Mondai updated character sheet + Abillity and Concentration!

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Mondai updated character sheet + Abillity and Concentration!

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Application: Mondai
Change: Updated my character sheet since it got broken and added a new plasma ability to the character.
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A mysterious chakra that Mondai discovered upon learning ninjutsu and chakra control. By funneling every single one of his chakra affinities the vast combination allows for 'Super Fusion' of Chakra which allows Mondai to tap into a latent chakra affinity within himself that supercharges all the other elements which then allows for his hidden affinity to truly show it colors both literally and figuratively. The chakra exudes a warm yellowish color that resembles that of dark gold. The chakra sparks violently of electricity while at the same time having dark golden swirls of a gas-like presence surrounding the chakra whenever activated. These sparks don't really do anything and don't cause any real harm to the user or anyone unless coming in direct contact with the chakra. This hidden power has turned his chakra permanently into a Golden hue This chakra has multiple effects, Its first ability is to vaporize all forms of liquid. Its ability to vaporize is dependent on the level of the ninjutsu with it vaporizing any body of liquid in ninjutsu/2=meters. This ability to vaporize will even effect organic bodies at later levels. However, this requires the plasma to come in contact with the organic material and be very powerful in order to have this effect. The second plasma has is the ability to absorb other 'energy-based' chakras by 1/10 of the jutsus stats despite its very physical form however it can only do so if Mondai's jutsu overpowers another jutsu meaning if Mondai has a plasma ball that has 15 strength and 15 speed vs a Katon ball that has 10 strength and speed after the Plasma ball will absorb 1/10 of the Katon balls stats giving the plasma ball 16 strength and 16 speed until it dissipates or gets destroyed in some way. This chakra type and its usage are extremely draining on Mondai since it draws a vast amount of chakra from different types at the same time in order to allow him to use this power in the first place. This drainage is comparable to Sankaton and thus he only uses it for the direst of circumstances or in very sparing use. (Requires four concentrations in order to be unlocked (Fuuton, Katon, Raiton, Plasma )
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Yūgana, Mondai
"It's rare for people like me to rise up, so I might as well rise up to the top and be the best I can be!"
General Information Age:13
Gender:Male
Height: 170 cm (5'7 ft)
Weight:70 kg (155 Ibs)
Physical Features: Mondai is a brown and smooth-skinned child, he is tall and muscular, he near constantly carries a serious expression on his face giving off a sight commanding, not to be messed with and focused aura but at the same time not looking so serious to scare people off. He also likes to make it obvious that he is joking about the breaking of his serious expression. He has small sharp eyebrows combined with piercing eyes makes him look observant and focused. He sports a well-combed short Afro and carries a comb with him at all times, making him rather touchy about his hair.  
Clothing/Accessories: In everyday life he where's nice clothes as he came from a place where that was not all too available and he goes by the logic that if you are going to dress you might as well dress well. This most of the time being a white shirt with a symbol of kirigakure going from chest to stomach and each strand having a different color of red and blue, dark blue full-length pants and black boots. On missions, He wears sandals, knee-length shorts with the head-protector wrapped around his thigh,finger-less gloves with small plating to protect his hands, a dark grey elbow-length shirt. He also wears a gray bandana tied around his waist, with a light gray vest with three shoulder holes. And a balaclava with a shark-like mask to complete his appearance.  
Personality:
  • General:After his upbringing, discipline from his father and just a bit extra from the academy. Mondai has gone from hot-headed, crude and judging kid from the slums to a more calm, focused and serious child. While that aspect from his childhood still is very much part of him only it's been toned down majorly over the years. While not one to pick fights he has a quick temper if insulted or challenged always accepting, trash-talking and never backing down. While bit harsh and crude he believes that it's necessary to toughen up the skin of his comrades and that it's all in good fun but it also reminiscent from his past as toxic friendships and fighting were common.      

    He always strives to be better and wants to join the seven swordsmen and become the greatest swordsman to ever have lived after hearing all the legends and their great feats.

    Despite all this Mondai is surprisingly empathetic whenever he actually reveals his softer side, He feels bad for the poor in the lowest cast being from there himself and wishes to help whenever he can and occasionally visits the slums to help children by giving them either money or food even fighting off criminals and ninja trying to get away with their crimes in the poor section. And he actually wants to get enough influence to actually help the people in a more major way. He prefers not to kill but isn't afraid to do what's necessary.  
  • Hopes/Dreams:To become the most powerful member of the Seven swordsmen to exist. And to be remembered throughout history as the greatest swordsman to ever have lived. He wants to change the lives of the poor for the better as he grew up in the slums. Wanting to prevent families from experiencing the harsh environment.
  • Fears:Dying not being able to help the poor people and dying at a young age not being able to experience life. He fears not being able to help the poor people of Kiri.  
  • Combat Mentality:He prefers to wait for his opponents and then countering hard, fast and efficient while keeping his enemies at a further range. While mostly using his shield if it wore to be removed from his hand he will be quick to switch to his two-handed blade.

Battle Information Village:Kirigakure
Rank:Chuunin
  • Ninjutsu:1
  • Taijutsu:20
  • Genjutsu:1
  • Stamina:16
  • Control:1
  • Strength:16
  • Speed:15
  • Instinct:10
Equipment:
Sharkfin harpoonShow
While mostly used to chase down opponents by either throwing or chasing then using the range to cut as they run.
FalconShow
]Falcon is a special  razor-like blade made to cut through flesh and clothing alike. The sword measures at 35 inches in total (90 cm) It's has a mechanic being able to fold into a two-handed sword measuring 112 cm 48 (inches)
RazorguardShow
A Shield passed down from his family but unfortunately, the shield has deteriorated due to age. The shield is about 90 cm (35 inches) high 90 cm (35 inches) wide and 2.5 cm (1 inch) thick  The shield was made with blades on the side and a spike at the very top. With the spike being 20 cm (8 inches) Making it good for both offense and defense giving more versatility making bashing a useful offense. The shield has a strength of 15 in defense and sharpness.
Razorguard Pre-ApprovedShow
A Shield passed down from his family but unfortunately, the shield had deteriorated due to age. Later Mondai sought to return the shield to its original power by meeting a legendary smith allied with Mondai's family. After restoring the shield, it has regained the ability to absorb power equal to the shield's strength from direct attacks and then redirect that energy equal to how much it has absorbed. By channeling a little bit of chakra through the shield, the shield's absorbed power will burst out in a 10-meter cone in diameter and in total range in a ray of golden light. The shield is about 90 cm (35 inches) high 90 cm (35 inches) wide and 2.5 cm (1 inch) thick. The shield was made with blades on the side and a spike at the very top. The spike is 20 cm (8 inches) making it good for both offense and defense. This gives it more versatility and makes bashing a useful offense. The shield has also regained its color; a shining silver around the center with gold plating around the edges and a monkey face with red glowing jewels filling the eyes providing a little bit of light. The shield has a strength of 50 in defense. (Cost: 205 points not including a reduction to acquire this shield)
Dull Moonlight greatsword/Nibui TsukiakaridaikenShow
The dull moonlight sword is a large two-handed thrusting focused sword the blade itself is 180 cm (5.11ft) with the Hilt being 20 cm (8 In) With the sword being 2m (6.7ft) in total. Because of its size it slows down the bearer of the sword with 5- speed but makes the user hit harder with 5+ strength. It's a legendary sword with the blade being made of a glass-like material and passed down through the family but has lost its power leaving a faint yellow celestial glow.
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Chakra affinities
Primary Chakra Affinity: Katon Secondary Chakra Affinity: FuutonTertiary Chakra Affinity: Raiton Quaternary Chakra Affinity Plasma

Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
First Ability
NOT UNLOCKED YETPlasmaShow
A mysterious chakra that Mondai discovered upon learning ninjutsu and chakra control. By funneling every single one of his chakra affinities the vast combination allows for 'Super Fusion' of Chakra which allows Mondai to tap into a latent chakra affinity within himself that supercharges all the other elements which then allows for his hidden affinity to truly show it's colors both literally and figuratively. The chakra exudes a warm yellowish color that resembles that of dark gold. The chakra sparks violently of electricity while at the same time having dark golden swirls of a gas-like presence surrounding the chakra whenever activated. These sparks don't really do anything and don't cause any real harm to the user or anyone unless coming in direct contact with the chakra. This hidden power has turned his chakra permanently into a Golden hue This chakra has multiple effects, including the ability to absorb other 'energy-based' chakras by 1/5 of the jutsus stats despite its very physical form however it can only do so if Mondai's jutsu overpowers another jutsu meaning if Mondai has a plasma ball that has 15 strength and 15 speed vs a Katon ball that has 10 strength and speed after the Plasma ball will absorb 1/5 of the Katon balls stats giving the plasma ball 17 strength and 17 speed until it dissipates or gets destroyed in some way. This chakra type and its usage are extremely draining on Mondai since it draws a vast amount of chakra from different types at the same time in order to allow him to use this power in the first place. This drainage is comparable to Sankaton and thus he only uses it for the direst of circumstances or in very sparing use. (Requires four concentrations in order to be unlocked (Katon, Fuuton, Raiton, Plasma )
Second Ability
Third Ability
Concentrations
Ninjutsu
Ninjutsu concentrations 0/1Show
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Taijutsu
Taijutsu concentrations 4/4Show
Close Quarters Combat:
The fundamental skill of [Close Quarters Combat] indicates the user's proficiently to efficiently utilize martial arts and advanced combat moves involving the body for example but not limited to, adv kicks, grapples, adv punches, etc.
Acrobatics:
The fundamental skill of [Acrobatics] includes the user’s ability to contort their body into unfamiliar positions in order to avoid attacks, as well as the user’s ability to fall safely and perform Ukemi and other feats of gymnastics. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Rigid Structure:
The fundamental skill of [Rigid Structure] describes the user’s ability to adeptly position and lock in their skeletal structure to efficiently absorb blows with minimal damage to their person. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Sword Weapons:
The fundamental skill of [Sword Weapons] indicates the user’s proficiency with swords and sword-like weapons such as knives, daggers, sword-breakers and the like. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Shielded armaments:
Shielded armaments:
The fundamental skill of [Shielded armaments] indicates the user’s proficiency with shields and defensive arms. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Genjutsu
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Jutsu
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Yūgana warfareShow
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A special style passed down from his which focuses on both duels and battlefield tactics. Incorporating sword and shield and solo sword fighting. As for the sword and shield style using a near-constant wall of defense, this style incorporates bashing grappling and throws providing offense from both sword and shield. And for the solo sword using different stances and special cuts to bypass the opponent's swords.
[CQC, rigid body, sword]
Skillful Wield
D-Ranked Taijutsu discipline
Prerequisite: 5 instinct
With a solid foundation of knowledge on their choice of weaponry, those with the Skillful Wield technique are able to utilize their weapon more fully. By knowing the weapon's weakest points, the user is able to avoid presenting these areas to damage during combat, thus making their weapon less likely to break by means of recklessness.

Seamless Skill
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 5 instinct
A skill utilized by those on the path to mastery of their weapon, users of Seamless Skill is actively able to transition between offensive and defensive usage of the aforementioned weapon. By transitioning so seamlessly, the user is able to save a marginal amount of energy while attacking.

Perfect alignment
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 9 instinct 9 Taijutsu
With extensive knowledge on sword, Mondai has learned to perfectly align the edge of the blades. by doing this his sword cuts minimizing damage to the blade and increasing cutting power. He does by aligning the edge in the direction of the strike and he does this perfectly.  

"Footwork is the most important part of fighting"
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 9 instinct 9 Taijutsu
After learning over and over by his father on how important footwork is Mondai has learned to move gracefully with his legs maintaining balance, being able to redirect at a moments notice and being in and out of striking range with his swords

Switching grip
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 9 instinct 9 Taijutsu
Extensive knowledge has teached Mondai that switching between the edge forward and the flat forward can be critical. This helps with being able to cut more effectively by essentially freeing up the wrist making some slashes from certain guards more efficient biomechanically and less awkward as a consequence.

Wrath guard
D-rank Taijutsu stance
In this guard, his shield is stretched out as far as possible at an angle. While keeping the elbows slightly bent to absorb blows. And the sword is raised above his head pointing over his shoulder. this helps in protecting his head as the sword could be used to protect his head.  

Wall guard
D-rank Taijutsu stance
This guard has the shield close to his body at a slight angle to the left completely defending his left side and torso. His sword is lowered to his thigh protecting his lower side.

A great wall and you will pay for it all
D-rank Taijutsu discipline
After extensive training he has learned to keep the shield in a way to protect as much of his body as possible even when attacking keeping his hands and sides safe  

Instant rotation
D-rank Taijutsu discipline
As his experience with shields depend he has learned to rotate the shield to his other side and move his weapon hand over or under to keep him free to attack or defense against other incoming attacks

Charge!
D-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Usually done from a distance he lowers his head puts the shield in front of his body at an angle and charges towards his opponent he then slams the shield over his enemies torso in an attempt to knock him over. if he has more strength over his opponent the opponent will be knocked down.

"Wechsel" Change guard
D-rank Taijutsu stance
When the user performs a downward slash, this stance allows them to seamlessly transition into a stance that begins with the sword being held at a downwards angle pointed between an opponent's legs with the flat side of the sword pointed downwards. is initiated by having the blades flat side aimed downward and the blades point is aimed between the opponent's feet while keeping the arms stretched out.

"Nebenhut" Tail ward
D-rank Taijutsu stance
Tail guard resembles a tail hence the name of Tail guard. This stance almost looks like the user is dragging the blade on the ground. The swords stance is assumed by having the lead leg forward and the sword on the opposite side. Keeping the sword in hip height while having the blade pointing towards the ground and having the back edge towards the user and the forward edge towards the enemy. A stance that makes it easier to do upward cuts. But can also be used to make the opponent/s think the user will throw a upwards cut.

"Schranckhut" Barrier ward
D-rank Taijutsu manuever
Used to defend against leg attacks. The ward is initiated by crossing the arms so that the lower hand is above the upper hand while holding a longsword. Causing the blade to point downwards. This can also be done by switching the front lead leg and the back leg and uncrossing the arms.

"Hangen" Hanging ward
D-rank Taijutsu manuever
Hangen guard is used by having the sword over the head and the blade pointed downwards towards the right or left used to defend against horizontal strikes.

"Schlüssel" Key ward
D-rank Taijutsu stance
Key ward is a transitional ward and is assumed by having left or right foot forward while holding the sword so that it points forward while having the blade pulled back close to the body while it's resting on the arm. This stance makes it easier to thrust at a target.

"Einhorn" Unicorn ward
D-rank Taijutsu stance
A transitional end position after throwing an upwards cut which is used for transitioning to other guards. The sword is over the head and has the point pointing downwards towards the opponents face.

"Zorthut" Wrath ward
D-rank Taijutsu stance
His shield stance actually gets the name form this stance. In Zorthut he has his sword resting on his shoulder while having his shoulder and hips cocked towards the right or left against the opponent ready to swing at any point, almost like a baseball player. This stance is used against advancing targets or defensive fighters and can be used in order to smash right through their guard with special techniques.

"Mordhau" Murder-stroke
D-rank Taijutsu stance
The Mordhau is an unusual technique used to defeat armor and cause little damage towards the blade. By grabbing the blade with both hands Mondai can use his sword and smash with either the guard of the blade or the pommel. Using the blade as an improvised bludgeon. This makes it so that the blade gains 3+ str to armor but loses 3+ against unarmored foes.

"Halbschwimmen" Half-swording
D-rank Taijutsu stance
Same concept as the Mordhau except for a different approach by grabbing his sword normally by the grip and then grabbing the blade further up the point he can gain more control over the sword and thrust in between the gaps of the armor essentially bypassing the problem. He also can grapple more easily since his hands are so close to the blade while in this stance. While half-swording Mondai gains more control of the blade and is able to put more power into the thrusts but because of the nature of this stance, he isn't as mobile. Mondai gains a -3 speed debuff but gains a +3 str against armor.
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C-rank
Big ass shield easy to wield
C-rank Taijutsu discipline
After extensive use of the shield his no longer encumbered by his shield. Essentially never tiring from holding the shield.    

PARRY KING!!!
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
If he sees an opponent wind up an attack he will cock his body and violently smack the attack away shaking his opponent balance leaving them wide open for counter-attack. and if the opponent were to have a weapon smack it right out of their hand If he has more strength then the opponent the attack will successfully initiate.

Spike raider
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
In this attack he launches two left jabs with the shield aiming to pierce the skull with the spike then he lowers other left jab to the stomach he then follows up with a hook to the neck attacking with the bladed rims.

Stab the sternum
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
If Mondai can predict an attack or sees an attack he stops the attack before it has gained any momentum effectively stopping the attack before it has gained any power. As this is happening he smashes the hilt over his opponent head then unleashes a strike with the shields spike to the opponent's sternum. He then launches a knee to the lower chest to release the spike.

Vicious viseration
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
When Mondai sees an opening he will sweep an opponent's legs with his shield then he bashes with his shields bladed rim three times to the opponent when they're on the ground aiming to disembowel or even split the opponent in half. B-rank
Sword breaker
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Because of the unique design of the shield, he will attempt to catch a blade in the spaces between the blades and the shield and then apply pressure to the foible (weak) of the sword between the middle to the point.

Raise da roof
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
In this attack Mondai charges in with his shield but instead of knocking over his opponent he lifts his foe over his head with the flat of the shield, and slams the enemy down to the ground leaving the victim stunned this is usually followed up with another attack.

Riposte!!!
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite:PARRY KING!!!
After parrying he moves in with a thrust to the heart and after that, the receiver will be tripped by Mondai using the gravity to pull out the sword. This attack is deadly and could spell death for if they have no medic nearby.

Arm breaker
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
a counter attack which involves him waiting for an opponent to attack he deflects the blow moves in with a slash above the knee making them drop to their knees he then puts the enemies arm to his armpit and then bashes it outward breaking the arm. He then ends his assault with a hilt bash to the head.

Bone-breaking brutal bashing
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
In this technique Mondai puts his shield in front of his opponents face obstructing vision he then slams the shield on his opponents toes moves it up to split the noes he then follows up with a backhanded bash to the jaw follows up with towards the face and then moves his shield around the opponents head-smacking him in the back of the head then follows up with a bash towards the spine making the victim crouch down then knees the enemy in the chest making them fall to the ground he then ends it by grabbing the shield with two hands and slamming down with the blades towards the chest.
Moonlight berserkerShow
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An aggressive, flashy and brutal style of fighting. Revolving around the use of Mondai's Moonlight great-sword. This style uses the combination of weird timing, aggression, and range to destroy his enemies.
D-rank
Switchblade
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 10 Strength,10 Taijutsu
After enough training Mondai can switch between which hand he grips his sword in. Even during attacks. Giving him more versatility.

Butcher's stomp
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 10 Strength
In this attack, Mondai will take one hand and place it on his blade and one hand on the hilt. He then lifts the blade up and smashes it into the ground after rushing forward to get in range. This can be aimed at the head or feet of the target.

Shield ward
D-Rank Taijutsu discipline
Prerequisite:10 Strength
By crouching down and placing his sword on the ground in a diagonal angle pressed towards his body, He uses his blade to cover his entire body effectively using his sword as a shield, And because of this crouching position he cannot be knocked away or knocked down unless the attack has more strength. This stance can also be used to transition into different attacks.

Switchblade
D-Rank Taijutsu discipline
Prerequisite: 10 Taijutsu
After enough training Mondai can switch between which hand he grips his sword in. Even during attacks. Giving him more versatility.

Dragging ward
D-Rank Taijutsu discipline
Prerequisite: 9 Strength
In this stance Mondai will place the blade by his side on the ground, dragging it while he is moving. A stance that fakes an opening and is used to set up attacks.

Windmill
D-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 10 Strength, 10 Taijutsu
Instead of stopping mid-swing with his greatsword like with normal swords. Mondai uses the momentum of each swing to lead into the next.

History
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Mondai was an unlucky child being born in the slums of kirigakure, He lived with his father Sigemaru, his mother Makoto and his sister Naomi being raised in this environment was harsh oftentimes having lite food or no food at all. His father had opened up a store he would find and sell any good trinkets he could get his hands. people would try to rob both the store and their home but his father was tough and warded off the thugs, but sometimes the store was not enough so Mondai resorted to stealing eventually his father found out and grew furious. So he punished him in an unusual way his father showed him that Mondai was part of an ancient family that had fallen centuries ago, and they had somehow managed to pass down their ancient style which interestingly enough had sword and shield techniques which were incredibly uncommon. His father trained him in a brutal almost no hold barred kind of way, this was actually apart of his father's plan to get him into the ninja academy.

He trained until he reached the age of 12 so his father would try to get him in to the academy, this proved to be difficult due to the cast they were in and the background check so his father used their family history while Mondai excelled in taijutsu but was near hopeless in ninjutsu and genjutsu only learning the basics he eventually passed the exams and was left to live in a better world, while he knew he would have to fight for the rest of his life it was that or starve. And from what he learned in the academy he could use his higher position to change the lives of the people in the lower cast, this while the others who adhere to the caste system would look down on this He also saw it as a way to not only help people but also  improve the villages standing by bringing in more people who could potentially help the village increasing the workforce and military force. He had heard of a unit known as the seven swordman of the mist, their might in their sword styles and their legendary blades. They were revered and he wanted the same glory. So now he sets out to change kirigakure and become the strongest swordsman to have ever lived.
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"[color=#cec704]It's rare for people like me to rise up, so I might as well rise up to the top and be the best I can be![/color]"
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[center][b][big]General Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Age:[/b]13
[b]Gender:[/b]Male
[b]Height:[/b] 170 cm (5'7 ft)
[b]Weight:[/b]70 kg (155 Ibs)
[b]Physical Features:[/b] Mondai is a brown and smooth-skinned child, he is tall and muscular, he near constantly carries a serious expression on his face giving off a sight commanding, not to be messed with and focused aura but at the same time not looking so serious to scare people off. He also likes to make it obvious that he is joking about the breaking of his serious expression. He has small sharp eyebrows combined with piercing eyes makes him look observant and focused. He sports a well-combed short Afro and carries a comb with him at all times, making him rather touchy about his hair.  
[b]Clothing/Accessories:[/b] In everyday life he where's nice clothes as he came from a place where that was not all too available and he goes by the logic that if you are going to dress you might as well dress well. This most of the time being a white shirt with a symbol of kirigakure going from chest to stomach and each strand having a different color of red and blue, dark blue full-length pants and black boots. On missions, He wears sandals, knee-length shorts with the head-protector wrapped around his thigh,finger-less gloves with small plating to protect his hands, a dark grey elbow-length shirt. He also wears a gray bandana tied around his waist, with a light gray vest with three shoulder holes. And a balaclava with a shark-like mask to complete his appearance.  
[b]Personality:[/b]
[list][*][i]General:[/i]After his upbringing, discipline from his father and just a bit extra from the academy. Mondai has gone from hot-headed, crude and judging kid from the slums to a more calm, focused and serious child. While that aspect from his childhood still is very much part of him only it's been toned down majorly over the years. While not one to pick fights he has a quick temper if insulted or challenged always accepting, trash-talking and never backing down. While bit harsh and crude he believes that it's necessary to toughen up the skin of his comrades and that it's all in good fun but it also reminiscent from his past as toxic friendships and fighting were common.      

He always strives to be better and wants to join the seven swordsmen and become the greatest swordsman to ever have lived after hearing all the legends and their great feats.

Despite all this Mondai is surprisingly empathetic whenever he actually reveals his softer side, He feels bad for the poor in the lowest cast being from there himself and wishes to help whenever he can and occasionally visits the slums to help children by giving them either money or food even fighting off criminals and ninja trying to get away with their crimes in the poor section. And he actually wants to get enough influence to actually help the people in a more major way. He prefers not to kill but isn't afraid to do what's necessary.  
[*][i]Hopes/Dreams:[/i]To become the most powerful member of the Seven swordsmen to exist. And to be remembered throughout history as the greatest swordsman to ever have lived. He wants to change the lives of the poor for the better as he grew up in the slums. Wanting to prevent families from experiencing the harsh environment.
[*][i]Fears:[/i]Dying not being able to help the poor people and dying at a young age not being able to experience life. He fears not being able to help the poor people of Kiri.  
[*][i]Combat Mentality:[/i]He prefers to wait for his opponents and then countering hard, fast and efficient while keeping his enemies at a further range. While mostly using his shield if it wore to be removed from his hand he will be quick to switch to his two-handed blade.[/list]
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[b]Village:[/b][color=Blue]Kirigakure[/color]
[b]Rank:[/b]Chuunin

[list][*][b]Ninjutsu:[/b]1
[*][b]Taijutsu:[/b]20
[*][b]Genjutsu:[/b]1
[*][b]Stamina:[/b]16
[*][b]Control:[/b]1
[*][b]Strength:[/b]16
[*][b]Speed:[/b]15
[*][b]Instinct:[/b]10
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[b]Equipment:[/b][spoiler=Sharkfin harpoon]While mostly used to chase down opponents by either throwing or chasing then using the range to cut as they run.[/spoiler] [spoiler=Falcon][center][img]https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/7/7c/Falchion.jpg[/img][img]https://i.pinimg.com/originals/ea/47/f8/ea47f8cfcafc35042be24bcb71aaf23d.jpg[/img]]Falcon is a special  razor-like blade made to cut through flesh and clothing alike. The sword measures at 35 inches in total (90 cm) It's has a mechanic being able to fold into a two-handed sword measuring 112 cm 48 (inches)
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[spoiler=Razorguard][center][img]https://bobsworlds.files.wordpress.com/2015/06/dremsakrerd.jpg[/img][/center]
A Shield passed down from his family but unfortunately, the shield has deteriorated due to age. The shield is about 90 cm (35 inches) high 90 cm (35 inches) wide and 2.5 cm (1 inch) thick  The shield was made with blades on the side and a spike at the very top. With the spike being 20 cm (8 inches) Making it good for both offense and defense giving more versatility making bashing a useful offense. The shield has a strength of 15 in defense and sharpness. [Spoiler=Razorguard Pre-Approved][S]A Shield passed down from his family but unfortunately, the shield had deteriorated due to age. Later Mondai sought to return the shield to its original power by meeting a legendary smith allied with Mondai's family. After restoring the shield, it has regained the ability to absorb power equal to the shield's strength from direct attacks and then redirect that energy equal to how much it has absorbed. By channeling a little bit of chakra through the shield, the shield's absorbed power will burst out in a 10-meter cone in diameter and in total range in a ray of golden light. The shield is about 90 cm (35 inches) high 90 cm (35 inches) wide and 2.5 cm (1 inch) thick. The shield was made with blades on the side and a spike at the very top. The spike is 20 cm (8 inches) making it good for both offense and defense. This gives it more versatility and makes bashing a useful offense. The shield has also regained its color; a shining silver around the center with gold plating around the edges and a monkey face with red glowing jewels filling the eyes providing a little bit of light. The shield has a strength of 50 in defense.[/S] (Cost: 205 points not including a reduction to acquire this shield)[/spoiler][/spoiler]

[spoiler=Dull Moonlight greatsword/Nibui Tsukiakaridaiken]
[center][img]https://preview.ibb.co/e04Esx/Moonlight_sword.gif[/img][/center][center]The dull moonlight sword is a large two-handed thrusting focused sword the blade itself is 180 cm (5.11ft) with the Hilt being 20 cm (8 In) With the sword being 2m (6.7ft) in total. Because of its size it slows down the bearer of the sword with 5- speed but makes the user hit harder with 5+ strength. It's a legendary sword with the blade being made of a glass-like material and passed down through the family but has lost its power leaving a faint yellow celestial glow. [/center][/spoiler]
[b]Companions:[/b] (0/1)
[Table=4, Chakra affinities][c][b]Primary Chakra Affinity:[/b] [color=orangered]Katon[/color][c] [b]Secondary Chakra Affinity:[/b] [color=lightgreen]Fuuton[/color][c][b]Tertiary Chakra Affinity:[/b] [color=yellow]Raiton[/color][c] [b]Quaternary Chakra Affinity[/b] [color=Goldenrod]Plasma[/color][/Table]
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[center][b][big]Abilities and Concentrations[/big][/b][/center]
[table=2, Abilities][b]First Ability[/b]
[c][spoiler=NOT UNLOCKED YET!!! Plasma ][S]A mysterious chakra that Mondai discovered upon learning ninjutsu and chakra control. By funneling every single one of his chakra affinities the vast combination allows for 'Super Fusion' of Chakra which allows Mondai to tap into a latent chakra affinity within himself that supercharges all the other elements which then allows for his hidden affinity to truly show it's colors both literally and figuratively. The chakra exudes a warm yellowish color that resembles that of dark gold. The chakra sparks violently of electricity while at the same time having dark golden swirls of a gas-like presence surrounding the chakra whenever activated. These sparks don't really do anything and don't cause any real harm to the user or anyone unless coming in direct contact with the chakra. This hidden power has turned his chakra permanently into a [color=Goldenrod]Golden hue[/color] This chakra has multiple effects, including the ability to absorb other 'energy-based' chakras by 1/5 of the jutsus stats despite its very physical form however it can only do so if Mondai's jutsu overpowers another jutsu meaning if Mondai has a plasma ball that has 15 strength and 15 speed vs a Katon ball that has 10 strength and speed after the Plasma ball will absorb 1/5 of the Katon balls stats giving the plasma ball 17 strength and 17 speed until it dissipates or gets destroyed in some way. This chakra type and its usage are extremely draining on Mondai since it draws a vast amount of chakra from different types at the same time in order to allow him to use this power in the first place. This drainage is comparable to Sankaton and thus he only uses it for the direst of circumstances or in very sparing use. (Requires four concentrations in order to be unlocked[/S] (Fuuton, Katon, Raiton, Plasma ) [/spoiler]
[c][b]Second Ability[/b][c]
[c][b]Third Ability[/b][c][/table]
[table=2, Concentrations][b]Ninjutsu[/b][c][Spoiler=Ninjutsu concentrations 0/1 ]N.A[/spoiler][c]
[b]Taijutsu[/b][c][Spoiler=Taijutsu concentrations 4/4 ][quote="Close Quarters Combat"]The fundamental skill of [b][Close Quarters Combat][/b] indicates the user's proficiently to efficiently utilize martial arts and advanced combat moves involving the body for example but not limited to, adv kicks, grapples, adv punches, etc.[/quote]
[quote="Acrobatics"]The fundamental skill of [b][Acrobatics][/b] includes the user’s ability to contort their body into unfamiliar positions in order to avoid attacks, as well as the user’s ability to fall safely and perform Ukemi and other feats of gymnastics. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote]
[quote="Rigid Structure"]The fundamental skill of [b][Rigid Structure][/b] describes the user’s ability to adeptly position and lock in their skeletal structure to efficiently absorb blows with minimal damage to their person. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote]
[quote="Sword Weapons"] The fundamental skill of [b][Sword Weapons][/b] indicates the user’s proficiency with swords and sword-like weapons such as knives, daggers, sword-breakers and the like. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote][quote="Shielded armaments"] Shielded armaments:
The fundamental skill of [Shielded armaments] indicates the user’s proficiency with shields and defensive arms. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.[/quote][/Spoiler][c]
[b]Genjutsu[/b][c][Spoiler=Genjutsu 0/1]None[/Spoiler][/table]
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[center][b][big]Jutsu[/big][/b][/center]
[spoiler=Taijutsu][spoiler=Yūgana warfare][quote]A special style passed down from his which focuses on both duels and battlefield tactics. Incorporating sword and shield and solo sword fighting. As for the sword and shield style using a near-constant wall of defense, this style incorporates bashing grappling and throws providing offense from both sword and shield. And for the solo sword using different stances and special cuts to bypass the opponent's swords.
[CQC, rigid body, sword][/quote]Skillful Wield
D-Ranked Taijutsu discipline
Prerequisite: 5 instinct
With a solid foundation of knowledge on their choice of weaponry, those with the Skillful Wield technique are able to utilize their weapon more fully. By knowing the weapon's weakest points, the user is able to avoid presenting these areas to damage during combat, thus making their weapon less likely to break by means of recklessness.

Seamless Skill
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 5 instinct
A skill utilized by those on the path to mastery of their weapon, users of Seamless Skill is actively able to transition between offensive and defensive usage of the aforementioned weapon. By transitioning so seamlessly, the user is able to save a marginal amount of energy while attacking.

Perfect alignment
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 9 instinct 9 Taijutsu
With extensive knowledge on sword, Mondai has learned to perfectly align the edge of the blades. by doing this his sword cuts minimizing damage to the blade and increasing cutting power. He does by aligning the edge in the direction of the strike and he does this perfectly.  

"Footwork is the most important part of fighting"
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 9 instinct 9 Taijutsu
After learning over and over by his father on how important footwork is Mondai has learned to move gracefully with his legs maintaining balance, being able to redirect at a moments notice and being in and out of striking range with his swords

Switching grip
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 9 instinct 9 Taijutsu
Extensive knowledge has teached Mondai that switching between the edge forward and the flat forward can be critical. This helps with being able to cut more effectively by essentially freeing up the wrist making some slashes from certain guards more efficient biomechanically and less awkward as a consequence.

Wrath guard
D-rank Taijutsu stance
In this guard, his shield is stretched out as far as possible at an angle. While keeping the elbows slightly bent to absorb blows. And the sword is raised above his head pointing over his shoulder. this helps in protecting his head as the sword could be used to protect his head.  

Wall guard
D-rank Taijutsu stance
This guard has the shield close to his body at a slight angle to the left completely defending his left side and torso. His sword is lowered to his thigh protecting his lower side.

A great wall and you will pay for it all
D-rank Taijutsu discipline
After extensive training he has learned to keep the shield in a way to protect as much of his body as possible even when attacking keeping his hands and sides safe  

Instant rotation
D-rank Taijutsu discipline
As his experience with shields depend he has learned to rotate the shield to his other side and move his weapon hand over or under to keep him free to attack or defense against other incoming attacks

Charge!
D-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
Usually done from a distance he lowers his head puts the shield in front of his body at an angle and charges towards his opponent he then slams the shield over his enemies torso in an attempt to knock him over. if he has more strength over his opponent the opponent will be knocked down.

"Wechsel" Change guard
D-rank Taijutsu stance
When the user performs a downward slash, this stance allows them to seamlessly transition into a stance that begins with the sword being held at a downwards angle pointed between an opponent's legs with the flat side of the sword pointed downwards. is initiated by having the blades flat side aimed downward and the blades point is aimed between the opponent's feet while keeping the arms stretched out.

"Nebenhut" Tail ward
D-rank Taijutsu stance
Tail guard resembles a tail hence the name of Tail guard. This stance almost looks like the user is dragging the blade on the ground. The swords stance is assumed by having the lead leg forward and the sword on the opposite side. Keeping the sword in hip height while having the blade pointing towards the ground and having the back edge towards the user and the forward edge towards the enemy. A stance that makes it easier to do upward cuts. But can also be used to make the opponent/s think the user will throw a upwards cut.

"Schranckhut" Barrier ward
D-rank Taijutsu manuever
Used to defend against leg attacks. The ward is initiated by crossing the arms so that the lower hand is above the upper hand while holding a longsword. Causing the blade to point downwards. This can also be done by switching the front lead leg and the back leg and uncrossing the arms.

"Hangen" Hanging ward
D-rank Taijutsu manuever
Hangen guard is used by having the sword over the head and the blade pointed downwards towards the right or left used to defend against horizontal strikes.

"Schlüssel" Key ward
D-rank Taijutsu stance
Key ward is a transitional ward and is assumed by having left or right foot forward while holding the sword so that it points forward while having the blade pulled back close to the body while it's resting on the arm. This stance makes it easier to thrust at a target.

"Einhorn" Unicorn ward
D-rank Taijutsu stance
A transitional end position after throwing an upwards cut which is used for transitioning to other guards. The sword is over the head and has the point pointing downwards towards the opponents face.

"Zorthut" Wrath ward
D-rank Taijutsu stance
His shield stance actually gets the name form this stance. In Zorthut he has his sword resting on his shoulder while having his shoulder and hips cocked towards the right or left against the opponent ready to swing at any point, almost like a baseball player. This stance is used against advancing targets or defensive fighters and can be used in order to smash right through their guard with special techniques.

"Mordhau" Murder-stroke
D-rank Taijutsu stance
The Mordhau is an unusual technique used to defeat armor and cause little damage towards the blade. By grabbing the blade with both hands Mondai can use his sword and smash with either the guard of the blade or the pommel. Using the blade as an improvised bludgeon. This makes it so that the blade gains 3+ str to armor but loses 3+ against unarmored foes.

"Halbschwimmen" Half-swording
D-rank Taijutsu stance
Same concept as the Mordhau except for a different approach by grabbing his sword normally by the grip and then grabbing the blade further up the point he can gain more control over the sword and thrust in between the gaps of the armor essentially bypassing the problem. He also can grapple more easily since his hands are so close to the blade while in this stance. While half-swording Mondai gains more control of the blade and is able to put more power into the thrusts but because of the nature of this stance, he isn't as mobile. Mondai gains a -3 speed debuff but gains a +3 str against armor.
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[center][b][Big]C-rank[/Big][/b][/center]
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Big ass shield easy to wield
C-rank Taijutsu discipline
After extensive use of the shield his no longer encumbered by his shield. Essentially never tiring from holding the shield.    

PARRY KING!!!
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
If he sees an opponent wind up an attack he will cock his body and violently smack the attack away shaking his opponent balance leaving them wide open for counter-attack. and if the opponent were to have a weapon smack it right out of their hand If he has more strength then the opponent the attack will successfully initiate.

Spike raider
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
In this attack he launches two left jabs with the shield aiming to pierce the skull with the spike then he lowers other left jab to the stomach he then follows up with a hook to the neck attacking with the bladed rims.

Stab the sternum
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
If Mondai can predict an attack or sees an attack he stops the attack before it has gained any momentum effectively stopping the attack before it has gained any power. As this is happening he smashes the hilt over his opponent head then unleashes a strike with the shields spike to the opponent's sternum. He then launches a knee to the lower chest to release the spike.

Vicious viseration
C-Rank Maneuver Taijutsu
When Mondai sees an opening he will sweep an opponent's legs with his shield then he bashes with his shields bladed rim three times to the opponent when they're on the ground aiming to disembowel or even split the opponent in half.
[center][b][Big]B-rank[/Big][/b][/center]
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Sword breaker
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Because of the unique design of the shield, he will attempt to catch a blade in the spaces between the blades and the shield and then apply pressure to the foible (weak) of the sword between the middle to the point.

Raise da roof
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
In this attack Mondai charges in with his shield but instead of knocking over his opponent he lifts his foe over his head with the flat of the shield, and slams the enemy down to the ground leaving the victim stunned this is usually followed up with another attack.

Riposte!!!
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite:PARRY KING!!!
After parrying he moves in with a thrust to the heart and after that, the receiver will be tripped by Mondai using the gravity to pull out the sword. This attack is deadly and could spell death for if they have no medic nearby.

Arm breaker
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
a counter attack which involves him waiting for an opponent to attack he deflects the blow moves in with a slash above the knee making them drop to their knees he then puts the enemies arm to his armpit and then bashes it outward breaking the arm. He then ends his assault with a hilt bash to the head.

Bone-breaking brutal bashing
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
In this technique Mondai puts his shield in front of his opponents face obstructing vision he then slams the shield on his opponents toes moves it up to split the noes he then follows up with a backhanded bash to the jaw follows up with towards the face and then moves his shield around the opponents head-smacking him in the back of the head then follows up with a bash towards the spine making the victim crouch down then knees the enemy in the chest making them fall to the ground he then ends it by grabbing the shield with two hands and slamming down with the blades towards the chest.[/spoiler][spoiler=Moonlight berserker][quote]An aggressive, flashy and brutal style of fighting. Revolving around the use of Mondai's Moonlight great-sword. This style uses the combination of weird timing, aggression, and range to destroy his enemies.[/quote][center][b][Big]D-rank[/Big][/b][/center]
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[Color=Goldenrod]Switchblade[/Color]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 10 Strength,10 Taijutsu
After enough training Mondai can switch between which hand he grips his sword in. Even during attacks. Giving him more versatility.

[Color=Goldenrod]Butcher's stomp[/Color]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 10 Strength
In this attack, Mondai will take one hand and place it on his blade and one hand on the hilt. He then lifts the blade up and smashes it into the ground after rushing forward to get in range. This can be aimed at the head or feet of the target.

[Color=Goldenrod]Shield ward[/Color]
D-Rank Taijutsu discipline
Prerequisite:10 Strength
By crouching down and placing his sword on the ground in a diagonal angle pressed towards his body, He uses his blade to cover his entire body effectively using his sword as a shield, And because of this crouching position he cannot be knocked away or knocked down unless the attack has more strength. This stance can also be used to transition into different attacks.

[Color=Goldenrod]Switchblade[/Color]
D-Rank Taijutsu discipline
Prerequisite: 10 Taijutsu
After enough training Mondai can switch between which hand he grips his sword in. Even during attacks. Giving him more versatility.

[Color=Goldenrod]Dragging ward[/Color]
D-Rank Taijutsu discipline
Prerequisite: 9 Strength
In this stance Mondai will place the blade by his side on the ground, dragging it while he is moving. A stance that fakes an opening and is used to set up attacks.

[Color=Goldenrod]Windmill[/Color]
D-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 10 Strength, 10 Taijutsu
Instead of stopping mid-swing with his greatsword like with normal swords. Mondai uses the momentum of each swing to lead into the next.[/spoiler][/spoiler]

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[center][b][big]History[/big][/b][/center][spoiler=Historical Accounts]Mondai was an unlucky child being born in the slums of kirigakure, He lived with his father Sigemaru, his mother Makoto and his sister Naomi being raised in this environment was harsh oftentimes having lite food or no food at all. His father had opened up a store he would find and sell any good trinkets he could get his hands. people would try to rob both the store and their home but his father was tough and warded off the thugs, but sometimes the store was not enough so Mondai resorted to stealing eventually his father found out and grew furious. So he punished him in an unusual way his father showed him that Mondai was part of an ancient family that had fallen centuries ago, and they had somehow managed to pass down their ancient style which interestingly enough had sword and shield techniques which were incredibly uncommon. His father trained him in a brutal almost no hold barred kind of way, this was actually apart of his father's plan to get him into the ninja academy.

He trained until he reached the age of 12 so his father would try to get him in to the academy, this proved to be difficult due to the cast they were in and the background check so his father used their family history while Mondai excelled in taijutsu but was near hopeless in ninjutsu and genjutsu only learning the basics he eventually passed the exams and was left to live in a better world, while he knew he would have to fight for the rest of his life it was that or starve. And from what he learned in the academy he could use his higher position to change the lives of the people in the lower cast, this while the others who adhere to the caste system would look down on this He also saw it as a way to not only help people but also  improve the villages standing by bringing in more people who could potentially help the village increasing the workforce and military force. He had heard of a unit known as the seven swordman of the mist, their might in their sword styles and their legendary blades. They were revered and he wanted the same glory. So now he sets out to change kirigakure and become the strongest swordsman to have ever lived. [/spoiler]
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Post by ShinobiTruth » Thu Oct 17, 2019 10:13 pm

Alright, so a couple of things:

1.) Did you have that ability, Plasma, before this mod?

2.) Connected to the first point, we need you to please actually list the changes that you're making. You can feel free to use the nocode, but without a list of actual changes that are being made (and while I understand the intent, the Thread Title doesn't replace the need for a list), we don't really even know what to look for.

3.) Okay, so you can't have multiple primary affinities. You'd choose one of those affinities to remain (can't be Plasma in this case) and that affinity, along with the others (except for Plasma since it's an ability, it seems) would go under your concentrations. Are you registering this character for the first time, or is this a character you already had approved?

4.) The way you're doing Plasma rn is both confusing to read and not possible based on your stats right now. You'd need to have at least a 10 in Ninjutsu to have the three elemental concentrations you're saying your ability needs.

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Post by Mre-face » Fri Oct 18, 2019 5:40 am

Made a bunch of changes so now it should all make sense!
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Post by ShinobiTruth » Fri Oct 18, 2019 1:28 pm

Forgive me for belaboring the same point, but it's important that we get this right. What I meant when I said you needed a list was like this:
Example:
Application: Mondai
Change: Updated my character sheet and added a new ability to the character:

1. Adding the Plasma Ability.
2. Updating Concentrations (list the concentrations you're updating here).
3. Something else if there is something else.

Payment: None?

PLACE SPOILERS AND NOCODE HERE
Also, I need to reiterate another point that I brought up in the last post, specifically about your Primary Affinity and Plasma Ability. Right now, your character cannot have Plasma. This is not because of an issue with Plasma itself, but because you do not have the stat requirement to do so. You are stating that Plasma requires Fuuton, Katon, and Raiton. Despite this, you have a 1 in Ninjutsu. This means that you only have one (1) Concentration Slot for Ninjutsu. In order to even get the three elemental affinities you need, you'd need at least a 10 in your Ninjutsu stat by the rules.

Additionally, you can only have one Primary Affinity, comrade. This is because your Primary Affinity allows a word discount for trainings that you do for that element. The Secondary/Tertiary/Quaternary Affinities should be removed. Your Primary Affinity should also be placed under your Ninjutsu Concentrations. Please refer to the Fuuton archive for the passive/Concentration listing you'll need.

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Post by Mre-face » Sat Oct 19, 2019 2:58 pm

Fixed everything else however I disagree with you on the affinity thing. It clearly states what Mondai's Primary affinity is Katon I think you are reading it wrong. I also stated in the plasma ability that I need four concentrations in order to use plasma.
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Post by WrightJustice » Sun Oct 20, 2019 10:23 am

Your link to Mondai is not correct and you don't state what changes you're actually making (I assume plasma going off previous mod reviews).

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Post by Mre-face » Mon Oct 21, 2019 2:09 am

There we go now it should be clear!
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Post by Niro » Thu Oct 24, 2019 8:50 pm

You still don't understand what Truth is saying. Your ability requires having four different concentrations for Ninjutsu, but your Ninjutsu stat is only 1. This means you can only have one Ninjutsu concentration. You do not have the required concs or concs slots needed for plasma.
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Post by Mre-face » Sun Oct 27, 2019 6:39 am

Yeah I know that's why I changed it to say requires 4 concentrations to be unlocked but I changed it to be more clear! His new ability should be Crossed in the nocode and Mondai spoiler
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Post by Kabu » Sun Oct 27, 2019 11:53 pm

Plasma: Alright so there's a lot I find wrong with this but let's start with the basics. First of all I don't understand why it requires four concentrations so it would be nice if you could explain your reasoning. Secondly please remove all of the exposition stuff that's unrelated to how the ability actually works as it makes it a bit more difficult to follow.

And finally we get to the main portion of the ability. Frankly I don't like the idea of absorption, especially not in its current state and also you say it has multiple effects which A. you only state one and if it does have multiple effects you have to say what they all are and B. well, frankly I don't think it's going to be passed with multiple effects so you're best off just removing that line and sticking with a singular effect.

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Post by Mre-face » Wed Oct 30, 2019 5:33 pm

Removed exposition, nerfed the fuck out of absorption and added the description to its first ability
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Post by Kabu » Sat Nov 02, 2019 6:32 pm

Quote:
This chakra has multiple effects, Its first ability is to vaporize all forms of liquid. Its ability to vaporize is dependent on the level of the ninjutsu with it vaporizing any body of liquid in ninjutsu/2=meters. This ability to vaporize will even effect organic bodies at later levels
This is basically Sankaton but in some ways better. And the absorption is still too much.

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Mondai updated character sheet + Abillity and Concentration!

Post by Niro » Thu Nov 14, 2019 1:35 pm

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NameVillageRankTeam
Kosuke [color=#DC143C]Miracle CountryC-rank
Tatsuo [color=#940839]IwaBanninTeam 18 Jousai
Kinomichi [color=limegreen]IwaGenin

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