Ottozeo- Custom Ability (Soseigan[Composite eye])

[Ottozeo]

Soseigan | 組成目 | Composition Eye

The Sharingan, the Byakugan, and the Rinnegan. Believed to be three parts of the same coin, all descended from one another in various mutations, all stemming back to the Sage of Six Paths. But, as many have discovered, they were not the only mutations. Named 'The Composition Eye', the Soseigan shares its connection with the Rinnegan in the unmistakable presentation. It shares many similarities with the Sharingan and Byakugan of legend, and seems to be far less famous for its many deeds.

The Soseigan present wildly, with little thought or creed connecting the people who inherit it. Many who unlock a Soseigan find themselves in the midst of legendary or heroic deeds, or at the sight of great slaughter. No Soseigan has ever awakened in the comfort of someone's daily life. The price to find it is steep, and has led many to believe the eye itself is cursed. Many of its wielders were actively hunted in the early days of ninja life, thought to be omens of death or misfortune. This bloody history stunted the spread of the Soseigan, leaving it to trail behind its more famous brothers, despite their tendency to invite no less misery, if truth be told.

The Soseigan, when manifested, is a vibrant, shining blue. The eye itself emits light, thought to be the overflow of chakra into the organ. When fully manifested, the eye "projects" a series of dials and gears in front of the wielder's face, each pattern specific to the Soseigan wielder. These dials help to angle and direct the Soseigan's power so it may be used more efficiently. Its initial manifestation simply appears as if the iris and cornea have been drawn on in glowing blue ink. A complex, interlocking gear-like pattern turns in the eyes themselves, creating a hypnotic effect thought to be remnants of its genetic link to the Sharingan. Geneaologists suspect that since its powers lie in a similar vein, and that the Copy Wheel Eye also has a near luminescent form, that the Composition Eye must have mutated from directly from the Sharingan. Although there is some debate whether or not the evolution might have occurred the other way around.

The Composition Eye, a relatively fresh doujutsu in a land dominated by those left since antiquity, is a strange and fickle creature. Sure, like many doujutsu, it provides the ability to see chakra as it is molded, to distinguish clone from creator, and to, by and large, increase the ability of the body to track high speed movements. The Soseigan differs from it counterparts in two key ways. The Soseigan cannot see chakra inside of a body. It cannot target chakra pathways like the Byakugan, instead only seeing the chakra after it has left the body. Physical objects seem to pose no issue to its detection, but living matter, like humans, animals, and to a degree plant life, blocks its sight. The second major difference is the fact that the eye analyzes but does not copy the chakra it sees. Instead, it destroys or breaks apart that chakra. Only it does so incredibly selectively. It gained the moniker 'The Composition Eye' because it can see, to a near infinitesimal degree, the composition of chakra, and all other substances, really. The Soseigan can determine within a near .0002% degree of error the exact degree and mixtures of different elemental and shape manipulations of a piece of chakra, and then strip those pieces apart. Fireballs suddenly become empty balls of force. Punches lose their power. The tiniest crack on a wall is exploited to create an opening. The Soseigan sees vulnerabilities in the composition of different attacks and exploits them to the highest possible degree.


chakra per post: idk?


Soseigan Sight

idea Effect: While the Soseigan is in the user's possession, the users speed, endurance and willpower are increased by [?]

Description: The Soseigan's main method of visual acuity is to find weaknesses. That may mean a fireball whose trajectory was off, or that was improperly made and sealed in the haste of battle. A Genjutsu whose construct has a visible edge or a triggering sensational component, may be detected using the analysis of the chakra that makes up any attack. Even Taijutsu relies upon composition to a certain degree, and the angle of a punch may be detected and interfered with before it is even thrown. As such, Soseigan wielders will often find themselves knocking aside or shrugging off attacks that ought to have killed them.


Soseigan Detection

Effect: While Soseigan is active, increase the user's control increases by [??]

Description: Some attacks have glaring, gaping flaws. Others have minute flaws, often detected by the Soseigan that are invisible to anyone else. These flaws can be exploited. Unraveling a jutsu before it ever strikes the wielder because it was sloppily made, or knocking a martial artist out of their stance because their balance was minutely incorrect. The Soseigan can see it all.


Soseigan Disassembly

Effect: If the Soseigan is Active and there are unresolved techniques targeting anyone in the battle, this character may pay ??? Chakra to remove an active/passive effect of the ability. The justu no longer benefits from the ability related to the effect of the [Tag].

Description: Upon seeing the composition of a technique, the Soseigan can go one step further. Instead of copying or reflecting that composition, the Soseigan can rip its composition apart, weakening the attack before it can get close enough to strike. Ninjutsu may suddenly lose their elemental manipulation. Traps will suddenly appear like regular jutsu. Even Taijutsu users will find their pressure points attacked in just the right way to render their style of martial arts incoherent.


Soseigan Masteries

Stored Patterns

Effect: When the user blocks an attack while the Soseigan is active, the user may designate one [Tag] on that attack. They can add that [Tag] to an attack made during their attacks of the same turn. If that [Tag] requires a skill to use the user may use the effect of that skill as if they possess it.

Description: Splintered from their branching history with the Sharingan, the Soseigan's ability to disrupt chakra flows can be harnessed for a new purpose. By studying the shape of something they make contact with, a skilled user of the Soseigan can alter the normal flow of their own Chakra, repeating these patterns and styles in a rudimentary style of 'copying' the parts of the techniques that they are intimately familiar with: its shape and nature manipulations.


Improved Disassembly [Jonin/Sennin]

Effect: When activating 'Soseigan Disassembly' this character can select two Tags on the unresolved attack(s) to remove instead of one. The effect also lingers for one additiona post (2 at jonin(A)/ 3 at Sennin?(S))

Description: The more one practices pulling techniques apart, the faster they can do it, often rendering techniques completely devoid of shape or substance.

[Valkier]

Please use the modification template so that we can easily see which character this change is for

@ 1st paragraph: The sage of six paths and the rinnegan don't exist in our alternate universe (or at least not yet, since no one's made them) - and while the byakugan and sharingan do, in various forms, they're distinctly unique things and don't have the same lore/connectivity that they do in the Naruto canon. But you could totally omit the history and just create the eye without that backstory.
The Shogo-Zumi of the Fukusha clan is the closest archive version of the copycat style Sharingan. A few members have made eyes called Sharingan, but with varying abilities and powers.

Chakra per post: There's two ways to do this -- you can either pay a permanent CP cost and have the eye always active, or you can build it like the current Byakugan, where the eye itself is free to use (though duration is limited), but you use jutsu (which each cost chakra as normal) to access its effects:

The maximum operating time a user can utilize their Byakugan at a time is equal to their Chakra Pool stat divided by 4 rounded down, to a minimum of one post. Upon reaching the max duration, the stress of using their Byakugan to it’s limit causes a cooldown period of 1/2 of the duration time, to a minimum of one post. During this cooldown period, the Byakugan cannot be activated and attempting to do so will cause physical pain. Duration is based off total posts where the Byakugan is activated, meaning users can turn it on and off to have a shorter cooldown.

Since you're granting boosts with the eye and have a list of tiered progression, I'd recommend building it with a Specialist stat (see: Specialist Stats) to get the most oomph out of the ability.
I'd recommend copying the layout of the Fukusha's Shogo-zumi, with the description/definition, then the rules and quirks of how it works, followed by the Mastery table breaking down the progression of the eye's abilities. This also gives you a good breakdown of what stat boosts are appropriate at each stage. Later stat boost tiers supercede the lower ones, so you should build them up progressively rather than jumping from stat to stat across tiers.

Soseigan Sight & Detection — these are very similar and could be the same effect, but neither are worthy of an ability slot to access. You can gain a similar level of visual acuity using taijutsu disciplines.

Soseigan Disassembly — Now this is interesting, I like it. Can you expand on how the dissassembly reaches the target jutsu or taijutsu? I.e., do you need to throw a ball of chakra at someone and hit them in order to "render their style of martial arts incoherent"? What I'm looking for here is a method of counterplay for fairness, so just looking at someone isn't enough to stop their jutsu working. There must be a defined way to resist or avoid the effect. It could be a stat check, such as your [Control] against their [Control] or [Willpower] or [Endurance] (etc., depending on what type of jutsu you're targeting).

Soseigan Masteries — I'm not too sure what a [Tag] entails, can you elaborate? This should be something put in a 'definitions' section of the ability. Copying shape and nature transformations may not be possible due to the aforementioned Shogo-Zumi; that's partly what that eye ability does. But given that your previous step was about removing passives, perhaps you could copy and apply passive effects using the Soseigan?

Improved Disassembly — Same comment about Tags as above. What's the base duration of a Tag? You should base the increase on one of the user's stats, or specialist/mastery level, rather than rank (rank is an in-character job title, it has no actual bearing on a character's strength).

Overall I think I'd recommend focusing the ability on the disassembly and mastery parts, expanding them to unlock their potential (what rank of jutsu they can disassemble/modify, number of tags and stat boosts granted) based on the progression of a mastery stat.

[Valkier]

Any updates on this?
As advised in Benjiken's app in registration, I'd recommend taking this draft and adding it to the "first ability" table in his registration topic, combining it into one application.

[Zao]

3 Days.

[Valkier]

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