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Post by Gara » Sat Oct 14, 2023 4:51 pm

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Thunder:
At its core, Thunder manipulation is an art of elemental alchemy, where the user's mastery over the two constituent elements combines in a seamless dance of power. This extraordinary synergy enables the practitioner to imbue their Fuuton with the crackling potency of Raiton, resulting in an eruption of pure, unrelenting concussive energy. The result is a force akin to the fury of a thunderstorm, striking with the intensity of lightning and the ferocity of a gale. In practical terms, Thunder users can craft devastating techniques that exploit the harmonious fusion of Raiton and Fuuton. These techniques can range from devastating shockwaves that shatter the earth to cyclonic tempests charged with electricity, capable of rending through formidable obstacles. The additional strike provided by the Concussive passive takes the form of swirling ball of force, it's size depending on the user's [Control]. The Concussive passive deals a secondary strike to the target at 3/4ths the strength of the original attack when hitting a solid, and 1/2 the strength when hitting an energy, or liquid, construct.
It should be noted that the passive only works with the strength of the technique used. It does not increase the strength in any way.

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Last edited by Gara on Mon Nov 13, 2023 3:17 pm, edited 4 times in total.
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Post by Kanade » Sat Oct 14, 2023 6:15 pm

as it stands, this is too strong.

Please see fuuton for a more accurate representation of what is considered viable for + to strength of a second attack.

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Post by Gara » Sat Oct 14, 2023 6:46 pm

Again, as I've already said, this is not increasing the strength of anything. With all do respect, I will wait for more experienced people to look over this. Nothing against you, or anything. I just don't want to limit this to much.
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Post by Kabu » Wed Oct 18, 2023 11:19 am

The passive is indeed too strong, a suggestion would be +1 strike at >45 Control but you should go take a look at Fuuton for a more direct reference on acceptable limits.
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Post by Gara » Wed Oct 18, 2023 2:53 pm

intense grumbling Is that more acceptable? I would like it to be noted that Thunder does not have the effects of Raiton nor Fuuton. It is simply concussive force.
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Post by Texas » Wed Oct 25, 2023 4:14 pm

I think +1 is acceptable

I think what they are talking about is this:
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Fuuton has a natural cutting property to it, that exists in all jutsu unless otherwise stated. This gives fuuton a unique opportunity to strike with additional power, and to act as a offensive defense. Regardless of their purpose fuuton jutsu passively cut with no distinct pattern at 1/2 the strength of the technique rounded down unless otherwise stated. This means if someone punched a 20 strength fuuton wall, they would get cuts on their hand applied with 10 strength. This also means that fuuton jutsu specifically designated to cut things can create devastating wound by essentially striking twice.
With that being said, is there a term for the passive? Like for Fuuton = Cutting?
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Post by Gara » Sat Oct 28, 2023 8:58 pm

How's that?
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Post by Kanade » Fri Nov 03, 2023 10:40 pm

Looks good! 1/2
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Post by Niro » Sun Nov 12, 2023 2:44 pm

Not sure why this scales rather than just has a flat number to it? Staff consensus is a second full powered strike is too powerful, especially considering Fuuton is 1/2. My suggestion is a flat 3/4 against solids and 1/2 against energy/liquids
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Post by Gara » Mon Nov 13, 2023 3:18 pm

How's that? Removed the table and added the strength qualifier to the description.
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Post by Niro » Sun Nov 19, 2023 1:47 pm

1/2
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Post by Ace Trainer » Sun Nov 19, 2023 2:24 pm

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