Custom Jutsu Help? UPDATED

Feedback for a jutsu I'd like my character to eventually have! :) It is a mixture of Fuuton and Suiton to create a highly cooled liquid nitrogen. Many thanks!

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Custom Jutsu Help? UPDATED

Post by Mlemb » Sat Jun 08, 2019 7:56 pm

  • Possible new Jutsu Concentration and type
  • Looking for feedback and suggestions :)
  • Don't be afraid to offer criticisms!
  • Many Thanks Friends!

Liquid Nitrogen Release:
Liquid Nitrogen
A character with this concentration is able to utilize Liquid Nitrogen, an elemental extension of Fuuton and Suiton. Must be an elemental ninjutsu specialist to make custom Liquid Nitrogen jutsus. A character with this concentration can use archived jutsu that require Liquid Nitrogen. Liquid Nitrogen has a Brittle effect and takes the appearance of silver-blue water. Must be learned by the creator of the technique, or someone the creator has trusted with the usage of the technique. Requires a ninjutsu concentration slot, along with Fuuton and Suiton concentrations.

Liquid Nitrogen Jutsu does not apply any cold effects, but instead just weakens the things it comes in contact with


Each rank of Liquid Nitrogen jutsu needs both ninjutsu and control of that rank. Ex.) A C-Rank Liquid Nitrogen Jutsu would require 10 Ninjutsu 10 Control.
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Liquid Nitrogen naturally Brittles anyone or anything it comes in contact with, weakening them substantially. The Brittle power of Liquid Nitrogen causes targets to become weakened. Below is a table detailing the worst stat change the opponent can get, based on the control of the technique.
  • 1-14 Control: -3 Strength for 4 Posts
  • 15-24 Control: -5 Strength for 3 Posts
  • 25-34 Control: -7 Strength for 2 Posts
  • 35+ Control: -9 Strength for 1 Post
D Rank:
  • Nitrogen Release * Frozen Shield
    D-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 5 Ninjutsu, 5 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user will spray silver water created from the inside of their chest through their mouth. Once the water is expelled, it will form an umbrella shape that is concave to the user and about two meters in diameter. This defense is somewhat solid and can be formed in any direction the user can spit, up to five meters away. The defense is shot at a speed of 5 and has a strength of 5, and unless completely destroyed it lasts for three posts before dissipating.
  • Nitrogen Release * Coldsnap Touch
    D-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 5 Ninjutsu, 5 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user will blow a covering of silver water onto their hand at a speed of 5. Over the course of 3 posts, the user will attempt to punch their opponent, transferring the water on their hand to the person. The water has a control of 5 and can be removed by an equal or higher control. If an opponent is hit, the silver water will cause the passive Brittle passive over the course of 1 post.
  • Nitrogen Release * NitroWeapon
    D-ranked Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 5 Ninjutsu, 5 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals, the user will coat a weapon they are holding in silver water for 5 posts. This causes the Brittle passive to be produced on any contact with a target. This also works for thrown weapons, however, if the projectile remains out of contact with the user for more than 2 posts the technique will dissipate early.
  • Nitrogen Release * Frozen Veil
    D-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 5 Ninjutsu, 5 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user will expel silver water, which when coming into contact with an object, will spread out to make a puddle of about 3 meters by 3 meters at a speed of 9. The water is not strong with a strength of 1, designed to coat defenses. This puddle will stay on the object for 3 posts before dissipating. The puddle will weaken defenses according to the passive chart.
  • Nitrogen Release * Icy Sphere
    D-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 5 Ninjutsu, 5 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user will expel a 3-meter diameter sphere of silver water from their mouth at speed of 5 up to 10 meters away. Upon impact, it will burst, spilling all over the immediate area making it extremely slippery. Those without 10 taijutsu or higher will not be able to hold their footing on this wet spot and will slip around, the water will cling to the person caught in the area and apply the Brittle passive for as long as they are in contact.

C Rank:
  • Nitrogen Release * Silver Gun
    C-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 10 Ninjutsu, 15 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user expels three 3 2-centimeter diameter droplets of silver water from their mouth in quick succession, each of which explodes with a force of one D-Rank explosion each on impact, scattering water all over the immediate area. These droplets fly up to 15 meters away at a speed of 5. Contact causes Brittle passive for 3 posts.
  • Nitrogen Release * Clone
    C-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 10 Ninjutsu, 15 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user creates a clone of themselves comprised completely of Liquid Nitrogen chakra. This clone is incapable of jutsu, however, it's liquid nature makes it a very capable taijutsu combatant. This clone lasts for 5 posts. After 5 posts it explodes covering a 4m by 4m area with silver water applying the Brittle passive to anyone that comes into contact.
    Taijutsu: 6
    Stamina: 8
    Strength: 7
    Speed: 6
  • Nitrogen Release * Icy Whirlpool
    C-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 10 Ninjutsu, 15 Control
    Created to safely incapacitate opponents, after performing the correct hand seals, if the opponent is within 15 meters and is standing atop a body of silver water with the user's chakra in it, the user will begin to churn their chakra causing the silver water to turn into a vortex and engulf the opponent, trapping them in a vortex about two meters in diameter. Once the target is inside the water is hardened, the user must hold the last seal and cannot use any other techniques, and is capable of holding this for up to five posts. In order to escape, the target must have at least 10 strength to physically make their way out, or the user must be disrupted. Most shinobi would pass out after two posts due to a lack of oxygen. However, if a target possesses a stamina stat higher than 10, it would require three posts for them to pass out. Should the target possess a stamina stat above 20, it would require five posts for them to pass out, but anything higher than 30 would allow them to resist passing out altogether. The Brittle passive is applied according to the table.
  • Nitrogen Release * Cold Mine
    C-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 10 Ninjutsu, 15 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user will create a dense puddle of silver water on the ground with a speed of 10. This water will lay dormant until the user performs a hand seal. When the pile is activated it will explode with the strength of 2 exploding tags. The water will cling to anything it comes into contact with and causes the Brittle passive.
  • Nitrogen Release * Arctic Tundra
    C-ranked Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 10 Ninjutsu, 15 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals, the user will seep Liquid Nitrogen chakra in an area around them with a 10m diameter. This will produce a silver puddle on the ground in this area visible as shimmering water on the surface. Any person other than the user who steps into this zone will have the Brittle passive applied and will have reduced mobility. This puddle lasts 3 posts, while it ends immediately if the user leaves the area.

B Rank:
  • Nitrogen Release * Icy Prison
    B-Rank Ninjutsu
    Requirements: 20 Ninjutsu, 20 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user is able to spew a large ball of silver water that stands at three meters in diameter. This ball rolls forward at the desired target up to 20 meters away and at a speed of 20. Should this strike the target, they will become engulfed within the sphere. However, if this manages to strike multiple targets, it will envelop them as well, up to a total of 3 prisoners. One can resist being pulled into the ball if they have a strength higher than 20. The trapped targets will spin with the sphere and may become nauseated and dizzy from the disorientation. The Brittle passive is applied. The technique lasts for a total of 4 posts before bursting.
  • Nitrogen Release * Arctic Kraken
    B-Rank Ninjutsu
    Prerequisite: 25 Ninjutsu, 20 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user will create a stream of silver water that shoots out at a speed of 25. Rather than going for a blunt hit the silver stream aims to wrap around the target and pull them with a strength of 15. The water will cling to anything it comes into contact with and causes the Brittle passive, hardening into ice after 2 posts. If the target has a strength higher than 15 they will be able to break out of the hold.
  • Nitrogen Release * Shining Water Beam
    B-ranked Ninutsu
    Prerequisite: 25 ninjutsu, 20 control
    After performing the correct hand seals, a beam of silver water will erupt from the user's hand. The water will travel 50m at 30 speed and explode with the force of 10 strength on contact over 10m3 while applying the Brittle passive throughout the explosion's area.

A rank:
  • Nitrogen Release * Ice Storm
    A-Rank Ninjutsu
    Prerequisite: 30 ninjutsu, 30 control
    After performing the correct hand seals the user will create a bubble of silver water 6m high in the air. Once the silver water is made the bubble will then start to form large drops of 1m x 1m and rain them down on the target at a speed and strength of 25. This will produce and fire 10 drops over the course of 2 posts. The silver water will cling to anything it comes into contact with cause the Brittle passive for 2 posts.
  • Nitrogen Release * Frozen Geyser
    A-Rank Ninjutsu
    Prerequisite: 30 ninjutsu, 30 control, 25 strength
    After performing the correct hand seals the user will flow chakra into their heel. When they next slam their heel into the ground, a massive 5-meter diameter silver geyser will shoot up from the ground directly in front of them at a strength of 25 and speed of 25 for up to 15 meters. The sheer force of the water alone is dangerous, not to mention the gravity of it all falling back to earth. The water then freezes into icy spikes.
  • Nitrogen Release * Frozen Waterfall
    A-ranked Ninjutsu
    Prerequisite: 30 Ninjutsu, 30 control, 25 speed
    The user of this technique will gather a concentrated amount of silver water in their hand after they perform the hand seals for this technique. The water causes a sound similar to a massive roaring waterfall while it is in existence. The user will then dash at full speed toward a target, unable to see anything not within their path. The user will then attempt to thrust their hand onto their target's body. The silver water is able to encompass the target's body at a speed of 45, instantly causing numbness, and applying the Brittle passive for 3 posts. Those with 10 less than the user's speed or higher are able to see the attack coming. The water disappears from the user's hand after 2 posts.

S rank:
  • Nitrogen Release * Frozen Devastation
    S-Rank Ninjutsu
    Prerequisite: 35 Ninjutsu, 40 Control
    After performing the correct hand seals, the user excretes a large amount of silver water from their body which rises into the air like a pillar. For the first post of this technique’s activation, this pillar extends around them for 2m in each direction, protecting them with 30 strength while funneling the water into the sky. On the user’s second post, the pillar disappears, but the user gains the ability to cause up to 3 giant balls of silver water, about 20m in diameter, to fall from the sky at 50 speed in their chosen direction. These giant balls explode with the force of 8 explosive tags while causing the Brittle passive. The user only has 2 posts after the second part activates to release all three balls, and may not cast any other jutsu during this time.
  • Nitrogen Release * Frozen Tides
    S-Rank Ninjutsu
    Prerequisite: 35 Ninjutsu, 40 Control, Nitrogen Release * Icy Whirlpool, Nitrogen Release * Icy Prison
    After performing the correct hand seals, the user excretes a large amount of silver water from their body, flooding a room, or area 15m around the user in all directions up 5m tall at a speed of 25. If the water comes into contact with anyone other than the user, it holds them in place with a strength of 35 applying the Brittle passive over the course of 1 post. If the target is trapped underneath the surface they are unable to breathe and are crushed for 15 strength.
  • Nitrogen Release * Frozen Skin
    S-Rank Ninjutsu
    Prerequisite: 35 Ninjutsu, 45 Control
    After the correct hand seals are performed, the user coats themselves in a thick layer of silver water. This armor of silver water increases their strength by 15 points and their Instinct by 10 while reducing their Taijutsu by 15 and their Speed by 10 for 5 posts. During this time any objects that come into contact with the user are slowed significantly by 15 speed. The water is able to spread to the target through physical attacks, applying the Brittle passive.


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Post by Director » Sun Jun 16, 2019 10:04 pm

Suggestion, instead of making it give a freezing effect, why not a strength weakening effect? As freezing things with liquid nitrogen can weaken them, it might be a better passive rather than freezing. Too I think you can work in freezing for certain jutsu as like an active effect. But I think you should definitely go with degrading strength over contact with liquid nitrogen rather than freezing, it'll be multi-purposeful in debuffing other people's strength, and weakening defenses/walls. If you have any questions you can always hit me on Discord or ask here.
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Post by Mlemb » Sat Jun 22, 2019 4:12 am

Director:
Sun Jun 16, 2019 10:04 pm
Suggestion, instead of making it give a freezing effect, why not a strength weakening effect? As freezing things with liquid nitrogen can weaken them, it might be a better passive rather than freezing. Too I think you can work in freezing for certain jutsu as like an active effect. But I think you should definitely go with degrading strength over contact with liquid nitrogen rather than freezing, it'll be multi-purposeful in debuffing other people's strength, and weakening defenses/walls. If you have any questions you can always hit me on Discord or ask here.
Ooooooh I never even thought of that, that would fit much better with the liquid nitrogen jutsu! I shall keep working on it and if I have any more questions I shall ask!
Thanks very much friend! :)
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Post by Gara » Sat Jun 22, 2019 4:49 am

Brittle - The Brittle passive is unique in that, while caused by extreme cold, does not cause any cold related alements. Instead, Brittle, weakens the strength of whatever the Brittle passive is applied to based on the control requirement for the technique used.
  • 0 - 5 Ctrl: -3 Strength
  • 6 - 10 Ctrl: -6 Strength
  • 11 - 20: -9 Strength


Something like that.
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Post by Mlemb » Sat Jun 22, 2019 4:51 am

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Sat Jun 22, 2019 4:49 am
Brittle - The Brittle passive is unique in that, while caused by extreme cold, does not cause any cold related alements. Instead, Brittle, weakens the strength of whatever the Brittle passive is applied to based on the control requirement for the technique used.
  • 0 - 5 Ctrl: -3 Strength
  • 6 - 10 Ctrl: -6 Strength
  • 11 - 20: -9 Strength


Something like that.
Alright! That sounds pretty good, I shall play around with it! Thanks for the input, it really helps! :)
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