[War]Shuryo, Shion

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[War]Shuryo, Shion

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Shuryo, Shion
Land Shark

General Information Age: 23
Gender: Male
Height: 5'8
Weight: 211lbs
Physical Features/Clothing:

Shion, revered warrior of the Shuryo Clan, stands proudly at 5 feet 8 inches, his powerful frame weighing a solid 211 pounds. Though not the tallest among his brethren, his stature exudes an undeniable aura of strength and authority. His sand-white hair, shaved clean on the sides, cascades in intricate dreadlocks down his back, each lock adorned with beads and trinkets symbolizing his lineage and achievements. The stark contrast of his hair against his dark, shark-like skin emphasizes his imposing presence.

Shion's eyes, with their black sclera and piercing yellow irises, hold a fierce determination that mirrors the relentless spirit of the ocean's predators. They betray a wisdom forged through countless battles and trials, a testament to his unwavering dedication to the Shuryo Clan. Adorned in attire crafted from the very essence of his heritage, Shion wears knee-high leather boots made from the supple yet durable skin of sharks, a symbol of his connection to the creatures of the deep. A leather battle skirt, also fashioned from shark skin, hangs from his waist, providing both protection and freedom of movement in combat. Not a shred of shirt adorns his torso, allowing his muscular physique to be fully exposed, a display of his unyielding strength and prowess in battle. Beneath his high cheekbones, below his eyes, Shion possesses a set of gills, a unique feature inherited from his shark ancestry. These gills, concealed beneath his skin, serve as a constant reminder of his connection to the ocean depths and the creatures that inhabit them. Additionally, another set of gills adorns Shion's body above his ribcage, nestled below his pectoral muscles. These gills, like the ones on his face, remain hidden from view, a testament to the subtle yet profound influence of his shark lineage on his physical form.

Picture:
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Personality:

Shion's personality is a complex tapestry woven from the threads of his heritage, experiences, and aspirations. As an exile of his clan, he carries the weight of longing for a home he can no longer return to. Despite this, his love for his clan burns fiercely within him, a flame that fuels his hope of one day reuniting with his kin. Living as a hermit in the vast expanse of the forest, Shion has grown accustomed to solitude, finding solace in the quiet embrace of nature. He prefers the company of the trees and the songs of the wind to the bustling crowds of human settlements, and often withdraws from social interactions, seeking refuge in the tranquility of his surroundings.

Yet, beneath this solitary exterior lies the heart of a berserker, a warrior whose primal instincts are unleashed with ferocity when faced with battle. In the heat of combat, Shion becomes a force to be reckoned with, tapping into a savage fury that knows no bounds, his movements guided by instinct and honed skill. Despite his reluctance to engage with others, Shion finds joy in the simple pleasures of life. He delights in the rigors of training, pushing himself to new limits in pursuit of perfection. He revels in the cool embrace of the water, losing himself in the rhythmic strokes of swimming that echo the fluid grace of his shark ancestors. And he thrives on the thrill of exploration, venturing deep into the heart of the forest, uncovering its secrets with an insatiable curiosity.

Shion's loyalty is not easily earned, reserved only for those who command his respect through strength and wisdom. He holds a deep reverence for the elderly and the innocence of children, their presence serving as a reminder of the cyclical nature of life and the importance of tradition. Yet, he expects all adults, regardless of gender, to carry their own weight, valuing self-reliance and resilience above all else. In Shion's eyes, strength is not measured by age or title, but by actions and deeds. He respects those who lead with integrity and conviction, regardless of their station in life. And while he may walk the path of exile alone, his heart remains tethered to the hope of one day returning to the embrace of his clan, a beacon of unwavering loyalty amidst the shadows of uncertainty.

Battle Information Village: Shark Country
Rank: A-Rank
  • Chakra Pool: 21
  • Endurance: 35
  • Control: 20
  • Strength: 39
  • Speed: 35
  • Willpower: 10
  • Power Rank: A
Equipment:

Leviathan Dragon Tomahawks: The handle of the tomahawk is crafted from a single, solid section of Leviathan Dragon bone, carefully shaped and polished to ensure a comfortable and secure grip. The natural curvature of the bone fits perfectly in hand, providing both balance and control during use. At the striking end of the tomahawk, a series of fearsome Leviathan Dragon teeth are embedded into the bone, forming a formidable cutting edge that is as sharp as it is intimidating. These teeth, ranging in size and shape, have been expertly selected and affixed to the tomahawk with meticulous precision, ensuring maximum durability and effectiveness in combat. Shion keeps four of these tomahawks in leather loops on his belt. Two on his left hip and two on his right hip.

Shrapnel Bombs: Shion keeps 2 softball sized rocks that have been engraved with an Explosion rune in a leather pouch on his belt.

Companions: (0/1)
Affinity/Specialization: Suiton
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
Umihada:
Umihada
The user’s permanently takes on the characteristics of a shark, their entire body is covered from head toe in hard, durable scales, that are locked tightly against one another and act as an armour, these scales are incredibly sharp and give the user a passive grinding ability. These scales are equal to the user’s [Endurance] and will protect the user until broken, however underneath their skin is quite soft, giving a -5 [Endurance] until the scales are repaired. (Usually the entirety of the thread.) They also have up to three rows of sharp teeth. They have a natural Lateral Line across their spine, meaning when I'm contact with water they are sensitive to electronic signals and can pick up their location, 3 Metres per [Endurance] to anything else in physical contact with the water. They can breathe under water indefinitely, their pupils can also dilate at will, increasing how much light and darkness they take in, being able to see in even the darkest of areas.
Passive (Grinding)Show
  • 1-14 Strength Requirement: Minor scrapes and cuts, minor bleeding.
  • 15-24 Strength Requirement: Scrapes, removal of skin, moderate bleeding.
  • 25-34 Strength Requirement: Removal of upper muscle, heavy bleeding.
  • 35+ Strength Requirement: Grinding of flesh, removal of deep tissue, profuse bleeding.
  • 45+ Strength Requirement: Grinding of flesh, removal of deep tissue, profuse bleeding, muscle and bone.
    Second Ability
    Third Ability
    Concentrations
    Ninjutsu
    Suiton:
    Suiton Affinity
    A character with this concentration is able to utilize Suiton, and can make and use any custom or archived jutsu that require the Suiton affinity. Suiton has a passive Replenishing effect.
    Passive (Replenishing)Show
    Suiton's effect is replenishing, this means that suiton jutsu passively repair themselves when damaged, at no additional cost to the user. The rate of repairing itself is 1/3 [Strength] per post. This only works for the length of the technique, so maintaining the damage to Suiton until the jutsu expires will stop it from regrowing.
    Taijutsu
    Close Quarters Combat:
    The fundamental skill of [Close Quarters Combat] indicates the user's proficiency to efficiently utilize martial arts and advanced combat moves involving the body, for example but not limited to, advanced kicks, grapples, advanced punches, etc.
    Deft Hands:
    The fundamental skill of [Deft Hands] indicates the user’s proficiency with using their hands in very specific and complex movements, like sleight of hand and targeting very small and specific points on an opponent’s body. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu in various ways.
    Rigid Structure:
    The fundamental skill of [Rigid Structure] describes the user’s ability to adeptly position and lock in their skeletal structure to efficiently absorb blows with minimal damage to their person. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
    Perception:
    The fundamental skill of [Perception] describes the user’s practiced methods of more keenly focussing their senses for a short time. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
    Alternative Weaponry:
    The fundamental skill of [Alternative Weaponry] indicates the user's proficiency with rare, uncommon, or otherwise non-standard weapons that aren't typically grouped under other concentrations. This could be anything like Staves, Axes, Spears, Nunchakus, Shields, etc.
    Projectile Weapons:
    The fundamental skill of [Projectile Weapons] indicates the user’s proficiency with weapons designed to attack from afar, such as bows, shuriken, senbon, launchers and the like. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
    Genjutsu[Place them here]

    Jutsu
    NinjutsuShow
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    Tomahawk TaijutsuShow
    [Tomahawk Style - Ambidextrous]
    D-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
    After practicing for a long amount of time with the concept of using both of their hands with equal skill, the user has developed a level of ambidexterity that allows them to utilize both hands equally and as effectively without any penalty. This extends to other methods of combat or simple everyday life as well.

    [Tomahawk Style • Release]
    D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    Prerequisites: [Projectile Weapons]
    Through rigorous training, practitioners attain the ability to seamlessly transition between slashing and throwing techniques, adapting to the flow of battle with fluidity and finesse. Unlike untrained wielders who struggle to find the optimal rotation and force for accurate strikes, those proficient in this technique possess a deep understanding of the weapon's dynamics.

    [Tomahawk Style • Cleave]
    D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    Tomahawk Style • Cleave embodies the essence of simplicity and raw power within tomahawk combat. In this fundamental technique, the practitioner adopts a stable stance, firmly planting their feet on the ground to establish a strong foundation. With a singular, decisive motion, the practitioner executes an overhead chop, wielding the tomahawk with precision and force. As the strike descends, the practitioner twists at the waist, enhancing the momentum and power behind the blow. This seamless integration of stance, strike, and twist generates a devastating force capable of cleaving through obstacles with formidable strength. Tomahawk Style • Cleave serves as a cornerstone technique, laying the groundwork for more advanced maneuvers within the style, while exemplifying the efficiency and efficacy inherent in tomahawk combat.

    [Tomahawk Style • Lumberjack]
    D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    With a fluid motion born of practiced skill, the practitioner unleashes the Lumberjack technique by twisting at the abdomen while executing a powerful strike with the tomahawk. This motion harnesses the rotational force generated by the body, amplifying the impact of the attack and maximizing its cutting potential.

    [Tomahawk Style • Block]
    D-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    The Tomahawk Style • Block technique empowers practitioners to intercept incoming attacks with precision and finesse. With a keen understanding of weapon dynamics, practitioners adeptly position their tomahawks to intercept blows without risking damage to their weapons.

    [Tomahawk Style • Splitting The Log]
    C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    The technique unfolds with a strategic feint aimed at diverting the opponent's attention towards an apparent vulnerability, typically a precise slash across the chest. This deceptive maneuver serves as a precursor to the main sequence, setting the stage for the practitioner's decisive strike. Capitalizing on the momentary distraction, the practitioner swiftly executes the core of the technique. With unwavering precision, the tomahawk descends like a swift blade, targeting the lower extremities with devastating intent. The calculated trajectory ensures maximum impact, delivering a forceful blow aimed at crippling the target's mobility.

    [Tomahawk Style • Clearing The Shrubbery]
    C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    Prerequisites: [Tomahawk Style • Dual Wielding]
    Tomahawk Style • Clearing The Shrubbery involves a sequence of strikes initiated from a dual-wielding stance. The practitioner begins with an overhead vertical strike towards the target's shoulder while pivoting at the abdomen. After completing this strike and the abdominal rotation, they swiftly rotate their abdomen in the opposite direction while executing a diagonal slash with the offhand tomahawk from the hip up to the shoulder of the opponent.

    [Tomahawk Style • Dual Wielding]
    C-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
    Having undergone extensive training in the use of tomahawks, the user has become adept in their use, able to utilize them perfectly regardless of the hand used.

    [Tomahawk Style • Counter]
    C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    Prerequisites: [Tomahawk Style • Dual Wielding]
    Tomahawk Style • Counter involves blocking an incoming attack with one tomahawk while simultaneously executing a slashing attack with the other. The practitioner chooses the ideal side to both block and attack, aiming to expose vulnerable areas such as the target's back. This technique capitalizes on the practitioner's proficiency in dual wielding, enabling them to maintain defensive posture while delivering effective counterattacks.

    [Tomahawk Style • Disarm]
    C-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    Tomahawk Style • Disarm is a tactical maneuver aimed at seizing control of the opponent's weapon. The practitioner intercepts incoming attacks and locks the opponent's weapon using one or both tomahawks. By leveraging superior strength, the practitioner twists to wrench the opponent's weapon free from their grasp. This technique requires the practitioner's [Strength] to be higher than the target's [Strength] for successful execution.

    [Tomahawk Style • Lumberjack's Fury]
    B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    Prerequisites: [Tomahawk Style • Dual Wielding]
    Foregoing any notion of defense, the practitioner charges towards their target with unbridled ferocity, wielding tomahawks in both hands. In a relentless onslaught, they deliver successive strikes with maximum force, targeting anything and everything in their path. This technique is characterized by its emphasis on sheer offensive power and speed, with the practitioner prioritizing the frequency and intensity of their attacks over defensive maneuvers. Tomahawk Style • Lumberjack's Fury aims to overwhelm opponents through relentless aggression, leaving them little opportunity to counter or evade the onslaught. This attack is so unpredictable due to the sheer aggression that those without [Perception] techniques will find it extremely difficult to predict where each attack will come from.

    [Tomahawk Style • Forestwalker]
    B-Rank Taijutsu Discipline
    Prerequisites: [Perception]
    Forestwalker encapsulates the essence of skilled woodsmanship, honing the practitioner's ability to navigate unfamiliar terrain and track elusive targets with heightened senses. This technique represents the culmination of the practitioner's training, enabling them to seamlessly blend into their natural surroundings while honing their perceptual acuity. By attuning their senses to the environment, the practitioner becomes adept at discerning subtle cues such as distinctive sounds, smells, tracks, and other telltale signs that could betray the presence of their target.

    Tomahawk Style • Arboreal Annihilation
    B-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    Prerequisites: [Tomahawk Style • Clearing The Shrubbery]
    Tomahawk Style • Arboreal Annihilation is a tactical sequence of strikes designed for proficient dual-wielding combatants. It begins with a powerful overhead vertical strike aimed at the target's shoulder, followed by a diagonal slash with the offhand tomahawk from the hip to the opponent's shoulder. The practitioner then delivers a horizontal sweep targeting the opponent's midsection before concluding with a precise jab to the solar plexus using the offhand tomahawk. This sequence maximizes efficiency and incapacitation potential, making it a strategic choice in combat engagements.

    Tomahawk Style • Verdant Vengeance
    A-Rank Taijutsu Maneuver
    Prerequisites: Tomahawk Style • Arboreal Annihilation
    Tomahawk Style • Verdant Vengeance is an advanced dual-wielding combat technique that utilizes precise strikes to overwhelm adversaries. The sequence includes a thunderous overhead vertical strike, followed by a rapid diagonal slash and horizontal sweep to incapacitate the opponent. It concludes with a lightning-fast thrust aimed at the throat or collarbone, followed by a fierce downward chop to incapacitate the opponent completely. This sequence maximizes efficiency and incapacitation potential, making it a strategic choice in combat engagements.

    [Tomahawk Style • Berserker's Fury]
    A-Rank Taijutsu Stance
    Berserker's Fury taps into the primal ferocity of Nordic mythology, channeling a warrior's berserker rage to enhance the practitioner's combat prowess. Upon activation, the practitioner enters a state of frenzied aggression, tapping into their primal instincts and unleashing their full physical potential. Eyes ablaze with fury, they wield their tomahawks with reckless abandon, abandoning all defense in favor of unrelenting offense. In this state of berserker rage, the practitioner's [Strength] and [Endurance] are heightened to supernatural levels. This results in a +4 to each stat. Each strike is infused with savage power, capable of cleaving through armor and flesh with devastating force. The practitioner becomes a whirlwind of destruction, charging headlong into battle with unmatched ferocity. However, this heightened state of aggression comes at a cost. Not only are the unable to tell friend from foe, but the practitioner becomes heedless of their own safety, leaving themselves vulnerable to counterattacks. Moreover, prolonged use of Berserker's Fury exacts a toll on the practitioner's body, draining their energy and leaving them vulnerable once the rage subsides. Whiling utilizing this stance, the user incurs a -8 to their [Chakra Pool].

    [Tomahawk Style • Ragnarok's Wrath]
    S-Rank Taijutsu Stance
    Prerequisites: [Tomahawk Style • Berserker's Fury]
    Ragnarok's Wrath elevates the practitioner's combat abilities to supernatural heights, bestowing a formidable +8 enhancement to both [Strength] and [Endurance]. In this state, the practitioner embodies a relentless force of destruction, impervious to illusions and mental intrusions. However, they relinquish all sense of self-awareness, resembling a rabid animal in their heedlessness towards friend or foe, rendering them incapable of making tactical decisions. While utilizing this stance the practitioner suffers from profound exhaustion and lack of control, enduring a significant -8 penalty to both [Control] and [Chakra Pool].
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    ~Chiageya • Sweeping Sea
    D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
    The user will lower themselves down and perform a leg sweep, knocking them off balance. Due to the passive nature of their body, this will also rip away at the skin.

    ~Chiageya • Grazing Fin
    D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
    A rather simple technique, though if successful can cause quite a bit of damage. The user will wind back their arm, making their attack obvious and will swing forward with a cross punch. This obvious punch is actually a feint, as the target moves their head out of the way they user will quickly adjust their positioning running their arm across the users cheek, hopefully ripping away the flesh in turn.

    ~Chiageya • Smiling Fist
    D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
    Prerequisites 10 Strength
    The Shuryo are able to exert the full force of their strength using their jaw and their rows of sharp teeth. This gives them the capability of biting through steel, though this does take time and requires a lot of pressure to be applied.

    ~Chiageya • Chinking Scales
    D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
    The user is able to place their fingertips onto one of their scales and dislodge it, they can then use this scale as a projectile, it will function exactly the same as a shuriken. (They can only remove 30 scales per thread).

    ~Chiageya • Barbed Vise
    D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
    The user is capable of up upraising the scales on their knuckles, creating sharp spikes that stick out up to two inches. They are as sharp as steel, however once they make contact with an opponent they will dislodged in their body and will continued to cause their pain until they remove them.

    ~Chiageya • Shiny Stockpile
    C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
    When being struck by a weapon or a projectile, the user will open up their scales at that exact moment and wrap around the object, with an equal strength of their scales [Endurance] and will lodge the item in place, usually yanking away weapons from their opponents grasp.

    ~Chiageya • The Final Grin
    C-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
    The user will catch their opponent by the shoulder and wrap their other arm behind the opponent’s knee, catching them off balance and yanking up their leg and pushing down their shoulder, knocking them to the floor. They will continue with the momentum and sink their teeth into the opponent’s neck ripping out their jugular.

    ~Chiageya • Stroke of the Land Swimmer
    B-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
    Prerequisites 25 Strength
    The user torques every muscle in their body and throw themselves forward and spiralling through the air without any visual preparation, hurtling themselves up to 35 metres at a speed equal to the users strength, anyone caught with this will have their flesh ripped away and will be knocked over by the force alone.

    History
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    Shion's childhood was a tapestry woven with the vibrant hues of the ocean and the rugged terrain of Shark Country. Born into the heart of the Shuryo Clan, his earliest memories are etched with the salty tang of sea spray and the rhythmic melody of crashing waves. From the moment he could walk, Shion was drawn to the vast expanse of the ocean, where he spent his days alongside his clan, immersed in the elemental embrace of the sea. Under the watchful eye of his elders, he learned to navigate the treacherous currents and hidden reefs, honing his instincts and mastering the art of survival in the unforgiving depths. In the company of his kin, Shion thrived, finding solace and belonging amidst the timeless rhythms of life beneath the waves. Together, they hunted as one, their movements synchronized in a symphony of precision and efficiency. Shion's agile form darted through the water with the grace of a shark, his senses attuned to the subtlest shifts in the currents, his keen eyes scanning the depths for signs of prey.

    But it wasn't just the thrill of the hunt that captivated Shion; it was the camaraderie of his clan, the bonds forged through shared triumphs and hardships. In the evenings, as the sun dipped below the horizon, Shion would gather with his kin around the flickering glow of the campfire, listening raptly to the ancient tales passed down through generations. As the years passed, Shion's connection to the ocean deepened, becoming an inseparable part of his identity. Whether gliding effortlessly through the waves or diving into the depths in pursuit of elusive prey, he found a sense of purpose and fulfillment that transcended words. And though his childhood in Shark Country was filled with challenges and trials, it was also a time of joy and discovery, a testament to the resilience and spirit of the Shuryo Clan. For Shion, those formative years shaped not only his skills as a warrior but also his unwavering loyalty to his clan and the deep-seated longing for the home he had left behind.

    In his adolescent years, Shion's path diverged from the traditions of his clan, leading him down a tumultuous road of exile and self-discovery. It began with a burning desire to expand his skills beyond the confines of Shark Country, a longing that stirred within him like the restless tides of the ocean. With fervent determination, Shion approached his father and the clan leader, pleading for permission to attend a Shinobi academy and learn the elusive arts of the shadow warriors. But his request was met with stern resistance, his elders adamantly opposed to the idea of straying from the time-honored traditions of their clan. Undeterred by their disapproval, Shion's resolve only strengthened, fueled by a thirst for knowledge and a yearning to carve his own destiny. Ignoring the warnings of his kin, he embarked on a journey of defiance, seeking out a Shinobi academy in distant lands, determined to unlock the secrets of the shadow arts. But his pursuit of enlightenment came at a steep price. Upon his return to Shark Country, his clan greeted him not as a prodigal son, but as a traitor who had forsaken their sacred traditions. In the eyes of his kin, Shion's thirst for knowledge had branded him an outcast, unworthy of the honor and respect bestowed upon true warriors of the Shuryo Clan.

    With a heavy heart burdened by sorrow and regret, Shion embarked on a solitary journey into the wilderness, seeking redemption and purpose. Armed only with his trusty tomahawks, he roamed the vast expanse of the land, honing his skills as a warrior and embracing the solitude of his exile. During his wandering, Shion's path intersected with a group of mercenaries known for their unwavering dedication to justice and freedom. Drawn to their cause, he pledged his allegiance to their ranks, finding solace in the camaraderie of his fellow warriors. Together, they fought numerous battles, their tomahawks shining in the heat of combat as symbols of hope in a world overshadowed by darkness. As he matured into a young man, Shion found himself living in the forests of Dwarf Country, protecting a small village that had taken him in and cared for him when he was severely injured from a fight. Here, amidst the towering trees and rugged terrain, he embraced his role as protector, dedicated to safeguarding the village and its inhabitants with unwavering determination.

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    Last edited by Gara on Sun Feb 04, 2024 6:15 pm, edited 8 times in total.
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    Shuryo, Shion

    Post by Kanade » Wed Jan 31, 2024 10:48 pm

    Umihada should, instead of having a table that tells how bad the scrapes are (like fire now burns with (str) intensity) should instead say that is scrapes at (intensity). Again, see Katon for a reference, but instead of burning it would be grinding. There are also a couple of minor spelling errors in it (I'm instead of in).

    Also Heavenly body control requires 5 "other" concentrations, 1 more S rank stance or discipline, and 2 more maneuvers. Please see this page for full details.

    Because your Heavenly Tai is not able to be on the character yet you will need to change it.

    4 tomahawk at 3 ryo =12 ryo
    Jutsu added = 130 more
    142 ryo total

    Total needed is 155 (unless you'd like to forfeit some of your startup ryo).

    Total stats are 160 so we are good there.
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    Shuryo, Shion

    Post by Gara » Thu Feb 01, 2024 12:12 am

    The Umihada ability came directly from the clan page. I'll address any other concerns when I'm at a computer.
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    Post by Kanade » Thu Feb 01, 2024 7:51 am

    I'll let staff know that it needs updated then, as I can't edit that page.

    The Heavenly body control Prerequisites are here: viewtopic.php?f=82&t=8342748
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    [War]Shuryo, Shion

    Post by Gara » Sun Feb 04, 2024 3:54 pm

    I believe that should be everything.
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    [War]Shuryo, Shion

    Post by Kanade » Sun Feb 04, 2024 5:45 pm

    Now you are missing an S rank taijutsu Maneuver or discipline
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    Post by Gara » Sun Feb 04, 2024 6:16 pm

    Removed the HT entirely. Added 2 explosives and one B rank to the Shuryo spoiler
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    [War]Shuryo, Shion

    Post by Kanade » Sun Feb 04, 2024 6:24 pm

    Perfect, 1/2
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    [War]Shuryo, Shion

    Post by Niro » Mon Feb 05, 2024 3:51 pm

    2/2
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