exceed your Strength/Taijutsu and Speed. Also, the technique sounds like the projectiles will indefinitely ricochet off of walls or environmental structures or will always ricochet back towards the opponent, which would normally be highly dependent on the terrain within this technique's area of effect.

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Post by Trusted Grader » Sat Sep 28, 2019 8:15 pm

It does that by hitting off both the environment and each other, this one takes careful planning to pull out, and the user is stationary while pulling the technique off as it requires so much attention.
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Different Sides Of The War
Order
The Compassionate
Karagata, Yuuto
Special Jounin: Kiri
[Lightblue]
SSM
Sushi
The Lawful
Shoshiki, Amaya
Bannin: Iwa
[Palegoldenrod]
H.N.K
Wana, Ran
The Hunter
Inuzuka, Kitsui
Genin: Konoha
[Forestgreen]
N/A
Wana
Treasure Hunter
Amigaou, Mahalow
B-Rank: Suna
[Olive]
[N/A]
[N/A]
The Invisible
Nonki, Hotaru
Jounin / Spy: Kumo
[#7FA08C][Dimgray][Gray]
S.T.R.A.T.O.S
Kirie
The Mercenary
Nara, Chikara
S-Rank MN: Konoha
[Purple]
Setsuzoku
Chie, Yasu, Wakana, Ayuma, Shiryoku
The Cryomancer
Aisu, Yuri
Genin: Kiri
[Skyblue]
N/A
N/A
The Jashinist
Kijo, Nehan
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Chishiki
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Post by Kabu » Tue Oct 01, 2019 10:23 pm

That doesn't really make sense. As currently written I don't see how the technique in question would really end up causing a debuff of any kind, except for maybe speed or strength if we stretch it a bit.
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Post by Niro » Tue Oct 08, 2019 9:10 pm

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