Naruto Saigen Roleplay

Posted: **Sun Sep 08, 2019 2:12 am**

Application: viewtopic.php?f=88&t=8114025&p=4082022
1. Returning +40 points back to Jinzo due to the new ruling
2. Removing the third ability, Izanagi, and turning it into a Ninjutsu: Maintenance Man.

+2 Instinct = 10 points
+4 Stamina = 20 points
+7 Speed = 35 points

FuuinjutsuShow

Maintenance Man
C-Rank Augment Fuuinjutsu
Prerequisite: Sensor
After a channel, Jinzo creates a Fuuinjutsu within Fuuinjutsu. For up to five posts, this allows him to be linked with it and utilize Sensory Jutsu through it.

Zilch
B-Rank Augment Fuuinjutsu
After drawing on a specified target, the user can hide the seal and its wearer that's under 5x5m in size from being seen visually. If the target is moving beyond 20 Speed, it will reduce the effects and reveal them.

Sealed Records
C-Rank Augment Fuuinjutsu
Prerequisites: Kakome [Ability], Kakome Visualization
The user will perform the necessary handseals and touch an object. Imbuing it with chakra of the recording made by the user's Visualization with his Kakome. Those who come in physical contact with the seal will have their vision affected and see what's in the seal's recording. However, if the target isn't willing and there's mental resistance of any sort, the effects wears off until they're willing to see its contents. This is a very ancient technique used to bring evidence to a crime, and was a key item of trust once cherished by those who worked along side with the Jiku long ago.

SensoryShow

[Kakome • Split]
C-Rank Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Maintenance Man
The user will channel into his eyes and begin to split his vision. One eye witnessing the present. The other eye witnessing the past with his active or upcoming Doujutsu techniques. Maximum duration of 5 posts.

[Kakome • Visualization]
C-Rank Ninjutsu
Prerequisites: Kakome
The very basic approach behind the Kakome. With concentration, and eyes closed: Jinzo will add a channel into his active Kakome, and for up to 3 posts can watch the activities performed in the past like a film.

[Kakome Hito]
B-Rank Ninjutsu
Prerequisites: Kakome
The user will channel into his Kakome looking for flesh within 10 feet. This catalyst allows him to read the activities the flesh has experienced. The experience, range, etc is based on the following Kakome technique's limitations. The flesh being the range's center during the area's reading. This reading has a duration of 5 posts.

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Posted: **Mon Sep 09, 2019 8:15 pm**

Kakome Hito should specify past activities

Kakome Split makes little sense with the words currently used, particularly atmosphere. If this is having it be so he can see into the past while seeing the present you can use much better words

Not sure what Sealed Records is doing

Zilch - you need a specific fuuin for each sense plus completely blocking one of them off would be higher than d rank

Maintenance Man is also confusing. I'm assuming you want to make an alteration to an already existing seal so that you can use sensory Jutsu through it

Posted: **Mon Sep 09, 2019 10:17 pm**

Fixed.

Hope the new edit makes a little more sense for you, bud.

Posted: **Mon Sep 09, 2019 10:44 pm**

New edit on Zilch. Changed it's goal.

Posted: **Mon Sep 09, 2019 11:20 pm**

Kakome split is still confusing. What do you mean by the "reading"? This is very vague and unclear.

[Kakome • Visualization] <-- how long does this last? how far back into the past can he see?

No idea what Hito is doing, to be honest. Can you elaborate on what it is about the flesh he is seeing? And is this just like...flesh that is severed from someone or are you just looking at a person?

Sealed Records <--- How is the person's vision affected? What kind of resistance?

Posted: **Thu Sep 12, 2019 11:50 pm**

Split:
--Edited in "... witnessing the past with his Doujutsu." Since he's seeing the past with his Doujutsu on that eye. Reading just meant using his Doujutsu...

Visualization:
--FIXED.

Hito:
--Kakome is like Mind's Eye of the past. So if the flesh is the source of the reading, he's reading the surrounding area. Range depends on which Kakome he's using C/B/A over said flesh during said time period. It's in the Kakome description on what's possible. But I try to keep the description for techniques requiring Kakome short and label it as the prerequisite is so it doesn't come out as fluffy. But all the info is there. But to answer the question: It's flesh in general.

Sealed Records:
--FIXED

Posted: **Fri Sep 13, 2019 12:46 am**

Edited in more info to make Hito a bit clearer just in case.

Posted: **Sat Sep 14, 2019 4:13 pm**

Maintenance Man
C-Rank Augment Fuuinjutsu
Prerequisite: Sensor
After a channel, Jinzo creates a Fuuinjutsu on top of Fuuinjutsu. This allows him to be linked with it and utilize Sensory Jutsu over the activities around said seal. <-"over the activities around said seal" should just be "through it"

Zilch <-how is it being hidden? Can I see it? Can I smell it? Can I use sensory?

Posted: **Mon Sep 16, 2019 10:09 am**

Although it has "seen" at the end of the sentence, I'll include "visually" just to secure the anti-visual aspect of the effect.

FIXED.

Posted: **Sun Sep 22, 2019 5:13 pm**

[Kakome Hito] <- please specify past activities

Posted: **Mon Sep 23, 2019 2:46 pm**

Fixed.

Posted: **Wed Sep 25, 2019 12:10 am**

Posted: **Thu Sep 26, 2019 1:14 pm**

+3 Int puts you at 40 and you cannot have that with his spec

Posted: **Sat Sep 28, 2019 4:23 pm**

Fixed

Posted: **Tue Oct 01, 2019 10:34 pm**

Posted: **Wed Oct 02, 2019 2:10 pm**

Maintenance Man
C-Rank Augment Fuuinjutsu
Prerequisite: Sensor
After a channel, Jinzo creates a Fuuinjutsu on top of Fuuinjutsu. This allows him to be linked with it and utilize Sensory Jutsu through it. <---- I think this should be worded to be more linked/within/surrounding the other fuuin rather than on top since being on top implies it might cover the other fuuin markings and in turn nullify them.

Zilch
B-Rank Augment Fuuinjutsu
With a handseal and a write upon a specified target, the user can hide a target that's under 5x5m in size from being seen visually. <--- I think this should be less specific and just say "necessary handseals" rather than just saying the one, also "a write..." sounds kind of weird to me but then again I suppose it gets things across.

[Kakome • Split]
C-Rank Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Maintenance Man
The user will channel into his eyes and begin to split his vision. One eye witnessing the present. The other eye witnessing the past with his Doujutsu. <--- Just want to be clear but this is for using with other jutsu that see into the past with their own limits right?

Posted: **Thu Oct 03, 2019 6:25 pm**

MM = makes sense. Fixed.
Zilch = Fixed
Split <--Correct. It's supplementing the way to other Jutsu. Fixed

Posted: **Wed Oct 09, 2019 11:52 am**

"Invisibility techniques are ranked based on how much movement the user can make while invisible. The lower the speed cap, the lower the the rank of the jutsu."

For a B-Rank, it needs a speed cap equal to the jutsu stat requirement.

For your Kakome techniques, but a time frame on it. Like you can only see up to x time in the past. It should take stronger techniques and more chakra to see 1000 years in the past vs. one week.

Posted: **Mon Oct 14, 2019 8:57 pm**

Fixed. Didn't know there was a speed cap, though.

The hosting Kakome techniques already have this in the profile.

Posted: **Sun Oct 20, 2019 8:56 am**

Posted: **Sun Oct 27, 2019 4:39 pm**

[Kakome • Split] <- This should have a listed duration. Does it end when the technique it's being used in conjuction with? Does it last a certain number of posts on its own? Whichever it is it should state such.

Posted: **Mon Oct 28, 2019 9:18 am**

You're right. Fixed.

Posted: **Tue Nov 05, 2019 12:41 pm**

Still no duration on Kakome Split?

Posted: **Sun Nov 10, 2019 11:54 pm**

2 days

Posted: **Wed Nov 13, 2019 3:45 pm**

Fixed.

Posted: **Thu Nov 14, 2019 1:50 pm**

Posted: **Thu Nov 14, 2019 3:20 pm**

Accepted

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