Aono, Ikuto

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Aono, Ikuto

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  • Age: 78
  • Gender: Male
  • Height: 5'9"
  • Weight: 253 lbs
  • Hair: Ikuto’s hair is almost pearlescent white and forms in a high widows peak, tying it in a bun on top of his head and letting the rest just hang past his neck.
  • Eyes: His eye are green in colour with splashes of blue, almost giving them a teal like colour.
  • Physical Features: Ikuto was once a young handsome warrior his physical prowess unmatched covered from head to toe in muscle with long dark hair that fell past his shoulders. However in his later years, he has grown fat and slow, shrunken in height losing at least three inches, wrinkles etched across his face, his nose red from drinking copious amounts of sake, his eyebrows thick and bushy, white hairs sprouting from his ears and nose. He has thick sideburns and a thin soul patch below his chin.
  • Attire: He wears a cream coloured nagagi, which is tucked into brown coloured trousers, wears a pair of white and black waraji. This is topped off with a crimson haori with a black trim. An iron iingasa often rests on his head.
  • Personality: Once a kind hearted person and the pride of powerful warrior, he was devoted to his wife and family. He’s now become overindulgent and focused only on achieving his goals and will not accept anyone standing in his way. Though he does still have a sense of warmth to him and will protect his fellow samurai and his students, doing anything for them.

  • Rank: A-Rank
  • Village: Land of Tea
  • Chakra Affinity: Katon
  • Stats:
  • Chakra Pool: 20
  • Endurance: 40
  • Control: 1
  • Strength: 44
  • Speed: 50
  • Willpower: 20
  • Combat Style: Ikuto uses his frailty to his advantage, taken his opponents by surprise by moving at incredible speeds that are almost invisible to the naked eye, unleashing a flurry of attacks with his Katana. Whilst at range he uses a yumi bow with pinpoint accuracy.

Equipment

Left Hip;
Akagane:
A 38 inch steel bladed katana, a gold habaki, a golden and black hilt with a dragon embossed across it, a ten inch white handle with orange wrappings and a golden pomel, the sheath is a golden-orange hue in colour.
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Left Hip;
Tanto:
A 7 inch steel bladed tanto, with a dragon stamped on the blade. A 4 inch handle, a copper like appearance on both the handle and the sheath with with floral pattern across it.
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Head:
Jingasa:
18 Inches in circumference, the iron Jingasa is worn on Ikuto’s head and has a gold and red circle stamped onto the front. He can use this as both defence and offensively, usually throwing it like a frisbee.
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Back:
Yuki Bow:
A 90-inch bow made from wood, with a thin iron core to prevent it from been easily broken. It has a spool of string wrapped around the centre, so it can be easily restrung.
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Quiver, Back:
30 x Arrows
15 x Explosive Arrows (Pouch of gunpowder that will explode on impact)
Pouch, Right Hip:
Tatsunokuchi:
A full set of gusoku armour made of steel that is white and gold in colour, covering almost every part of the users body the chest, shoulder and the users waist which is topped off with a brown sash. Vambraces, shin covers a large white helmet with two large gold horns and a full face mask. A set of black gloves are worn and black yaori underneath.
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NinjutsuShow
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TaijutsuShow
  • [Sword Weapons]
  • [Perception]
  • [Projectile Weapons]
  • [Deft Hands
  • [Medicine]
  • [Heavenly Tai]
  • Acrobatics
Taijutsu StylesShow
Yoshin Kenjutsu:
Waterfall Country's samurai are the creators of Yoshin, a style of Kenjutsu honing one's precision to strike more precisely than any needle or arrow at the enemy's inherent weaknesses. The human body is full of natural weak spots and vulnerabilities, and Yoshin takes full advantage of those weaknesses in combat with calculated, precise, intelligent strikes and thrusts to cripple and cut down their opponent. Common joints, unseen nerve endings and nerve clusters, critical tendons and muscle groups, and even vital organs are all fair game to the users of Yoshin. The precision required for this style causes most users of its techniques to prefer short blades such as kodachi and wakizashi, often with serrated edges to maximize damage on the blade exiting the wound, though katana can still be used with this style.

Requires: [Deft Hands], [Sword Weapons], [Medicine] Concentrations.
Iaido Kenjutsu:
The samurai of the Land of Tea have produced a unique style of Kenjutsu called Iaido. Unlike other styles, which rely on the sword being drawn to attack, a practitioner of Iaido is always ready to attack their opponents, even when their weapon is sheathed in its scabbard. Known as a "sword drawing" technique, Iaido uses the smooth, linear motion of pulling the sword from its sheath to create abnormally fast slashes and strikes against often ignorant and unsuspecting opponents. Though the katana is preferred for this style, any curved sword single-edged sword with a complimenting scabbard is compatible with this style. Their ability to fight with both traditional swordplay and hand-to-hand combat while perfectly capable of switching to quick slashes and stabs using Iaido's hallmark techniques makes practitioners of this style unpredictable fighters.

Requires: [Sword Weapons], [Perception] Concentrations.
Flawless Aim Style (Description):
This style of combat is favored by shinobi preferring to use projectiles, often serving as a staple for ranged taijutsu users. Focusing on the synergy between their hands and senses, they strive to make their lethal skills reach as far as possible with absolute precision.

Requires: [Projectile Weapons] Concentration.
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HistoryShow
Aono, Ikuto warn in The Land of Tea son of a fisherman and a tea picker, two of the land of teas biggest imports. Though he enjoyed eating the fish his father brought home and drinking the tea his mother picked, Ikuto had no interest in following their footsteps. He’d come to idolise the Samurai at the Iaido Dojo. Once he was old enough, he enlisted at the Dojo training every day, committing his life to the of the samurai He wasn’t the best in class, the strongest, the fastest or even the most talented, but he was determined.

Using that determination, he completed his training at the Dojo. However, it was not quite what he was hoping for there was surprisingly less work that what he expected. The Shinobi from The Land of Fire had made The Land of Tea a place of peace, guarding their borders, protecting their villages, businesses and population it was a perfect relationship, at least for everyone. It was far from perfect for Ikuto, people weren’t hiring shinobi to protect them anymore, no wars for them to fight in, it wasn’t just The Land of Tea that was protected by Shinobi it was the entire world. Samurai were getting hired by criminals and slavers for incredibly low wages. Low incoming and low morality, not the life of honourable Samurai.

Ikuto eventually married, marrying a beautiful woman and the pair had a beautiful son. Just like his farther he was determined, training to be a samurai and have exceptional natural talent far beyond that excelled Ikuto’s own. He was destined to be great samurai.

Many years later, Ikuto’s son now a man began to take on jobs that were unsavoury working from criminals, collecting bounties on innocent men. This however got him in a lot of trouble, taking on jobs that were far too dangerous and simply not worth the risk. However, it was a risk he kept taking and it didn’t pay off, loosing his life.

Ikuto fell into a spell of depression, taking it out on anyone around him. The person who took this brunt the most was his wife, who soon after left him. Now alone, he his purpose in life became nothing. Becoming weak, indulgent and an alcoholic, drinking his weight in Sake, which had increased a lot. He became a traveling ronin, taking on bounties here and there just to survive. This continued for years.

He became an old man, his life nearing an end he began to reflect on what he’d done; he’d achieved and the dishonour he’d brought on himself. He decided something had to be done, the world could no longer be The Shinobi World it needed to have Samurai within it, as a dominate power. He’d set himself a goal before he died to make that happen.


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*[Yoshin • Sever the Tendon]
C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Dropping low to the ground and hooking their blade around the back of an opponent's ankle, the practitioner draws a heavy slash against the ankle's tendon, immediately causing a jolt of intense pain. The pain causes even the slightest step to send shocks of pain through the nerve. Aside from causing significant pain, this technique also imposes a persisting -3 Speed penalty on the opponent due to being unable to place weight upon the foot. This penalty can be lifted if the opponent receives medical attention.

*[Yoshin • Incurvate Arrow]
C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Targeting the opponents torso and abdomen, the practitioner launches a series of quick snapping slashes. These lashes produce a series of evenly spaced cuts across the target's abdomen and torso. While these cuts are not life-threatening, the damaged muscles prohibit the opponent from fully drawing strength from their core and back into their limbs. Aside from causing significant pain, this technique also imposes a persisting -3 Endurance penalty on the opponent due to the damage the muscles have sustained. This penalty can be lifted if the opponent receives medical attention.

*[Yoshin • Shatter the Hoof]
C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
A technique to disarm opponents, the practitioner launches a snapping slash or thrust at the opponent's forearm, severing several key tendons in the forearm. The damage caused to the muscles and tendons in the forearm by this technique can cause an opponent to drop whatever they are holding. Aside from being disarmed and causing significant pain, this technique also imposes a persisting -3 Strength penalty on the opponent due to the damage the muscles have sustained. This penalty can be lifted if the opponent receives medical attention.
[Yoshin • The Equalizer]
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
The user will strike an opponent with either the pommel or their blade, striking a cluster of nerves on the targets body with such a force it will shut down that area and prevent chakra from pouring through their system correctly. This will prevent the target from using Ninjutsu for 3 posts.
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[Flawless Aim Style • Quick to the Quiver]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Deft Hands] & 10 Speed
The user has a skill of drawing their bow and/or arrows from their quiver incredibly quickly, having their weapon ready within an instant.

*[Flawless Aim Style • Arcing Shot]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
The practitioner can launch projectiles in arcs up and over most obstacles, being able to accurately hit a target that is behind obstructions as if they were in the open. The practitioner must still be able to locate their target by some other means to ensure the projectile will hit its target.


[Flawless Aim Style • Shooting Back
C-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: [Perception]
The user is able to perceive a flight path of a projectile and can throw their own projectile to meet, to know exactly where to strike, if it is lower in strength, it will knock the projectile off its path and send it back directly to the target at the speed it came. This will often catch an opponent of guard. However, if the strength of the incoming projectile is higher, this will not work in the same way, though it will be redirected away from the target.


[Flawless Aim Style • Boomerang Shot]
C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
When throwing a projectile, the user will flick their wrist at the last moment. To the naked eye, this projectile will be flying towards as normal, however if the projectile doesn’t hit its target or isn’t stopped, it will weigh back on its own momentum and come back, like a boomerang. Usually catching their opponent of guard.

[Flawless Aim Style • Evasive Maneuvers]
C-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
The practitioner has learned how to accurately launch projectiles while moving through the flow of combat. This Discipline represents the practitioner's ability to accurately launch projectiles while moving at full Speed, while jumping, rolling, sliding off the ground, or while performing other basic combat movements.

[Flawless Aim Style • Safe Hands]
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Deft Hands], [Perception] & 15 Speed
The user has an extensive knowledge on ninja tools and how they are used and where is safe to touch them. When a projectile is coming towards them, the user can predict the flight path of the tool and safely pluck the weapon out of the air, as long as their speed is equal or higher than the strength it is thrown at.

[Flawless Aim Style • The Dragons Bow]
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Heavenly Tai
The user will focus their energy and torque the muscles in their arm, they’ll release a projectile at full force. Kinetic energy will project out of the projectile setting it on fire, taking on the shape of a dragon with a circumference of 10 metres and a length of 20 metres, with a strength and speed equal to the users [Strength] burning whoever or whatever it comes in contact with.
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[Iaido • Ambidexterity]
D-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
After practicing for a long amount of time with the concept of using both of their hands with equal skill, the user has developed a level of ambidexterity that allows them to utilize both hands equally and as effectively without any penalty. This extends to other methods of combat or simple everyday life as well.


[Iaido • Back and Forth]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Deft Hands] & 10 Speed
The user is capable of sheathing and unsheathing their blade within an instant, having their blade to hand whenever it’s needed.


[Iaido • The Hidden Dragon]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Deft Hands] & 10 Speed
The user is able to withdraw their sword from their sheath within an instant and deflecting any incoming melee attack or projectiles that is within 5 [Speed] of the users own. This can be performed from a prone position and often catches an opponent off guard and unless their opponent has a perception technique of a equal or higher rank they'll struggle to see the defence and usually won’t feel the need for a secondary counter attack.


*[Iaido • Clouding Eyes]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite(s): 8 Speed.
A simple technique meant to cripple the target's vision, the practitioner draws the sword from its scabbard and aims a quick slash at the eyes. This technique can be done in any single direction to either target one or both of the opponent's eyes.


*[Iaido • Shinigami’s Wrath]
C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite(s): 15 Speed.
A technique refining the concept of targeting multiple opponents with a single draw, the practitioner uses their sheath hand to reverse grip the hilt. Using the one hand, the practitioner quickly torques their body and cuts with a reverse hand slash a full 360 degrees before immediately sheathing the blade. This technique can strike multiple opponents at once, and the reverse grip of the sword allows the practitioner to more easily defend against counterattacks immediately after.


[Iaido • V-Trigger Draw]
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 25 Speed
The user moves forward within an instant up to 40 metres and draws their blade striking diagonally through their targets hip up through their chest and their shoulder and quickly make a second countering strike that will aim for the users neck in attempts to sever their head. The draw can be done without striking forward if the target is already within range, also as it’s a complex movement without a perception technique the target will struggle to see this strike at all.
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[Unbroken Mind]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: Perception & 15 Willpower
Unlike the Shinobi, Samurai without training aren’t capable of using [Kai Release], however the samurai have developed a secret technique that allows for similar results. The user must have a strong will, a powerful mind and a keen sense of perception. They are able to physically force out any Genjutsu and purge themselves of any foreign chakra, they must meet the same control and will power. The stat requirements for this technique can be found in the genjutsu rules.


[The Truth of Running Water]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 25 Speed & Acrobatics
The user is capable of running at such speeds they are able to run across water without sinking, however once they stop moving, they will instantly sink.


[The Truth of Running Trees]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 15 Speed & Acrobatics
The user is able to run at such speeds they can run up or across any vertical surface with a maximum height of 1 metre per the users [Speed] however once they stop moving they will fall and won’t be able to stay in position.


[Way of the Samurai]
C-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: Sword Weapons & Projectiles
The user has trained their entire life in the discipline of the Samurai and their techniques and how to be efficient. Whilst using sword and bow techniques the user, uses a minimum amount of energy needed. Allowing the user to fight for much longer than usual.

[The Cutting Leaf]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: Heavenly Tai & Sword Weapons
The user is able to torque their muscles through their entire body whilst swinging. This can be applied to other maneuvers, whilst performing this a gust of air invisible to the naked eye will project out, however it does disrupt the air around the target giving them a hint that something is coming. This will be 20 meters in height and width will project out from the user, up to 40 meters at a speed equal to the user’s strength and will slice through anyone or anything as though a blade was cutting through them. This blast will last 3 posts.

[Without Sight]
A-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: Perception
The user has trained their body to such a degree that they have gained impeccable hearing, even without the use of their eyes they able to see everything around them, within their mind like sonar vision. They can only sense anything that is making a sound or has sound reflecting off it, within 2 Metres per the users [Strength].

[Vison of Truth]
S-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: Perception
The user has trained their body to such a degree that their vision is almost incomparable, they are able to see incredibly fast, complex or acrobatic movements usually not visible to the naked eye and taijutsu techniques an equal rank or lower as long as these techniques are within 5 points of the users own [Speed].


[The Dragons Path]
S-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: Heavenly Tai, Sword Weapons & 40 Strength
The user will focus their entire energy into a single swing of their blade, torqueing every muscle in their body and swinging their blade outwards and spinning on the spot, a blast of energy will take on the shape of a dragon reaching 30 meters in height and width and covers an area of 90 metres, moving around in perfect spiral around the user at a speed and strength equal to the users [Strength] anyone and anything caught within its blast will be ripped to shreds. Lasts up to 4 posts.

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Aono, Ikuto

Post by Nafan~ » Sun Aug 30, 2020 3:47 am

[Flawless Aim Style • Quick to the Quiver]

^ Should probably just say up to x-number of arrows to put a proper limit on it and make it clear.

Your Flawless aim also has a broken color tag at shooting back.

[Flawless Aim Style • Shooting Back]
Equal strength probably won't send it back, will just result in both cancelling each other out.

[Iaido • The Hidden Dragon
^ We don't do absolute requirements for perception techniques anymore I think. It should be phrased that it's more difficult to realise without a perception technique. Also you will need at least equal speed for a D-rank.

[The Dragons Path]
^ This doesn't have enough dimensions to accurately describe the range this attack covers. The dragon may be 30 meters tall, but how far out from you does the spiral reach? How thick is the dragon? If someone was right next to you would they be hit? I'm confused as to exactly what motion the dragon is moving in as well. The technique in general is kind of unclear to me and I'd appreciate if you tried to make it a bit clearer for me.

[Yoshin • The Equalizer]
^ This is probably heavenly taijutsu since shutting down tenketsu usually requires chakra. See Jyuuken.

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Post by TheLacarix » Sun Aug 30, 2020 5:02 am

[Yoshin • The Equalizer] < When I asked about creating this, I was that gentle fist can be replicated with the medical concentration.

Other than that all fixed!
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Aono, Ikuto
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Post by Das Kirb » Sun Aug 30, 2020 5:05 pm

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Post by Ace Trainer » Wed Sep 16, 2020 8:49 pm

[Iaido • V-Trigger Draw]
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 25 Speed
From a prone position, the user moves forward within an instant up to 40 metres and draws their blade striking diagonally through their targets hip up through their chest and their shoulder and quickly make a second countering strike that will aim for the users neck in attempts to sever their head. The draw can be done without striking forward if the target is already within range, also as it’s a complex movement without a perception technique the target will struggle to see this strike at all.

I'm a bit confused by this, because I'm reading it as you're laying on the ground and then launch forward 40 meters? Or is prone like a sword terminology? It might make sense to say "from a prone position, the user rises and moves forward in a single motion" if you mean laying on the ground.

Just kind of funky.

[The Truth of Running Water]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite 5 Speed
The user is capable of running at such speeds they are able to run across water without sinking, however once they stop moving, they will instantly sink.

[The Truth of Running Trees]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 5 Speed
The user is able to run at such speeds they can run up or across any vertical surface with a maximum height of 1 metre per the users [Speed] however once they stop moving they will fall and won’t be able to stay in position.

It doesn't matter much, but this should have like a 25 speed requirement for water, and maybe 15 for tree, it can stay D-rank though. It also needs a concnetration, probably acrobatics.

[Roar of the Dragon]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: Sword Weapons & 20 Will Power
The user will scream with such force that anyone within 2x metres of the user’s [Strength] who has lower [Willpower] than the user will be crippled with fear for the next 4 posts and will not be able to attack the user.

[Scream of the Dragon]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: Sword Weapons & 20 Will Power
The user will scream with such force that anyone within 2x metres of the user’s [Strength] who has lower [Willpower] than the user will hear a ringing through their ears and lose all sense of orientation, struggle to stand and may even cause vomiting. Their speed will be reduced by -9 for 3 posts.

I don't understand what this has to do with Sword Weapons, and I'm not sure why their speed would be reduced from this.
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Post by TheLacarix » Sat Sep 19, 2020 7:16 pm

All fixed!

I removed the Roar and Scream of the dragon. I’ll make an ability further down the line, I was basing them from Zantou.

I’ve used the points for armour and a tanto instead.
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Post by Taiga » Sun Sep 20, 2020 12:01 pm

"from head to in m" <= Typo, guessing head to toe in muscle was the goal.

Is this a scoop? Has 175 stats but A-Rank starts 160.

Items, armor, etc is probably going to need stats on it. Not sure how stringent new staff regime is on that for swords but the armor/helmet for sure.

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[Flawless Aim Style • Quick to the Quiver]
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Deft Hands] & 10 Speed
The user has a skill of drawing up to 5 arrows and the bow, followed by knocking and aiming, thus reducing the time required to be combat ready significantly <- Kind of dont get what this jutsu is doing.

Your Heavenly Tai in general likely needs ranges (which will also clarify duration, like the spinning shootiing dragon goes until X meters)

EDIT: Maybe you are using points for the stats? If so probably need to price everything out with items too. Also I think you can only buy a set amount of stats on startup with the startup moolah

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Post by TheLacarix » Thu Sep 24, 2020 9:28 am

There doesn’t need to be any stats for the armour, all base armour is assumed to have 15 endurance.

I added 15 maximum stats are start up.

[Flawless Aim Style • Quick to the Quiver] < I was told to rewrite it this way, but I’ll change it back to how I had it.

Other than that, everything else is fixed! :)

15 Stat Points: 45 Points
Jutsu: 92 Points
Arrows: 2 Point
Explosive Arrows: 2 Points
Bow: 2 Points
Akagane: 2 Points
Tanto: 2 Points
Jingasa: 2 Points
Tatsunokuchi: (Head, Chest & Bottoms) 6 Points

Total: 155
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Post by Taiga » Thu Sep 24, 2020 6:38 pm

Looks all good for the most part!

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Post by Nafan~ » Sun Oct 04, 2020 9:48 pm

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Post by Niro » Mon Oct 05, 2020 4:47 pm

Chakra Affinity: Unkown <-Even if he doesn't know it, he has one. Please select one.
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Kotetsu [color=slategray][b]IwaGeninTeam 7
Ashura [color=coral][b]SunaGenin
Sai [color=#FF14A1][b]Kiri - MND-Rank
Yamato [color=#C71585][b]KiriA-Rank

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TheLacarix
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Aono, Ikuto

Post by TheLacarix » Tue Oct 06, 2020 12:29 am

Fixed
CharactersShow

The White Eyed Demon of the Leaf
Aizawa, Yoru
S-Rank - Bannin
Konohagakure - ANBU

Shiazu, Ico
D-Rank - Genin
Kirigakure

Aono, Ikuto
A-Rank - Shogun
Land of Tea

Hondo (Aizawa), Haru
C-Rank
Land of Tea

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hobnob
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Aono, Ikuto

Post by hobnob » Sun Oct 25, 2020 6:59 am

YoshinShow
[Yoshin • The Equalizer]
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
The user will strike an opponent with either the pommel or their blade, striking a cluster of nerves on the targets body with such a force it will shut down that area and prevent chakra from pouring through their system correctly. This will prevent the target from using Ninjutsu for 3 posts.

[Comment: I saw your previous comment; doesn't being able to attain the effect of Jyuuken through medical ninjutsu completely defeat the uniqueness of the Hyuuga, Byakugan, and Jyuuken?]
Flawless Aim StyleShow
[Flawless Aim Style • Boomerang Shot
C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
When throwing a projectile, the user will flick their wrist at the last moment. To the naked eye, this projectile will be flying towards as normal, however if the projectile doesn’t hit its target or isn’t stopped, it will weigh back on its own momentum and come back, like a boomerang. Usually catching their opponent of guard.

[Comment: Closing bracket missing. I think the last sentence shouldn't be there; some people might consider it godmodding]

[Flawless Aim Style • Safe Hands
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Deft Hands], [Perception] & 15 Speed
The user has an extensive knowledge on ninja tools and how they are used and where is safe to touch them. When a projectile is coming towards them, the user can predict the flight path of the tool and safely pluck the weapon out of the air, as long as their speed is equal or higher than the strength it is thrown at.

[Comment: Missing bracket]

[Flawless Aim Style • The Dragons Bow
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Heavenly Tai
The user will focus their energy and torque the muscles in their arm, they’ll release a projectile at full force. Kinetic energy will project out of the projectile setting it on fire, taking on the shape of a dragon with a circumference of 10 metres and a length of 20 metres, with a strength and speed equal to the users [Strength] burning whoever or whatever it comes in contact with.

[Comment: Missing brackets. Also 10m circ makes the technique 3.14m wide; is that what you're going for?
IaidoShow
[Iaido • The Hidden Dragon
D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: [Deft Hands] & 10 Speed
The user is able to withdraw their sword from their sheath within an instant and deflecting any incoming attack or projectile that is within 5 [Speed] of the users own. This can be performed from a prone position and often catches an opponent off guard and unless their opponent has a perception technique of a equal or higher rank they'll struggle to see the defence and usually won’t feel the need for a secondary counter attack.

[Comment: This needs clarification on what sort of attacks it can deflect.]

[Iaido • V-Trigger Draw]
B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 25 Speed
The user moves forward within an instant up to 40 metres and draws their blade striking diagonally through their targets hip up through their chest and their shoulder and quickly make a second countering strike that will aim for the users neck in attempts to sever their head. The draw can be done without striking forward if the target is already within range, also as it’s a complex movement without a perception technique the target will struggle to see this strike at all.

[Comment: Looks good, but I feel like a tech like this should be an A rank - secondary opinion please?]
TaijutsuShow
[The Cutting Leaf]
B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: Heavenly Tai & Sword Weapons
The user is able to torque their muscles through their entire body whilst swinging. This can be applied to other maneuvers, whilst performing this a gust of air invisible to the naked eye, however it does disrupt the air around the target giving them a hint that something is coming. This will be 20 meters in height and width will project out from the user, up to 40 meters at a speed equal to the user’s strength and will slice through anyone or anything as though a blade was cutting through them. This blast will last 3 posts.

[Comment: The wording in this is throwing me off a little; what is this actually doing? needs clarification.]

[Without Sight]
A-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: Perception
The user has trained their body to such a degree that they have gained impeccable hearing, without sight able to see everything around them, without their mind like sonar vision. They can only sense anything that is making a sound or has sound reflecting off it, within 2 Metres per the users [Strength].

[Comment: Wording.]

[Vison of Truth]
S-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: Perception
The user has trained their body to such a degree that their vision is incomparable, able to see incredibly fast complex or acrobatic movements usually not visible to the naked eye of an equal rank or lower, as long as the target it moving slower than the users own [Speed].

[Comment: Does this mean the victim needs a doujutsu to be able to see the user?]
Other than this the character is dope.
KonohagakureShow
Senju, Noeru - Chuunin - A-Rank
IwagakureShow
Fukusha Kurai - Genin - D-Rank
KumogakureShow
Igarashi Ryoto - Genin - D Rank
SunagakureShow
Ikigai, Itoshii - Genin - D Rank - #C2B280

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TheLacarix
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Aono, Ikuto

Post by TheLacarix » Sun Oct 25, 2020 7:35 am

[Yoshin • The Equalizer] < Techniques like this, can and are already done through the medical concentration. So, it’s fine as is.

Flawless Aim Style • Boomerang Shot < Fixed the bracket and it isn’t god modding, the final line is fine as is.

Flawless Aim Style • Safe Hands < Fixed

Flawless Aim Style • The Dragons Bow < Yes

Iaido • The Hidden Dragon < Fixed

Iaido • V-Trigger Draw < B-rank is fine, it’s not complex and there are similar techniques already in the Iaido archives of an equal rank.

[The Cutting Leaf] < Fixed

[Without Sight] < Fixed

[Vison of Truth] < No. It’s a simple perception technique that allows the user to keep up with high speed or complex movements. I’ve re-written it a little so it’s clearer to understand.
CharactersShow

The White Eyed Demon of the Leaf
Aizawa, Yoru
S-Rank - Bannin
Konohagakure - ANBU

Shiazu, Ico
D-Rank - Genin
Kirigakure

Aono, Ikuto
A-Rank - Shogun
Land of Tea

Hondo (Aizawa), Haru
C-Rank
Land of Tea

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Niro
Tsuchikage
Tsuchikage
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Aono, Ikuto

Post by Niro » Sun Oct 25, 2020 3:12 pm

1/2
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NameVillageRankTeam
Tatsuo [color=#940839][b]IwaTsuchikageTeam 18 Jousai
Kinomichi [color=limegreen][b]IwaBanninJousai
Kotetsu [color=slategray][b]IwaGeninTeam 7
Ashura [color=coral][b]SunaGenin
Sai [color=#FF14A1][b]Kiri - MND-Rank
Yamato [color=#C71585][b]KiriA-Rank

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Ace Trainer
Posts: 16242
Joined: Sun Nov 23, 2008 7:00 pm

Aono, Ikuto

Post by Ace Trainer » Sun Nov 08, 2020 10:12 am

Accepted
Mistaki ShioShiimu KozanGekko IndraShoshiki HeiyaHizashi Ikinari
Kirigakure No Sato
Kemurigakure no Sato

Taishou of Iron Country
Kirigakure No Sato
Genin
Experiment 81 v2
Sunagakure No Sato
Genin
The Soul Host
Iwagakure No Sato
Special Jounin
The Tungsten Princess
Sunagakure No Sato
Jounin
The Revolutionary
Past CharactersShow
[Kenketi Tenteki :: Kumogakure No Sato – Special Jounin]
[Setsuya Inka :: Sunagakure No Sato – The Soul Host – Special Jounin]
[Kaikyo Kohon :: Kirigakure No Sato – Jounin]
[Shinwa Basuta no Suihouheki Yasahii :: Kirigakure No Sato – Mizukage :: Spirit of Capricorn, Topenga]
[Futokutei Hitoare :: Konohagakure No Sato – Pestilence (Four Horsemen) – Jounin]
[Aisu Koiji :: Kirigakure No Sato – Jounin]
[Shitagane Sakki :: Kumogakure No Sato – Genin]
[Batsu Betsuni :: Iwagakure No SatoJounin A Rank Missing Ninja]
[Futokutei Yasunari :: Konohagakure No Sato – Genin]
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HonchkrOnu
ArticOnu
RichardUnknown
RichardGreen
RichardRed
RichardBlack
RichardGold
AlienHostRichardGold
ValidusWrecks
ValidusWreckingBall
NotOnu
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NotCdf
SunaOOCOnu
HolyCowMrSmith
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