[OPHP] The Big One (Extremely Dangerous! Keep Out of Reach of Children!)

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[OPHP] The Big One (Extremely Dangerous! Keep Out of Reach of Children!)

Post by Golnax » Sat Nov 09, 2019 9:37 pm

Application: Aimi Kaguya

Change: We've a lot to get through, so let's get crackin'. I'm cashing in 34 OPHP points to get myself a full pyramid of jutsu, 5D, 4C, 3B, 2A and 1S rank jutsu. Additionally, I am putting up a special weapon at long last to be reviewed, priced, and bought. I had a price estimate that was roughly 355 points, which I currently don't have. Thankfully I just checked to make sure and I can skim on a lot of the costs if I just don't include all of the abilities now and add them in later! SO! Without further ado, the changes!


Katon • Fire Coming Out of the Monkey's Head
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user channels their katon chakra into their eyes and mouth, setting both ablaze. This fire rages for a total of 5 posts, causing no burns to the user nor impairing their ability to speak or see. This jutsu does little aside from act as an intimidating display for the user’s foes.

Katon • Ghostly Hand of Flame
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Katon • Ghost-Light
The user channels their katon chakra and creates a replica of their own hand made out of flame. This hand doesn't give off much heat at all and is not as hot as other fire. Touching this hand of flame will not burn the person touching it in the slightest. Similarly, the light this flame gives off is incredibly dull in comparison to other flames. This hand is able to move away from the user up to a maximum of 15 meters at a Speed of 5 and can grab a hold of things with 5 Strength.

Katon • Wick
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Storage & Force Fuuinjutsu Concentration, *[Basic Jutsu • Chakra Kai]
The user channels katon chakra and sends it to a Force Fuuinjutsu seal close to them, up to a maximum distance of 15 meters. Directly above the seal a small ember will appear briefly before erupting into a tiny flame. This flame burns away the seal and simultaneously activates it, releasing any Fuuinjutsu within. This flame is ephemeral and dissipates after burning the seal away.

Katon • Visions of Fire
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user closes at least one eye and focuses on a flame within 15 meters of themselves, channeling katon chakra as they do. This chakra is used to allow the user to see through the selected flame, giving them vision of anything that is going on around the fire but no other sensory information up to a range of 10 meters. While using this jutsu the user is blind in whatever eye they used to perform the jutsu and cannot perform any other ninjutsu.

Katon • Listen to Flame
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user focuses on a flame with 15 meters of themselves, channeling katon chakra as they do. This chakra is used to allow the user to hear through the selected flame, giving them hearing of anything around the flame but no other sensory information up to a range of 10 meters. While using this jutsu the user is deaf and cannot perform any other ninjutsu.

Katon • Pin-point
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: D-rank Katon • Pin-point
The user channels their katon chakra into their finger tips. Then, with a snap of their fingers, the user ignites a small area not exceeding a 1x1x1 meter area in size in flames, causing first degree burns. A brief moment before the ignition, there is a small 'ember' of flame that indicates where the bloom of flame will erupt. These flames expand outwards from the ember at 10 Speed. This flame lasts for one post and quickly dissipates after burning. The user is able to perform this jutsu at a range of 20 meters.

Katon • Smoldering Embers
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user channels a small amount of katon chakra throughout their entire body, giving them an orange glow. Afterwards, the next katon ninjutsu that the user performs will be enhanced with an additional 5 Strength and Speed. This jutsu lasts until the user performs another katon ninjutsu or 5 posts have passed.

Katon • Ghost-light: Nilbog
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Katon • Ghost-light Curse
The user performs the handseals and sends chakra into a number of fireballs created through Katon • Ghost-light ninjutsu equal to the user’s Control/2. This chakra alters the fireballs subtly, making it so that if they come into contact with an inanimate object – such as a tree, a rock, a wall etc. - the fireball with split into two of equal size and bounce off of the object they came into contact with rather than vanish. The amount of times that they can do this is equal to the user’s Ninjutsu/5. Aside from this they retain all other properties of the original jutsu in how they behave.

Katon • Message in the Flames
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Katon • Visions of Fire
The user closes their eyes and focuses on a flame within 25 meters of themselves, channeling katon chakra as they do. This chakra allows the user to both see and speak through the selected flame. This is signified by a pair of fiery eyes appearing within the flame through which the user can see up to a range of 15 meters and their voice can carry up to 15 meters away. While using this jutsu the user is completely blind and cannot perform any other ninjutsu.

Katon • Pin-point
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: C-rank Katon • Pin-point
The user channels their katon chakra into their finger tips. Then, with a snap of their fingers, the user ignites a small area not exceeding a 1x1x1 meter area in size in flames, causing second degree burns. A brief moment before the ignition, there is a small 'ember' of flame that indicates where the bloom of flame will erupt. These flames expand outwards from the ember at 20 Speed. This flame lasts for one post and quickly dissipates after burning. The user is able to perform this jutsu at a range of 40 meters.

Katon Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic)
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Death Bone Pulse • Bone Clone (Basic), Katon Concentration
By channeling chakra throughout their entire body, the user creates an entire skeletal structure at a speed of 20 that is identical to their own in structure. The bones come out burnt and black with a large ball of fire burning in its rib cage and a smaller ball burning in its skull. The clone can utilize any katon ninjutsu the user can up to B rank. In addition, any contact with the skeleton will result in a burn as per the katon passive based on the clone's Strength stat. The clone lasts for a maximum of 9 posts before falling apart and can move a maximum of 40 meters away from the user. The clones stats are as follows:

Taijutsu: 6
Stamina: 6
Strength: 7
Speed: 8

Katon Death Bone Pulse • Cremation Reanimation
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Katon Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic), user must have an inactive Death Bone Pulse • Bone Clone to perform this jutsu on.
The user weaves a quick series of seals and sends their chakra into a Bone Clone which has fallen apart by reaching the end of it's life span or being defeated in combat, drawing the bones back together at a Speed of 15 and reassembling them. In addition, the user's chakra ignites the bones, turning them into a Katon Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic). The user must be within the range of the clone that they created to use this jutsu.

Katon • Pin-point
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: B-rank Katon • Pin-point
The user channels their katon chakra into their finger tips. Then, with a snap of their fingers, the user ignites a small area not exceeding a 1x1x1 meter area in size in flames, causing third degree burns. A brief moment before the ignition, there is a small 'ember' of flame that indicates where the bloom of flame will erupt. These flames expand outwards from the ember at 25 Speed. This flame lasts for one post and quickly dissipates after burning. The user is able to perform this jutsu at a range of 55 meters.

Katon • Shepherd of Fire
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user channels their katon chakra into any preexisting fire within 35 meters of them. This chakra feeds the fire, making it both larger and more intense, flaring it up so that it burns hotter and grows in size. Using this technique, the user is able to increase the passive strength of any fire around them by 13. This increase in Strength lasts for 10 posts before cooling down and returning to it's original Strength.

Katon • Flash-bang
S-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: A-ranked Katon • Flash-bang
The user channels their katon chakra into their finger tips. Then, with a snap of their fingers, the user ignites an area up to 32x32x32 meter in size in flame, causing a large explosion within this area with 35 Strength. A brief moment before the ignition, there is a small 'ember' of flame that indicates where the bloom of flame will erupt. These flames expand outwards from the ember at 35 Speed. The user is able to perform this jutsu at a range of 75 meters.


As a quick note: I really tried to keep this to just Katon jutsu as much as possible, but as it turns out I've pretty much run dry on most of my low ranking stuff for Katon or anything related to Katon stuff! As such I had to improvise a bit by adding in some Napalm jutsu and one plain ol' Kaguya D rank (The other DBP jutsu are all katon based, mind you). I really hope that's alright because, again, I'm frankly running out of low rank stuff :(

Now, as for Worldslayer...
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[WORLDSLAYER]
S-Ranked Special Weapon

Description: A weapon to end worlds. A fragment of creation itself. A left-over mistake by the gods. A twisted mockery of anything living. All could be said of the Worldslayer. It’s origins are a mystery, ultimately to never be truly known but what is known is thus: It is ancient, far older than the creation of the first blade. It would not be unreasonable to assume that this is what all blades were based upon, in fact. There is a presence to it, a force or entity unknown which has no name, is silent and is malevolent in nature but subdued. It is a relic recognized only by the oldest and most powerful of spirits, it’s true nature and origin perhaps known only by the Genma themselves. Whatever it truly is, wherever it truly came from, whatever its’ true purpose might be, it is in the hands of Aimi Kaguya now, to do with what he wills.

Worldslayer is a “sword”, in that it is a bladed weapon with a singular handle. This is where the similarities end, however. The handle of Worldslayer is solid metal, as is the rest of the weapon, and twisted into a loose coil that ends in a ring. The guard is triangular in shape with dull, short, rounded arms hanging downward. At each angle of the triangle there is a thin blade that, like the handle, is twisted into a spiral. Each spiraling blade is further twisted over each other while never touching one another. Each blade is exactly 91 centimeters long and ends in a tapered point. The entire weapon is dark like unpolished iron with bits of what appears like red rust on either end of it and along the edges of the blades in patchy, uneven amounts. Despite its’ shabby appearance, Worldslayer does not have any rust upon it nor does it seem able to accumulate rust.

Worldslayer as a weapon has 50 Strength, making it nearly indestructible save for the strongest of forces known.

Abilities: Everlasting - Worldslayer is a leftover fragment of creation. It has always been, since the beginning, long before any life existed in the world and it will remain long after life has ceased. Should Worldslayer break for any reason or by any means the broken parts will turn to ash and vanish, fading into the void from whence it came. Then, over the next few days, Worldslayer will reform itself. So long as a part of it exists, the rest will reform around it. Should for any reason the weapon be completely "destroyed", it will reform again somewhere in the world, waiting to be found. Should the weapon break in a thread it remains broken for the remainder of the thread only to reform at the start of another thread.
I got a price quote from ShinobiTruth on Worldslayer. By his metric the cost of the weapon is:

Complexity: 5 (Possible range 1-5)
Utility: 5 (Possible range 1-5)
Durability S(50): 75
Regeneration between Threads (Mod Discretion - S Base): 30

Making a total of 115 points for the weapon as is. I should note that the utility is listed as a 5 right now not because of what the weapon can currently do, but what it will eventually do. Frankly the only reason I'm not posting it up with it's full abilities now is I can't afford it. Regardless, there it is for now!

Payment: viewtopic.php?f=107&t=8340480&start=80#p4171449
115 points from Aimi Kaguya

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[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Fire Coming Out of the Monkey's Head[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user channels their katon chakra into their eyes and mouth, setting both ablaze. This fire rages for a total of 5 posts, causing no burns to the user nor impairing their ability to speak or see. This jutsu does little aside from act as an intimidating display for the user’s foes.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Ghostly Hand of Flame[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Katon • Ghost-Light
The user channels their katon chakra and creates a replica of their own hand made out of flame. This hand doesn't give off much heat at all and is not as hot as other fire. Touching this hand of flame will not burn the person touching it in the slightest. Similarly, the light this flame gives off is incredibly dull in comparison to other flames. This hand is able to move away from the user up to a maximum of 15 meters at a Speed of 5 and can grab a hold of things with 5 Strength.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Wick[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Storage & Force Fuuinjutsu Concentration, *[Basic Jutsu • Chakra Kai]
The user channels katon chakra and sends it to a Force Fuuinjutsu seal close to them, up to a maximum distance of 15 meters. Directly above the seal a small ember will appear briefly before erupting into a tiny flame. This flame burns away the seal and simultaneously activates it, releasing any Fuuinjutsu within. This flame is ephemeral and dissipates after burning the seal away.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Visions of Fire[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user closes at least one eye and focuses on a flame within 15 meters of themselves, channeling katon chakra as they do. This chakra is used to allow the user to see through the selected flame, giving them vision of anything that is going on around the fire but no other sensory information up to a range of 10 meters. While using this jutsu the user is blind in whatever eye they used to perform the jutsu and cannot perform any other ninjutsu.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Listen to Flame[/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user focuses on a flame with 15 meters of themselves, channeling katon chakra as they do. This chakra is used to allow the user to hear through the selected flame, giving them hearing of anything around the flame but no other sensory information up to a range of 10 meters. While using this jutsu the user is deaf and cannot perform any other ninjutsu.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Pin-point[/b][/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: D-rank Katon • Pin-point
The user channels their katon chakra into their finger tips. Then, with a snap of their fingers, the user ignites a small area not exceeding a 1x1x1 meter area in size in flames, causing first degree burns. A brief moment before the ignition, there is a small 'ember' of flame that indicates where the bloom of flame will erupt. These flames expand outwards from the ember at 10 Speed. This flame lasts for one post and quickly dissipates after burning. The user is able to perform this jutsu at a range of 20 meters.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Smoldering Embers[/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user channels a small amount of katon chakra throughout their entire body, giving them an orange glow. Afterwards, the next katon ninjutsu that the user performs will be enhanced with an additional 5 Strength and Speed. This jutsu lasts until the user performs another katon ninjutsu or 5 posts have passed.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Ghost-light: Nilbog[/b][/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Katon • Ghost-light Curse
The user performs the handseals and sends chakra into a number of fireballs created through [i]Katon • Ghost-light[/i] ninjutsu equal to the user’s Control/2. This chakra alters the fireballs subtly, making it so that if they come into contact with an inanimate object – such as a tree, a rock, a wall etc. - the fireball with split into two of equal size and bounce off of the object they came into contact with rather than vanish. The amount of times that they can do this is equal to the user’s Ninjutsu/5. Aside from this they retain all other properties of the original jutsu in how they behave.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Message in the Flames[/b][/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Katon • Visions of Fire
The user closes their eyes and focuses on a flame within 25 meters of themselves, channeling katon chakra as they do. This chakra allows the user to both see and speak through the selected flame. This is signified by a pair of fiery eyes appearing within the flame through which the user can see up to a range of 15 meters and their voice can carry up to 15 meters away. While using this jutsu the user is completely blind and cannot perform any other ninjutsu.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Pin-point[/b][/color]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: C-rank Katon • Pin-point
The user channels their katon chakra into their finger tips. Then, with a snap of their fingers, the user ignites a small area not exceeding a 1x1x1 meter area in size in flames, causing second degree burns. A brief moment before the ignition, there is a small 'ember' of flame that indicates where the bloom of flame will erupt. These flames expand outwards from the ember at 20 Speed. This flame lasts for one post and quickly dissipates after burning. The user is able to perform this jutsu at a range of 40 meters.

[color=White][b][color=#FF4000]Katon[/color] Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic)[/b][/color]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Death Bone Pulse • Bone Clone (Basic), Katon Concentration
By channeling chakra throughout their entire body, the user creates an entire skeletal structure at a speed of 20 that is identical to their own in structure. The bones come out burnt and black with a large ball of fire burning in its rib cage and a smaller ball burning in its skull. The clone can utilize any katon ninjutsu the user can up to B rank. In addition, any contact with the skeleton will result in a burn as per the katon passive based on the clone's Strength stat. The clone lasts for a maximum of 9 posts before falling apart and can move a maximum of 40 meters away from the user. The clones stats are as follows:

Taijutsu: 6
Stamina: 6
Strength: 7
Speed: 8

[color=White][b][color=#FF4000]Katon[/color] Death Bone Pulse • Cremation Reanimation[/b][/color]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Katon Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic), user must have an inactive Death Bone Pulse • Bone Clone to perform this jutsu on.
The user weaves a quick series of seals and sends their chakra into a Bone Clone which has fallen apart by reaching the end of it's life span or being defeated in combat, drawing the bones back together at a Speed of 15 and reassembling them. In addition, the user's chakra ignites the bones, turning them into a Katon Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic). The user must be within the range of the clone that they created to use this jutsu.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Pin-point[/b][/color]
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: B-rank Katon • Pin-point
The user channels their katon chakra into their finger tips. Then, with a snap of their fingers, the user ignites a small area not exceeding a 1x1x1 meter area in size in flames, causing third degree burns. A brief moment before the ignition, there is a small 'ember' of flame that indicates where the bloom of flame will erupt. These flames expand outwards from the ember at 25 Speed. This flame lasts for one post and quickly dissipates after burning. The user is able to perform this jutsu at a range of 55 meters.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Shepherd of Fire[/b][/color]
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user channels their katon chakra into any preexisting fire within 35 meters of them. This chakra feeds the fire, making it both larger and more intense, flaring it up so that it burns hotter and grows in size. Using this technique, the user is able to increase the passive strength of any fire around them by 13. This increase in Strength lasts for 10 posts before cooling down and returning to it's original Strength.

[color=#FF4000][b]Katon • Flash-bang[/b][/color]
S-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: A-ranked Katon • Flash-bang
The user channels their katon chakra into their finger tips. Then, with a snap of their fingers, the user ignites an area up to 32x32x32 meter in size in flame, causing a large explosion within this area with 35 Strength. A brief moment before the ignition, there is a small 'ember' of flame that indicates where the bloom of flame will erupt. These flames expand outwards from the ember at 35 Speed. The user is able to perform this jutsu at a range of 75 meters.

[spoiler=Worldslayer][b][WORLDSLAYER][/b]
S-Ranked Special Weapon

[b]Description:[/b] A weapon to end worlds. A fragment of creation itself. A left-over mistake by the gods. A twisted mockery of anything living. All could be said of the Worldslayer. It’s origins are a mystery, ultimately to never be truly known but what is known is thus: It is ancient, far older than the creation of the first blade. It would not be unreasonable to assume that this is what all blades were based upon, in fact. There is a presence to it, a force or entity unknown which has no name, is silent and is malevolent in nature but subdued. It is a relic recognized only by the oldest and most powerful of spirits, it’s true nature and origin perhaps known only by the Genma themselves. Whatever it truly is, wherever it truly came from, whatever its’ true purpose might be, it is in the hands of Aimi Kaguya now, to do with what he wills.

Worldslayer is a “sword”, in that it is a bladed weapon with a singular handle. This is where the similarities end, however. The handle of Worldslayer is solid metal, as is the rest of the weapon, and twisted into a loose coil that ends in a ring. The guard is triangular in shape with dull, short, rounded arms hanging downward. At each angle of the triangle there is a thin blade that, like the handle, is twisted into a spiral. Each spiraling blade is further twisted over each other while never touching one another. Each blade is exactly 91 centimeters long and ends in a tapered point. The entire weapon is dark like unpolished iron with bits of what appears like red rust on either end of it and along the edges of the blades in patchy, uneven amounts. Despite its’ shabby appearance, Worldslayer does not have any rust upon it nor does it seem able to accumulate rust.

Worldslayer as a weapon has 50 Strength, making it nearly indestructible save for the strongest of forces known.

[b]Abilities:[/b] Everlasting - Worldslayer is a leftover fragment of creation. It has always been, since the beginning, long before any life existed in the world and it will remain long after life has ceased. Should Worldslayer break for any reason or by any means the broken parts will turn to ash and vanish, fading into the void from whence it came. Then, over the next few days, Worldslayer will reform itself. So long as a part of it exists, the rest will reform around it. Should for any reason the weapon be completely "destroyed", it will reform again somewhere in the world, waiting to be found. Should the weapon break in a thread it remains broken for the remainder of the thread only to reform at the start of another thread. [/spoiler]
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Post by WrightJustice » Wed Nov 13, 2019 7:06 am

Your app link is not correct.

Also I do believe the pyramid options from the OPHP store are indeed supposed to be a pyramid and therefore all the same kind of jutsu, as such they should all be napalm or all be katon etc. Though the cross pyramid jutsu should be fine since they're just incidentally part of another pyramid.

As for the sword I am not sure special regeneration between threads needs to be paid for as that is usually a given for weapons even if it's crazy and flavourful rather than simply mending it or buying a new version.

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Post by Golnax » Wed Nov 13, 2019 5:46 pm

I will fix the link after posting this quick update.

As far as the pyramid goes, I hoped that I could use these as is but it's not THAT big of a deal. I just need to figure out some low ranked katon techniques, since katon is the vast majority of this pyramid. Yaaay... It's going to be a little bit before I can actually do that though, as I'll be working away from home starting tonight. Please keep that in mind when grading this mod in the future please!

As far as the regeneration between threads goes, I'll wait for another mod's say so before I take that off of the app, just in case it is an ability that needs to be a part of the weapon. If not, then I'll just edit it in the future to be a flavorful part of the weapon as opposed to an actual ability and put in another ability in its' stead.

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Post by ShinobiTruth » Thu Nov 14, 2019 9:13 pm

Katon • Pin-point (B-A Ranks) <==== These two need to have different names for clarity's sake. Someone should be able to immediately look at the jutsu name and be able to tell it's a separate jutsu, even if it's a graduated version. Naming multiple ranks of a certain execution on a jutsu the same name can lead to confusion, which is no bueno.

As the person who quoted the regeneration on the weapon, I specified that because special weapons that don't specify they get remade between threads should probably be considered broken, right? That's my understanding on it.

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Post by Niro » Sat Nov 16, 2019 11:38 am

Napalm • Napalm Bullet <-Channel OR hand seals, not both.

Napalm • Napalm Shuriken <-Needs a flat amount not scaled. Because it's a multi-projectile jutsu you get E-rank jutsu stats.

Katon Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic) <-Can do 3 'special' things for clones meaning it gets downranked 3 times to E-rank stats.

Katon • Shepherd of Fire <-Doesn't distinguish between unfocused/focused but stat reinforcement suggests focused.

Pricing is okay at 115
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Post by Niro » Fri Nov 22, 2019 1:10 pm

1 day on this
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Post by Golnax » Fri Nov 22, 2019 3:20 pm

Okay. So.

Replaced all napalm and non-katon Kaguya jutsu with katon ninjutsu, which naturally will have to be looked over and reviewed.

Regarding the renaming of my pin-point jutsu, I have to ask... why? I wasn't asked to rename my Flash-bang line, which were accepted without issue and are currently on my profile up to A rank. I honestly don't see any reason why I should have to change the name of it's brother line of jutsu now when there is already precedent for using the same name for a jutsu that does the exact same thing already on my character's profile. And that is kind of the thing - these jutsu in particular do literally the same thing, as opposed to it's Flash-bang brethren. There's no change in the dimension of the jutsu, just the range at which it can be performed and the strength of the flame as it's being performed. Functionally they are otherwise identical. Would you have me go back and rename my Flash-bang jutsu as well? If someone finds the naming scheme confusing between different ranks of this jutsu, they need only look at the rank of said jutsu, the Strength and Speed and the range at which it is usable to distinguish between them.

Katon Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic) --> I'm not entirely sure what the 3 special things you're refering to. As far as I can tell, you meant the clones' ability to perform katon ninjutsu up to B rank, taijutsu within it's capabilities, and burning on contact. I went ahead and removed being able to use taijutsu in favor of keeping the ninjutsu, but I should clarify that the burning on contact isn't supposed to be any special ability of the clone itself, but just the passive of the katon fire that it's covered in. It specifies in the jutsu that the burn is only first degree, so I had that toned down from the normal 2nd degree that it would be for most other B rank katon jutsu. Be that as it may, I believe that the stats on the clone are currently C rank - downgraded one time from B rank to cover the use of ninjutsu - and otherwise correct. I'll wait and see if the mods really want me to make the katon passive a 'special' ability for this clone.

Katon • Shepherd of Fire --> Changed the wording on this so that it SHOULD be unfocused channeling. I gave a limited duration of 10 posts for this effect to take place after the user has used the jutsu.

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Post by Niro » Sat Nov 30, 2019 12:21 am

Katon Death Bone Pulse • Ember Bone Clone (Basic)
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Death Bone Pulse • Bone Clone (Basic), Katon Concentration
By channeling chakra throughout their entire body, the user creates an entire skeletal structure at a speed of 20 that is identical to their own in structure. The bones come out burnt and black with a large ball of fire burning in its rib cage and a smaller ball burning in its skull. The clone can utilize any katon ninjutsu the user can up to B rank. In addition, any contact with the skeleton results in a 1st degree burn. The clone lasts for a maximum of 9 posts before falling apart and can move a maximum of 40 meters away from the user. The clones stats are as follows:

By giving it a definite level of burn, it becomes an active effect instead of passive. The burn strength no longer scales off the passive but by what you wrote in the jutsu. An active effect would count as another special ability and de-rank it to D.

Katon • Shepherd of Fire
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user channels their katon chakra into any preexisting fire within 35 meters of them. This chakra feeds the fire, making it both larger and more intense, flaring it up so that it burns hotter and grows in size. Using this technique, the user is able to increase the passive strength of any fire around them by 25. This increase in Strength lasts for 10 posts before cooling down and returning to it's original Strength.

25 Strength reinforcement suggests active and the user cannot do anything while performing this. A-rank unfocused is 25/2 rounded up to a Katon jutsu.
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[OPHP] The Big One (Extremely Dangerous! Keep Out of Reach of Children!)

Post by Golnax » Sat Nov 30, 2019 10:49 pm

Edited Ember Clone so that it doesn't say that it gives a first degree burn on contact. I replaced it with the phrase:
Quote:
In addition, any contact with the skeleton will result in a burn as per the katon passive based on the clone's Strength stat.
Which I hope is enough to illustrate what I've always wanted it to; that the katon-created flames burn with a minimal amount of heat, since there are flames within the clone after all. If this is still seen as a secondary ability, then I'll downgrade the stats I suppose. Again, I'll wait for a mod to say one way or the other before making any more changes.

Shepherd of Fire has been edited so that it only buffs up fire by 13 Strength. This was just a simple mistake on my part, as I forgot that there was only so much you could buff something up IE the buffing and debuffing rules. Should be good now, as 25/2 rounded up is 13.

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Post by Niro » Fri Dec 06, 2019 11:34 am

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