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Shio Revamp

Post by Ace Trainer » Mon Jun 28, 2021 1:30 pm

Character: Shio
Change:
Age up
Picture change, and other character details updated + history.
Stats rearranged, jutsu exchanged. Ditched an ability and some concentrations.
Cost:
Drop his pen (2 ryo)
Drop 4 S-rank taijutsu (48 ryo)
Drop 3 A-rank taijutsu (30 ryo)
Drop 4 B-rank taijutsu (32 ryo)
Drop 4 C-rank taijutsu (24 ryo)
Drop 3 D-rank taijutsu (12 ryo)
Drop 1 D-rank genjutsu (4 ryo)
Drop 2 C-rank genjutsu (12 ryo)
Add 1 D-rank Ninjutsu (-4 Ryo)
Add 1 C-rank Ninjutsu (-6 Ryo)
Add 1 B-rank Ninjutsu (-8 Ryo)
Add 2 C-rank Taijutsu (-12 Ryo)

Ryo total has already be updated to reflect this all.
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[center][big][big][b]Mistaki, Shio[/b][/big][/big]
[img=300,500]https://i.pinimg.com/originals/8b/74/77/8b74770d9f6e5d68e35098ff597bcbac.jpg[/img]
[Heh][/center]
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[center][b][big]General Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Age:[/b] 14
[b]Gender:[/b] Male
[b]Height:[/b] 5’6”
[b]Weight:[/b] 131lbs
[b]Physical Features:[/b] As far as physical features go, Shio is rather average for a boy his age. He is slim, with a visible jawline and hazel eyes. His hair is sloppy, neck length and black with grey and white strands peppered throughout it. As a Kawazaiwa he has the familial red dots on his palms, permanently marked on him. Shio wears large round glasses that are often hidden behind unrestrained locks of hair.
[b]Clothing/Accessories:[/b] Shio wears plain clothes, black shirt on black pants with a black belt. His clothes are slightly baggy on him. He wears his forehead protector on his head, high on his brow to hold his long hair out of his face. He wears standard ninja sandals. Shio does not wear the flak jacket typically worn by those of his rank.
[b]Personality:[/b] Shio is a far-cry from the boy raised in Kirigakure. Now the unconventional leader of one of the greatest non-shinobi forces of the world, Shio carries himself with discipline and purpose. Many would describe him as regal, slightly haughty, and driven. Unafraid to speak, abandoning the principles he was raised with, Shio is unafraid to speak with authority, and can be rather demanding of the people around him. A boy who seeks excellence for himself and all those around him, Shio can be quite averse to failure, and will get very frustrated with those who struggle to succeed around him, or accomplish what he asks of them. However, one thing many people do not see of Shio is that he can be quite compassionate when eyes are off of him. Shio, having been raised in complex circumstances, empathizes with children like himself, and seeks them out in order to help them reach their true power and ability. He can be quite harsh on those who treat disadvantaged people unfairly or cruelly, but also believes that we have power over our destinies and some people simply choose to be in bad situations. 
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[center][b][big]Battle Information[/big][/b][/center]
[b]Village:[/b] [s]Kirigakure no Sato[/s] / Iron Country
[b]Rank:[/b] S-rank Missing Ninja / Taishou of Iron Country
[list][*][b]Chakra Pool:[/b] 43
[*][b]Endurance:[/b] 41
[*][b]Control:[/b] 40
[*][b]Strength:[/b] 46
[*][b]Speed:[/b] 30
[*][b]Willpower:[/b] 50
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[b]Equipment:[/b]
[list][*]Two kunai are kept strapped to each of his thighs.
[*]10 Exploding Tags, and 5 Smoke Tags are strapped to his belt.[/list]
[quote]A pair of gloves made of a special, chakra enhanced material, the wearer of Emperor Hanzi's Fists can interact with anything as if it were solid, without detriment to their bodies. The wearer of these gloves could hold a hand out and block a raiton blast, or slap away a fireball, or catch and throw back a wind blast, even grabbing water or mist as if it were a solid object is possible with the gloves. This however does not supplement the user's strength, they merely give the user the ability to physically touch and move chakra as they please.[/quote]
[b]Companions:[/b] (0/1)
[b]Primary Affinity:[/b] Suiton
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[center][b][big]Abilities and Concentrations[/big][/b][/center]
[table=2, Abilities][b]Sage Mode: Euphoria[/b][c]Shio’s chakra has a passive effect on the air around him, and when he releases it, causes the affected air to be highly absorbent of the naturally occurring energy of the world. The nature charged oxygen is then absorbed through the skin, mouth or nose, essentially inducing anyone who is breathing the air or present in it into a very minor form of Sage Mode. Because it is so minor, most do not realize they are in sage mode and instead say the state feels like a small burst of euphoria. This effect leaves the air charged with natural energy for 2 posts following exposure to his chakra.Those impacted have two effects occur for the entire duration they're in the area, and for 2 posts following the exit:[list][*]The euphoria caused by this state has a very acute neuromuscular effect that causes a -1 in Willpower. Any technique that counters neuromuscular effects, maintains heightened body control, or antidotes for neuromuscular toxins will counteract this. [*]The Euphoria also induces sensory in those affected. They are able to sense any beings with chakra within 30m of their bodies. Those without sensory techniques can not control this unrefined sensory and will simply be aware of where those they sense are with poor accuracy. Those with sensory techniques can control this as if it was a sensory technique, including turning it off.[/list]
[c][b]Second Ability[/b][c] --
[c][b]Third Ability[/b][c] --[/table]
[table=2, Concentrations]
[b]Taijutsu (3)[/b][c][Rigid Structure][Close Quarter Combat][Perception][Acrobatics]
[c][b]Genjutsu Types(7)[/b][c][quote="Overlay Genjutsu"]This user has learned to create entire worlds in the heads of their targets. These genjutsu allow the user to completely recreate reality within the heads of their target, and interact with them in various ways through the techniques. Overlay stand out as a threat in genjutsu users as they lapse on a single second in real time, but can last extremely long in the heads of the target.[/quote]
[quote="Warp Genjutsu"]This user has learned to combine the basics of Status and Illusion genjutsu, allowing them to use single techniques to create sensory illusions, as well as status changes on their target.[/quote][quote="Status Genjutsu Genjutsu"]This user has learned how to utilize Status Genjutsu that impose mental and cognitive effects on their target.[/quote][quote=Illusion of Force Genjutsu]This user has learned to add a physical component when using genjutsu, allowing them to create the sensation of pulling, pushing, or evoking some force against their target.[/quote]
[quote="Advanced Channeling"]This user has superb chakra control, and has learned to perform jutsu by channeling, without the use of hand seals. The user can channel any genjutsu that is designed to be channel, and there are no specified parameters in which a jutsu must fall to be channeled by this method. Channeling Genjutsu causes the user to be surrounded in an aura of chakra while channeling the genjutsu, until the genjutsu is initiated.[/quote]
[quote=”Genjutsu Sensor”]Genjutsu Sensor is not actually a class of genjutsu, but instead a skill set derived from Genjutsu knowledge. When a genjutsu user places a target in a genjutsu, the user has an acute awareness that someone is in a genjutsu, and some level of understanding of what's happening within the genjutsu. This awareness allows them to make subtle manipulations and ensure their target has been captured. Through Genjutsu Sensor, the user is able to pull that awareness into the front of their mind, and perform additional techniques classed under genjutsu to derive information from that awareness. This allows them to do things like key in on the location of their target, feel their emotions, and other sensor like events.[/quote]
[quote=”Genjutsu Package”]Genjutsu Package is a variation on initiation, a technique performed prior to a genjutsu in order to modify it. Package works by condensing the genjutsu in a dense ‘package’ of chakra, and then retaining it. Each packaging technique designates how long a technique is packaged for, and the technique cannot be initiated in the target until the timer is up. However, for ever two[2] posts a technique is packaged, the cost to perform it is reduced by 1 rank. (An A-rank package for 4 posts would cost a C-rank’s chakra to perform.) However, if the technique is not initiated in the target post it comes unpackaged, the user pays 1.5x the cost of the jutsu. This allows genjutsu users to “hold on” to jutsu and release them when the target may not be as suspecting..[/quote][c]
[b]Genjutsu Initiators (3)[/b][c]
[quote="Sound Initiation"]
This user has learn to use sound cues to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to create sounds and sustain sounds to capture their targets in a genjutsu.[/quote][quote=Sensor Initiation]
This user has learned to use their chakra's presence to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to initiate genjutsu in people who notice them with sensory techniques.[/quote][quote=Touch Initiation]
This user has learn to use physical sensations to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to physical touch the target, or touch them with objects to capture their targets in genjutsu.[/quote]

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[center][b][big]Jutsu[/big][/b][/center]
[spoiler=Genjutsu Package]
Package: D - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an D-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra costs. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: C - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an C-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra costs. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: B - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an B-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra costs. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: A - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra cost. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: S - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an S-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra cost. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: D - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an D-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a E-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: C - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an C-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a D-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: B - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an B-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a C-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: A - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an B-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: S - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an S-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an A-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: C - Level 2
C-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an C-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 4 posts. By the end of 4 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a E-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: B - Level 2
C-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an B-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 4 posts. By the end of 4 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a D-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: A - Level 2
C-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 4 posts. By the end of 4 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an C-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: S - Level 2
C-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an S-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 4 posts. By the end of 4 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an B-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: B - Level 3
B-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an B-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 6 posts. By the end of 6 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an E-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: A - Level 3
B-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 6 posts. By the end of 6 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a D-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: A - Level 4
A-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 8 posts. By the end of 8 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an E-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: S – Level 4
A-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on a S-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 8 posts. By the end of the 8 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a D-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Genjutsu Sensory][Mole]
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu Sensory
Channeling chakra and then speaking out loud, anyone who hears his voice will be caught in this genjutsu. This genjutsu causes the target to see a mole on the back of their neck for 10 posts, should they look at it. Additionally, at any point while the genjutsu is active Shio is able to focus on anyone caught in it, getting a very vague, momentary sense of all 6 of their senses. This cannot be used to convey any information, but allows Shio to determine if their senses are active, letting him know what style of genjutsu to use.

[Mole]
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu Sensory
Channeling chakra and then release a burst of chakra, anyone who senses will be caught in this genjutsu. This genjutsu causes the target to see a mole on the back of their neck for 10 posts, should they look at it. Additionally, at any point while the genjutsu is active Shio is able to focus on anyone caught in it, getting a very vague, momentary sense of all 6 of their senses. This cannot be used to convey any information, but allows Shio to determine if their senses are active, letting him know what style of genjutsu to use.

[Mole]
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu Sensory
Channeling chakra and then utilize the [Rumble] technique, causing any who feel it to be caught in this genjutsu. This genjutsu causes the target to see a mole on the back of their neck for 10 posts, should they look at it. Additionally, at any point while the genjutsu is active Shio is able to focus on anyone caught in it, getting a very vague, momentary sense of all 6 of their senses. This cannot be used to convey any information, but allows Shio to determine if their senses are active, letting him know what style of genjutsu to use.

[Terminate]
D-rank Genjutsu Sensory
Because of Shio's advanced awareness of his genjutsu in his targets, he is able to at any point during the duration of a genjutsu, end it prematurely in his target with a single seal.

[Location]
C-rank Sensor Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra, focusing on someone current caught in his genjutsu. So long as he is channeling, he'll be able to feel where that person is, regardless of the distance. He cannot use any other jutsu while utilizing this technique.

[Preparation]
C-rank Sensor Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra, focusing on someone within his genjutsu. For the next 3 posts, any time they're about to do jutsu Shio will feel a sensation as their chakra wells up for the jutsu, giving him an opportunity to prepare for the attack. This jutsu lasts for 3 posts, or until the genjutsu ends in the target.

[Experience]
B-rank Sensor Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra, focusing on an individual currently afflicted with a genjutsu. While he holds the final hand seal, he is able to experience everything about the genjutsu the target is currently experiencing by bringing it to the fore of his mind. This means feelings all feelings, and receiving all sensory information (sights, sounds, etc.). This allows Shio to gather understanding of their experiences in order to increase his combat ability.

[Genjutsu Eye]
A-rank Sensor Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra, then focus on all targets currently initiated in a genjutsu. While this technique remains channeled, Shio can focus on individual chakra signature to get a precise idea of where they are up to 25m of his current location. He also has a passive direction and number to up to 50 meters. This technique requires focus and calls for Shio to close his eyes to focus on it. Even with high levels of Control and Instinct, this jutsu can be mentally taxing as it requires Shio to sort through the individual chakra sources in the sensor’s range.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Genjutsu]
Fog
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra to perform this technique. Anyone who senses him channeling chakra will be caught in this genjutsu. For the next 5 posts they will see a fog around them, limiting vision to 5m. Because the fog is not real, it will not disappear if the target tries to disperse it.

Radiant
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra to perform this technique. Anyone who senses him channeling the chakra will be caught in this genjutsu. For the next 10 posts, anyone caught in the genjutsu that looks at Shio will see a soft light radiating from his body.

Ragnarok
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra then speak aloud, anyone who hears his voice will see the sky slowly begin to turn red, and remain that way for 10 posts. This does not change visibility in any way.

Gut Punch
C-rank Illusion of Force
Shio will do a series of hand seals, then speak out loud, focusing on a single individual around him. If that person hears him, they’ll suddenly feel a strike of [Will Power] strength at their stomach. The genjutsu and the aftereffects of it end after 2 posts.

Sweep
C-rank Illusion of Force
Shio will do a series of hand seals, then speak out loud, focusing on a single individual around him. If that person hears him, they’ll suddenly feel a strike of [Will Power] strength sweeping both of their feet, aiming to trip up anyone who isn’t strong enough to resist it. The genjutsu and the aftereffects of it end after 2 posts.

Skull Crusher
C-rank Illusion of Force
Shio will do a series of hand seals, then speak out loud, focusing on a single individual around him. If that person hears him, they’ll suddenly feel a strike of [Will Power] strength rocking at the crown of their head as if coming from the back. The genjutsu and the aftereffects of it end after 2 posts.

Savior
C-rank Status Genjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, then speak aloud. Anyone who hears his voice will have a sudden sensation that Shio is a being of great power. The genjutsu immediately ends after this, leaving most people with a lingering sensation and no explanation for it.

Depression
C-rank Warp Genjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, Shio will release a pulse of chakra. Anyone who senses this will be caught in his genjutsu. They will suddenly feel a tinge of depression strike them, as Shio moves closer to them it will fade but as he moves further it will intensify. This lasts for 5 posts.

Focus
C-rank Warp Genjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, Shio will speak aloud mentioning in his speech an object. The target will feel an intense draw towards whatever the focus of the desire is. This draw will also cause a sort of tunnel vision in the target’s sight, causing a blurring of their peripherals and making it hard to focus on anything but the target.This lasts for up to 5 posts.

Conqueror
C-rank Warp Genjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, and releasing a surge of chakra, this genjutsu will activate in anyone who senses the chakra. Those impacted will feel a sudden wave of fear every time they look at anyone that they consider adversarial, and may believe they are much stronger or intimidating than they truly are. After 3 posts the genjutsu will end.

*[Genjutsu • Doubt
C-Ranked Status Genjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, then whistle, initiating the genjutsu in anyone who hears the whistle. For the next three posts, the victims of this technique will feel tinges of doubt when listening to other people talk. While the doubt isn't strong, it creates a slight feeling that can be used to dissuade them from following instructions of other people if utilized properly.

Clamp
C-rank Illusion of Force Genjutsu
The user will do a series of handseals then release a surge of chakra towards their target. Should the target sense this, they’ll suddenly feel as if their hands are swelling. For a single post they’ll be able to perform kai, otherwise after this for 5 posts they will feel [Will Power] strength restraining their fingers if they try to move them, preventing them from grabbing anything or performing seals.

Death
B-rank Overlay Genjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, Shio will send a surge of chakra towards an individual, if they sense it Shio will capture a target in this overlay technique. Immediately the target will suddenly feel an intense pain as a kunai slides across their throat, slicing it open. For 3 posts the target will feel the life slip from their bodies, bleeding from their throats, then the genjutsu ends.

Touch of God
B-rank Warp Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra to perform this technique, then reach to touch a person. The contact will initiate this genjutsu, causing any pain they’re experiencing to begin to subside over the course of 5 posts and they will see any wounds they have slowly start to close (though they won’t actually). On the 5th post before the genjutsu ends, all their wounds will appear to rip back open and the pain will quickly return to them.

Intimidation
B-rank Illusion Genjutsu
The user will channel chakra and then take a step forward towards their target. If their target senses the user when doing so, they'll be trapped in the genjutsu. For the next 5 posts, every step the user takes towards the target will make them seem larger, more daunting, and scarier. This illusion can be mixed with other aspects to intimidate their target out of fighting.

Sweet Dreams
A-rank Status Genjutsu
Shio will do the hand seals for this technique then speak out loud, “And now, you sleep.”, for the post following this, an overwhelming drowsiness will overcome anyone afflicted with the genjutsu, and if they do not kai out of the genjutsu prior to the end of the post, will fall into a deep sleep. It takes 15 Willpower to resist this effect, and the standard Control to kai it.

Paralysis
A-rank Warp Genjutsu
Channeling chakra, this genjutsu will activate in anyone who senses him doing so. Fear will rock through the target’s body, as they will suddenly feel a sense of doubt and fear moving through them. By the end of the post, if they do not perform Kai they will feel their body being restrained by [Will Power] strength for 5 posts, unable to move unless they can overpower it.

Fright
A-rank Overlay Genjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, causing a sharp flare in his chakra. Anyone who senses this flare will be captured in an Overlay world for 4 posts, in this Overlay they will actually just be a ghost, as they float behind Shio’s body for 4 posts while he completely slaughters a small village of people. They’ll be helpless and unable to turn away as they witness him bloodily murder men, women and children without regard, leaving nothing but blood and death in his wake. At the end of the 4 posts the genjutsu ends.

Heat Death
S-rank Overlay Genjutsu
Prerequisites: 50 Willpower
Shio will channel chakra, then touch his target, capturing them in the overlay. In the moment that happens the target will suddenly feel their vision warp, the world becoming oblong and strange, as if looking at it through a fisheye lens. Everything will fade to white and the target will be left sitting in a room with Shio sat opposite of them. For the next 15 posts, the duration of the genjutsu, they can speak, move, and even perform techniques. However, Shio is in full control of their entire sensory-motor system. He can bring them excruciating pain, and soothe immediately after. Control their movements, stop them from speaking. He also has complete control of the reality within the room, allowing him to summon visuals, create events and happenings, and otherwise warp the reality to whatever he would like. Additionally, Shio has complete control over how time passes within this reality, allowing him to make it feel as if only minutes have passed, or entire centuries. This technique is taxing on the user and stuns their chakra circulatory system, disabling the use of jutsu after it ends for 1 post.

Messiah
S-rank Status Genjutsu
Prerequisite: 50 Will Power, the user must remain speaking for the duration of the genjutsu.
A genjutsu designed to be performed on large groups, after forming the proper hand seals, the user will speak. They can speak on any topic, and anyone who hears their voice while this genjutsu is active will be captured in it. This technique lasts for 10 posts, but will end prematurely if the user stops speaking at any point. Because the initiator is rolling with their voice, the impact of the technique is based on the length they’ve been within it, not the length in which it’s been active.
1st post: The afflicted will feel an overwhelmingly desperate urge to find the source of the voice and keep their eyes on the source.
2nd Post: Once they have seen the user, the afflicted will feel a sudden feeling of both reverence and fear that gets increasingly powerful over the course of the technique. Those without strong wills will feel as if they need to surrender, hopelessness sinking into their gut,
3rd Post: The afflicted will feel weakness through their body, increasing as any distance between themselves and the user is reduced, making resistance and the even movement incredibly mentally taxing.
4th Post: Anyone within the genjutsu this long will feel their willpower draining from them, most often completely paralyzed by the overwhelming authority of the user.
5th Post; Most anyone will have felt all power drained from their body, falling to their knees in reverence, fear, and obedience.
For all posts following this feeling is only increased and compounded.
The user cannot act in a way that would bring harm to any of the victims of this technique or the technique will end.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Taijutsu]

[Presence of a Saint]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception]
Shio carries himself with a proper demeanor at all times, evoking the image of a religious figure. This can make it harder for those with low Will Power to attack him unexpectedly. Shio must remain keenly aware of his surroundings in order to ensure his demeanor is not interrupted.

[Focus]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception]
Shio’s Will Power is incredibly high due to his genjutsu skill, and he can exert this Will Power to focus, able to clear out distractions with ease. This allows Shio to ignore information his senses pick up that are not particularly relevant to his current task. Everything is still perceived (not making him immune to genjutsu initiation) but allows him to ignore it mentally, keeping him clear of distractions and tricks.

[Balancing Act]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Rigid Structure]
A combination of extreme deftness and bodily reinforcement, Shio is incredibly difficult to knock off balance. This means Shio is incredibly well at keeping his balance, even against techniques designed to knock people off balance, and he can maintain his balance even when under dizzying effects.

[b]Braced[/b]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Close Quarters Combat][Rigid Structure]
With high strength and skilled in close quarters combat, Shio has trained himself to receive virtually any blow and remove knockback. So long as the strike is not great than 5 his own strength, Shio will not be thrown back or pushed back under any circumstances.

[b]Killing Intent[/b]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception]
Shio is able to amplify his killing intent to [Will Power] meters, making everyone in the area aware of his vicious nature.

[Split]
D-rank Taijutsu
[Hanzi’s Fists][Rigid Structure]
Utilizing the ability of Hanzi’s fist, Shio will hold both hands out palms touching, with one hand pointed forward and the other slightly angled out and facing downward. This causes any ninjutsu his hands touch to split, moving around his hands rather than striking him. The angle of his hands causes the break created to split completely around his body protecting him from harm unless the jutsu can double back from where it came to hit Shio from behind.

[Crowd Mentality]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception]
Shio’s life as the center of a religious movement means he has spent a lot of time in crowds, and has learned to watch and monitor crowds. As such, Shio is able to easily pick out information about a crowd and use it to his advantage. He’s also able to easily notice outliers in a crowd, those who don’t fit in, or won’t fall in with everyone else, allowing him to key in on them and pay special attention.

[Convincing]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception][Crowd Mentality]
Using his keen sense of perception, Shio is able to closely watch any number of people while speaking, allowing him to use their responses to guide any sort of speech in the direction he wants. By closely monitoring for responses and making micro changes to how he’s behaving and speaking he can ensure he’s received positively. This makes it easy for Shio to tap into crowd mentality.

[Clinch Break]
C-rank Taijutsu Maneuver
[Acrobatics]
Having excellent flexibility and body control, Shio can escape clinches with ease. This technique allows him to slither and slip out of grasps relatively well, effectively reducing the strength of anyone clinching him by 3.

[Immovable Force]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Rigid Structure]
While rather simple in execution, Shio is able to remain in place regardless of what force is exerted against him. His ability to stand firm, combined with his immense strength means that any force acting upon him is treated as if it has -3 strength, and must be greater than his own to be able to cause him to move against his will. This means faced against even the strongest of winds, blasts, explosions, and recoil, Shio is able to remain in place. Techniques meant to disorient will nullify this effect.
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[spoiler=Ninjutsu][]Barrier[]
D-rank Nintaijutsu
Requires: Hanzi's Fist
When interacting with anything that requires Hanzi's Fist for Shio to manipulate, he can do basic channel to channel chakra into the gloves, forcing a barrier 2m tall, 1m wide to form from the gloves with [Control] speed and strength, expanding the protection the gloves grant.

[]Pulse[]
D-rank Ninjutsu
Shio will charge chakra momentarily, then release a single pulse of chakra in every direction from his body that will surge out [Control x2] meters. This pulse of chakra generates no effect to anyone it touches but charges the air in accordance with Shio’s [Sage Mode: Euphoria] ability, and any active techniques.

[]Double Jump[]
D-rank Nintaijutsu
While in combat, Shio can do a basic channel to channel chakra into his feet, releasing a burst of chakra that allows him to jump again as if he was on the ground. This technique lacks the force to be combat useable, and due to the low rank of the technique can only be used once before the user has to touch the ground again.

[]Suppress[]
C-rank Ninjutsu
As Shio’s chakra causes the air to initiate sage mode in others, he has developed this technique to cancel out the effects in people. By doing hand seals and focusing on a individual, he can send a burst of chakra at them at [Control] speed, that will dispel the effects of his ability should it strike them.

[]Enhance[]
C-rank Ninjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, for the next 5 posts, his [Sage Mode] will increase the amount of ambient energy it pulls in, strengthening the Euphoria effect. This will have it's debuff increased by -3, increasing the range of sensory granted by +10m, and require any techniques used to counter its effects to be equal to or greater than this technique's rank.

[]Empower[]
B-rank Ninjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, for the next 5 posts, his [Sage Mode] will increase the amount of ambient energy it pulls in, strengthening the Euphoria effect. This will have it’s debuff increased by -5, increasing the range of the sensory granted by +20m while also refining it to the point of being able to recognize exact positions and requires any techniques used to counter its effects to be equal to or greater than this technique’s rank.[/spoiler]

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[center][b][big]History[/big][/b][/center][spoiler=Historical Accounts]Born to a mother and father of the Kawazaiwa family, there are hardly anything exceptional about Shio’s birth or infancy. His mother and father, however, belonged to a small pseudo-religious sect in the Kawazaiwa family that believed in the power of the human voice. As Shio learned to speak, his talent for the spoken word raised alarms within the sect, and soon after, his was brought forward to the heads who designated him the avatar, the voice of the Universe. Shio was raised as a central pillar to this small sect, pounded with knowledge, given every resource. Through this, it was revealed his great talent. By 5 he was already a skilled shinobi, hardly able to convey complex thoughts he was able to master jutsu with incredible ease, manipulate chakra, and perhaps most curiously, illicit incredibly potent genjutsu in combat.

The day of his 6th birthday, he was submitted to the academy, and took his oath of the voice. With this oath he swore to hold his voice in highest regard, it temper his words, to speak only with purpose. In the academy, Shio performed not only above his peers, but well above even some of his teachers. He excelled in the academy, using overlay genjutsu to manipulate time for learning to allow him to pick up more information in less time. He graduated with flying colors, at the top of his class. He now acts as a genin, studying and expanding his skills.

Shio would move on to take the chuunin exam by 8, promote to special jounin quickly there after, and be named Jounin by 10 years of age. Chosen as a representative of the villages strength, Shio was sent on international missions to bring other countries under Kirigakure’s authority. However, Shio got lost from his convoy on one of this missions, and was unable to find his way back. He has since been classified as an S-rank missing ninja and wanders the world collecting followers and allegedly trying to find his way home.

During the Great War, Shio would wonder, conquering land and eventually moving in on Iron Country. While many of the forces were out, Shio would move in on the country and usurp the seat of the Taishou during his absence. Upon their return, Shio would challenge the Taishou to battle, fighting the sword master with his bare hands. Shio would walk out the only man alive, and take the title of Taishou where he now sits, ruling over the land of samurai.[/spoiler][hr]
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Shio Revamp

Post by Ace Trainer » Mon Jun 28, 2021 1:34 pm

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Mistaki, Shio

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General Information Age: 14
Gender: Male
Height: 5’6”
Weight: 131lbs
Physical Features: As far as physical features go, Shio is rather average for a boy his age. He is slim, with a visible jawline and hazel eyes. His hair is sloppy, neck length and black with grey and white strands peppered throughout it. As a Kawazaiwa he has the familial red dots on his palms, permanently marked on him. Shio wears large round glasses that are often hidden behind unrestrained locks of hair.
Clothing/Accessories: Shio wears plain clothes, black shirt on black pants with a black belt. His clothes are slightly baggy on him. He wears his forehead protector on his head, high on his brow to hold his long hair out of his face. He wears standard ninja sandals. Shio does not wear the flak jacket typically worn by those of his rank.
Personality: Shio is a far-cry from the boy raised in Kirigakure. Now the unconventional leader of one of the greatest non-shinobi forces of the world, Shio carries himself with discipline and purpose. Many would describe him as regal, slightly haughty, and driven. Unafraid to speak, abandoning the principles he was raised with, Shio is unafraid to speak with authority, and can be rather demanding of the people around him. A boy who seeks excellence for himself and all those around him, Shio can be quite averse to failure, and will get very frustrated with those who struggle to succeed around him, or accomplish what he asks of them. However, one thing many people do not see of Shio is that he can be quite compassionate when eyes are off of him. Shio, having been raised in complex circumstances, empathizes with children like himself, and seeks them out in order to help them reach their true power and ability. He can be quite harsh on those who treat disadvantaged people unfairly or cruelly, but also believes that we have power over our destinies and some people simply choose to be in bad situations.
Battle Information Village: Kirigakure no Sato / Iron Country
Rank: S-rank Missing Ninja / Taishou of Iron Country
  • Chakra Pool: 43
  • Endurance: 41
  • Control: 40
  • Strength: 46
  • Speed: 30
  • Willpower: 50
Equipment:
  • Two kunai are kept strapped to each of his thighs.
  • 10 Exploding Tags, and 5 Smoke Tags are strapped to his belt.
Quote:
A pair of gloves made of a special, chakra enhanced material, the wearer of Emperor Hanzi's Fists can interact with anything as if it were solid, without detriment to their bodies. The wearer of these gloves could hold a hand out and block a raiton blast, or slap away a fireball, or catch and throw back a wind blast, even grabbing water or mist as if it were a solid object is possible with the gloves. This however does not supplement the user's strength, they merely give the user the ability to physically touch and move chakra as they please.
Companions: (0/1)
Primary Affinity: Suiton
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
Sage Mode: EuphoriaShio’s chakra has a passive effect on the air around him, and when he releases it, causes the affected air to be highly absorbent of the naturally occurring energy of the world. The nature charged oxygen is then absorbed through the skin, mouth or nose, essentially inducing anyone who is breathing the air or present in it into a very minor form of Sage Mode. Because it is so minor, most do not realize they are in sage mode and instead say the state feels like a small burst of euphoria. This effect leaves the air charged with natural energy for 2 posts following exposure to his chakra.Those impacted have two effects occur for the entire duration they're in the area, and for 2 posts following the exit:
  • The euphoria caused by this state has a very acute neuromuscular effect that causes a -1 in Willpower. Any technique that counters neuromuscular effects, maintains heightened body control, or antidotes for neuromuscular toxins will counteract this.
  • The Euphoria also induces sensory in those affected. They are able to sense any beings with chakra within 30m of their bodies. Those without sensory techniques can not control this unrefined sensory and will simply be aware of where those they sense are with poor accuracy. Those with sensory techniques can control this as if it was a sensory technique, including turning it off.
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Concentrations
Taijutsu (3)[Rigid Structure][Close Quarter Combat][Perception][Acrobatics]
Genjutsu Types(7)
Overlay Genjutsu:
This user has learned to create entire worlds in the heads of their targets. These genjutsu allow the user to completely recreate reality within the heads of their target, and interact with them in various ways through the techniques. Overlay stand out as a threat in genjutsu users as they lapse on a single second in real time, but can last extremely long in the heads of the target.
Warp Genjutsu:
This user has learned to combine the basics of Status and Illusion genjutsu, allowing them to use single techniques to create sensory illusions, as well as status changes on their target.
Status Genjutsu Genjutsu:
This user has learned how to utilize Status Genjutsu that impose mental and cognitive effects on their target.
Illusion of Force Genjutsu:
This user has learned to add a physical component when using genjutsu, allowing them to create the sensation of pulling, pushing, or evoking some force against their target.
Advanced Channeling:
This user has superb chakra control, and has learned to perform jutsu by channeling, without the use of hand seals. The user can channel any genjutsu that is designed to be channel, and there are no specified parameters in which a jutsu must fall to be channeled by this method. Channeling Genjutsu causes the user to be surrounded in an aura of chakra while channeling the genjutsu, until the genjutsu is initiated.
”Genjutsu Sensor”:
Genjutsu Sensor is not actually a class of genjutsu, but instead a skill set derived from Genjutsu knowledge. When a genjutsu user places a target in a genjutsu, the user has an acute awareness that someone is in a genjutsu, and some level of understanding of what's happening within the genjutsu. This awareness allows them to make subtle manipulations and ensure their target has been captured. Through Genjutsu Sensor, the user is able to pull that awareness into the front of their mind, and perform additional techniques classed under genjutsu to derive information from that awareness. This allows them to do things like key in on the location of their target, feel their emotions, and other sensor like events.
”Genjutsu Package”:
Genjutsu Package is a variation on initiation, a technique performed prior to a genjutsu in order to modify it. Package works by condensing the genjutsu in a dense ‘package’ of chakra, and then retaining it. Each packaging technique designates how long a technique is packaged for, and the technique cannot be initiated in the target until the timer is up. However, for ever two[2] posts a technique is packaged, the cost to perform it is reduced by 1 rank. (An A-rank package for 4 posts would cost a C-rank’s chakra to perform.) However, if the technique is not initiated in the target post it comes unpackaged, the user pays 1.5x the cost of the jutsu. This allows genjutsu users to “hold on” to jutsu and release them when the target may not be as suspecting..
Genjutsu Initiators (3)
Sound Initiation:
This user has learn to use sound cues to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to create sounds and sustain sounds to capture their targets in a genjutsu.
Sensor Initiation:
This user has learned to use their chakra's presence to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to initiate genjutsu in people who notice them with sensory techniques.
Touch Initiation:
This user has learn to use physical sensations to initiate genjutsu. Allowing them to physical touch the target, or touch them with objects to capture their targets in genjutsu.

Jutsu
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Package: D - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an D-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra costs. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: C - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an C-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra costs. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: B - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an B-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra costs. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: A - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra cost. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: S - Level 0
E-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an S-rank genjutsu of any style. However, unlike standard packaging genjutsu, this packaging technique allows the genjutsu to be performed at any time within the next two posts rather than requiring to be initiated immediately, but does not reduce any chakra cost. However, like packaging techniques if he does not initiate it in the 2 post span, he will pay 1.5x the cost of the technique.

Package: D - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an D-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a E-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: C - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an C-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a D-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: B - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an B-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a C-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: A - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an B-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: S - Level 1
D-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an S-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 2 posts. By the end of 2 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an A-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: C - Level 2
C-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an C-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 4 posts. By the end of 4 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a E-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: B - Level 2
C-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an B-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 4 posts. By the end of 4 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a D-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: A - Level 2
C-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 4 posts. By the end of 4 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an C-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: S - Level 2
C-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an S-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 4 posts. By the end of 4 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an B-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: B - Level 3
B-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an B-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 6 posts. By the end of 6 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an E-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: A - Level 3
B-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 6 posts. By the end of 6 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a D-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: A - Level 4
A-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on an A-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 8 posts. By the end of 8 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume an E-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.

Package: S – Level 4
A-rank Package Genjutsu
Shio will add an additional series of hand seals on the end of a technique, packaging it instead of initiating it. This technique must be performed on a S-rank genjutsu of any style, and requires 8 posts. By the end of the 8 posts the genjutsu must be initiated, however it will only consume a D-ranks worth of chakra to perform the genjutsu.
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[Mole]
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu Sensory
Channeling chakra and then speaking out loud, anyone who hears his voice will be caught in this genjutsu. This genjutsu causes the target to see a mole on the back of their neck for 10 posts, should they look at it. Additionally, at any point while the genjutsu is active Shio is able to focus on anyone caught in it, getting a very vague, momentary sense of all 6 of their senses. This cannot be used to convey any information, but allows Shio to determine if their senses are active, letting him know what style of genjutsu to use.

[Mole]
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu Sensory
Channeling chakra and then release a burst of chakra, anyone who senses will be caught in this genjutsu. This genjutsu causes the target to see a mole on the back of their neck for 10 posts, should they look at it. Additionally, at any point while the genjutsu is active Shio is able to focus on anyone caught in it, getting a very vague, momentary sense of all 6 of their senses. This cannot be used to convey any information, but allows Shio to determine if their senses are active, letting him know what style of genjutsu to use.

[Mole]
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu Sensory
Channeling chakra and then utilize the [Rumble] technique, causing any who feel it to be caught in this genjutsu. This genjutsu causes the target to see a mole on the back of their neck for 10 posts, should they look at it. Additionally, at any point while the genjutsu is active Shio is able to focus on anyone caught in it, getting a very vague, momentary sense of all 6 of their senses. This cannot be used to convey any information, but allows Shio to determine if their senses are active, letting him know what style of genjutsu to use.

[Terminate]
D-rank Genjutsu Sensory
Because of Shio's advanced awareness of his genjutsu in his targets, he is able to at any point during the duration of a genjutsu, end it prematurely in his target with a single seal.

[Location]
C-rank Sensor Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra, focusing on someone current caught in his genjutsu. So long as he is channeling, he'll be able to feel where that person is, regardless of the distance. He cannot use any other jutsu while utilizing this technique.

[Preparation]
C-rank Sensor Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra, focusing on someone within his genjutsu. For the next 3 posts, any time they're about to do jutsu Shio will feel a sensation as their chakra wells up for the jutsu, giving him an opportunity to prepare for the attack. This jutsu lasts for 3 posts, or until the genjutsu ends in the target.

[Experience]
B-rank Sensor Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra, focusing on an individual currently afflicted with a genjutsu. While he holds the final hand seal, he is able to experience everything about the genjutsu the target is currently experiencing by bringing it to the fore of his mind. This means feelings all feelings, and receiving all sensory information (sights, sounds, etc.). This allows Shio to gather understanding of their experiences in order to increase his combat ability.

[Genjutsu Eye]
A-rank Sensor Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra, then focus on all targets currently initiated in a genjutsu. While this technique remains channeled, Shio can focus on individual chakra signature to get a precise idea of where they are up to 25m of his current location. He also has a passive direction and number to up to 50 meters. This technique requires focus and calls for Shio to close his eyes to focus on it. Even with high levels of Control and Instinct, this jutsu can be mentally taxing as it requires Shio to sort through the individual chakra sources in the sensor’s range.
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Fog
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra to perform this technique. Anyone who senses him channeling chakra will be caught in this genjutsu. For the next 5 posts they will see a fog around them, limiting vision to 5m. Because the fog is not real, it will not disappear if the target tries to disperse it.

Radiant
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra to perform this technique. Anyone who senses him channeling the chakra will be caught in this genjutsu. For the next 10 posts, anyone caught in the genjutsu that looks at Shio will see a soft light radiating from his body.

Ragnarok
D-rank Illusion Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra then speak aloud, anyone who hears his voice will see the sky slowly begin to turn red, and remain that way for 10 posts. This does not change visibility in any way.

Gut Punch
C-rank Illusion of Force
Shio will do a series of hand seals, then speak out loud, focusing on a single individual around him. If that person hears him, they’ll suddenly feel a strike of [Will Power] strength at their stomach. The genjutsu and the aftereffects of it end after 2 posts.

Sweep
C-rank Illusion of Force
Shio will do a series of hand seals, then speak out loud, focusing on a single individual around him. If that person hears him, they’ll suddenly feel a strike of [Will Power] strength sweeping both of their feet, aiming to trip up anyone who isn’t strong enough to resist it. The genjutsu and the aftereffects of it end after 2 posts.

Skull Crusher
C-rank Illusion of Force
Shio will do a series of hand seals, then speak out loud, focusing on a single individual around him. If that person hears him, they’ll suddenly feel a strike of [Will Power] strength rocking at the crown of their head as if coming from the back. The genjutsu and the aftereffects of it end after 2 posts.

Savior
C-rank Status Genjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, then speak aloud. Anyone who hears his voice will have a sudden sensation that Shio is a being of great power. The genjutsu immediately ends after this, leaving most people with a lingering sensation and no explanation for it.

Depression
C-rank Warp Genjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, Shio will release a pulse of chakra. Anyone who senses this will be caught in his genjutsu. They will suddenly feel a tinge of depression strike them, as Shio moves closer to them it will fade but as he moves further it will intensify. This lasts for 5 posts.

Focus
C-rank Warp Genjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, Shio will speak aloud mentioning in his speech an object. The target will feel an intense draw towards whatever the focus of the desire is. This draw will also cause a sort of tunnel vision in the target’s sight, causing a blurring of their peripherals and making it hard to focus on anything but the target.This lasts for up to 5 posts.

Conqueror
C-rank Warp Genjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, and releasing a surge of chakra, this genjutsu will activate in anyone who senses the chakra. Those impacted will feel a sudden wave of fear every time they look at anyone that they consider adversarial, and may believe they are much stronger or intimidating than they truly are. After 3 posts the genjutsu will end.

*[Genjutsu • Doubt
C-Ranked Status Genjutsu
The user will do a series of hand seals, then whistle, initiating the genjutsu in anyone who hears the whistle. For the next three posts, the victims of this technique will feel tinges of doubt when listening to other people talk. While the doubt isn't strong, it creates a slight feeling that can be used to dissuade them from following instructions of other people if utilized properly.

Clamp
C-rank Illusion of Force Genjutsu
The user will do a series of handseals then release a surge of chakra towards their target. Should the target sense this, they’ll suddenly feel as if their hands are swelling. For a single post they’ll be able to perform kai, otherwise after this for 5 posts they will feel [Will Power] strength restraining their fingers if they try to move them, preventing them from grabbing anything or performing seals.

Death
B-rank Overlay Genjutsu
Doing a series of hand seals, Shio will send a surge of chakra towards an individual, if they sense it Shio will capture a target in this overlay technique. Immediately the target will suddenly feel an intense pain as a kunai slides across their throat, slicing it open. For 3 posts the target will feel the life slip from their bodies, bleeding from their throats, then the genjutsu ends.

Touch of God
B-rank Warp Genjutsu
Shio will channel chakra to perform this technique, then reach to touch a person. The contact will initiate this genjutsu, causing any pain they’re experiencing to begin to subside over the course of 5 posts and they will see any wounds they have slowly start to close (though they won’t actually). On the 5th post before the genjutsu ends, all their wounds will appear to rip back open and the pain will quickly return to them.

Intimidation
B-rank Illusion Genjutsu
The user will channel chakra and then take a step forward towards their target. If their target senses the user when doing so, they'll be trapped in the genjutsu. For the next 5 posts, every step the user takes towards the target will make them seem larger, more daunting, and scarier. This illusion can be mixed with other aspects to intimidate their target out of fighting.

Sweet Dreams
A-rank Status Genjutsu
Shio will do the hand seals for this technique then speak out loud, “And now, you sleep.”, for the post following this, an overwhelming drowsiness will overcome anyone afflicted with the genjutsu, and if they do not kai out of the genjutsu prior to the end of the post, will fall into a deep sleep. It takes 15 Willpower to resist this effect, and the standard Control to kai it.

Paralysis
A-rank Warp Genjutsu
Channeling chakra, this genjutsu will activate in anyone who senses him doing so. Fear will rock through the target’s body, as they will suddenly feel a sense of doubt and fear moving through them. By the end of the post, if they do not perform Kai they will feel their body being restrained by [Will Power] strength for 5 posts, unable to move unless they can overpower it.

Fright
A-rank Overlay Genjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, causing a sharp flare in his chakra. Anyone who senses this flare will be captured in an Overlay world for 4 posts, in this Overlay they will actually just be a ghost, as they float behind Shio’s body for 4 posts while he completely slaughters a small village of people. They’ll be helpless and unable to turn away as they witness him bloodily murder men, women and children without regard, leaving nothing but blood and death in his wake. At the end of the 4 posts the genjutsu ends.

Heat Death
S-rank Overlay Genjutsu
Prerequisites: 50 Willpower
Shio will channel chakra, then touch his target, capturing them in the overlay. In the moment that happens the target will suddenly feel their vision warp, the world becoming oblong and strange, as if looking at it through a fisheye lens. Everything will fade to white and the target will be left sitting in a room with Shio sat opposite of them. For the next 15 posts, the duration of the genjutsu, they can speak, move, and even perform techniques. However, Shio is in full control of their entire sensory-motor system. He can bring them excruciating pain, and soothe immediately after. Control their movements, stop them from speaking. He also has complete control of the reality within the room, allowing him to summon visuals, create events and happenings, and otherwise warp the reality to whatever he would like. Additionally, Shio has complete control over how time passes within this reality, allowing him to make it feel as if only minutes have passed, or entire centuries. This technique is taxing on the user and stuns their chakra circulatory system, disabling the use of jutsu after it ends for 1 post.

Messiah
S-rank Status Genjutsu
Prerequisite: 50 Will Power, the user must remain speaking for the duration of the genjutsu.
A genjutsu designed to be performed on large groups, after forming the proper hand seals, the user will speak. They can speak on any topic, and anyone who hears their voice while this genjutsu is active will be captured in it. This technique lasts for 10 posts, but will end prematurely if the user stops speaking at any point. Because the initiator is rolling with their voice, the impact of the technique is based on the length they’ve been within it, not the length in which it’s been active.
1st post: The afflicted will feel an overwhelmingly desperate urge to find the source of the voice and keep their eyes on the source.
2nd Post: Once they have seen the user, the afflicted will feel a sudden feeling of both reverence and fear that gets increasingly powerful over the course of the technique. Those without strong wills will feel as if they need to surrender, hopelessness sinking into their gut,
3rd Post: The afflicted will feel weakness through their body, increasing as any distance between themselves and the user is reduced, making resistance and the even movement incredibly mentally taxing.
4th Post: Anyone within the genjutsu this long will feel their willpower draining from them, most often completely paralyzed by the overwhelming authority of the user.
5th Post; Most anyone will have felt all power drained from their body, falling to their knees in reverence, fear, and obedience.
For all posts following this feeling is only increased and compounded.
The user cannot act in a way that would bring harm to any of the victims of this technique or the technique will end.
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[Presence of a Saint]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception]
Shio carries himself with a proper demeanor at all times, evoking the image of a religious figure. This can make it harder for those with low Will Power to attack him unexpectedly. Shio must remain keenly aware of his surroundings in order to ensure his demeanor is not interrupted.

[Focus]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception]
Shio’s Will Power is incredibly high due to his genjutsu skill, and he can exert this Will Power to focus, able to clear out distractions with ease. This allows Shio to ignore information his senses pick up that are not particularly relevant to his current task. Everything is still perceived (not making him immune to genjutsu initiation) but allows him to ignore it mentally, keeping him clear of distractions and tricks.

[Balancing Act]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Rigid Structure]
A combination of extreme deftness and bodily reinforcement, Shio is incredibly difficult to knock off balance. This means Shio is incredibly well at keeping his balance, even against techniques designed to knock people off balance, and he can maintain his balance even when under dizzying effects.

Braced
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Close Quarters Combat][Rigid Structure]
With high strength and skilled in close quarters combat, Shio has trained himself to receive virtually any blow and remove knockback. So long as the strike is not great than 5 his own strength, Shio will not be thrown back or pushed back under any circumstances.

Killing Intent
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception]
Shio is able to amplify his killing intent to [Will Power] meters, making everyone in the area aware of his vicious nature.

[Split]
D-rank Taijutsu
[Hanzi’s Fists][Rigid Structure]
Utilizing the ability of Hanzi’s fist, Shio will hold both hands out palms touching, with one hand pointed forward and the other slightly angled out and facing downward. This causes any ninjutsu his hands touch to split, moving around his hands rather than striking him. The angle of his hands causes the break created to split completely around his body protecting him from harm unless the jutsu can double back from where it came to hit Shio from behind.

[Crowd Mentality]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception]
Shio’s life as the center of a religious movement means he has spent a lot of time in crowds, and has learned to watch and monitor crowds. As such, Shio is able to easily pick out information about a crowd and use it to his advantage. He’s also able to easily notice outliers in a crowd, those who don’t fit in, or won’t fall in with everyone else, allowing him to key in on them and pay special attention.

[Convincing]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception][Crowd Mentality]
Using his keen sense of perception, Shio is able to closely watch any number of people while speaking, allowing him to use their responses to guide any sort of speech in the direction he wants. By closely monitoring for responses and making micro changes to how he’s behaving and speaking he can ensure he’s received positively. This makes it easy for Shio to tap into crowd mentality.

[Clinch Break]
C-rank Taijutsu Maneuver
[Acrobatics]
Having excellent flexibility and body control, Shio can escape clinches with ease. This technique allows him to slither and slip out of grasps relatively well, effectively reducing the strength of anyone clinching him by 3.

[Immovable Force]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Rigid Structure]
While rather simple in execution, Shio is able to remain in place regardless of what force is exerted against him. His ability to stand firm, combined with his immense strength means that a force of +5 strength than him is required to be able to cause him to move against his will. This means faced against even the strongest of winds, blasts, explosions, and recoil, Shio is able to remain in place.
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[]Barrier[]
D-rank Nintaijutsu
Requires: Hanzi's Fist
When interacting with anything that requires Hanzi's Fist for Shio to manipulate, he can do basic channel to channel chakra into the gloves, forcing a barrier 2m tall, 1m wide to form from the gloves with [Control] speed and strength, expanding the protection the gloves grant.

[]Pulse[]
D-rank Ninjutsu
Shio will charge chakra momentarily, then release a pulse of chakra in every direction from his body that will surge out [Control x2] meters. This pulse of chakra generates no effect to anyone it touches but charges the air in accordance with Shio’s [Sage Mode: Euphoria] ability, and any active techniques.

[]Double Jump[]
D-rank Nintaijutsu
While in combat, Shio can do a basic channel to channel chakra into his feet, releasing a burst of chakra that allows him to jump again as if he was on the ground. This technique lacks the force to be combat useable, and due to the low rank of the technique can only be used once before the user has to touch the ground again.

[]Suppress[]
C-rank Ninjutsu
As Shio’s chakra causes the air to initiate sage mode in others, he has developed this technique to cancel out the effects in people. By doing hand seals and focusing on a individual, he can send a burst of chakra at them at [Control] speed, that will dispel the effects of his ability should it strike them.

[]Enhance[]
C-rank Ninjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, for the next 5 posts, his [Sage Mode] will increase the amount of ambient energy it pulls in, strengthening the Euphoria effect. This will have it's debuff increased by -3, increasing the range of sensory granted by +10m, and require any techniques used to counter its effects to be equal to or greater than this technique's rank.

[]Empower[]
B-rank Ninjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, for the next 5 posts, his [Sage Mode] will increase the amount of ambient energy it pulls in, strengthening the Euphoria effect. This will have it’s debuff increased by -5, increasing the range of the sensory granted by +20m, and require any techniques used to counter its effects to be equal to or greater than this technique’s rank.

History
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Born to a mother and father of the Kawazaiwa family, there are hardly anything exceptional about Shio’s birth or infancy. His mother and father, however, belonged to a small pseudo-religious sect in the Kawazaiwa family that believed in the power of the human voice. As Shio learned to speak, his talent for the spoken word raised alarms within the sect, and soon after, his was brought forward to the heads who designated him the avatar, the voice of the Universe. Shio was raised as a central pillar to this small sect, pounded with knowledge, given every resource. Through this, it was revealed his great talent. By 5 he was already a skilled shinobi, hardly able to convey complex thoughts he was able to master jutsu with incredible ease, manipulate chakra, and perhaps most curiously, illicit incredibly potent genjutsu in combat.

The day of his 6th birthday, he was submitted to the academy, and took his oath of the voice. With this oath he swore to hold his voice in highest regard, it temper his words, to speak only with purpose. In the academy, Shio performed not only above his peers, but well above even some of his teachers. He excelled in the academy, using overlay genjutsu to manipulate time for learning to allow him to pick up more information in less time. He graduated with flying colors, at the top of his class. He now acts as a genin, studying and expanding his skills.

Shio would move on to take the chuunin exam by 8, promote to special jounin quickly there after, and be named Jounin by 10 years of age. Chosen as a representative of the villages strength, Shio was sent on international missions to bring other countries under Kirigakure’s authority. However, Shio got lost from his convoy on one of this missions, and was unable to find his way back. He has since been classified as an S-rank missing ninja and wanders the world collecting followers and allegedly trying to find his way home.

During the Great War, Shio would wonder, conquering land and eventually moving in on Iron Country. While many of the forces were out, Shio would move in on the country and usurp the seat of the Taishou during his absence. Upon their return, Shio would challenge the Taishou to battle, fighting the sword master with his bare hands. Shio would walk out the only man alive, and take the title of Taishou where he now sits, ruling over the land of samurai.

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Post by ShinobiTruth » Thu Jul 01, 2021 7:35 pm

Forgive me, could you please provide a list of the jutsu you exchanged (those that were added specifically) for review?

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Post by Ace Trainer » Sun Jul 04, 2021 2:20 pm

oh ye duh
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[]Pulse[]
D-rank Ninjutsu
Shio will charge chakra momentarily, then release a single pulse of chakra in every direction from his body that will surge out [Control x2] meters. This pulse of chakra generates no effect to anyone it touches but charges the air in accordance with Shio’s [Sage Mode: Euphoria] ability, and any active techniques.

[]Suppress[]
C-rank Ninjutsu
As Shio’s chakra causes the air to initiate sage mode in others, he has developed this technique to cancel out the effects in people. By doing hand seals and focusing on a individual, he can send a burst of chakra at them at [Control] speed, that will dispel the effects of his ability should it strike them.

[]Empower[]
B-rank Ninjutsu
Shio will do a series of hand seals, for the next 5 posts, his [Sage Mode] will increase the amount of ambient energy it pulls in, strengthening the Euphoria effect. This will have it’s debuff increased by -5, increasing the range of the sensory granted by +20m while also refining it to the point of being able to recognize exact positions and requires any techniques used to counter its effects to be equal to or greater than this technique’s rank.

[Immovable Force]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Rigid Structure]
While rather simple in execution, Shio is able to remain in place regardless of what force is exerted against him. His ability to stand firm, combined with his immense strength means that any force acting upon him is treated as if it has -3 strength, and must be greater than his own to be able to cause him to move against his will. This means faced against even the strongest of winds, blasts, explosions, and recoil, Shio is able to remain in place. Techniques meant to disorient will nullify this effect.

[Convincing]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Perception][Crowd Mentality]
Using his keen sense of perception, Shio is able to closely watch any number of people while speaking, allowing him to use their responses to guide any sort of speech in the direction he wants. By closely monitoring for responses and making micro changes to how he’s behaving and speaking he can ensure he’s received positively. This makes it easy for Shio to tap into crowd mentality.
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Post by TheLacarix » Fri Jul 16, 2021 12:23 pm

[]Pulse[] & []Empower[] < I am concerned about this, as it could allow for a maximum of 100m & 50m respectively. Whereas a way to balance your euphoria technique is the relatively short distance of 30m and allows for *some* counterplay for those with low willpower. This negates that, especially in a tournament setting. (E.G smaller arenas)

[]Suppress[] < Just to be clear, this is to simply supress your effect correct not other’s sage modes? (Just want to double check I’m reading this right).

[Convincing] < I’m not sure you even really need this, as against PC it won’t really have a systemic effect however against NPC it would be fine and could just simply be a personality trait.
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Post by Ace Trainer » Sun Jul 18, 2021 6:23 pm

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[]Pulse[] & []Empower[] < I am concerned about this, as it could allow for a maximum of 100m & 50m respectively. Whereas a way to balance your euphoria technique is the relatively short distance of 30m and allows for *some* counterplay for those with low willpower. This negates that, especially in a tournament setting. (E.G smaller arenas)
I don't understand what you mean by this.
His ability doesn't have a range; it's determined by where his chakra is. He could set a fuuin 200m from himself that releases a burst of chakra over a 5m area and it would induce the effect as well. He could do a mist tech and it would effect everyone in the mist.

The range limit of 30m is how far the sensory the people under the effect are. The primary counter-play for this ability is the several methods of countering it written into the ability, the relatively short time span it remains active, and the fact that it imbues everyone with the ability to track Shio.

Thats correct about Suppress, and I would like to keep it at Convincing.
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Post by Nafan~ » Fri Jul 23, 2021 9:40 am

[]Pulse[]
D-rank Ninjutsu
^ I know this sounds kind of dumb, but is there some way you can make this clearer that it's just a one-time wave with no duration?


[]Empower[]
B-rank Ninjutsu
^ Requiring a B-rank 'I cancel my sensory' technique is an unrealistic point of counterplay, since there's literally no reason for a person to have a technique to just cancel their existing sensory techniques at all, let alone one of high rank. Sensors to just turn off this effect may be required to have a technique, but anything else will be a control battle.

[Immovable Force]
C-rank Taijutsu Discipline
[Rigid Structure]
^ Is there a reason you get a +5 without applying stat buff rules here? I can't find anything in the rules to support this technique working without a debuff or some other kind of drawback other than I used a c-rank taijutsu.

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Post by Ace Trainer » Fri Jul 23, 2021 1:43 pm

Pulse fixed.

Empower - I was under the impression sensors could willingly deactivate their sensory w/o any jutsu. That "counter" line is in regards to anti-neurotoxins, bodily control techniques/etc. which is how the ability functions.
However I did add into it that the sensory granted is more refined in addition to the increased range.

Immovable force - sorry that should be -3 this was in my notepad from before the effective debuff rules, fixed
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Post by Rain21199 » Fri Aug 20, 2021 4:06 pm

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" A 7 for Zangy for example, is different from a 7 from Envy who is not quite a nuanced writer as Zangy is (sorry Envy), which is different from a 7 for Rain, who has English as his second language." - Onu 2016

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TyDie
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Shio Revamp

Post by TyDie » Fri Aug 20, 2021 4:14 pm

1/2
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Sunagakure no SatoHenrin EmiGenin[color=darkgoldenrod][b][/b][/color]
Konohagakure no SatoIbakuro AiyaChuunin[color=#8CD600][/color]
Sunagakure no SatoKouseki TakumaGenin[color=#003893][b][/b][/color], [b][color=#AFBCDB][/color][/b]
Kirigakure no SatoKazuki RyuChuunin[color=#dc143c][/color], [b][color=#C71585][/color][/b]
Iwagakure No SatoHiraku KenjiBannin S-Rank Missing Ninja[b][color=slategray][/color][/b]
Iwagakure No SatoFukusha JinsaiJounin[color=#BF0000][/color], [b][glow=orangered][color=#000000][/color][/glow][/b]

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Rain21199
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Shio Revamp

Post by Rain21199 » Fri Aug 20, 2021 4:14 pm

2/2 congrats on getting this passed!

Mamoru Gerudo
Konohagakure - D-Rank

Resu
Owl Country - D-Rank

" A 7 for Zangy for example, is different from a 7 from Envy who is not quite a nuanced writer as Zangy is (sorry Envy), which is different from a 7 for Rain, who has English as his second language." - Onu 2016

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