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Post by Niro » Sat Apr 04, 2020 8:29 pm

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Change: Changed Static Shroud's range from 6 inches to 1m

Changed Galvanic Zone from some strange buff to a continuous debuff

Changed Sky Spear from 5 Speed to Speed = Strength [you're throwing it], gave it a creation speed, and buffed it's explosion strength

Changed Golden Birds to Golden Bird and brought it into acceptability with its str/spd divsion

Removed Thunder Wave's strange debuff

Gave Thunderous Lightning Cannon dimensions

Changed Thousand Birds

Changed Flying Dragon-Striking Heaven-Shaking Thunderous Bombardment from tag amount to strength

Changed Lightning Armament from some weird boost/armor hybrid into just armor

Removed Hell's Stab: Four Finger

Buffed Thousand Birds Current to correct numerical values

Buffed Earth-Shattering Roar from the Highest Heavens values

changes post revamp

changed ranges and numerical values
Raiton

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Raiton
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Raiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Raiton affinity. Raiton has a shocking effect.
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[quote=Raiton][color=yellow][b]Raiton[/b][/color]
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Raiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Raiton affinity. Raiton has a [b]shocking[/b] effect.
[spoiler=Passive (Shocking)]Raiton has the effect of [b]shocking[/b], which means causes it's effect to be diffuse upon impact. In organic material, this causes nervous stimulation which results in numbness, tingling, loss of sensation, and sometimes paralysis. In inorganic material, this means that the strength of the jutsu diffuses across an area 2x the size of the attack. In a jutsu that creates a lightning ball 2m in diameter, if it struck a wall the size of the attack would cover a 4m area.

Additionally, the strength of the nervous effect on organic material from raiton jutsu is determined by the Strength stat range they fall into.[list][*]1-14 Strength Requirement: Tingling, acute numbness.[*]15-24 Strength Requirement: Loss of Sensation[*]25-34 Strength Requirement: Localized Paralysis[*]35+ Strength Requirement: Diffuse Paralysis[/list][/spoiler][/quote]
Raiton, the elemental affinity of lightning, is an electrical element that poses itself as a powerful offensive and supplemental element. While it seems straightforward, Raiton has a variety of uses that makes it appealing to both close and long range users of many types. Raiton has the effect of shocking, which means causes it's effect to be diffuse upon impact. In organic material, this causes nervous stimulation which results in numbness, tingling, loss of sensation, and sometimes paralysis. In inorganic material, this means that the strength of the jutsu diffuses across an area 2x the size of the attack. In a jutsu that creates a lightning ball 2m in diameter, if it struck a wall the size of the attack would cover a 4m area.

Additionally, the strength of the nervous effect on organic material from raiton jutsu is determined by the Strength stat range they fall into.
  • 1-14 Strength Requirement: Tingling, acute numbness.
  • 15-24 Strength Requirement: Loss of Sensation
  • 25-34 Strength Requirement: Localized Paralysis
  • 35+ Strength Requirement: Diffuse Paralysis
Below is a list of jutsu of varying rank to explore the different uses of Raiton techniques.
D-rank:
D-rank *[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Lightning Armament[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After the correct hand seals are performed, the user coats themselves in a thick layer of lightning. This armour of lightning forms near instantly and requires [Control] Strength to break. During this time, the user's physical strikes apply the Raiton shocking effect.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Bright Bolt[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user will extend two fingers toward a target. A bolt of lightning will jump up to 10 meters from their fingers at [Control] Speed and Strength.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Conductor[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user will coat a weapon they are holding in Raiton electricity for 5 posts. This causes the shock effect to be produced on any contact with a target, while also granting blunt weapons the ability to cut through skin to produce shallow wounds. This also works for thrown weapons, however if the projectile remains out of contact with the user for more than 2 posts the technique will dissipate early.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Stun Gun[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user will channel Raiton chakra to two of their fingers. They will then be able to fire up to three total bullet sized balls of concentrated lightning from their fingertips. These bullets will travel at [Control] speed, but will not have any physical force. Instead, they will apply light electrical burns similar to a sun burn and will apply Raiton's shocking effect.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Sky Spear[/b][/color]
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user will create a 1 meter long rod of lightning in their hand at [Control] Speed. They are then able to launch it at their Strength in a single direction. Upon contact the spear will explode with [Control] Strength. If it has not been launched by the end of the second post it will dissipate.

C-rank:
C-rank *[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Galvanic Zone[/b][/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user will seep Raiton chakra in an area around them with a 25m diameter. The user's Raiton will constrict and paralyze jutsu and people who enter it. They will lose -1 Speed per post for 2 posts or until the user ends the jutsu.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Shock Double[/b][/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the necessary hand seals, the user will create a clone out of their Raiton chakra. This clone will have the users stats. It lasts for [Control/5] posts.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Voltaic Zone[/b][/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user will seep Raiton chakra in an area around them with a 25m diameter. This will produce an electric current on the ground in this area visible as crackling lightning on the surface. Any other than the user who step into this zone will have the shocking effect applied and their legs will sustain [Control] Strength shocks. This current lasts 3 posts, while it ends immediately if the user leaves the area.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Golden Bird[/b][/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user creates an orb of lightning the size of a basketball slightly above their head. They are then able to direct the orb at [Control] Speed at their will, however they may not move while doing this. The orb cannot leave 25m diameter around the user, and detonates with [Control] Strength on contact with a solid. This orb last a maximum of 4 posts, and may be self destructed at any moment in their lifespan at the user's will.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Jamming Pulse[/b][/color]
C-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals, the user emits a wave of electricity from their palm in a single direction. This is produced as a 10m wide line which extends 2m into the air and travels up to 25m from the user at [Control] Speed. The wave will apply the shocking effect and reduce the speed of any living thing it strikes by 3 Speed for 3 posts by electrically interfering with the brain's nervous signals.

B-rank:
B-rank *[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Thunder Wave[/b][/color]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user will first perform the correct hand seals, and then fire a cone of lightning which begins at 5m wide closest to them and then 40m wide at the furthest point. The cone extends 40m from the user's body at [Control] Speed. This cascade of lightning roars tremendously loud, and strikes all caught within it at ]Control] Strength.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Castle of Sky[/b][/color]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user will first perform the correct hand seals before releasing a basketball sized orb of lightning 15m into the air. The orb will then cascade sheets of lightning down in the shape of a dome over the caster, with a 40m radius. This dome, apart from being exceptionally loud, forms a sort of protection against attacks. It comes into being at [Control] speed, and is able to redirect hits of up to [Control] strength in a downward direction. These sheets of lightning also serve as a visual obscurity. This technique lasts for up to 3 posts depending on the user's discretion.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Thousand Birds[/b][/color]
B-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user of this technique will gather a concentrated amount of Raiton in their hand after they perform the hand seals for this technique. The lightning causes a sound similar to thousands of birds chirping over the top of each other while it is in existence. The user will then dash at full speed toward a target and attempt to thrust their hand into their target's body using their strength and momentum. The lightning then jumps from the user's arm into the opponent's body where it ravages the insides with a [Control] Strength surge of Raiton chakra.

A-rank:
A-rank *[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Thunder Dome[/b][/color]
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
The user performs the needed hand seals before thrusting their arms forward and summoning Raiton chakra in the shape of 4 2m lightning rods that shoot out and surround the area, up to 65m, in a square. These rods, once set up, then start to conduct Raiton chakra between them turning the area between the four rods into a sea of Raiton that strikes and binds any who enter it, sans the user, with [Control] Strength and Speed.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Static Shroud[/b][/color]
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user covers their body in a layer of visible static which crackles around them for 4 posts. Anything which comes within a 3 meters of their body will be repelled with [Control] Strength. Otherwise the armor operates like a normal barrier.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Flying Dragon-Striking Heaven-Shaking Thunderous Bombardment[/b][/color]
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
This technique visibly charges electricity for a single moment after the user performs their hand seals. Once this moment is over, it fires a massive column of lightning in a single direction, forming a cylinder with a 30m radius that extends up to 65m from the user's position. This cylinder travels at [Control] Speed and erupts on contact with [Control] Strength.

S-rank:
S-rank *[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Thousand Birds Current[/b][/color]
S-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: Raiton • Thousand Birds
After performing the hand seals similar to that of the Thousand Birds technique, the user will begin to spark with various bolts of electricity. For up to 6 posts the user will be surrounded by crackling lightning, which will immediately lash out at any person or metallic object within 80 meters of them at [Control] speed. This will then strike with [Control] strength and apply third degree electrical burns to those it hits. The user cannot cast any other techniques while this technique is active.

*[color=Yellow][b]Raiton • Earth-Shattering Roar from the Highest Heavens[/b][/color]
S-Ranked Ninjutsu
Considered the ultimate expression of prowess with the lightning element, this technique creates a bolt of lightning of unmatched power. After using the correct hand seals, the user concentrates lightning between their hands before firing it in a 3 meter long bolt of lightning which travels for a maximum of 80m at [Control] Speed. Once it connects with a solid or at the user's will, it will explode with 50 Strength. This technique causes the user's arms to become paralysed for 2 posts after use.
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Post by Takumi » Sun Apr 05, 2020 12:44 am

Raiton • Thousand Birds still mentions instinct. Feel free to delete this post when corrected.

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Post by Niro » Sun Apr 05, 2020 5:12 pm

Removed the Instinct mention and replaced with needing a Perception Technique of equal or greater rank than it
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Post by Ace Trainer » Mon Apr 06, 2020 10:17 pm

*Raiton • Static Shroud
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the correct hand seals the user covers their body in a layer of visible static which crackles around them for 4 posts. Anything which comes within 1m of their body will be repelled with [Control] Strength.

This is......incredibly powerful. I think maybe it's meant to be anything metal?

*Raiton • Thousand Birds
A-Ranked Ninjutsu
Prerequisite: 25 speed
The user of this technique will gather a concentrated amount of lightning in their hand after they perform the hand seals for this technique. The lightning causes a sound similar to thousands of birds chirping over the top of each other while it is in existence. The user will then dash at full speed toward a target, unable to see anything not within their path unless they possess a Perception Technique equal or greater in rank than this jutsu. The user will then attempt to thrust their hand into their target's body using their strength and momentum. The lightning then jumps from the user's arm into the opponent's body where it ravages the insides with a [Control] Strength surge of Raiton chakra.

I recognize this is Chidori but I don't think this really merits A-rank, since its basically just a raiton punch? Probably B-rank at most, unless its doing something extra fancy.

*Raiton • Shock Double
D-Ranked Ninjutsu
After performing the necessary hand seals, the user will create a clone out of their Raiton chakra. This clone will have the users stats. It lasts for [Control/5] posts.

Elemental clones should be C-rank, that was an error in the rules. Oops
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Post by Niro » Tue Apr 07, 2020 11:19 am

Original in archives says anything but was also a 6-inch range. Considering we don't use inches but rather meters for range, I upped it to 1m. Dropped it to half a meter.

Changed Clone rank

Moved Chidori to B-rank and removed a B-rank jutsu that was the equivalent of *Raiton • Flying Dragon-Striking Heaven-Shaking Thunderous Bombardment. Replaced Chidori with a custom A-rank.
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Post by Niro » Tue Apr 07, 2020 9:03 pm

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Post by Ace Trainer » Tue Apr 07, 2020 9:13 pm

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