[Accepted]Takiyashi Sama

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[Accepted]Takiyashi Sama

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Takiyasha Sama
Boss

Live your own way.

General Information Age:14
Gender: Male
Height: 5'8
Weight: 139 lbs
Physical Features:
  • Face/head: His eyes are usually glazed over with quite a dazed expression. He has long black curly hair that sits on his shoulder blades. He is quite a lethargic looking tired individual who's only visual representation of stress seems to stem from trivial issues his eyes usually opening up wide too an extent that is unseen normally. He drools quite a lot usually a trail of spit emitting from the corner of his mouth.
  • Body: Quite unremarkably thin but muscular enough for him to meet the standard weight for his height. To someone whom which spends a long time in physical fitness or body makeup might note that he has a strangely unique physique which may allow him to work taijutsu at a more natural pace.
  • Notable Features:----
Just general lethargic like stature and features and somewhat a slouched over posture which gives him somewhat a strange physique like mentioned previously. This does not count his extremely long tongue or his other clan features. He has a tendency to sit in quite a perked posture.
Clothing/Accessories: He has a tendency to wear the color of dark purple or dark green depending on what kind of terrain he is in at the current moment. Being quite an unestablished mercenary he really does not seem to have any form of signature wardrobe or attire, He has a tendency just to wear whatever he can get his hands on if it's a non combat situation.. if it comes too it he tends to usually wear his red armband around his head with the back loosly fashioned so sometimes it will tend to droop or jiggle around his head in combat. He notably still is neither a midgit or freakishly tall like most Takiyashi, Perhaps this is due too his spine being under grown due too his slouching.
Picture:
Personality:
  • General:

    A young slacker mercenary with a lot going for him in terms of natural talent but not too lazy to really realize his complete potential. He is a mercenary doing small jobs here and there so that he can make a living, his family abandoning him due to a dispute between if he was theirs or not he grew up in an orphanage and when he was of a young age required to become a samurai of sorts. He is a relaxed in the now mentality kind of person. Somewhat of a Cynic in the way that he applauds those whom which he sees as non hypocritical and has a very laid back lifestyle. He became a samurai due to being from his clan, there wasn't much choice in the matter. He isn't much of one to spend a lot of his time exercising or working on combat techniques or bettering himself as a fighter, in fact he works best training alone working on his own combat techniques in his spare time. Though he does not have much ambition as a warrior he does however have a lot of interest in experimenting with his abilities though he'd never admit it too others. He is quite secretive and generally mysterious but in reality he's just not a very outspoken person. Not that he doesn't have a lot of sense of humor. He can really enjoy making quips and jokes at others expense and will promptly do so whenever he gets the chance.
  • Hopes/Dreams: To live a life by his choice
  • Fears: Captivity or being ordered around
  • Combat Mentality:Trickster

Battle Information Village: River
Rank: D-class
  • Ninjutsu: 1
  • Taijutsu: 10
  • Genjutsu: 1
  • Stamina: 5
  • Control: 1
  • Strength: 6
  • Speed: 6
  • Instinct: 10
Equipment:

1x Tanto, 14 inches, stainless steel. Plain Crossguard and wooden grip. hung horizontal above his tail bone by rope tied in a hangman's knot.

1x Wakazashi 60.6 cm Stainless Steel. No Crossguard, Wooden handle tied tight too the rope around his waist with string.

He has a Medical kit,

1x Syringe,
4 inches x 4 yards of bandages
1x Square Bandage.
1 inch x 1 yard of tape.
1x Small Tweezer
50 mml of burn salve.
50 mml of anti sceptic salve.
Small bottle of water.
50 mml of rubbing Alcohol

It's leather and generally quite large and hangs on his back from a belt.

2x Bombs kept in a pouch next too his Medical Kit.
1x Smoke Bomb kept in a pouch next too his Medical Kit


Companions: (0/1)
Primary Affinity: Suiton
Abilities and Concentrations
Abilities
First Ability
Kekkei Genkai:
Numakon
The Numakon trait is a rare ability found once every several generations in people all across river country. The ability itself is said to be the result of fornication with swamp spirits, though the actual causes are unknown. The ability itself provides its owners with a long, prehensile tongue (roughly three feet in length) that functions as an extra limb, stronger than average legs which allow them to jump twice the height and/or distance their strength would indicate, along with sticky saliva that is produced in copious amounts thanks to incredibly active saliva glands, which grows more powerful with age and use, primarily dependent on their stamina to determine its strength. Skilled Children of Takiyasha have also been known to channel their frog genes outwards in strange and esoteric ways.
Sticky Saliva StrengthShow
, 1
StaminaStickiness
1-95 Strength
10-1910 Strength
20-2420 Strength
25-3425 Strength
35-3935 Strength
40-5040 Strength

Second Ability
Third Ability
Concentrations
Ninjutsu[Place them here]
Taijutsu
Deft Hands:
The fundamental skill of [Deft Hands] indicates the user’s proficiency with using their hands in very specific and complex movements, like sleight of hand and targeting very small and specific points on an opponent’s body. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu in various ways.
Sword Weapons:
The fundamental skill of [Sword Weapons] indicates the user’s proficiency with swords and sword-like weapons such as knives, daggers, sword-breakers and the like. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Medicine:
The fundamental skill of [Medicine] describes the user’s mental and physical ability to perform traditional and mainstream medicinal practices. This facilitates their use of related Taijutsu.
Genjutsu[Place them here]

Jutsu
NinjutsuShow
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TaijutsuShow
Yoshin Kenjutsu:
Yoshin Kenjutsu is a style of sword techniques that originate from Waterfall Country. The style's method of attack is considerably different from normal sword techniques, as each one is actually focused more on intelligent strikes to the body at critical places. Nerves, muscles, organs, even joints, are all targets of Yoshin Style. Because of this, practioners typically use short blades such as wakizashi or kodachi, though katana users are not unheard of. The typical stance of the style is to hold your sword at chest level to make the typical jabbing motions of the style more accessible.
  • Requires [Deft Hands], [Sword], and [Medicine]
*[Yoshin • Ambidexterity]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Discipline
Prerequisite: 5 Instinct
After practicing for a long amount of time with the concept of using both of their hands with equal skill, the user has developed a level of ambidexterity that allows them to utilize their preferred weaponry without any sort of issue. This extends to other methods of combat or simple everyday life as well.

*[Yoshin • Side Step]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 5 Instinct
After stepping up beside the target or sidestepping an attack from the target, the user utilizes a quick striking method, drawing a very firm slash across the side, ribcage or arm of the target. The user slashes with the intent to both injure and startle the opponent, hoping to catch them off guard and disrupt the flow of their attacks. Unlike many other Yoshin techs that focus on shallow cuts that flare up in pain, this particular technique is meant to dig as deep as possible, many times slashing into bones to cause as much long term damage as possible.

*[Yoshin • Flinch]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 5 Instinct
With a quick feint, the user quickly draws their sword up in an arc, aiming at a foe's eyes usually with intent to slash across their face and injure their eyes. The nature of the technique's movements make it easily read, prompting the target to avoid or dodge.

*[Yoshin • Finger Snap]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 5 Instinct
Using a quick striking method, the user of this technique quickly draws a very firm slash towards the hands of the target aimed towards the fingers or palm. The user slashed with the intent to injure the gripping portions of the opponent's hand to knock weapons free with the slash, though the attack itself is shallow. Typically the technique is only useful as a quick disarm method and unsuitable for long term disarming.

*[Yoshin • Paper Slash]
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 5 Instinct
In this technique, the user switches from the typical critical blows to a more specialized 'swirl' pattern of slashing, which while much less effective in terms of damage, is useful in distraction. Wounds inflicted are patterned to flare up with pain when those muscle areas tighten, causing moves the opponent's make to recoil slightly on their bodies, the wounded areas acting as a detrimental pain in their actions.
Arts of Medicine:
Arts of Medicine
This user has educated themselves in traditional medicine, and is able to treat and care for wounds in methods taught to medicine men and doctors that don't utilize chakra.
Requires: [Medicine] and [Deft Hands] Concentrations
All Art of Medicine Techniques require both Taijutsu and Instinct stats equal to the requirements for the rank of the Technique.

*[Medicinal Style • Bandage Wrapping]
D-rank Taijutsu Maneuver
The user knows how to utilize bandages, wrapping a wound in a manner that creates a near-perfect barrier from external forces, keeping the wound clean from bacteria. The bandage is tucked in place, preventing it from falling off, though excessive rubbing, pulling, or getting the bandage wet can cause it to fall off.

*[Medicinal Style • Wound Cleanse]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
The user knows how to use sterile water or alcohol to clean out a wound, destroying any bacteria in the would to prevent infection.

*[Medicinal Style • Injury Assessment]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
Unlike the mystical means of diagnosis utilized through iijutsu, those who utilize the Arts of Medicine must learn the most effective manner to assess a patient. Learners of this discipline have learn the most effective manner to diagnose a patient, starting at the head, and assessing for head wounds, then moving down through the torso, both arms, the groin area, both legs, then the back. Those who learn this discipline will be able to account for any wounds that present with physical symptoms on a patient.

*[Medicinal Style • Pressure Points]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
The user has learned all appropriate pressure points on a body. In the event of bleeding, they know where to apply pressure to slow the bleeding while treatment is administered.

*[Medicinal Style • Splint]
D-rank Taijutsu Discipline
The user is able to create slings and wraps that support fractures, sprains, and breaks in patients.

*[Medicinal Style • Air Way]
C-rank Taijutsu Maneuver
The user is able to use make shift supplies to obtain, and maintain, an airway in a patient through various methods, such as intubation or emergency cricothyroidotomy. This allows people to breath even if they have obstructed airways, and remain alive.

Ochiba
Ochiba is a weapon style originating from the fire country, one of the few weapon styles developed by Shinobi and not Samurai. Ochiba translate as “Dead Leaf” As it is a weapon style that focuses on the use of a Kunai which are similar in appearance to a leaf. The kunai is held in a reversed manner, the handle comes up by the thumb and the blade comes down by the bottom of the hand. This allows for short, yet quick strikes and parries. Though this style is developed to use a kunai it can be transposed to other short weapons such as ninjato & tanto, though not all techniques will be available.
Requires: Deft Hands and Sword Weapons

*Ochiba • Single Finger Draw
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Utilizing this Maneuver, the user is able to quickly draw a kunai from its holster. This is done by placing their finger through the lip of the holder and into the ring of the pommel, flicking it up and out quickly, having the kunai in the user’s hand within an instant.

*Ochiba • Extending Branch
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
Prerequisite: 8 Taijutsu
Using extremely quick thinking, if the user attempts to land a hit but their kunai is just short of hitting their target, they can very quickly spin the kunai on their finger, effectively extending its reach by a few inches.

*Ochiba • Round and Round
D-Ranked Taijutsu Maneuver
The user will start by performing an extremely quick and powerful slash aimed at the target, and then continuing with that movement, they will spin themselves around and follow up with a powerful roundhouse kick.


GenjutsuShow
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History
Historical AccountsShow
Sama was born in a small orphanage within River country. His parents were a miller whom which had an affair with a local teen. When he was born he was chucked into the fish at the market, When he opened his eyes he let out a defiant scream and got his mother hanged for attempting to kill him. He would grow up somewhere with not a lot of money and the other kids would feel the need to debate murdering him, however as he grew he became more strange. He would eat bugs and hunch himself over on furniture, he had tremendous balance and a freaky tongue. It terrified the children. When he came the age of 12 his orphanage sent him away to do child labor gutting fishes, When he gathered enough money by pickpocketing his boss he made his way away from his job. He fled after curfew.

When he got to the more central hub of River he would use his acquired wealth to purchase swords and other equipment, He would start preforming missions as a mercenary. Most of his life him having natural innate talents in acrobatics and stealth. Gathering more and more wealth he gained some reasonable sustainability and has never went back to believing he needs to live a life which was given too him by another. He lives his own way, He wants to become a greater figher and some day show his philosophy to others. This is why people call him Boss, Never really being assigned a real name growing up, it was soon that people noticed what he might be, His name is self proclaimed. He spends a lot of time with the local youth training them to fight like he does. One day he took a rather difficult escort mission with a local samurai and some ninjas and it was almost a total party wipe out. He followed a dieing medical ninjas instruction one of the samurai there. They were forced to retire from their injuries and he spends his time studying under them, this had caused him to have a desire to become more of a medical professional. Though his ambitions are quite large though he might be very well be more bark than bite.
Last edited by Hokami on Sat Dec 01, 2018 1:57 am, edited 12 times in total.
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Sama
Ninjutsu: 1 Taijutsu: 10 Genjutsu: 1 Stamina: 5 Control: 1 Strength: 6 Speed: 6 Instinct: 10 Minor Samurai

viewtopic.php?f=85&t=8339961
Yama
Ninjutsu: 10 Taijutsu: 8 Genjutsu: 1 Stamina: 5 Control: 10 Strength: 2 Speed: 2 Instinct: 2

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Takiyashi Sama

Post by Kabu » Sun Nov 11, 2018 1:42 am

1/2, except your weight says ibs when it should say lbs and could you also please get rid of that emoji at the top? We like that very top section to remain uniform and untouched.
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Post by Yura » Wed Nov 14, 2018 8:21 am

Quote:
^o) Username: memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=4065035 Hokami.
Please remove the emoji, we try to keep this portion of the app uniform across all apps as it is just primarily for moderation purposes. For your username, you can use [url=https://www.narutosaigen.com/forums/memberlist.php?mode=viewprofile&u=4065035]Hokami[/url] instead and it will link the name to the profile.
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Takiyashi Sama
The last name should link back to the clan page. Replace the last name with [url=https://www.narutosaigen.com/forums/viewtopic.php?f=88&t=8310613]Takiyasha[/url]
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Equipment:

Sama has a Wakizashi and a Tanto. Both are expertly crafted by the best smiths that he could find.
He has a Medical kit fit with bandages, Syringes, String and various other miscellaneous things he would need in a first aid situation.
30x Kunai
30 Shuriken
The Wakizashi and Tanto need blade/overall lengths.
The Medical Kit needs to list out the contents otherwise it leads to an "bottomless grab bag of whatever you need" type of situation.
For the Kunai/Shuriken, as a minor country mercenary you wouldn't really have access to true kunai and shuriken (in this universe anyway) as they are considered shinobi weapons. You can have "throwing knives" (which are essentially the same thing), just not actual kunai/shuriken

All of our equipment needs to state where it is stored on his person as well.



For your concentrations, at a Taijutsu stat of 10 you only have 3 concentration slots available, not 4. You'll have to remove one of your concentrations which will affect which jutsu you have as well. It seems like you only use CQC for bone breaker while all of the other concentrations are used in multiple styles so I would recommend removing CQC, but it is entirely up to you.

History <--- You need to have a history for your character. A paragraphs or two describing their life up until this point.
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Takiyashi Sama

Post by Yura » Wed Nov 21, 2018 7:58 am

Normally we have a 7 Day rule which would mean that by the end of today this would be denied if you haven't edited, but I'll give you 2 more days (Friday Morning) to edit this before it is denied.
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Takiyashi Sama

Post by Hokami » Fri Nov 23, 2018 8:37 pm

I've made most of the edits should be done by the time you read this
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Sama
Ninjutsu: 1 Taijutsu: 10 Genjutsu: 1 Stamina: 5 Control: 1 Strength: 6 Speed: 6 Instinct: 10 Minor Samurai

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Yama
Ninjutsu: 10 Taijutsu: 8 Genjutsu: 1 Stamina: 5 Control: 10 Strength: 2 Speed: 2 Instinct: 2

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Post by Kao » Sun Nov 25, 2018 2:24 am

• You still have shuriken and kunai listed, which are weapons that are specifically created for shinobi. As a minor country character, you don't have access to these weapons so they need to be removed. You can replace them with "throwing knives" or something similar, just not those weapons specifically.

• For your other weapons, please state where he carries them on his person.

• 100 m of bandages is huge. He really wouldn't be able to carry that on his person by conventional means since it'd be absurdly large, so you should make it quite a bit smaller.

• In your history you say "He would start preforming missions as a ninja." <-- this and the other references to him being a ninja need to be removed/edited because minor country aren't hired as ninja. He can be a mercenary or something similar
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Post by Hokami » Sun Nov 25, 2018 4:14 am

Should have all relevant changes. Still have mentioned he has indeed met ninja, It's unstated that they were from a specific village.
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Sama
Ninjutsu: 1 Taijutsu: 10 Genjutsu: 1 Stamina: 5 Control: 1 Strength: 6 Speed: 6 Instinct: 10 Minor Samurai

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Yama
Ninjutsu: 10 Taijutsu: 8 Genjutsu: 1 Stamina: 5 Control: 10 Strength: 2 Speed: 2 Instinct: 2

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Post by Niro » Fri Nov 30, 2018 7:42 pm

Nitpicking but Weight: 139 ibs <-Lbs

After that, I'll slap a 1/2 on it
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Takiyashi Sama

Post by Valkier » Sun Dec 02, 2018 12:06 pm

I'd prefer some more emphasis on the distinctive clan features - but there is a small mention of it so I won't hold up the character. Other than that, a nicely made character, I like it!

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