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Post by Zao » Sat May 23, 2020 6:32 pm

Demon Hegemon's Death Guard (Swarm)
Description: The spirit crows stand about six inches in height with pitch black feathers and match beak. Each of their three toed feet have a curved one inch claw. But what sets the birds apart from their normal counterparts is that the spirit crows have three red eyes in a triangular shape upon their heads.

Personality: The crows are a rather simple group, having only a single true desire which is to serve their Hegemon. Coming from the demon realm they have a thirst to destroy and ravage whatever is placed before them, as is natural for them due to the environment within the demons spirit world where the strong rule and the weak are trampled upon. The swarm can be broken into three groups, each led by a slightly larger crow known as an Legionnaire that communicates directly with their King and controls its portion of the swarm in battle. This position is earned by the strong and another crow can and often do challenge the current commanders for their spot as leader, the loser of the interaction facing death.


Picture:
Rank: D
Skill:
Illusionist:


The Swarm has access to Sound Initiation, Sight Initiation, Illusion, Status and Warp concentrations based on the swarm's sync stat.
  • 5 - Sight
  • 15 - Sount
  • 25 - Illusion
  • 35 - Status
  • 45 - Warp


History::

The swarms members are former members of the great Crow Demon King's royal guard, but as the Demon Hegemon extended his power across the demon spirit realm in the distant past, the fellow King refused to bow or submit himself or his crow empire to the rule of another. Shortly after the Crow's rebuttal the hordes of demons under the Hegemon's control washed over the territory razing it to the ground and slaying the crow king and my of the crow empire. In the end the personal guards of the former King were forced to submit under force to the new Hegemon whom had shown the strength to continue to conquer the other empires within the spirit realm, becoming one of the Demon King's personal guard units named the Death Guard, after the corruption of the great Demon King corrosive chakra affected the demon crows. Now the remaining demon crows faithfully serve their new King and only wish to destroy that which attempts to resist the rule of their overlord, excited to potentially traverse back to the human world under their ruler's command.


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Post by Kabu » Mon May 25, 2020 2:31 am

Alright so, this ability is very very strong. I feel like an ability of this scale is going to need to take some kind of toll on the owner, whether that be a chakra cost or something. Also these illusions need to have some kind of listed duration and also also, are these treated like normal genjutsu in that the target's willpower is the deciding factor on whether or not they can escape? I feel like the method of escape should be listed as well.

Also, I'm fairly certain that despite swarms ranking accordingly to the owner's synch stat, you still need to have a letter rank listed.
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Post by Zao » Mon May 25, 2020 3:06 pm

Added post duration.

Fixed swarm rank, currently D-rank due to no sync stat for them.

The illusion ability functions just like a normal genjutsu, following all the rules for them.
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Post by TheLacarix » Sun May 31, 2020 1:20 pm

effect style illusion < What do you mean by ‘Style’ illusion, it either is an illusion or it isn’t?

Only the swarm's owner is immune to the illusion created < Why is he immune to it? If an ally casts a genjutsu, other allies will also be effected.
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Post by Zao » Thu Jun 04, 2020 10:34 am

It's been reworded now
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Post by TheLacarix » Fri Jun 05, 2020 8:55 pm

I've noticed that it has two initiations, I'm pretty positive a Genjutsu can only have one, due to the debuff.
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Post by Niro » Tue Jun 09, 2020 12:32 pm

Multiple triggers will reduce the overall number of effects and strength of those effects

10
20
30
35 <-Too many effects. -1 each. 25 nd 35 should have weaker effects
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Post by Zao » Tue Jun 09, 2020 3:42 pm

That seems a bit backwards. Anyways, I'll change it to just sound then.
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Post by Ace Trainer » Sun Jun 14, 2020 1:18 am

The demon crow swarm is able to activate a multi-target illusion, being able to target [Sync/5] targets of the swarm and owner's choosing.

So this has been a little unclear in the past so I wanna make sure we're on the same page for this.

All genjutsu can hit an "unlimited" number of targets.

1. Jutsu intended to hit 1 person, costs a static amount, which increases if more than 1 person is hit.
2. Jutsu intended to hit a static quantity of people also costs a static amount, more then (1), but less than (3), which increases by a fractional amount for each person more than its intended quantity
3. Jutsu intended to hit any number of people cost a static amount, more than (1) and (2), but doesn't increase as the number of people it hits increases.

Typically, 1 & 2 are mitigated by using triggers that target as well as initiate, so "Point at target", the initiator is seeing the user pointing, but it only activates if the person you're pointing at looks at it, anyone else isn't being pointed at, so they don't meet the bar for being initiated, which lets you avoid hitting multiple people.

Right now, your jutsu is written as 2 and is worded like its a "point at target" type, where you only hit the people you want to hit. But you don' have any thing that lets you actually qualify who you're targetting. You'll need something like that, or otherwise you're always going to hit everyone in the area regardless of your sync stat.
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Post by Zao » Sun Jun 14, 2020 10:56 am

Sounds good man, clears up a lot. I'm going to try to reword it to fall into the third category you mentioned now.
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Post by TheLacarix » Sat Jun 20, 2020 7:16 pm

1/2
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Post by Zao » Sun Jun 28, 2020 10:56 pm

Made the change Onu suggested in Discord for ability/skill.
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Post by TheLacarix » Mon Jun 29, 2020 12:46 pm

So, it would be better if that your ability gave you access to the concs and initiations worked via the sync stat. So a quick example;

5: Sound
25: Sight
45: Warp
Etc, etc.
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Post by Zao » Mon Jun 29, 2020 2:58 pm

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Post by TheLacarix » Wed Jul 01, 2020 7:56 am

1/2
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Post by Ace Trainer » Thu Jul 02, 2020 2:10 am

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